Chapter 2 - "Thinking Time"
"Well?" Twilight asked after roughly thirty minutes of back and forth between Caboose and himself.
"Well, he certainly is a little disoriented, but I believe that is due to the crash." The doctor explained. "He has no broken bones, which is very lucky, so I suggest you take him home."
"We should throw a party to celebrate his good health!" Pinkie Pie said, letting out a large gasp.
"Pinkie, we don't even know him." Rainbow Dash said. "Why should we throw a party for him?"
"I don't know." Pinkie answers truthfully. "I think he is kind of nice. A little weird, but who doesn't like being weird sometimes?"
Pinkie Pie then cartwheeled into the room Caboose is in. "How did you do that? Is it magic?"
Twilight couldn't help but smile, "Thank you Dr. Stables. Come on Caboose, it's time to get out of here."
"But the bed is so comfy." Caboose whimpered.
"Yeah, but we’re throwing you a party." Pinkie said, giggling.
"Where?" Caboose said. "On the bed?"
"No silly, where would you get that idea?" Pinkie said, raising her brow, still smiling.
"Oh, just my friend Tucker." Caboose said. "Well he's not really my friend, but he always says he has parties with my sister in his bed. One time I asked him if I could come and he said only two people were allowed and occasionally a third person, like my mother, could go too."
"Who ever heard of a party with that few people?" Pinkie asked.
"That is exactly what I said!" Caboose agreed. He then noticed her mane. "Is your hair made of cotton candy?"
"No it just looks like it." Pinkie giggled, tilting her head to the side to give Caboose a better look.
"Come on guys let's get out of here, the doctor said Caboose is free to go." Twilight said. "He needs this room for other patients."
"Alright then. Just let me pack my things." Caboose said.
"What things?" Fluttershy asked apologetically. "When I found you you had nothing near you. Don't tell me I left one of your belongings there."
"Well I guess I'm done packing then." Caboose said, jumping out of the hospital bed. "I always feel good after packing my stuff up. Hey what is that?" Caboose sprinted out of the room, faster than he had ever run before.
"Somethin' ain't right with that boy." Applejack said.
"Oh well, let's go get him before he causes any damage," groaned Twilight.
The girls soon caught up with Caboose, who was demanding a lollipop for being in the hospital.
"I'm sorry sir, but the lollipops are for the little ones." The receptionist stated.
"Please, I've been a good boy this year!" Caboose pleaded. "I promise."
The receptionist rolled her eyes and gave in. "Fine you can take one, and only one."
"I heard two!" Caboose yelled, taking two and walking up to Pinkie Pie. "Here you go. I got one for you."
Pinkie Pie was never given anything by a stallion before unless it was her birthday. Pinkie Pie blushed slightly and kissed Caboose on the cheek.
"Aw, thanks Caboose." Pinkie said, glancing over at the bowl of lollipops. "Hang on, I'll be right back."
Pinkie Pie ran up to the receptionist at the counter and asked if she could have a lollipop. The receptionist decided she would stop arguing and just give the bowl to her. Pinkie Pie then hopped happily back to Caboose and gave him the entire bowl.
"This is the single greatest moment of my life." Caboose said, blushing. "No that one. No wait, that one was pretty good too. I like where this moment is going."
Pinkie Pie and Caboose moved towards the doorway of the hospital, both munching on lollipops.
"This one is blue! Just like you!" Pinkie Pie said.
"Oh my gosh!" Caboose yelled. "You can talk!"
The girls stood back, staring at the pair as they skipped out the door.
"It's like having a second Pinkie Pie." Rarity asserted.
"I got a bad feelin' bout this one girls." Applejack said, frowning.
"You got that spine tingling sensation too?" Twilight asked.
All the girls shared a nervous giggle.
"Equestria is doomed." Twilight said jokingly, as the mares got over their shock and hurried after the dynamic duo
"So when is this party going to happen?" Caboose asked.
"It’s a surprise." Pinkie giggled.
"A surprise?" Caboose yelled with excitement, grabbing onto Pinkies hooves, spinning in circles. "And it's not even my birthday! You are amazing!"
"You are pretty amazing yourself." Pinkie Pie said, winking at him.
"Only two people have ever said that to me before..." Caboose said. "And you are the first."
