Thanks for the info Pinks

Pinkie... Stop staring into my non-existant soul!

>>11341151134115 Any time.  See, Ravenmane's snoozing right now, silly can only stay awake so long so I thought it would be great if I did a few things for him.  Stuff like post that notice and clear the story out were nice and easy, but I also had to check some silly things like in-game auction houses and loop something on his iPod every hour.  I mean honestly, do you have any idea how hard it is to use that thing with hooves?

Why is it always large pictures of Pinkie? They always freak me out.

On a second note, why isn't there a new story, instead of deleting over the original? Or does that go against the "Don't post the same story twice" rule?

>>11365651136565 I didn't want to risk having the almighty admins bear down on me.  I'm actually a very meek individual unless I've had a nice, long sleep.

>>11365711136571

Ha! The opposite is what happens with me. With much sleep, my brain starts working sensibly, and for some reason, I don't like that. When I'm up late feeling sleep deprivation, then it gets fun for me.

>>11367201136720 Oh, I forgot that this also clears out some silly comment wars.  I can't have that getting in the way of the praise of my revisions

Do the likes, views and/or favourites still carry on if you rewrite a story?

If not, who the hell felt it was warranted to give this a dislike???

>>11430401143040 Very true, perhaps someone who disapproved of me flipping off the "Complete" notice?  Correct me if I'm wrong but it's my understanding that they carry unless you change you mind.  Or perhaps they don't like Twilight McSparkle...

>>11433351143335

Preposterous! How could they not like her?

>>11433991143399 Well Bronies Got Doc Pinkie Pie Brown...

That was probably one of the best fourth wall breakings I've ever read.

>>11681801168180 I got a question for you, how well do you think I got Pinkie pegged here?  I mean she felt a little hit or miss at times, but I need a different perspective.

In other news, I have the Bronies under construction notice and everyone can see that a little while later.  After I've let the last chapter sink in for a while and after I've done more of this story's rewrite.

I think I got everything, but I'd like to get some feedback if I missed something or didn't complete a part of this chapter.  I was awake all night ya see and I snoozed after my alarm for a couple of hours.  Not quite completely here but I still think I got everything.

>>11692981169298 Yes, yes we are.  I could say something, but it would be mean.

Deja Vu level: Infinity

Right. I have to say that it looks better. A lot better.

He still seems to take things a little too easy, but I have no idea how I'd react if somepony just suddenly jumped out of the screen. I'd probably scream.

>>11691711169171 you put 8 pairs of eyes instead of 7

>>11705271170527 Unless I missed some memo...

Six sets of pony, one set of dragon, one set of human unless I missed something in little kid classes that equals eight.

>>11705451170545 i thought you meant 8 pair staring at him

Hmm... I don't think anything is missing... yet. I just think Ales there might be having a... delayed reaction to having Fluttershy's flank on his face. Snuggling fur could be a cause for allergies or just plain sneezing.

You can sure as sugar can

Would this be... uhh... I think you could remove the first can.

Now if only I could stop finding pink hair on my floor...

>>11724321172432 Ack, I was rewriting the wording and it looks as though I abandoned it, thanks for that.

Now, I can't seem to reach Pinkie so you'll just have to deal with her yourself.

>>11728161172816 Great... Least I don't have to worry about... not drinking... every now and again I will find some kind of concoction on the countertop. Last time I tried not to drink I found myself blindfolded and bound to a chair with a funnel in my mouth... Lemme tell you... It was slightly fun but were with Pinkie so yeah... don't wanna go through that again...

grumble grumble grumble...

I liked it.

oo... interesting.. try posting it on equestria daily..

>>11865181186518  Have you even seen their rants about human tagged stories?  I'd have to be crazier than I already am, and I'm actually pretty crazy,

I’d rather not shock him by letting everypony from meeting him.

Is there an extra 'from' there? doesn't make sense as-is.

>>11918461191846 Thank you, let that be a reminder to everyone that doing your final double check before going to sleep is a bad idea.

Hmm... When I saw the name Lauren you can guess what went through my mind...

Nice touch adding the store. Another new element is now in... Bah... I can't pull of the evil scheming voice...

>>11978471197847 How's this...

Image: http://iambrony.jsmart.web.id/mlp/gif/877__safe_fluttershy_animated_evil.gif?1342342781

P.S. Lauren churned out of my mental "name generator" and is pure coincidence.  I wrote that Lauren in an early story that I lost my train of thought on and didn't put anywhere.  The story reminded me of FLCL if you took the sad excuse of a wire-frame of a story out of FLCL.

>>11981691198169 Fluttershy, the wicked with of the East... or was it West?

'grumbles to self'

Me like it 2

and loosing horribly

staying up last night and being woken my an unruly slurping I needed sleep

1. Losing.

2. By.

Wait... Sister? DETAILS! If you don't mind that is...

Wait... you actually beat Pinkie... in a staring contest? What did you do? Wave a cupcake in front of her? Maybe cotton candy, sugarcane's or even... uhh... I don't know... Just glad I ain't th-... Hmm... Actually, I have mixed feelings now...

