Kingdom Hearts: Friendship’s Turmoil
Chapter 3: More to Go
All Sora could feel was nothingness. Pure darkness was all around him, and though it didn’t consume him, it also didn’t allow him the element of feeling either. Then, he found himself floating, slowly falling towards whatever was waiting for him below. Groggily, he was able to regain movement, and even sight in time; but it was still too dark to make out anything. In a few seconds, he was righted so he would be standing, and landed gently on a solid surface.
On instinct, Sora looked down to see a glass surface, one that was very familiar, yet not. It was mostly purple with circles all along the rim, and a smaller circle - taking the upper-half of the pillar - held seven equal circles inside of it. He had seen those glass pillars, sure, but the design was empty. There wasn’t anything to signify what it represented.
Before Sora could hope to think on it further, a voice spoke in his head. It was empty, like the words were simply appearing in his mind, rather than being spoken. “There is Darkness in Light,” it said, causing a chill to run down Sora’s spine. “And Light in Darkness. There cannot be one without the other.”
Sora looked around the darkness that surrounded him, as if he could find the one that said these words, but to no avail. “Six elements are what oppose the Darkness.” It continued, “Six elements, but one meaning.”
Sora had no idea what the voice could be talking about, but remained silent. He knew there was no point in trying to reply, as he didn’t even know if the voice would respond. “Do the six make up the one, or does the one make up the six? That is for you to find out.”
Sora frowned at the voice’s riddles. They had never made much sense, even when he first found himself here. One of the circles in the smaller circle glowed cyan as an image appeared. Sora walked over to it with curiosity, and the light faded away to reveal Rainbow Dash, wearing a different outfit than what he saw her in.
“Loyalty…” the voice echoed ominously.
What exactly would that mean? Is Rainbow loyal to someone, or is it just her personality? Confused, Sora shook his head, and awaited for something else to happen. Inevitably, another light, this one yellow, glowed in another circle across from Rainbow’s image. Looking over, the image showed Fluttershy, wearing the same outfit Rainbow Dash had on.
“Kindness…” the voice said.
First loyalty, now kindness. Sora couldn’t understand what these meant or what those two girls had to do with it, but felt like it would reveal itself in time. When that would be, he didn’t know. It couldn’t be something bad, he felt confident of that, but he knew that not finding out could lead to dire consequences.
“Find the rest,” the voice said, “And the meaning will become clear.”
“The rest of what?” Sora finally asked, looking up at the nothingness above. He was tired of being left clueless. The voice didn’t reply, nor did he really expect it to, as Sora was left to his thoughts. Did it mean find the other people that filled these circles? And if that was the case, how would he know where to find them? A few seconds later, Sora felt himself sink into the ground. Alarmed, he flailed about, trying to pull himself out as he saw that the entire platform had disappeared, leaving only the darkness that he felt before. As he slowly sank into the abyss, he heard the voice speak again, only this time it was difficult to make out.
“You are the key to the end. How it will end shall lie with you.”
With those words ringing in his ears, Sora sank faster, his efforts to escape becoming futile. Soon, only his hand was left, reaching out for whatever it was worth. To his surprise, he felt a hand grasp his, but when he thought about it, it wasn’t really one hand. It was six hands. With the hands tightly grasping his own, they pulled, and brought him out of the Darkness.
***
Sora’s eyes shot open, and he instantly sat up in his bed. Though he regretted doing that, as he banged his head against the roof of his bunk. He was back in the Gummi Ship, back in reality, and it was painful. Rubbing his sore head, Sora climbed out of bed, still feeling sleepy as he walked to the cockpit.
“What was that about?” he questioned, shaking his head slowly. Sitting in the pilot’s chair, he gazed outside to the rising sun, his mind drawing a blank from finding a conclusion. What did Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy have in common? And why were they referred to as ‘loyalty’ and ‘kindness’? It was a peculiar mystery. Knowing there was no way he was going to find his answers from sitting around, Sora jumped up from the chair and stretched his arms.
“Time for my first day of school,” he reminded himself. He hadn’t been to school in years, and it would be refreshing for him to return after so long. Flipping a switch, the ramp under the Gummi Ship lowered, and Sora ran down it, heading over to the edge of the roof.