Applejack laughed. "I hafta admit, his innocence kinda makes him fun to have around."
"I have to say," Rarity said, watching Pinkie Pie and Caboose prance in circles. "Out of the six of us, Pinkie Pie is the one I least expected to find a stallion that matched her personality so... perfectly."
"Yeah." Twilight agreed, beginning to get a little worried. "Hey Caboose, I don't mean to bother you but... do you have any real friends?"
Caboose stopped dancing with Pinkie Pie and looked over at Twilight. He then looked at the ground and placed the bowl of lollipops down beside him and sat on the grass. Caboose was always caught up doing things Church and Tucker always wanted to do that he never really thought about how close they actually are.
"Well, the only two people I usually talk to are Tucker and Church. But Tucker is always mean to me, and Church is a bit too serious so I never felt that close to him. I think the only reason I call him my friend is because he doesn't yell at me all the time." Caboose said somberly, beginning to tear up. "I guess the answer to your question is no. I don't have any real friends."
"You don't know anypony else?" Rarity asked.
"Not really. I mean, there are a few people that live near me and Church and Tucker, but they are always calling me names. I don't like them very much." He said, now realizing that his old life wasn't that great and that nobody truly appreciates him. "If you excuse me, I think I want to be alone right now."
And with that, Caboose walked away, head down, sniffling softly to try and find a place to think.
"What is wrong with you ponies? Why would you say something like that?" Pinkie Pie yelled. "He barely came out of the hospital ten minutes ago and you guys are already making fun of him?"
"Pinkie, we’re just-" Twilight started to object, but Pinkie Pie ran after Caboose in an effort to catch up with him.
Twilight couldn't help but feel a strong pang of guilt.
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We need about 50 milligrams of boom chicka wow wow in this fic STAT!!!
Oh Gawd Yes.
Well, you've captured Caboose's personality perfectly. The writing is fairly well done, but there are a few errors, mostly in comma placement. Nothing I feel like detailing right now.
One issue: it was a little difficult to tell if Caboose was still human or had been turned into a pony until Rarity called him a stallion. The personalities of the mane six are a little flat as well, but they're not really the stars of the story.
In any case, this isn't bad. Might have to check back on it some time.
I can speak just like sarge. I mean it's scary how good I can do his voice. I have actually help a friend do a fan dub of RvB and I did sarge, it was amazing.
wow, i never though i would see such a perfect characterization of caboose before. with that + pinkie pie X caboose shipping!? how can i not track?
Awwww poor caboose
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Yeah, I wrote this at about 5 in the morning so there will be quite a few errors and you are correct, I am not going to be really going on any of the ponies in much details besides Pinkie.
An now that you mention it I will go and fix it so Caboose finds out about his no-hands much faster.
And everyone else, I thank you for your nice words
Pinkie Pie x Caboose.
The word "terrifying" comes to mind.
This is brilliant.
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Thank you, I did not expect there to be so many RvB fans on here, but I am happy that I am playing it off right
You sir, are a genius. Please, I need more!
Just making Caboose a pony has melted my brain.
You have done what many have only thought of even bothering to do...
And now I'll have to kill you for doing it before me
This is the 3rd Red vs Blue crossfic I've read, and it is so amazing.
Keep up the good work. I just might support CaboosexPinkie
Holy hell its like watching the show!
I have four points though
1 send this to rooster teeth/ animate it
2 does caboose like pinkie because she reminds him of Dougnut
3 is caboose Gonna freak out when he sees and hears big Mac?
4 can some one draw a caboose and pinkie picture?
Hmm Pinkie x Caboose?
How bad could it be....?
Caboose X Pinkie... What could possibly go wrong? This story is great, and I can see you already have a sh*t load of chapters. I am glad to say I am following this... But now I have a lot of catching up to do, not that it's a bad thing
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Give me the link to the video and prove it, please.
-The Doctor
ALL I CAN HEAR IS CABOOSE'S VOICE IN MY HEAD!!!!!
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" 'Oh, just my friend Tucker." Caboose said. "Well he's not really my friend, but he always says he has parties with my sister in his bed. One time I asked him if I could come and he said only two people were allowed and occasionally a third person, like my mother, could go too.' "
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Absolute perfect characterization!
