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I thought this was completely doneee!
28375 same ^^ reading soon
"Clearly the fate of Equestria hinges on Rainbow Dash getting laid regularly."
This is an amazing line...and scarily true, too, with all the Dash-ship fics out there.
Anyway, I enjoyed the series, and this side-story was good too. I hope to see more from you, whether it be another like this or experimenting with another genre. Thanks for the great read.
I feel like there needs to be a continuation of this where Pinkie and Dash actually get together.
First Twilight's story and now this. You are truly one of the few who can turn porn into beautiful art.
On another note: Are you gonna continue this DashiePie story? That would be one of the dew things to make it even better.^^
niceeee new chapter i need to go for a bottle of wine and some chocolates hahahaha
"Sea of dildos"
Oh Sleepless, you have such a way with words. My body was not ready for this chapter. Don't spose it was at all inspired by Sweatshirts Pinkie pic?
Wow. Just wow. Who knew Pinkie was the craziest... But of course, isn't she always? Hmm... I just wonder what happens as far as Pinkie and Dash's friendship... Obviously Pinkie has some stronger feelings for Dash... Maybe you ought to continue this...
Wow. Just wow. Who knew Pinkie was the craziest... But of course, isn't she always? Hmm... I just wonder what happens as far as Pinkie and Dash's friendship... Obviously Pinkie has some stronger feelings for Dash... Maybe you ought to continue this...
A sequel/side story is definitely required. You can't just leave Dash hangin', can you? Er... please?
*pomf* i lost it when i read that i think i woke the whole house with my laughing
Well.
Let's just say that this deserves the perfect score.
All clopfics should look up to this one, because it is clearly the greatest of them all.
This was amaaaaaaaaaaaazing.
I got a little sad at the end though. 3: Don't worry, Pinkie, she'll come around!
So, wait. Pinkie Pie and Rainbow Dash watched things together before they tried it themselves? Like, adult films? That's... an unusual activity for two friends to do together...
And I SO should have seen the "Pinkie Pie has toys" thing coming. Kinky Pinkie plays Slinky with her Not-So-Dinky Twinkie. (I know. That was bad. That was really, really bad. )
Only thing I would lament is that in 3 scenes there has only been 1 wing job. Don't ask me why I have a wing fetish because it freaks the living hell outa me (I think I've always liked all sorts of wings but never viewed them erotically), but I think it started somewhere between Chapter 8 of this story and the story Dawn of a New Day.
29003 Kinky Pinkie plays Slinky with her Not-So-Dinky Twinkie thats great.
One thing that does seem a little OOC overall now that I think about it is that, although I think you nailed Dash's personality spot on, I don't really get the whole spinning tall tales about herself bit. Dash's boasting and bragging and general ego masturbation is only endearing in my mind due to the fact that it's 100% true and backed up. She is very proud of her abilities and wants appreciation from others for them. I just don't see her ever trying to make herself out to be larger than life since what she wants to be is exactly what she is. She never struck me as a character who really gave a damn about what anyone thinks of her and therefor wouldn't really be shy or deceptive since she is so overly proud about everything about herself.
that was a freaking long story, and so much sex, my mind was warring with itself on whether I should continue reading or not, but the story it's just too damn good and I kept reading, I have many comments in my head about parts of the story but they are too jumbled up to make a coherent sentence, so I'll just say this story was amazing!
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Interesting point about Dash. A lot of that for me was going off Sonic Rainboom - she keeps up the awesome facade no matter how much she's falling apart inside. As it happens, she came through that time. But she didn't know that would happen when she was insisting she could pull it off.
That being said, exaggerating seemed to me like something she would do, but now that I'm going back and looking I can't really find it in-canon...which bothers me, since I like having at least a line or two to reference back to on character moments. She's definitely cocky and arrogant, but she hasn't made up anything blatant in the show. I guess that's just my head-canon, then. I suppose my interpretation of her is just the result of my inclination to find the more flawed version to be more interesting.
Still, you got me!
Super crazy awesome.
