Apple Bloom tells a little lie to get out of work. The thing about little lies is how they can grow. Before she knows it, everypony up to and including the princesses is involved in a national disaster of lies.
What is her sister Applejack, the Element of Honesty, going to do about it?
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It was a dream
It WASN"T a dream
dat twist
3407073 Thanks. I was worried that it wasn't clear enough.
I cannot tell a lie,
For i never tell the truth.
Wait a minute......
*Mind explodes into muffin bits*
Awww... That was adorable.
Whoooo~!
And that kids is why lies are bad and can lead to the end of the world.
A wonderful short story based on a small white lie that turned into a world destroying lie.
So wait, if Cheerilee was lying about catching a virus, I guess that means the bad apples weren't responsible after all?
Don't worry Apple Bloom, it's not your fault! It's probably Discord suffering a relapse or something!
I'm not... 100% sure of what happened. 95% sure, but not 100%.
And then we pan out through the window to reveal...
What, you wanted me to say something?
DAYUM !!!!!
Heh, nice one. The fact that it was a dream seemed pretty obvious early on, but I've been reading JasonTheHuman's "Moonlight" lately, so maybe that was just me. A good morality tale regardless. The little twist at the ending was nice too.
i think PONYCEPTION!!!!!
3410379 Looking back on it, I'm not sure whether I meant it that way or not. I guess that implies either good horror or poor writing. Sorry. I don't do this scary story thing very often.
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It's a decent first effort, though. One thing that would have helped would be more hints that Applejack caused that nightmare somehow--as it is, she just says "I know" and the story ends on kind of a weird note. Assuming it was a nightmare anyway, it was a little unclear. You still show an understanding of how to do this kind of story though, so with a bit of practice I'm sure you can do it.
This was great!
I really like how you used the weather as a hint for the impending catastrophe and the little changes escalating. Really well written horror.
Dreams are strange things and can occasionally hint at bigger pictures for our mental states and this story reflects that the an extent with Apple Bloom growing up in a family where honesty is a value it's only natural that she subtly doubts herself a little bit like a normal kid.
So, it was a little unclear. Was the nightmare Applebloom had a memory?
5794927 I intended it to be about AJ, actually. Through the story, she was the only one who never lied. Everything she said actually happened. But perhaps everything that happened was because she said.
5796343 Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh, so she's got Truespeak, eh?