• Member Since 14th Jan, 2012
  • offline last seen Aug 28th, 2014

Prince Luna


Dedicated writer who loves to work and think of new ideas. I hope you like my fanfics - my readers are very precious to me!

E

Now an audio drama series!

It's been around 8 years since Twilight's coronation to being a princess and the cutie mark crusaders are in their last year of high school, but they still don't have cutie marks. As time has gone on they've learnt not to let this bother them and it's hardly at the front of their mind in this studious and stress-filled time.

Twilight invites the three to attend the Grand Galloping Gala for the very first time and the three are ecstatic, but Scootaloo is nervous. A colt named Shiner that she had rejected to be her date to the gala was to attend and she realised she still has feelings for him. Once she confesses to him he softens up immediately and the two begin a beautiful relationship.

Shiner has his cutie mark, which gets on the girls' minds and they decide to once again dedicate a large amount of their time to crusading for cutie marks, with any help they can get, but their friends, relationships and school life stand in the way.

GeneralZoi Pony Creator Codes for OCs!

Shiner: 343M005010DBDBDBFEF99E02900003FD3UN173C040201001W0540000FF7FFF05107F3FCC004CB2
Applebrown: 2A1D00100089883DFFC49D0040100FE48UN183722B40000081CC8304FEDB8009107F3FCC004CB2
Uncle Applcore: 372A004000D3A900FFC49D0290000BB96UN1333014200020C06D5252FF7FFF0F107F3FCC004CB2
Aunt Applestalk: 352S0S600029EF4DFFC49D0070100BB96UN183702800100190824B4BFF7FFF0O107F3FCC004CB2
Quick Quilt: 2Y4T000100E0DEFEFFC49D00A0100BB96UN1837501000000A1CC0000FE808004107F3FCC004CB2
Mr.Stitcolt: 3K37004200EEFE00FFC49D037000C00BAUN183710B000500R1000000FFFFFE06107F3FCC004CB2
Prince Regal Crown: 1O2I000210FEE0FDFFC49D0300015FC00UN1935108000001N000098CFF7FFF06107F3FCC004CB2 (ACCESORIES: 066CC66066CC66066CC662CC0000066CC6604E8FBAFFFF8C7D10000066CC666D10000066CC66)
Chemist Carpenter: 3B2S00510093A541FFC49D0090000FE1AUK173B009000102I1FFFFFEA1A1A019107F3FCC004CB2
Mr.Baker: 324B007000AFAFAFFFC49D0240000BB96UN331411900000070000000FF7FFF0T107F3FCC004CB2
Buckingham Ghost Pony: 2Z5K004010FE7575FFC49D00040BAF0FEUN313430000000180F2E8FEFF7FFF0A107F3FCC004CB2

Chapters (10)
Comments ( 74 )

I approve of this fan fiction good sir/madam. :moustache:
But yes, in all seriousness, it was good. :twilightsmile:

A bit too fast paced, but I liked it.

Very nice! Short and sweet, very like the show in the way you structured it and had ponies speak, loved the theme tune nice touch :raritywink:

Nice story, but a bit too fast pace.:pinkiehappy:

Far, far too quick paced. But good.

That's how you write a good fanfic. Although, as many have already said, it was a bit too fast paced, and maybe even a bit too short, the story itself was good, and so was the writing. Keep this up!

369991 I have noticed over my writing time that length isn't quite my strongpoint, I sort of just put everything I want into the fic. I'll take note in future that people want more bulk though! Thanks :twilightsmile:

369995
Always happy to give some helpful feedback! Congratulations once again for writing such an awesome story. :twilightsmile:

370005 Thank you, I began wriitng it a while ago and decided to finish it out of boredom last night :derpytongue2:

need more fill. you need to discribe more. and in the first chapter: what was the dresses locked like. even the picture had more discribsen then you have in the chapter.

Applebrown probably wanted to confuse Applebloom with a letter so she could go over to Sweetie Belles's to mess up her room. OR It was Sweetie Belle who was messing up her room then started to cry. I think it is the first one.:duck:

389636 If you want a spoiler as to why she was crying, it's in my new blog post which has the synopsis for the next chapter, otherwise you'll have to wait and find out :derpytongue2:

d'awww, scewts. That is all.

I'm sorry i couldn't pre-read within the hour, I was finally busy for the first time today.
I like the mini-stories with a big plot. It makes it a better series. I love it so far.

I'd say this is getting pretty good. Keep this up!