Peering down, Sora could see all the students milling about in the front yard of the school, either heading inside or talking with friends. He found it relaxing to stand up there, high above the ground with the sun shining on him. It gave him a sense of belonging, like he had experienced it many times before, even though he hadn’t. It also gave him a craving for sea-salt ice cream.
Focusing back to the ground, Sora saw Fluttershy standing in front of the statue of a horse. She looked to be holding a piece of paper in one hand, with a stack of papers in her other arm. She was conversing with Rainbow Dash, whom he had met the day before, and a white-skinned girl, who had dark purple hair. The girl had on a purple skirt with a very light blue blouse. Fluttershy must have been friends with them.
Turning back to Fluttershy, Sora remembered how he had involuntarily scared her away. “I need to talk to her.” Sora muttered, for he knew it was the right thing to do, even if she didn’t want to see him again.
How Sora would bring up the subject and get her to forgive him would be a challenge, but Sora knew that he could do it. Wanting to get to her quickly, Sora looked directly below him to judge how far he would have to jump. It was only two stories down, and he had fallen from higher places without trouble. Satisfied with his analysis, he took a step back, and leapt off the building.
***
Fluttershy was having her typical Wednesday morning. As in, she was handing out fliers for the local animal shelter, and she was being ignored. Though she tried valiantly, it was only a repeat of last week, and the week before that, and the week before that. Holding out a flyer was hardly working, but what else could she do?
“Canterlot’s animal shelter needs more volunteers,” she called out rather desperately, “Won’t you help an animal that can’t help itself?”
However, everyone continued on their way, barely giving her a second glance. Sighing, Fluttershy continued waving the flyer in her hand. She promised herself that she would do this every week, and she was sticking to that, even if she felt like she would break down into tears.
With the extra time, Fluttershy thought back to the scene involving Sora and those black creatures. She was really frightened to find them there, disappearing in a black mist every time Sora hit one. Not only that, but the weapon he was using was so bizarre. In truth, she didn’t really know what to think of Sora. Why would he be fighting them? And why did he use a weapon that looks like a key?
“Fluttershy!” Rainbow Dash’s voice exclaimed happily, knocking Fluttershy out of her thoughts as she jumped. When she looked over, she saw Rainbow approach with another of her friends.
“Oh, hello Rainbow, hi Rarity,” she replied with a smile. Rainbow simply waved back, but Rarity looked very relieved and cheerful, practically skipping with joy.
“Handing out fliers again, I see?” Rarity said, sounding like the whole idea was wonderful, and when Fluttershy nodded, she let out a loud, “Marvelous!”
“You sound happy today,” Fluttershy said, glad to see her so relaxed. Because of Rarity’s work, Fluttershy rarely saw her outside of school, and other times, she would be so tired that she could barely utter a word.
“Yeah, no kidding,” Rainbow commented with a smirk, gently elbowing Rarity in the gut. Rarity giggled at the gesture, which was uncommon in that type of situation.
“I most certainly am happy,” Rarity revealed, hugging herself as she explained, “It took me days, but I finally finished the dress I’ve been working on.”
“That’s good,” Fluttershy said, her mind involuntarily going back to Sora again, causing her smile to falter. Rainbow was the first to notice and she frowned with a raised brow.
“You okay, Fluttershy?” she asked, “You look kind of down.”
Rarity was able to snap out of her happy mood to see what Rainbow meant, looking at Fluttershy with concern. Fluttershy felt pressured as she hugged her fliers, unsure on how to respond to the question.
“Y-Yes,” Fluttershy stuttered, but seeing their faces, she quickly added, “Well, I mean, not really.”
“Come on, you can tell us,” Rainbow said reassuringly, giving her a worried look. Fluttershy hadn’t told her friends about the incident with Sora, and she wasn’t really sure why. Probably because she didn’t want to bother them with something she didn’t fully believe herself. Plus, she didn’t know how the best way to describe the scene.
“W-Well,” Fluttershy sighed, searching for the right words to use. “Do you remember the transfer student, Rainbow?”