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For this, I hereby give you the Magical Trevor
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There are a FEW MINOR grammatical errors to clean up, just a comma missing here and there, but aside from that... XD Loving it!
(And I hate you. I have a final tomorrow, and I'm going to end up staying up all night to read this. I freaking hate you. XD)
"Only two people have ever said that to me before..." Caboose said. "And you are the first."
i love it!
There are no words to describe how amazing this is. Oh wait, yes there is.
THIS IS THE MOST BUCKING AMAZING THING I HAVE EVER READ!!!!!
Why did twilight feel guilty for asking if Caboose had any freinds????? Did she say it sarcasticly???
Wow...this is pretty go-OH CELESTIA 98 CHAPTERS?!?!?!?! /faints
Caboose and Pinkie Pie shipping?
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way to drop the ball twilight
"Yeah, but we’re throwing you a party." Pinkie said, giggling.
"Where?" Caboose said. "On the bed?"
"No silly, where would you get that idea?" Pinkie said, raising her brow, still smiling.
"Oh, just my friend Tucker." Caboose said. "Well he's not really my friend, but he always says he has parties with my sister in his bed. One time I asked him if I could come and he said only two people were allowed and occasionally a third person, like my mother, could go too."
"Who ever heard of a party with that few people?" Pinkie asked.
"That is exactly what I said!" Caboose agreed. He then noticed her mane. "Is your hair made of cotton candy?"
^ I couldn't stop laughing, I literally couldn't force in enough air to make the sound of laughter.
I really like Caboose's child like innocence.
you made him smarter... to think...
So much win only on the third chapter!
(Relises there is 114 chapters left)
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OH MY.
I'VE ONLY READ THREE CHAPTERS AND I LOVE IT.
THE BEST PART IS THAT I LOVE READING AND THERE ARE A LOT OF CHAPTERS.
Dear god 3 chapters in and I love it already
Gah, you repeat this ALL the time:
"[...]" So-and-so said.
"[...]" Other so-and-so said.
Normally, I would see things like this and instantly throw them aside due to being a might picky... but there are 122 more chapters for me to read... and not a single buck is given.
It's just too funny for me to care about the writing quality...
Basically, you need to work on your writing, but your story is so good I find myself no longer giving a sh
, which almost never happens... So consider yourself hilarious. 
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Don't worry I've quashed the "he said, and then they said" writing later on, I just haven't edited the older chapters. When I finish this fic I'll go over the older chapters and get rid of that stuff.
749418 Yeah, I noticed (I'm on chapter 9 now) that it's getting better.
You still have some tense issues and such, but, as I said, I don't really care anymore... Too funny to care...
YES! pinkie and cabose let e guess he doesn't know that pinkie pie will sedue him RIGHHHHHT??
*read Chapter 2 comments*
*jokingly* "Equestia is doomed"
"Equestia is DOOMED!"
*Read Chapter 3*
ME: HA!
291457 oh god no.
I am fucking loving this story, how the hell do you write caboose this good!?!?
BEST STORY EVAR
Applejack laughed. "I hafta admit, his innocence kinda makes him fun to have around."
you say that, until he meets sheila and kills everyone.
291583I'm not a red vs. blue fan, yet i still love this. Kudos to you good sir. I do believe you have eanred yet another fluttershy
. This makes 2 so far, so keep up the good work.
291486 I'm a red vs. blue fan, mind PMing me a link to it? (The fan dub I mean)
GIRLS, SHAME ON YOU
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"...because he doesn't yell at me all the time."
Have you ever watched Red vs Blue? I'm pretty sure Church yells at him all the time.
I don't mean to comment with criticism on everything but Christ in heaven I don't understand. Also, the speed at which you rushed to ship Pinkie and Caboose gave me whiplash.
Caboose! Stop flirting!
"It's like having a second Pinkie Pie." Rarity asserted.
The basis for all the Surprise Meets Pinkie stories in one line.
Once again, Pinkie Pie does not realize the meaning of alone.
Great chapter, but the Pinkie Caboose shipping was like BAM!
Okay, that's it. This story is awesome so I'm going to watch the series right now! Or not...
This is completely and utterly ridiculous!
Thank you. Thank you very much.