404272 If there's anything you'd like to see, leave a comment on my newest blog. I'm at a block for chapter 4 :twilightblush:

I read this in the first ten minutes of it origionally being released... now Im really glad I clicked track on it! xD
Loving the series, you keep hitting the style of the show really well, just putting tenage themes instead of kids lessons, brillianty idea! I don't give a rat's ass for the shortness of the stories, it adds to the atmosphere in my opinion! :pinkiehappy:
Kepp it coming! :derpytongue2:

SUPER KAWAII DESU DESU MODE ACTIVATED:heart::heart::heart:

In all seriousness though, great story. I think it really fits in with the same design of the episodes and it kept in mind the traits of each of the characters involved. I could honestly see Hasbro latching onto this idea and maybe writing it as a spin off in Series 4. I think it did move a little fast, but everyone has already said this so I kinda didn't need to. End of the day, great story, I applaud you sir!

Completely made up for the weaknesses in the last chapter. It was more thorough and the story was better in my opinion. It was one of those two-parters where one half really outshone the other,and while chapter two was good, this one was brilliant. I demands another installment in this series, or a certain some-pony is not going to be very impressed...:trixieshiftleft:

519069 It's in the writing...just thinking about how it plays out still :derpytongue2:

I think I might have found one mistake.
"Shining Armor stood in front of a mirror to take a look at himself."
I'm guessing you meant Shiner there.

Otherwise, cool story bro! :rainbowlaugh::pinkiecrazy:

744237 Ah that one completely flew past me - thank you! :twilightsmile:

"It was super effective. Apple Bloom fainted."
Nice.

I have frequently wanted to beat Diamond Tiara to a quivering lilac pulp, but now I REALLY want to cause her damage:flutterrage:

By the way, great use of the word Spurious:twilightsmile:

1039605 lol I had to look up synonyms for fake. :raritywink:

Great chapter, looking forward for more of interactions of Diamond with the CMC + Shiner.

Woohoo!
Finally, another chapter!
God, don't the CMCs know that real high school is much crappier and more boring than this fanfic? :rainbowlaugh:

1170010
Haha! I'm about to start college soon, the school in this fic is based on MY secondary school. Maybe when this fic is done we'll see "Stories of the Young Adult Cutie Mark Crusaders"? :pinkiegasp:
Chapter 1: Scootaloo accidentally sends in her enrolement forms late, Sweetie Belle misses the bus on her first day and Apple Bloom didn't get good enough grades to go anywhere and has to work on the farm!

1170024 Dun dun dun.
Okay, I know that high school has varying levels of boringness and uneventfulness among the US.
Didn't this fic start as a one-shot though?

1170058 Indeed it did! It was just the first chapter at first and was going to have nothing to do with them going to school. I had the idea of Cousin Applebrown Comes to Visit in my head for a while afterwards and when I began to write it, I found it easier to use a teenage Apple Bloom, then realised I already had her somewhere else, thus, the series was born!

1170078 Haha, I know. It's funny how big ideas come from the smallest things. Like that one time when I wrote a fanfic about Jon Lajoie in Equestria, though it only took one small 30-second sketch from Ponies: The Anthology II to inspire me to do it.

I can assume what Shiner is going to say when he gets out of the dorm and chats with the girls again.
Scootaloo: So, how was your night?
Shiner: Fine. The three other guys basically kept to themselves. They really like that Ponyu-gi-oh! thing. you know, that card game from Japony? Heavy Metal and Stellar Spike really do like their music. It was...interesting to say the least.

Great chapter though, the song was very cleverly done and scans well. For someone who doesn't really have much of a musical background, you aren't bad at those little song snippets

1235907 "They also really like something called 'My Little Human'. I thought that was for little mares?"

1235911 "Yeah, that Scribble Dibble guy had a bag full of the little figurines. They were nice enough though. Even offered to let me play once or twice."

1235917 "But I did get a lot of glitter on my hooves from some of them. Says he only needs seven more of them to get them all"

1235919 "To which the other two yelled 'Gotta catch 'em all!'
Scootaloo: "Wasn't that the tagline from that kids show...Ponymon?"
Applebloom: "Oh yeah! I love that show. My favourite one was Lopony"

Saw your comment on EQD decided to check out I'll get back to you when I read it

Shit just got real. Or did it? Honestly I'm not sure...

Great chapter, the inclusion of Team S was impressive. But um, Heavy Metal's a Unicorn...not a pegasus. Other than that it's fantastic!

1670716 he is described as a unicorn in there. Or so I thought. Ill go over it again and change it if I made a mistake

Edit: oh yeah. Didnt see that I'd put Pegasus. Changed now :twilightblush:

1673414 Oh. So, as Yoda would say, "About to get real, shit is." :rainbowlaugh:

Login or register to comment