“Yeah, the spiky-haired guy,” Rainbow recalled, as she crossed her arms with a hint of impatience, “What about him?”
“Transfer student?” Rarity asked, looking between the two, “When did we get a transfer student?”
“Just yesterday,” Rainbow said, looking irritated, “Now, what about this guy?”
“His name is Sora,” Fluttershy kindly reminded, making Rainbow sigh in exasperation.
“Can you just tell us what he did?” Rainbow groaned, sagging her body.
“Um, you see, he sort of-” she started slowly.
“Did this ‘Sora’ hurt you!?” Rarity exclaimed, drawing stares from passing students. Just like Rarity to jump to the worst conclusions.
“N-No,” Fluttershy stammered, suddenly feeling like she was tattling on Sora. He hadn’t done anything wrong, but her friends really wanted to know, otherwise they would pester her until she told them. “He just… scared me.”
Rarity and Rainbow glanced at each other with concern before turning back to Fluttershy, who was staring at the floor pitifully, a few fliers slipping from her grip and onto the ground.
“Why didn’t you tell us sooner, darling?” Rarity requested, putting a hand on Fluttershy’s shoulder.
“I didn’t know if you would believe me,” she revealed, feeling embarrassed about the whole thing.
Rainbow sidled up to Fluttershy with a genuine smile, wrapping an arm around Fluttershy’s shoulder. “We’re your friends, Fluttershy,” she said, “You can tell us anything!”
Rarity smiled as well, stepping to Fluttershy’s other side to wrap her own arm around her. “Besides,” she added, “after the whole mess with the Twilight and the crown, I think we can handle anything.”
Fluttershy looked up at Rarity, seeing the sincerity on her face, and Rainbow’s was no different. How could she doubt her friends like that? She should have had more faith in them.
“Thanks,” she whispered, feeling glad she had friends like them. She looked to the sky, her mood having lifted considerably, and when her eyes passed over the roof of the school, her smile quickly faded into confusion. “Oh, why is he on the roof?”
Puzzled, Rainbow and Rarity gave her a funny look before seeing what she was talking about, and they saw Sora hanging out on the roof, just standing there. Many other students had stopped in their tracks to stare at him as well, already muttering amongst themselves.
“At least it’s easier to find him,” Rainbow growled, releasing Fluttershy as she took a few steps forward.
“I concur,” Rarity said, also letting Fluttershy go as she stood beside Rainbow. “We shall teach this transfer student not to scare our-”
He had jumped off the roof. The whole courtyard was taken by surprise as they saw him falling to the ground. “What is he doing!?” Rarity shouted, her jaw wide open. Rainbow was just as taken aback, simply standing in shock. Fluttershy was completely speechless, her mind going blank as she watched Sora grow closer and closer to the ground. She couldn’t process why Sora would do such a thing, but turned away, too afraid to see what would happen when he landed.
After a few seconds, she peeked again, and her surprise had doubled ten fold. Sora had stuck the landing, and was running over to them like it was nothing. He had jumped off a two-story building, landed, and simply walked it off. To say that she, or everyone who had seen the stunt, were shocked would be an understatement.
***
After sticking the landing, like he always did, Sora headed straight for Fluttershy, ignoring the stares he had earned. As he neared her, he tried to think of what exactly to say to her, but was coming up with nothing. He hoped she would accept a simple apology, because that was all he had. Rainbow and the purple-haired girl were gawking at him the entire time, until he had stopped a ways away from them, uncertain if they would want him near them.
Looking over to Fluttershy, he saw her hide her face from him using her hair. He rubbed the back of his head as he waited for the words to pop in his head like he hoped they would. Knowing he had to say something, he opened his mouth to at least say hello, but didn’t have the chance.
“How did you do that?” Rainbow questioned, her eyes wide in disbelief.
Distracted from his objective, Sora turned to her with a raised eyebrow and tilted head. “Uh, do what?” he asked back, not understanding what she meant.
“Jump off the school,” the purple-haired girl explained pointing to the building, which Sora faced to fully comprehend their meaning.
He shrugged, “I always do that.”
“Huh!?” the two exclaimed simultaneously.
