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A sister story of sorts to Dan&Pinkie VS.
Cover Image provided by DA’s kaiamurosesei

Mordecai is a regular guy who recently got as job as a groundskeeper alongside his best friend Rigby at a not so regular park where strange phenomena seemed to be a daily event.
Though common for the park employees, these phenomena caught the attention and interest of a young girl and researcher from the University, who intends to study the cause of the phenomena that appear to be connected to the park.
And the meeting between these two is anything but regular.

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 79 )

Humanized Regular Show??

Honestly the thing that confuses me most is the fact that this pairing exists.

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Though I can't speak for everyone... I think this pairing exist for two reasons.
Aesthetics: meaning that they look good togethers just for the combination of colors.
Two: They found Cartoonslover's artwork of the two and liked it.
As for me I'm in between, it also bothers me that despite existing for some time now, there isn't a GOOD fic with this pairing. So I decided to play with this idea and try to make it work.

3378566 I always thought it's because of the ship name "MordeTwi".

I'm only reading this fic because it's written by you.

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thanks for the confidence vote. :pinkiehappy:
This is just a side project,though. So I'll not be doing many updates.
Just when

Ok let me get this straight?... This fic wasn't fail moderation or something like that because it wasn't based on MLP universe. But anyway I like it.

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It did fail the first time I submited it. But then I added the prologue and 'boom'
passed the moderation.

Okay just posting typos and grammar problems as I go through

was a unoccupied right besides a tree

, probably meant to be

was an unoccupied bench right besides a tree

she appeared to have fell asleep

fell should be fallen

don’t say I didn’t give you the change to walk away

swap change w/ chance

when he dude threw what it looked like a very avoidable punch

when the dude threw what looked like a

“Please do not touch your nose.” She kind of ordered”

no offence but kind of ordered doesn't sound right

“It’s the least I could do after you retrieve my bag…”

Retrieved

“Hey, hey, do be sad! It’s not your fault! It was his.”

don't also maybe you should use the same tense in a sentence like this:
“Hey, hey, dont be sad! It’s not your fault! It's his.” or “Hey, hey, don't be sad! It wasn't your fault! It was his.”

“Did…did he just call me cute?”

can't tell if speach or thought, if its a thought you should probably specify or just use italics

She had never being near a person this tall before.

had never been

but also could help her get to her destination

but also he could

he was surely going to do so after he saw the current state of cart.

after he saw the current state of the cart

“Tara Sparkle, but my friends call me Twilight.” She introduced herself too.

Its clear that she's introducing herself so you don't need to say she is

Overall I like the setup of the story, although I still need to figure out how the whole/human ponies thing works but im sure you'll explain it later or not, whatever

3378826 Adding a prologue, nice. Something like that happened with one of my stories, second time around it passed. Nice Job Morex25

Huh...

Not bad, though some of the details I wanted to see we're skipped for a good place for the story. Typically, you want personal details like setting and the characters towards the start instead at the end of a chapter. I do enjoy the premise, makes me wonder why no one sent some to investigate the park before.

Granted this is a start and your own spin things, I gotta question Tara instead of Twilight. Also this feels like some things were skipped. The flow felt a bit jumpy at times.

I like the concept and idea of this story, but maybe you should hire a pre-reader to fix the mistakes in this. Have a good day, my friend.

P.S. Xerom better not screw this up.

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So... It was like you trolled moderators or you were smartest than they? :rainbowderp:

One of the weirdest ships that I don't get in the slightest, but I'll see how well you do it. :pinkiehappy:

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ehm...neither? I think...I just wanted to post the story here, because in FF.net it went unnoticed.

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I have always been a fan of stories where characters interact for a while before relvealing their names.
I wanted to give it a try...but I'm not good enough to pull it off.
As for the names....yeah...this is a spin off of D&P VS so 'Twilight' had to be her nickname.
Don't worry everyone is going to call her Twilight and some more details will be revealed later on.

curiousity.....Peaked i shall try it out!

Ok..So we have Two hasbroverses, a Konamiverse (if your little Soma Cruz bonus is to be believed), and a CNverse...Now, i can't stop thinking that this earth is where all the insane shit happens throughout time and space.