Are you considering fleshing out (heh, I made an unitentional pun) Dash's story and her and Pinkie's relationship? Because that would also be super crazy awesome.
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Thanks for reading my critique. Not that you story has ever had much to critique. I just tend to be extremely picky when it comes to Dash because she IS the character people make the most assumptions about and therefor the most likely to slip OOC in fics.
So many fics have her treating her friends callously and portraying her as irresponsible. It's apparent that she is not irresponsible since she seems to take any responsibility very seriously in canon. It seems to be more that she has an aversion to taking on unnecessary responsibility due to the stress it would cause her if she were to come up short.
The Sonic Rainboom thing was her fear of failure. That fear of failure is frequently considered to be a selfish or egotistical fear of being made to look bad and blow her chances. It's not. It stems from her never wanting to let anyone down, herself included. This in turn stems from her Element of Loyalty.
This is why, in my headcannon for Dash, her messed up emotions at the end of Private Party make a lot of sense.
If Gilda was her first real romantic relationship and it went bad, whether it was her fault or not she would not be able to get over the idea that she had failed the relationship she had let it fall apart or slip away. That she wasn't good enough to make it work.
If she felt there was no way to have salvaged it she would set the line farther back and avoid all relationships since she had no control over it and could not stand to fail again estranging another friend and lover.
This is also why she would never make stuff up (unless it was for a specific reason like to pull a prank or convince someone to do something important). She wants to be seen by others purely for who she is and lauded for that alone. All her arrogance and boasting is simply her sledgehammer attempts to get others to see her for who she is.
TL;DR Thanks for responding. Dash's Loyalty and severe phobia of letting herself and others down is the driving force behind her flaws, not her ego or brashness.
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You've nailed what I was going for with Dash almost exactly, sans the boasting. She likes Pinkie, but she doesn't want to get involved with anyone for fear of hurting them/screwing things up...bam! Instant drama.
What were your thoughts on Dash in the main story? It's one of the things I'm taking a hard look at in the edit...and this is an open question to anyone, by the way.
The way I have it now, just to sum up quickly:
-She never comes out and actually lies, but she still wants to impress upon everyone what she's about, even if she's doing it clumsily.
-She's tried so hard to score, and failed repeatedly, while coming agonizingly close.
-She's also trying to live up to what she thinks her friends expect of her...of course she's scoring left and right, she's freaking Rainbow Dash. Right?
This ends up tangling her into a secretly anxious ball of false bravado. I was hoping to address that more in future stories - I would love to give Dash a full-length treatment after Fluttershy, where she finally comes to terms with the Gilda stuff and learns some lessons and whatnot. But for Romance Reports itself, it became a big discussion in the original thread on fimchan of whether or not she should have actually been a virgin by the time she got to Twilight, what her true motivations were, etc. Curious for more thoughts on that, as I'm revising Romance Reports as we speak.
As for the lies and exaggerations, you made great points. I was trying to play it up in Private Party for comedic effect, but I can see now where it could be OOC. Dash is definitely cocky, but she's yet to outright make anything up. I think her boasting regarding sex has solid build up behind it, but in other areas it doesn't quite make sense. It was just too tempting to have Applejack play straight man to ridiculous Rainbow Dash, I guess. Thanks for all that!
You have NO IDEA how much I'd love to see that Rainbow Dash full-length treatment. The dynamic with Rainbow's past with Gilda and how it will affect her future relationships is just so amazingly well done, and just BEGS for more exploration. Also I have a soft spot for the griffin, so I just want her to show up more in general, even if it's flashbacks to a failed relationship.
dovahkiin dovahkiin naal ok zin los vahriin
man this shit is so awesome w/ skyrim music
also i liked the story and the whole " I fucked gilda and broke up with her lol " deal
i still think this whole clopfic thing ( and thereby myself for even reading this shit ) is pretty damn pathetic
kudos to you anyways
I absolutely loved this story, my only complaint is that it ended, but I guess that is just a bit of greediness on my part. You put a lot of thought into this and really pulled it together into one of the most marvelous things I've read in a very long time. I was kind of iffy on the principle of Luna's request, but what it turned into was amazing. I've formed an intricate connection with your Twilight and her experiences, I've cried when she cried, laughed when she laughed, and I haven't gotten that from a book in a long time. Thank you for writing this. I look forward to reading your future works.