Shaking his head at their behavior, Sora turned his focus back to Fluttershy, who still hadn’t looked at him since he had arrived. “Fluttershy,” Sora started with a guilty frown, making Fluttershy take a quick glance at him before hiding again.
Rainbow and the purple-haired girl were quickly knocked out of their stunned demeanor and furrowed their brows at him. They stood between Sora and Fluttershy like a wall, as they bore down on him like a kid caught stealing from the cookie jar. “How dare you come see Fluttershy again, you ruffian!” the purple-haired girl shouted, making Sora jump back. He didn’t think he scared her that bad, but maybe he had frightened her more than he had thought.
“I just wanted to say I’m sorry,” he tried to explain, waving his arms in front of himself.
“Right,” Rainbow drawled with a roll of her eyes, crossing her arms. Sora sighed, his shoulders slumping. He didn’t think apologizing would be this hard.
“You… want to say you're sorry?” Fluttershy said quietly, earning a look from Rainbow and Rarity.
Sora gave a friendly smile, “Yeah. I mean, I didn’t do it on purpose.”
“I guess not,” Fluttershy admitted, blushing slightly at Sora’s kindness. It’s like he cared about everyone he met, even if he hadn’t truly met them yet. “Thank you, Sora.”
Sora sighed, glad to have that off his chest, and nodded at her. Rainbow looked between the two as Rarity looked Sora over, studying his outfit.
“What exactly did he do to scare you anyway?” Rainbow asked at last, making Sora suddenly nervous. He didn’t want to force Fluttershy to lie to her friends, but he didn’t want too many people knowing about everything that had happened. Fluttershy was evidently indecisive herself, as she backed away from the tension.
“Um, he… he just…” she said weakly, trying to stall for whatever it was worth, but knew deep down that there would be no way out of an explanation.
It was at that moment, that the three heard someone yell, “Get out of my way!”
When they looked over, they saw Sunset Shimmer shove her way past the other students, and a few jumped out of the way in freight. Rarity scoffed at her attitude and looked the other way, obviously unhappy with the way Sunset treated others. As Sora watched her move away from them towards the entrance of the school, he found himself asking, “What’s her problem?”
“The question is,” Rainbow corrected with a huff, “What isn’t her problem.”
“She was always so mean before Twilight Sparkle came,” the purple-haired girl elaborated, “Practically ruling the school, come to think of it.”
“So, what exactly did Twilight do?” Sora asked, becoming interested in the tale.
“She brought everyone together,” Rainbow said, a huge grin on her face. “It was awesome! Especially when she used magic to take down Sunset when she became a monster!”
That got Sora’s attention, as he leaned forward with a concerning face. “Monster!?” he blurted, before crossing his arms while facing the ground, thinking over what he had learned. Cadence had told him that a monster had appeared during a dance. Perhaps they were one and the same. Facing forward, Sora was startled to see the purple haired girl right next to him, examining his clothes critically.
“What are you doing?” Sora asked with a chuckle, finding it a bit amusing to find her so attentive to his outfit.
The purple-haired girl jerked up slightly from being addressed, and slowly looked up towards Sora’s bemused expression. With a slight blush, she jumped back with an embarrassed smile. “N-Nothing at all, darling,” she laughed nervously, facing away from him.
“What’s your name anyway?” Sora asked, suddenly feeling rude for not asking earlier.
The purple-haired girl turned back to him with a gasp, “We haven’t been properly introduced! Oh, please excuse me for that, but I am Rarity.”
“It’s alright,” Sora waved off, “We can call it even for chewing me out. Oh, and I’m Sora.”
Rarity giggled, “Splendid.”
“Anyway,” Sora chuckled, before turning serious, “Someone told me that a monster attacked the dance. Was Sunset that monster?”
“Yep,” Rainbow answered with a sigh, “She nearly destroyed us too, if it wasn’t for those-”
The bell suddenly rang, alarming everyone that classes were to begin soon. As the students in the front yard began to file into the building, the four blinked in surprise. Time had passed faster than they had thought.
“Oh, man, I can’t be late for Algebra again!” Rainbow shouted, sprinting for the school as the other three watched. “I’ll catch you guys later!”
