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Rakoon1


I'm a Portuguese author who wants to share his stories.

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Did you ever think how must have been Shining Armor's childhood? How was his relationship with his parents? How did he react to his younger sister's birth? The reason he decided to be a royal guard and how he entered to the royal guard academy? How he met Princess Cadance and how they started their courtship? How he managed to be the captain? In this story, we will know that and see how he managed to overcome the problems.

This is the first story of my main saga. Its sequel is Twilight and Blue Sword.

Second story: Twilight and Blue Sword
Third story: The Light Kingdom
Fourth story: The Taking of Tartarus
Fifth story: Star Knight and the Nine-Tailed Fox
Sixth story: The Island of Tambelon
Seventh story: Light and Darkness - The Shadow of Midnight
Eighth story: The Hidden Prince
Nineth story: Aventures in the Bermikun Triangle
Tenth story: The Elements of Virtue
Eleventh story: The Prince of the Cursed Kingdom

Chapters (25)
Comments ( 96 )

Great story,I look forward to more updates!:twilightsmile: Just make sure to watch out for spelling,I saw a lot of typos. :trixieshiftright: Great job,though! :pinkiehappy:

I apologize for the view graphic, but I created this story while doing Bloom's New Life without publishing it:derpytongue2:.

:pinkiehappy: Great job! :raritystarry: Just watch out for typos and grammar mistakes,and this will be great! :raritywink:

3433675 Sorry, but writing in a language that is not mine is a little difficult. I think mistakes is something that will be a bit impossible to avoid.:twilightblush:

oh,then that's alright! Great job though,you're doing amazing so far! :moustache:

"I can fend me here"? That can't be right, can it? Shouldn't it be "I can fend for myself"?

i can't understand this author's notes

3442102 I'm so sorry. I didn't realize that I had put the notes in Portuguese:derpytongue2:. Punctually, I have these lapses:facehoof:. Once again, I really sorry:twilightblush:.

3448698 If you read my first story in the nineth chapter, you'll see who is blue sword. Of course the character is still being developed, but everything will clear up soon.

U have my attention now don't buck it up!

3466440 Maybe, but Shining needs to overcome obstacles and Fire Punch is the perfect candidate for that. And besides, expell is much better than not get into the Academy, don't you think?:moustache:

:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy: Great job,soo excited to hear what happens next! :raritystarry::raritystarry:

officially following this :rainbowdetermined2:

you update regularly!! :yay: that doesn't happen very often, carry on :twilightsmile:

3483851 It was just because they were easy chapters:twilightblush:. But now, the things will complicate to me, because the story will also become more complicated:facehoof:.

I want to see what fire punch will do after seeing shining and cadence being together :pinkiecrazy:

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In this chapter, we already see a bit of this, but let's say Fire Punch will give a big jolt to this happy couple, you can count on it.:twilightsmile:

3524550 I was being sarcastic though!!!!
I don't want anything to happen to them!

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I had also planned that. After all, what is a good romance if there's not few mishaps along the way?:raritywink:

SDo that is how He larened the Shield Spell

3525687 It will not be exactly what he will do to try separate Shining and Cadance but let's say that you almost hit the bull's eye.

:pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp: something in tha next chapter bad gonna happen i bet.

:facehoof: y fire punch cant exept their :heart: but i guess wut fire punch in the will probaly be :pinkiegasp::raritycry::raritydespair: :fluttershbad:

lolz :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

3542060 Not necessary. Don't see that as a violent act. Sometimes it takes an act like that to get the attention of others so as to have the opportunity to earn their respect. It also should be noted that Shining was moved by an act of anger at the insult made by Dark Night. Concerning the matter of the mistakes, thank you for your advice, but I prefer everyone criticize my mistakes so I can improve my English.

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I'm going to bucking murder fire punch

3548116 it should be all the more sweeter (and hopefully bloody :pinkiecrazy:)

:flutterrage::flutterrage:WHERS THE NEXT CHAPTER!!!??!!:flutterrage::flutterrage: :twilightangry2::twilightangry2::twilightangry2::flutterrage::twilightangry2:

GODDAMIT FIRE PUNCH IS STILL ALIVE!!!!!!
on another note great chapter

Comment posted by Kirby deleted Dec 1st, 2013

Cadance didn't know why, but there was something in his aunt that gave her security. She then smiled, believing in her words.
Just a typo I wanted to point out

got to say it. every time I get on, you grammar and spelling gets worse. I am slightly irritated :flutterrage:

3568515 The mission in the Griffin Kingdom was more to demonstrate the duty of a royal guard. I don't intend to write something about that mission.

Loved this story absolutely brilliant looking forward to reading some of your other works

I have to change Shining and Blue's teacher's name because I'm planing using her name in another character.

I like the concept and i'm looking forward to reading more of the story later on.

Like a lot of people who don't have English as a first language, your tenses tend to be inconsistent.

Other than that I really like this, and I can't wait to finish it. :twilightblush:

Oooh! :raritystarry: A fanfic giving backstory to Shining Armor! You have just gotten the attention of Sunlight Blaze's FIMfiction Reviews!!!

For those of you new to the show, it is where I read through a story, leaving a comment at the end of each chapter giving a summary of the chapter along with some snarky commentary and personal opinions and/or critiques along the way (you may find it similar to the reviews of Joshscorcher on Youtube, if you've seen them).
When I reach the final chapter, I will leave another comment detailing my complete opinion and overall critique of the story as a whole, giving a letter and number grade at the end for four of the following five criteria:
Story --- the premise of the story, and how interesting the overall plot is
Writing --- I'm a bit of a Grammar Nazi, so I tend to grade down stories with spelling errors and/or bad grammar; I'm also taking into account how well-written the characters are.
Humor --- I judge humor based on quality over quantity; the stronger and funnier the jokes, the higher the grade. (This is especially judged harshly for stories tagged "Comedy.")
Moral --- Normally reserved for stories tagged with "Slice of Life," the more applicable the lesson is, and how well the message is relayed, the higher the grade.
Ending --- Every story needs to give the readers a satisfying conclusion and/or give hints for a sequel. The more satisfying and well-rounded the ending, the better the grade. Timing is also taken into account.

Now, as I understand it, English is not a first language to you, so I'll try not to judge too harshly. Another thing I should note, if you haven't figured it out already, these reviews are strictly opinion-based, so if you have a problem with one of my comments, take what I say with a grain of salt.

Well, now that you know how my reviews work: Let's get started! *clicks first chapter*

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