I want to say how very much I love this story, how well written it is, how astonishingly complex the characterization is. If this is what a supposed 'clopfic' can be, then dammit, I've just become a complete fan of the genre.
No, this isn't a 'clopfic', if I understand the term, this is an astonishingly romantic tale of powerfully represented emotions. Sexuality is essentially just the motivation in some ways; the real action is inside the characters minds and hearts. I am blown away that this is possible; this story is way outside my normal experience, and It. Is. Brilliant.
God Damn, SleeplessBrony, not only have you entertained me, not only have you exponentially expanded familiar characters for me to astonishing complexity, but you have shown me that there are ways to make sexuality vital to a story in such a manner that it illuminates the very souls of the characters. Yeah, maybe I'm a little slow on the uptake, or a little sheltered or whatever, but I didn't know that before this work.
I feel like your vision of Twilight, and I am the one being educated by your writing prowess.
Thank you for writing this, and damn am I happy I found 'Romance Reports'. Just amazing.
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The way I read it it was more or a warning. Luna realizes that she is a creature of fancy when it comes to these sorts of things and want's Twilight to have enough experience in the matters of love to not completely break apart when Luna eventually grows tired of her (and probably get sent to the moon in the process). Although the morality of her methods can be questioned, she does mean well.
Not to spoil anything in case you do decide to read the entire novel, but in the end we find out that Luna has set up a xanatos gambit, and although she sends Twilight through the gauntlet, her trial by fire ends up teaching Twilight some very valuable lessons on the nature of love.
Again, the morality of Luna's methods can, and certainly should, be brought into question. Her manipulation of Twilight is definitely far from what most would consider good. But I urge you, before pass judgement on this story, read a few more chapters. Judging a character's actions before they have had the chance to be explained or justified is not a very good way to critique.
This was the first Fan Fic I've ever read, I finished this story long ago but it inspired to start writing my own. It had pretty much everything, plot ( lol ), action, sadness, and a lot of other things that comprise a great story, SleeplessBrony, You are awesome
*sighs* oh Sleepless.... A long time ago I swore that I'd never read clop fics. Like... Ever. Then I read this story back near the very beginning because it was recommended to me. Ive seen this said time and again to to you so I just have to reiterate, you have done an amazing job taking a porn story and making me not only buy it, but also really enjoy it. Your characters not only have depth, but I feel like they have been torn straight from canon and grown up a bit. I really hope that not only do you keep at this one, giving us all those little side stories that you have promised, but that you find other ways to amaze and astound. Bravo!
"slowly sailing the sea of dildos" do you know how weird it is to laugh while very aroused? Great story man, thank you for adding it to Romance Reports.
I'm completely in love with this story. You've deepened and matured the characterizations of all the mane cast without throwing anyone into OOC territory, and you've taken a very deep look into the nature of romantic love. I especially like that the story didn't just end after Cheerilee and Twilight's first date, as many stories do (the "end the movie with a wedding" thing) but took a look at how things work in a more established, long-term relationship.
I also really enjoyed the interactions among all the friends. The obvious love all of them had for one another, even when having horrible knock-down fights or at that party where Dash and Rarity gently shot down a post-Luna Twilight. My favorite of all the friend moments, I think, was when Twilight took a post-battle report from everyone after she'd sent them out to help win back Cheerilee. My heart just felt so full and happy. Cheerilee was absolutely right about how lucky Twilight is.
This really was a story about platonic and familiar love as much as about romantic love. I like how you showed how all these kinds of love are important and special, because they are.
I also wanted to comment specifically on the bonus chapter, as Rainbow Dash and Pinkie Pie are my One True Ship. Love, love, love. I'm completely in love with your characterization of Pinkie here. How she subtly takes the reins from Dash while letting Dash think she's still in charge, so Dash's all-important fascade can remain in place. How tender and caring she is with Dash, in her own way. Pinkie breaks my heart--in a good way. And so does Rainbow, and the hints at her painful past experiences.