Rarity brushed her skirt, “I guess Fluttershy and I should be off for Chemistry.”
Fluttershy nodded in agreement, quickly collecting the pieces of paper that had fallen. Sora remembered he had his own class to get to, but for the life of him, couldn’t recall where it was.
“Will we see you soon, Sora?” Fluttershy asked sweetly, smiling. Sora had made a good impression on her, even though he had made messed up.
“Yeah, of course,” Sora answered with a firm nod, knowing he would keep his promise. “But… do you know where Miss Cheerilee’s room is?”
“Oh, that was where Rainbow was headed off to,” Rarity said, already heading out herself. “You should ask her before it’s too late.”
“Thanks,” Sora said, running for the school. Fluttershy and Rarity walked with each other towards the entrance, catching the last glimpse of Sora as he swung open the doors and went inside.
***
As Fluttershy and Rarity entered, they both talked briefly about the exchange with Sora.
“He certainly is different from everyone else I met,” Rarity commented, looking over to Fluttershy, who simply nodded. “So childish, yet responsible! How did you two meet?”
“He helped me with my detention,” Fluttershy answered, playing with the flyers in her hands.
“Really?” Rarity said in mild disbelief, gazing out in a daydream. “How noble! And his clothing is so elegant and stylish; It fits him perfectly!”
As Rarity continued saying remarkable things about Sora, Fluttershy thought back to how Sora had apologized to her. He had seeked her out, even jumping off a building, just to say he was sorry. How he went through such lengths to help out someone he had barely known was truly fantastic. With a small smile, she hoped she would run into him again soon.
***
Sunset Shimmer was aggravated to no end. It wasn’t really from something that happened to her that morning, as she was actually having a normal day, but it was the gossip she heard when she got to school. Gossip about a certain spiky-haired boy.
As she stormed through the hallways, Sunset let her mind wonder how that boy was getting so well-known so fast. After the incident at the Fall Formal, she had to lie to get Twilight Sparkle off her back, pretending like she wanted to make friends. She still couldn’t believe how oblivious Twilight and her friends were that she had ‘reformed’ so quickly. And when Twilight left back to Equestria, the pony world, she instantly went back to her old habits, wanting to rebuild her status that the princess had destroyed in only three days.
It was a slow process, as the students hadn’t forgotten what Sunset had done at the dance. But over the last few weeks, she had reminded them why she was in charge of the school to begin with. Blackmail worked wonders. Even though the Twilight of this world enrolled in this school, Sunset knew she was no threat, and she was basically unopposed. However, with the arrival of that boy, everything she had been working on was crumbling as the students only talked about him. Sure, it may just start off with a small rumor of him jumping off a building, one that she doubted happened, but eventually he would become more famous, and knock her off her pedestal.
As she stopped at her locker to collect her things for her next class, she heard someone running down the hallway. Turning her head, she saw the same boy run past her without a glance at her, intent on going where he needed to get to. Just seeing him go by made Sunset grow even angrier. She would have to put that boy in his place, show him who the real talk of the school was.
“You are going to wish you never came to this school,” Sunset sneered, a grin appearing on her face as she slammed her locker shut. She was already coming up with a plan, and in time, she would implement it.
***
Gasping for breath, Lea put his hands on his knees as he desperately tried to regain his breath. He never imagined being a keyblader would be so much work. Of course, it was much harder for him than Kairi, as he was so used to wielding his Chakrams. Using a keyblade was so different: the fighting style, the magic, everything. It had taken its toll on him.
“Come on, Lea,” Kairi called out from the other side of the yard in front of an abandoned mansion, holding her keyblade, Destiny’s Embrace. “You can’t be tired already!”
Lea couldn’t help but chuckle at her behaviour. She had been so dedicated to her training that she probably ignored the fatigue over all. She wanted to be at her friends’ sides in battle by the time she was done.
Taking a deep breath, Lea said back, “Why don’t we take a break. I could use one after all the beating I’ve been taking.”
Kairi giggled and nodded, making Lea instantly fall into a sitting position with a sigh of relief, resting against his hands as he leaned back. Walking over to him, Kairi sat beside him as Lea observed his surroundings. He was still a bit surprised that the King would hold their training in Twilight Town. It felt so long ago when he was last here. It reminded him so much of his best friend, Roxas, and the times they had shared together.