>>12036521203652 You see, there's this thing called company.  This company comes in the form of two very unusual foals...

You can il/logic the rest right?

>>12037121203712 So you were saved by the twins. Just make sure not to grab their attention and you should, SHOULD be fine.

You REALLY pegged Pinkie. And I really mean it. I finally understood what it felt like to be one of the other characters in the show when Pinkie starts talking really fast and everything starts going over your head.

>>11865181186518 Equestria Daily is the elitist metalhead scene of the MLP fandom, it only accepts what it views as 'the best'.

>>11691711169171 It feels somewhat artificial that they automatically realize that talking ponies aren't normal here. Maybe have one or two of them not realize it or something?

>>11982931198293 West, the Wicked Witch of the East is the poor sumbitch that died without any screen time, thus ruining any dramatic presence she may have, and then her life was turned into a comedy with the song "Ding Dong, the Witch is Dead."

It must hurt a lot without them with them.

Hate to be that one guy, but since it's the first time that I've had a chance to do this in my life...

FIRST.

Anyway, I'm really liking the journal thing so far.

>>12154081215408  I was crazy paranoid about that so it's good to hear someone likes it.  I mean I get the vibe some liked it but to actually see the words strung together is a completely different thing.

this is like the begining of the tcb genre

>>12276111227611 To be honest I find that amusing since I haven't touched those at all.  I mean I hear stuff and it just doesn't click in my head or something.

>>12036241203624 I agree I want details about what happened to rainbows sister

>>12399871239987 I promise nothing...

For now

A few weeks have past

1. Passed.

Time to email

In b4 the unthinkable happens

>>14055361405536 Anything else?

>>14055381405538 Uhh... for now nope.

Why would Twilight teaching magic to a unicorn (male or not) be taken the wrong way?

>>14060271406027

long, intensive private lessons, often behind closed doors "for safety" with a member of the opposite gender?

often including those involved shouting and/or coming out of the room exhausted and sweaty, with rumpled manes?

no, couldn't possibly be taken wrong by folks accustomed to jumping to conclusions.

>>14070981407098 of course. Because none of their friends have ever had to conduct physical training. After all, AJ and RD never had a workout in their lives. And Rarity would have no idea what goes on in a magic training session. And you know Fluttershy... She's so judgemental.

>>14071731407173

Okay, who again was the ones freaking out because a new person with, ahem, "gaudy stripes" and odd ways came every month to Ponyville, then flipped out because one of their siblings tried to extend the metaphorical olive branch?

Who was the one freaking out because she thought that said newcomer was digging at the ground in frustration, thinking she could've been "digging for poor little creatures" ?

Who was the duo who regularly works out and never show a sweat unless doing long stretches of strenuous or stressful activities?

The only one who kept her head, for the most part, was usually was Twilight, up until the Lesson Zero incident.

You know, when everyone dismissed her worries as utterly inconsequential. And then did it again with the wedding.

Who, again, assumed that Twilight could be pressured or bribed into providing goods (the Gala tickets) and then performed several underhoofed and presumptuous favors to attempt to sway her judgement?

Really, all the ponies except Twilight have an extremely worrying tendency to jump to conclusions quickly.

To address the points you made directly;

AJ and Dash are both used to prolonged physical effort, and usually only sweat and look rumpled after putting specific effort into particularly difficult or intensive tasks.

It is doubtful that Rarity ever went to Celestia's School for Gifted Unicorns, seeing as she has a lot of incorrect fantasies about Canterlot, and it was shown that many Unicorns inducted from a young age where still in the school when Twilight got her "assignment" to stay in Ponyville.

Fluttershy judged Zecora straightaway, finding a flimsy excuse to hold onto an irrational fear and prosecution simply because the others where thinking it too. She may not be judgmental, but she follows the flow worse than most sheep or lemmings. And I'm talking these:

Image: http://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/en/thumb/0/0c/Lemmings-BoxScan.jpg/220px-Lemmings-BoxScan.jpg

not these:

Image: http://scienceblogs.com/zooillogix/wp-content/blogs.dir/253/files/2012/04/i-7e48e800d9f11a8c884b05749ec2f2c4-Lemming%20II.jpg

So yes, they would have some "jumping to conclusions" issues.

That said, after this multi-post rant, Twilight's probably also exaggerating, seeing as the portion was written from her POV, rather than from the Omnipotent 3rd Person. As such, while I can see the others getting some ideas, I doubt anypony would bring it up without being asked about it specifically. And they'd probably investigate first, to make sure.

Image: http://static.tumblr.com/mfxyxgh/wZ5m5ze9a/tldr.jpg

Sure, they would probably jump to some conclusions, and Pinkie would try to be subtle (i.e. throwing a "you got a coltfriend! hooray!" party) but Twilight is worrying a bit too much, and it's unlikely anyone would start tossing accusations around, even RD, who is extremely impulsive.