Thank you for this story.
Read this a while ago, still one of my favourite fanfictions of all time
Thanks for the great read. :D I read this over the span of a couple days, really happy with it.
"It's like...space penis!”
I died laughing
Wah! What are we gonna do on the bed? POMF! Hahahahaha.
Best part of the whole story.
Thank you for uploading it here! This is one of my favorite fics
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Please, please, please do a full follow-up for Rainbow Dash. I nearly slapped myself at the end of Private Party when I realized just how scarred Dash was. You did a perfect job of veiling her scars in the main story, because while I could tell that she was acting odd, I never put the pieces together.
Your characterization is fantastic, and your ability to balance a story with tasteful clop scenes is unparalleled. As much fun as your shorts are, I am anxiously awaiting another in-depth piece from you.
Read this awhile ago. It is fraking amazing.
There is nothing for me to say that hasn't already been said, and I realize you'll probably never read this, SleeplessBrony. I also know that this will come off as crazy and pathetic, but here goes, goddamnit !
If you haven't, you seriously need to write a book. Seriously. If you have and it hasn't been praised as a work of true art I need to take a torch and burn whatever is responsible.
To me, you are someone who is on par with other great artists I look up to, Eiichiro Oda, for example. You, as well as most great people, have managed to find the niche in your mind where you understand and accept yourself, others, and the workings of the world, and aren't afraid, unlike me, to explore and face those things. Face the good things and love them and share them. Face the bad things and not shy away or ignore them, but see them for what they are, and just accept them. You aren't afraid to "go there". To you "there" is a place all people have been to and shouldn't be ignored, though to me and for others it's a daily struggle to try and face that place, when we would prefer to pretend it doesn't exist.
Maybe you have more life experience than me. Maybe it's this damn depression that I keep having issues with. Maybe I don't understand myself well enough. Maybe you've simply been braver than me, but you've taken the truth that we all understand and fully embraced it. Society and depression and pressure have forced me to deny that basic understanding of emotion and bury it under "what we should feel" and "what others want us to feel and do".
I haven't lived my life for myself in a long time. Sometimes it's school that lives my life. Sometimes it's friends. Hell, sometimes it's My Little Pony that takes over and makes me go through my day. But I haven't gone through a day really doing what I want for the longest time.
People who can do that, like you and other amazing artists, are the people that command all of my respect in this world. I don't know how you do it, but I wish I did. I hope to someday be like you. Celestia knows, I'm trying! Words probably can describe how much I appreciate you being who you are, though I'm too poor of a wordsmith to make it work. It just gives me hope that there are people out there like you.
Wow.
I'm humbled by your. . . . something. . . . Celestia.... I just can't describe my respect for you.
Maybe I assume too much from the story, but work of this level has to come from somewhere deep. I send the above to you with doubt in my heart, ha. Look at that, I'm already doubting my feelings again. I'll finish before I decide to delete all of my rambling on your awesomeness.
I can only express this by repeating it over and over again.
Take my gratitude. For what? I don't know. I'm too stupid to understand the depth of your work and how amazing it is. Take my gratitude. For what? I don't know. I'm too stupid to understand the depth of your work and how amazing it is. Take my gratitude. For what? I don't know. I'm too stupid to understand the depth of your work and how amazing it is. Take my gratitude. For what? I don't know. I'm too stupid to understand the depth of your work and how amazing it is. Take my gratitude. For what? I don't know. I'm too stupid to understand the depth of your work and how amazing it is. Take my gratitude. For what? I don't know. I'm too stupid to understand the depth of your work and how amazing it is. Take my gratitude. For what? I don't know. I'm too stupid to understand the depth of your work and how amazing it is. Take my gratitude. For what? I don't know. I'm too stupid to understand the depth of your work and how amazing it is.
