Tank are some of the most fearsome weapons made by humanity, able to destroy anything lesser than them, they are obvious machines of war. Now in Equestria a new sport have started some years ago, using those same machines.
Now a group of young Stallions and Mares are going to be throw into this sport no matter they want it or not
Basically a Crossover between MLP:FiM and WoT
Expect bad grammar
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I came here because
... okay, fine, I came here because tanks as well.
But anyways, the grammar... yeah, does need work. But it's not horrid, which is good. A good place to start is to use some quotations when characters talk. You know, these
things. Dashes are not what you need to use.
Next, while I admire your insane attention to details concerning credits and module prices... geez. I dunno how to feel about that. It just feels wrong to list it all out like that. Maaayybe you could stuff it into some dialogue to make it interesting. Or at least continuously describe the framing device (the computer). It's just dull the way you did it near the end.
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I use that to know the status of the team, and there are some readers that might forget when they got something, but yeah I will try to use your option since some of the lists are inside of the story part, but the part of author notes I think that I will leave it like that.
The problem is that I prefer lists because I tend to forget a lot of things very easily.
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Nah, not the author's note part, the part in the story before that. (I kinda rushed through the story).
EDIT
Whoops, looks like I rushed through your comment too. But yeah, I think the authors notes are fine.
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well I wrote it in like 8 hours and English isn't my first language and I only have one day per week to write something.
Also my inspiration is spontaneous one week I have an idea for a fic, the next I have an idea for another.
Still will try to check the chapters before posting them,Might take a month or so though
Okay, I guess now I'll just comment on your story story-wise.
Also, if Luna technically made the team:
1. She's technically the clan leader.
2. She must have some gold.
3. She's a terrible clan leader for not sharing that gold.
And the stuff I just took from my previous comment:
Let me guess, 1st Ponyville team is the Mane 6 rolling in some slick tier 10s...
Also, don't pass up the opportunity and get the Crusaders a Crusader. Even though I personally didn't like that thing
. But hey! Tier 5. And 3 crew slots.
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The regimental school is the royal guard school
Luna doesn't have gold or such (Gold-expy doesn't exist for the league) all is paid with credits even premium tanks and premium equipment (yes the T-50-2 it going to get a revenge in this fic)
Nope the Crusaders are going into the Panzer II (here Babs is living in Ponyville after her parents moved)
and comment about Pipsqueak's bat pony parents (and that they are part of the Lunar Guard)?
About the first team they have Tier ViII-X Tanks but Fluttershy doesn't do tankery because the last time she tried almost died of a heart attack and Twilight can't go because royalty can't participate as per rules
The other Main six are in a Leopard 1 the other tanks of the main team are:
T28 Prototype Tank Hunter
T-54
FV4202
Object 268
Jagdtiger
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Wow. I only somewhat expected you to have thought part of that through. Also:
... Why an FV4202? Of all the other t10 meds... an FV4202. I dunno, I just think that's really random.
Also why a Leopard 1? That thing's the squishiest thing ever after the BatChat.
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Also is fast I prefer fast tanks so I don't get hit, or tanks with lot of armor, so the first reason is why the Leo 1, also Rainbow Dash is the driver
and the FV4202 was just 'cause its british
I use british and german line, trying to do the turret TD United States Line