>>14072941407294 Thanks for that and I'm really sorry that after all this time this was all I had to post but what can ya do?  Some things have to be done "on camera" and I kinda lost my train of thought along the way.

~

Pinkie's trying to beat Dragon's Lair? If we're talking the first one, then yeah, fugeddaboutit. I beat the second one in the arcade on a single life.

>>14072941407294 well, you have a lot of good points, but I'm not convinced. There are too many logical holes stemming from your argument. But this is a really minor point anyway, so I'm going to drop it and just enjoy the story.

>>14074691407469

Oh, I was saying that the characters where acting perfectly in character, so that was good.

>>14082951408295

I'm just saying that it's not impossible, and it's largely from being from Twilight's POV, and she's entitled to her opinion, even if it's incorrect.

T-T

Technology doesn't work like that

>>11341151134115>>11341501134150>>11355051135505

Note how the first three comments' authors have Lyra as their avatar.

>>14495151449515 At the time I think mine wasn't... At least I'm pretty sure it wasn't... I don't really remember anymore... It changes every once and a while.

>>14495171449517 At the time it was. Well... the current one is Guyra sleding on Lyra whereas there were others that were just Lyra. After 20 or so changes I believe you changed to Little Luna & Celestia followed by Science Woona. Not to say i'm stalking you or anything.

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If I can’t, then if he feels strong about me

1. Strongly.

Hmm... How are the both of you gonna get that thing out in the morning? Or even get it into a box. Unless Pinkie somehow manages to stuff both into her party cannon and still comes out the way it was supposed to be. Who knows?

>>14496661449666 No, you've just been around since the beginning.

Oh damn... It's a bleeding love triangle...

>>14504291450429 Since the beginning of time... But seriously, I can't even remember exactly when I started Oh well

>>14504481450448 I think it's around the original version's chapter 5 or so.

Hmm... I just realised that Twilight is wondering about computers. She hooked up Pinkie to a machine right? Would that be counted as a type of computer?

Well great, now we have a love really really like triangle.

Dear >>14589561458956,

Signed,

>>14497631449763 I think the 'Party Cannon' method would work..that or she would just put int int PinkePie Sapce.".

THE SHITSTORM IS COMING!  THE SHITSTORM IS COMING!

>>15171831517183 You don't know the half of it

>>15171901517190

I was referring to the brother that just arrived, but in that case.  *Dives into unobtanium bunker.*

Moar?

>>15172281517228 No, because I'm the author I know how many panes in a glass house I'm about ready to break.  Something in the range of all of them unless I did the math wrong.

>>15173381517338

More to be written and more to be read.  I gobble it all down, like another would their bread.

MOAR!!!

I was the first to react as I ran upstairs at a speed I was Rainbow would envy.

1. I think you mean; That... But I cannot think straight for now for reasons unknown

SOUND THE PINKIE ALARM!

I just want to say that like ya Al

1. Forgot the I in the middle.

I just  figured out an ingenious way to sleep with Pinkie and not get bruised! Short of wearing body armor (then again, that may not work as well) my plan is to have somepony strap Pinkie onto your back with one of her hooves strapped to each limb. I don't think Pinkie will mind.

>>15173431517343 You do realise that at this point, his chapters are becoming like romantic crack mixed with radioactive substances that could give one of Pinkie's drinks a run for her money right? Then again... I might be over dramatic on this bit, who knows?

>>15203591520359

Dude, I wolf down stuff like Cheerilee's Garden, the same as I would stuff like That moment you realize you're awake., The Assumption of Applejack -or- Appletheosis, and Earth & Sky.

Which are Horror, and varying shades of Adventure/Comedy/Random/Romance/Slice-of-Life.

(Wow, those last three have more in common with their tags than I originally would have thought.)

>>15203811520381 Oh well, I tried I don't even remember what I was trying to do though...

>>15203911520391

I don't think you were trying to anything.  Most likely you were just rambling.  Happens to the best of us from time to time.

>>15203981520398 happens to our spot-checker more often than you'd expect.  Isn't that right refferee..?

*finishes reading chapter*

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*grabs pen and paper*

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>>15361821536182 Your list is noted.  I could use use some better glasses so I may read it though.

I muttered, gabbinga shirt

1. Grabbing.

And so, the conclusion is coming... but so is the dawn of a new chapter I think I need more sleep.

MORE

>>15365281536528 Be patient.  Allow me to explain...

>>15369801536980 I'm not very good at patience with excellent writing, but I'll damn sure try. I want this to be good as much as fast... but I'd rather have good over fast.

>>15373181537318 And good trumping fast is a very good thing seeing as how I have a... um... minor snag in the ending right now.  No worries, I'll get it sorted out, but going chapter by chapter right now is for the best.  I still have a surprise lined up at the very end though

If only Polygyny was an option... but then again, he would STILL be sad... Make up your mind Alex!

>>15412081541208

Most Appropriate Gif

>>15482981548298 More or less, next chapter in final formatting touches

Great story, now all you need to do is clone Alex so and can have him.