“Hey, Lea,” Kairi said, gaining his attention as he turned to her, “You never told me why you're still wearing that black coat. Couldn’t you get something else to wear?”
Looking at himself, Lea certainly did have the same black coat he had been wearing for the longest time. “Well, yeah, I could if I wanted to,” Lea answered, with a smile, looking back at the sky. “But I make this look good. And it’s quite comfortable.” He faced Kairi, tapping the side of his head, “Got it memorized?”
Kairi nodded, her smile growing at Lea’s catchphrase. She herself looked up at the sky with Lea, her mind drifting off to other things. “I wonder how Sora’s doing,” she commented out of nowhere, making Lea look at her strangely.
“Why suddenly bring that up?” he asked with a raised eyebrow.
“Just thinking out loud,” she replied, and Lea rubbed his chin in thought.
“Well,” he started, sticking a finger in air matter-of-factly. “He’s probably making more friends. Knowing him, he’ll probably have twice as many as he had before.”
“But he won’t forget us,” Kairi said her smile never wavering, “Right?”
“Yeah,” Lea said, punching the palm of his hand, “Or else he’s going to have to answer to me.”
Kairi laughed at his joke, just as King Mickey came through the woods over to them, holding something behind his back. Seeing his return, Kairi stood up and met him halfway, while Lea remained where he sat, looking over nonchalantly.
“I see ya two are taking a break, huh?” King Mickey said, looking over to Lea, who gave an idle wave to him.
Kairi put her hands on her hips as she turned towards Lea, “Only because Lea begged for one.”
“Hey!” Lea exclaimed with a smile, pointing a finger at her. “If I wasn’t so new to this keyblade, I wouldn’t be half as tired.”
Kairi rolled her eyes as King Mickey smiled warmly. “Well,” he started, standing on his toes, “It’s a good thing I brought these then.”
As Lea and Kairi gave him confused expressions, King Mickey showed them what he was hiding behind his back: three bars of sea-salt ice cream. The sight made Lea give a bark of excitement as he jumped to his feet and walked over to him. King Mickey handed one to Kairi and Lea, keeping one for himself, and the three simultaneously licked the ice cream.
“It’s salty…” Kairi said, giving the ice cream an odd look.
“But sweet,” Lea finished, licking it again before realizing something. “Oh, this is the first time you’ve eaten sea-salt ice cream, isn’t it?”
When Kairi nodded, Lea gave a quick chuckle, “Well, just don’t eat it too fast, and enjoy it while it lasts.”
As the three ate their ice cream contently, they each gave the same thought of how delicious it was. As Kairi glanced up, she caught sight of a cluster of gold dust heading straight for them. “Hey, what’s that?” she asked the group, pointing directly towards it.
Though Lea had no clue, King Mickey knew exactly what it was. “That’s Master Yen Sid’s magic!” he said as the gold dust neared the ground a few meters away from where they stood. The dust swirled amongst each other and two figures fell out of it, one landing right on top of the other
“Donald! Goofy!” King Mickey exclaimed happily.
It truly was Sora’s companions, Donald and Goofy, though they didn’t look nearly as heroic while Goofy was sitting on Donald. Goofy looked up from his position and smiled broadly. “Hello, your majesty!” he said, and looked over to Lea and Kairi, “Oh, and hello to you too, Lea and Kairi.”
Lea and Kairi held back their laughter as they waved at him, and Goofy returned the wave. Donald, on the other hand, was still on the ground with Goofy right on top of him, drumming his fingers on the ground irritably.
“Get off me, you big palooka!” Donald shouted, making Goofy look down on where he landed. As soon as he noticed Donald, he instantly got off, though a bit sluggishly.
“Oh, Sorry Donald,” Goofy apologized, scratching the back of his head, “I didn’t know you were there!”
Donald grumbled to himself as he pushed himself to his feet, wiping the dirt off of his sleeves. Lea had missed these two considerably, as they were not only courageous, but also funny to be around. “What brings you guys here?” he asked, causing the Donald and Goofy to face him, with a look of worry, as Donald crossed his arms and Goofy played with his hands. That made Lea a bit nervous, seeing as they were hardly ever like that.
