A mysterious entity awakens from a long slumber. Unique to this world, this being must face suffering from its very nature. Some will seek to use this nature for good and others for ill. In a new world, opportunity abounds, but so too does adversity.
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Oh! good i was hoping this would continue.
good chapter! I like this guy he's focused and balanced.
(also writing zecora dialog is a bitch!)
Badass character is badass
He wakes up and the first major thing he does is wrestling a manticore and breaking its neck.
That's what i call badass.
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I like the way he thinks, in most other HiE fics the human starts to stab the manticore with a small knife or tries to bludgeon it to death with a stick or something.
And i think he might have gained a small case of superhuman traits thanks to his absorbing massive amounts of chaos and normal magic, looking forward to see what it will be.
this one GREAT! cant wait for the next one to see what he dos nex oh and a special thank you for writing it.
Thanks for the update
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Yeah! Good chapter!
(didn't I tell you writing zecora lines would be difficult)
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Indeed, you did. I've done it before but never on this scale. Didn't realise how taxing it would be.
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I must say I'm impressed with what you did though!
this is an awesome story cant wait for more
strangely enough, I wasn't alerted to the new chapter.
I found entirely by accident.
Glad I did though.
I gotta say this guy is one calm motherf
er, calculating too
If he were evil...well..he'd be Discord
Awww yeah! New Chapter
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How queer. Though, quite happy you found it.
Beware the fact that Angel was naturally terrified by the mere act of looking into his eyes. Animals are intuitive and instinctive creatures. This is Angel we're talking about as well. Snide, mischievous, confident. Terrified.
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I'll be starting the next chapter right after this comment is posted.
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Again, thanks for the goad. I certainly needed it.
In general, I'm glad you lot enjoy my writing style. Most people prefer the more traditional. "Fluttersy said, "[insert words spoken by said individual]"." Few people actually tend to like my style of stating what a character is doing and following it with straight vocab from said character. I guess it requires the barest hint of intuitive thinking. Curse me and my expectations!
Edit: You lot should have seen my face when I watched the first episode of the new season a few days ago. My prologue is now flat-out defiant of canon. I may go back and change it someday... Maybe when this is finished.
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I thought it was simply because he was a predator.
...could it be that angel see's something we can't?
...thats going to be fun
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By the by. Happen to notice I mentioned evidence of the presence of animals in Fluttershy's home, but none of them made an appearance in Adrian's presence?
Even subtle, missing details can contribute to a story.
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they didn't warn her to the fact a carnivore twice her size was heading for her?
again I figured it might have something to do with the six foot predator walking around.
...wait?
those little cowards!well Its clear you put a lot of care into your story.
good job
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If you like, I can pre-read and do minor editing for you.
He's the calmest guy ever.....and I love it.
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4178769 Double space or maybe 1.5x? No way in any of the hells am I going back and putting spaces between all of my paragraphs. Though, I'll probably space paragraphs if I ever start another story.
4170934 Most HIE stories I've seen involve people who just give up their old world without trouble. It made me ponder what a level-headed and average individual would do. Hence, the calm demeanor, adaptive mindset, pleasant nature, and fallible behaviour.
4198813 yeah, I like how he isn't flippant or uncaring.
he's just got control over himself.
He doesn't make want to facepalm or think "why do that?".
Your character has a brain.
4198813 I'm a lying sack of shit. As per nighters suggestion, I have gone back and added some nice spacing to everything. Expect this to be a continuing theme. That is, unless I get complaints about it.
Also, expect a chapter later this evening (or tomorrow morn). I've finally got some free time baby! It's a miracle! Hallelujah praise the sweet baby Jesus!
I overestimated my ability to focus and the amount of free time I actually had. Not sure when I'll have free time again, but the new chapter has 3,800 words, so I'll likely be able to finish it when next that occurs.
It happened. I also altered some tags now that I realise I dun' goofed the first time around. Also, I hope you weren't too fond of all the introspection. Shit's gonna start impacting them rotors within the next two chapters.
You used the word sapient correctly, everyone else use's "sentient" and I always sneer at it because I know its wrong.
You used it right and that made me smile.
-also, no hunger? thirst? or restroom needs? Interesting.
I noticed it disturbed him deeply but he held his composure on the outside.
There's so much that can happen at this point.
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I am excited. I've spent time carefully crafting fragments of a web from sparingly introduced ideas. Some even seem to have no relevance on their lonesome. Now, it all comes to a head. The centerpiece will soon be made known, and the web shall be made whole by its presence.
Unfortunately, those who saw that abysmal prologue will have the slightest advantage in figuring out what is happening. Though they'll still be lacking the centerpiece... No more hints.
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The care and attention you've put into this story is really shining through now.
I'm seeing detail and connections slowly weaving together at a healthy pace.
The character development is well...actually developing.
But possibly the most important thing, I have never finished a chapter feeling angry or dissatisfied.
Organic Construct...I tip my non existent hat to you.
Thank god someone using the word sapient instead of sentient I've seen so many people get that wrong even on spacebattles which is
a site I would not expect that mistake to be made. And good job on the story really nice so far.
I have my theories based on the prologue, the title of the story and a bit of guessing.
I can't wait for the moment when the panic and confusion overrides his ability to calm his mind and he breaks down.
this story dead?
5291225 Negative. I would've changed its classification to "Cancelled" if it were.
well made.
holy hell this updated!
I like the way he talks. he's speech gives off a real sense of control over himself and his environment.
The delusion of returning home will prove harmful fo him in the long run...
... Where is the fourth option? Celestia only stated three options yet in the beginning she said Adrian has "four paths available".
6676257 To attack her.
6676346 Ah. Thank you for the response.
6676257 Exactly what I was wondering
You can't be from the states if you spell honour with a "u"
The title of this story is incredibly misleading a first, but it becomes clearer after haha
6676257 Oops. I'd thought I fixed that. I didn't like the fourth option.
6676346 Well, I certainly suppose that was among a few unmentioned paths he could've taken.
6676006 I'm trying to give him an air of pretentiousness. I still want him to be likable, but some of his behaviour should make some readers think: "You stuck up bastard."
6676144 Deep down, he knows this. The hope simply gives him a reason to press on where otherwise he wouldn't have one. There are other reasons to live, such as exploring a brilliant new world, but he doesn't see that. He's not a perfect person.
6676571 The character isn't supposed to reflect me.
6676108 Self-control is the only real control that he feels he has left in this new world. He's gonna do his damnedest to maintain it.
Why would a 21st century dude use the word 'tis'?That's a word that's definitely not used anymore.
6677070 Except by neckbeards
And maybe LARP'ers
6676672 So the character is American, but you're not?
Havel the Rock, Apple Farmer . . . .
I think he's possessed by something.
I still think he's possessed.
interesting thus far :) I was wondering about the not eating anything problem but then you brought it up by yourself which is nice ^^ I like Adrian, though I prefer some more moping - that's just my opinion though, but I still hope there will be more of it XD
Overall, I'm interested to see where this leads ^^ like and favorite from me ^^
Oh wow, haven't read this in a while. Pretty fantastic work, once again.
Call me crazy, but didn't there used to be a chapter (or a section of one) detailing Discord summoning Adrian into Equestria, in the presence of the royal sisters, just before getting turned to stone for the first time? Or is that something I'm remembering from another story?
6805910 That was a prologue that was deleted due to direct defiance of canon. Excellent memory you've got there.