56381 The way I see it, if a relationship and love are meant to happen they will happen. You don't need to mess around with other people (ponies in this case) to "prepare" for one. Someone finds mental maturity for such on their own accord, not by being with other people. Its just wrong for Luna to want Twilight to not only give up her virginity, but give eveyr ounce of innocence she has just for her own satisfaction. That's why I will not respect this story.
41667>>41667 I read and respect what you have to say, really, but this seems to me of a "lets defile twilight's innocent for the sake of sexual pleasure, so she will be slutty enough for Luna to take her in" I am by no means an advocate of abstinence or non sex before marriage, but I do believe in reserving sexual interactions with someone you are truly intimate with. The way this story is treating intimacy is just wrong and empty. I have read other Fanfics supporting my view, the exact opposite of this, when Twilight asked all of her friends on a date but they just laughed at her, got pissed, or felt awkward. She learned at the end it's not about going on a date, its about the pony you do it with. I do realize that most of the chapters are about her performing sexual favors with a handful of ponies, which isn't exactly what I'm interested in.
The reason I don't like the story was because of the motives in the story, not because other people like it.
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Good sir, I agree with you completely. Let me shake your hoof.
This story may be well written, but in my eyes it kills everything good in FIM. I regret reading it.
It's sad that someone have taken the time to actually rating bomb this story. Probably by some proxy program that changed up their IP.
Your fanfic, this an all others you have written, seem to have been pushed down from near perfect 5.0s in just a day or three. Literally receiving hundreds of 0.5 stars. Which is a shame, I really found it incredibly amusing to that two of your stories were in the top 10 best rated fics on this website.
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Huh, I always wondered why I couldn't get into this story myself, but I think you nailed it. Twilight's so shallow for most of the story, and Luna's actions are so vile (supposed good intentions be damned) - it all just doesn't mesh. Kind of wish I could un-read it too, but it is what it is.
Right then. The story was good, I rather liked it. Got very sex heavy at the end with the Cheerilee thing. I preferred it when it was random flings with ponies. I also tend to avoid any kind of sexualisation of Twilight Sparkle because of reasons I suppose I could explain if you really want me to but whatever. I think you tackled the issue quite well though I must admit I was beginning to get annoyed by Applejack and Twilight constantly arguing and the fact Rainbow Dash never spoke about her insecurities. Even to her friends. Spike also seemed like a part of the story no one ever seemed to care about, he just seemed like a slave where despite 2 mares getting it on right beneath his nose he was completely clueless. This is the same dragon who ran up the stairs when he heard Braeburn and Twilight arguing but not when he hears a mare screaming? Also where was Fluttershy during the last 70% of the fic? Seriously everyone else had a LOT of facetime except her, this killed it slightly for me, just because she is just as important as everyone else... And any time she did appear she was acting like the complete innocent which annoyed me because NOBODY ELSE WAS. Right, onto the... Citrusy scenes then, most of them seemed forced. Particularly near the end of the fic, I would have like to see a Pinkie and Twilight thing going on because I love that pairing but this naturally was not the case... There could have been a lot less sex and I would have liked this much more but I guess it enhanced the experience even though it WAS my favourite pony and I knew exactly what I was getting myself in for.
Anyway, you are a good writer. I have heard your name reach my ears once or twice so I was legitimately interested when I found this. Any problems I have I have detailed above. I rate this a 7/10.
(I wont be coming back here so either look for this name on Fanfiction.net or DeviantART if you wish to reply or comment)
Not particularly bad, as far as clopfics go. Suffice to say that the storyline is a significant enough part of the fic to be more disgusted with it (OOC Luna and Twilight) rather than with sexual content
I am now mentally scarred, For the next ten minutes that is.
The head-canon for these two characters is now (quite literally) fucked up.
But it is so well written (like the rest of Romance Reports) that it is truly what other "Clopfics" should aspire to be.
Oh yeah and "Like a space penis" Really got me.
I have found atleast four great quotes from this story!
well done, I hope that your writing does not end here!
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You do have a point, but for the sake of the story being so well [Insert accurate description here] I will have to negate that particular notion.
well done