“Master Yen Sid sent us,” Goofy explained, “He has an important mission for you guys.”
“A mission, huh?” Lea said with a shake of his head and a grin, crossing his arms, “Where would you guys be without us?”
Not to criticize, but shouldn't you have figured out most of the story before you started writing it?
3509971 Hey, I just suddenly had this idea, and rolled with it. Do I look like I have a plan!?
3510001 With that profile picture? Yes.
I have a suggestion, why not involve the Mirror World Twilight somehow? Not Princess Twilight, just the Twilight of that world.
Sunset Shimmer suffering an ironic fate: that is, turning into Canterlot High´s Nobody after losing her heart .
Lea...Being a teacher.
Honestly, I think Sunset was honest about wanting to get friends... but not for the sake of friendship. What Sunset wanted was the power to rule.... and Twilight proved the true way to such power is with friends. So, she likely would seek friends not for redemption's sake... but rather, so she can acquire the same power Twilight had. Or at least, that would be the reason at first.
I would usually have a lot of ideas to offer, but seeing as I haven't played Kingdom Hearts in years, i'm in no shape to help. I'm very sorry.
Sunset's got darkness to spare, give her some Heartless to control.
I would have to say Applejack and Pinkie Pie, and I wanted to see what expression of Sora when Pinkie Pie goes what pinkie does.
Lea, please more Lea. And maybe Roxas if you can?
How about an introduction to Human!Twilight? Even if it's just a summary, I would like to know how she came to Canterlot High and how she met the Mane 5.
3510988 Don't worry about it. You do enough in my other story!
3511045 It ain't a Kingdom Hearts story without Lea, so definetly be seeing more of him. As for Roxas, well, no spoilers.
1.) Don't forget about Aqua, Terra, and Ven!
2.) Summons
3.) Learning new spells
4.) New Drive Forms
5.) Can't go wrong with a few well placed cameos
6.) Scrounge up a few Nobodies, perhaps even an original or two.
7.) Xehanort getting new lackeys
8) Discord = best student counselor
9.) More info on how Sora's Heart is connected to everyone else's
10) explaining the level up system
Is that enough? Or should I go on?
3511780 You talk like I'm making a new Kingdom Hearts game or something! I like the ideas though, I wouldn't mind hearing more.
Two things...
One, drive forms which means, other keyblades
And two... summoning Stitch!
3511045
Roxas. Such a struggle to say that name.
Nothing of Roxas's life interests me anymore, he's just turned from NO XIII (13) Into a streetwise child.
I preferred Org 13 Roxas
3511808
New story, new game... there's a difference?
In any event, here are a few more ideas:
1.) Exploring how Sora felt and possibly coming to terms with turning into a Heartless in the original game.
2.) Having memories of Xion slowly trickling back to Roxas and Lea/Axel.
3.) Riku's path as the Hero of the Darkness (As mentioned in Re: COM)
4.) Namine needs more screen time.
5.) Exploring possible interactions between the Keyblade and the Elements of Harmony.
I'm really liking this story...always been a big Kingdom Hearts fan myself. Now...I don't know how this could work and to be honest it does seem weird as a concept but a staple of the Kingdom Hearts series besides Organization XIII is also having two Disney Villains Pete and Maleficent show up. Are you planning on fitting them in the story. If not that is fine but I'll understand it bad enough for Sora to be in high school but Pete and Maleficent showing up there that's not their natural environment. But on the other hand Maleficent is my favorite Disney Villain and Kingdom Hearts Villain... so I hope she makes a debut and plays a active role in the story. Who knows she could give Sunset Shimmer a run for her money. BUZZINGA!
But in seriousness a Maleficent Sunset Shimmer team up would be... kind of cool
I'd fancy the idea of the Organization having Young Norty attend high school for the sake of their plans. Imagine if he and Sora were given detention together; oh the immense frustration of not being able to battle each other while Luna watches them like a hawk.