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Good...just as expected. :moustache:
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Kinda like the DC or Marvel Universes. There is always wierd stuff happening everywhere.:pinkiehappy:

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Thanks dude.
Sometimes I wonder how could I miss such easy mistakes...:pinkiesad2: makes me feel like a lousy writer.

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Yeah, that's make sense for me. So, go on.

3380951 dude don't even:ajbemused: let me explain something, when we write we sometimes look at words as a whole, because of this we NEED to have someone else look at our work. bad grammer & typos can be fixed, bad stories cannot and i think you have a good story so far

Everyone turned towards the pony who said that last line, who unsurprisingly was Rainbow Dash. “What? What did I say?”

“Everyone

:facehoof: everypony! you have lost points with me lol

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Its a psychological thing when we have thoughts they seem perfect and when you write it out they seem less perfect but you don't see any mistakes due to bias amd pride towards ones work. In fact, i think that there's a theory that pessimists are better at finding mistakes in their work due to obvious reasons. so! lesson of the day XD get a pessimist to be your editor lol.

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I used everyone because I didn't want to use the word pony too close to eachother.

Everypony turned towards the pony...

I like this so far pretty good keep it up

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Now all we need is some Superman, Avengers, Anime...

Mordetwi.




........That name alone makes this ship work.

Also....


.....................

Who would Luna date......?

..Alucard?

Cannot wait to see when Margerat makes an appearence.

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:to tell you the truth, I'm not very excited about her. :ajsleepy:
She is fine, but she is one of my least favorite characters in the show.:unsuresweetie:
But you shouldn't worry, I'm not going to bash her or anything. I'll try to think up stuff to do with her. :pinkiesmile:

3397573 What I mean is I want to see the self-conflict Mordecai has, being as he is infatuated with her in the show.

"Regular? I don't think so."
that's a good title.

Oh god XeroM, what else do you have planed? Rainbow DashxSonic? Umm... Huh I can't think of any other popular Mane 6xOther Universe crack ships. :derpytongue2:

Also, XeroM don't take Rainbow/Sonic thing seriously, it's sarcasm not a request. :ajbemused:

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XeroM: Not even I would attempt to go near THAT ship. :pinkiesick:

3400253 Oh good to see that at least you have some standards. :rainbowwild:

Really XeroM? Hey Linkara, sum up my reaction please.

Thank you, you are a great forum weapon.

I write instead of homework too...unless my homework is writing

Neither of these have a reason to exist.

I love them both.

Would give the DerpBob fic a try, if you actually made it.

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I think I'm going to fail a class for writing these fics. :facehoof:
I do have a serious problem. :twilightoops:

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If there is enough support, maybe I'll do a one-shot of that pairing. (and if I find an appropiate pic for the cover)
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Just leave a crack pairing and I'll see what I can do! :pinkiesmile:
No promises though!:twilightsheepish:

3412778 Shrugs. You've got the only two fan crossover pairings.

Is pony Twilight going to even factor into this fic? Because the Prologue and the chapters after it are kind of conflicting on whether that is the case, and yes I know that you made the prologue after the first 2 chapters, but still.

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This is a difficult question to answer. :unsuresweetie: My opinion is divided.
On a more objective view of the matter, there is nothing wrong with this ship or any other. People are entitled to their opinions and ideas. And hating on something that is entirely fictional and non-canon is dump.
On a more subjective view: I still don't hate in per se... It's just that...how to say this...I don't know...i simple don't like it. I know that doesn't asnwer anything and makes me sound hypocritical, but that's my opinion.
Maybe is because some fan-artists ruin the ship for me, could be that I still haven't read a decent story with them together, the fact that I don't like sonic's character (his characterization, not the Ch's design or his games.) all that much, that RD is one of my least favorite ponies, etc.

In the end...I don't like the ship. If you do, I respect it and I apologize if my comment offended you.

3440707 I was more joking when I said that, I mean I'm not the biggest fan of crack shipping, thought whether they involve MLP or not, I've seen WAY worse ones than Sonic and Rainbow Dash.

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