the legitimacy of the grass root workers will never be questioned. the quality... ALWAYS... but the legitimacy. never.
Fluttershy tries to make a move on Rainbow Dash.
Rated T for Teen just in case.
Spoilers...
nah, it's too short for that.
Also, at least on my computer, I find it funny that there is a magnifying glass on Rainbow's head. She's like "what the hay is this?" Daww.
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I loled so hard at this part, just the way it was pictured in my mind. Cool fic! And I kinda feel bad for Fluttershy, not suceeding at her goal. But it will be okay... I hope.
Well... Applejack didn't really ask nicely. I guess it was sort of ironic, but it felt a little weird.
You tend to have some sort of problem with handling the repetition. There were several of them in the story (this one being the most obvious).
But I liked the story altogether
. It was simple (from a scenaristic point of view and on an epicness level), but very enjoyable as well as well paced. In that way, it corresponds a lot to how Fluttershy could actually try a first move.
Like the way you described Rainbow Dash's flying a lot by the way.
Pretty bare bones for a story but hey it functions. Poor Fluttershy.
short and sweet. love me some flutterdash
Well this could use a second chapter to have Flutterdash in it. But its still cute
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Which is funny because when I edit for other people that's one of my biggest pet peeves. Strange that I can't fix it for myself.
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Based on a true story. Me sitting on a bus next to a cute girl... needless to say the same thing happened.
Single forever, but if my misery provides you with entertainment than I can live with that. Honestly, the whole story was based on and leading up to the last line, so I took it and went with it. Looking back... maybe I should have waited until she was gone to write down the idea, but when inspiration calls...
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I bet you could picture everypony's reactions perfectly. I was wondering about how that "Oooo" would be read and if the proper effect, aka. tone of voice would transfer from the words. I'm glad that it worked out the way it should.
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Honestly, long ago, when I used to comment a lot, "repetition" had almost become the most used word (well, "répétition"... of course) because it happens very quickly and is really hard to see afterwards, in the middle of all the other factors.
I have no idea how to handle them correctly. No trick there, just practice I guess.
Yay, misery, I feed of that
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Make this a thing. I watch with anticipation.
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We all wait with anticipation, Sandy.
3698259 Oh, well in that case *starts walking away*
Just kidding, gimme!!
Now we play the waiting game.
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Oh.. it is on!
3699978 come at me, bro!
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I'm coming at you, bro!
Being a FlutterDash shipper, I find stories where neither of them confess their feeling for each other to be a little sad.