Great story so far. You've captured the characters better than most KHxMLP stories I've read.
yes, maybe now's the time for Sora to introduce himself to Rainbow Dash
Moar battles?
Applejack & Pinkie too, we mush see how Sora reacts to PInkie's Mid-air pause technique
I'm sorry, but I've got some major problems with this chapter. For one, Sora jumping off of the school. He knows he's not supposed to let on that he's from another world. Jumping off the school attracted too much attention to him, which is something that he would've avoided. I'm not saying that you wrote in too much attention, that was great that you showed everyone shocked at what he did. All I'm saying is that Sora would never have done that in the first place. That, or he'd at least have regretted it afterward. Also, Sora being excited to go to school. I'm sorry, but Sora is not like that. We've seen from the previous games that he's very laid back. In the beginning of the first one, Riku and Kairi both mention his laziness to him when he wakes up. Those are traits of someone who doesn't like doing work, something that school is full of. Also, why would he want to go back? Was school pleasant for him in his past? Did he have more friends there? You need to elaborate on these points if you're going to set him up as someone who likes school, as that was never explored in the games. Sora also seems a bit giddy about making friends. It's not too extreme, but he was never like that. In Dream Drop Distance, he wanted to make friends with Neku because Neku, at first, seemed pretty depressed and was against the idea altogether. So why is he so excited about it in this story? Finally, why didn't Rarity and Rainbow Dash ask Fluttershy what Sora did to scare her? That would've been a good point for them to bring up when scolding him (which of course, they didn't do because he apologized). It also would've given them insight as to what kind of person Sora was. Just think about these points as you move on. Also, check for editing. There were a couple of words missing from different places, and Sora was sleeping in a bed, so how could he hop up from a chair? Overall though, I still like it.
3515917 I believe I can counter everything you said. First off, Sora jumping off the building. He wouldn't regret it or decide not to do it because it would attract attention, simply because he does it every freakin' where he goes! He glides around like nothing, jumps off buildings like nothing, and nobody blinks and eye. In the school, though, he doesn't realize that these people are unfamiliar with such things. Thus, his naivety comes into play. Next, though Sora is laid back and lazy, I think I would like to go back to school after everything he went through. It would actually be normal, besides trying to fight monsters every minute. Plus, he hadn't gone to school in years, so of course he would be excited about what it would be like to return! The differences, the fun of the activities, and many other things. Another thing is that it is never explicitly shown how he truly feels about school, and he could actually like it a lot, even with this lazy attitude. Now, conserning his giddiness to make friends. In all the games, we never actually see his thoughts about making friends at all, and this is what I think is running through his head. Especially in KH2, he looks more open to making friends, and when he's in a setting like school, where the biggest thing for a kid like him is to make friends, of course he's going to try.
Oh, and if you were paying attention. I SAID he climbed out of bed!
And I also said he sat in the pilot's seat. Another thing, you said was that Rarity and Rainbow never asked what Sora did to scare Fluttershy, but they did!
I appreciate you helping me out, truly, but having a large paragraph of mistakes I did doesn't help boost my confidence to keep going with the story (even though I would anyway). Maybe if you could also point out what I did WELL, I could focus on things that need work and feel like I did something good for the story!
Don't take this the wrong way though, I love reading everyone's thoughts and suggestions. Even reading that I messed up on something helps me keep track of what to fix. And I hope I didn't make you TOO angry, as I tend to go overboard when defending something.
Oh, and if some words are missing, blame my editor.
well since you asked, i can think of a few things I'd like to see: Maybe have riku meet princess luna since they both practically come from the same backgrounds of being consumed by the darkness and being brought back by the light in their friends. Something else I'd like to see; Mickey meeting celestia. He goes to equestria with possibly Lea and Kairi to tell all the princesses that the magic of friendship is in danger, and that the mirror world is essential to all of this, but since it won't reopen, they unlock it by using their keyblades. That's just two ideas I have in mind, but I have more that I'll probably list later if you want.
I'm loving your story dude, and looking forward to the next chapter
not bad
Found a typo,
One too many "and's".
I'll find more typos later, I'm just rereading this now, just to enjoy it more.
You should have Roxas be in this story. He's one of my favorite KH characters next to Riku