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Canterlot vanishes in a mysterious explosion, an explosion which engulfs all of Equestria. Twilight manages to save herself, but the world she finds herself in is not the one she remembers. Her friends have no memory of her, the world is trapped in darkness, and Celestia is missing. Can Twilight figure out what's happened to her and the rest of Equestria before the darkness overwhelms her?
Well, Chapter 2 is finally up. Gonna try for one chapter a week, though given my predilection for procrastination, I will undoubtedly fall short of this promise at some point.
That having been said, please, feel free to leave your comments and critiques below. The only way I can get better is if I know what I'm doing wrong.
Tricondon out!
Welp, Chapter 4 is finally up. Sorry it took me a bit longer than usual. Also sorry about the rather abrupt ending.
Interesting bit of trivia; the entire story idea stemmed from a line of dialogue in this chapter. Guess which line it is, win a cookie. One entry per user, offer void in Nebraska.
In related news, I am interested in aquiring a pre-reader. My current pre-reader has personal issues to work through, and I find myself without someone to catch my mistakes. If you feel up to the task, and can actually keep a secret, then send me a Private Message.
Other then that, enjoy my tale of woe.
-Tricondon
If I could draw, my profile pic would be my pony-sona. As such, my drawing skill is limited to photoshopping someone else's work. But I would never do that. 
Also, more praise! Glee!
-Tricondon
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I decided to look up this 'Glassed' fellow you mentioned. We both sign our posts, we have similar tastes in humour, we have the same profile pic, and I even like his writing style. I do believe I've found my soul mate. 
For the record, I post this comment so that no writers can claim 'first' comment. There will be no first for this chapter.
Tricondon, very good. Can't wait to see more! Also, nice character connection. I feel sad and confused when Twilight does, and I feel a general gloom throughout the story. Very good job...I have found a writing style to try, a skill to strive for. Thank you for setting the bar so high for me.
>>567776 Oh nononono my good sir, yours a better by several miles!
There's no way I could ever compete with your picture
-Glassed
-looks from one to the other-
Your conversation really makes little sense to me. But your back and forth does amuse me! So you receive a LOLuna from me.
Anywho, I'm interested in BOTH of your stories. Oddly enough it's because of the writing styles of you in the comments. Strange how the universe works that way sometimes. I shall have to find the time to read your stories Tripod and Brassed. What?! Those aren't your names?! -looks at username- Oh. Well, I'm still going to call you two that. It sounds much better.I would've written the first "ooh" with two o's and the second with three, Brassed. And how did you know I meant you when I said that?
hmm... I have not read the story yet, but it seems very interesting, and also has a little element of "silent ponyville".. well, as far as I can tell based on the description. Interesting story, really. Silent Ponyville is an awesome [horror] [sad] type of story... also, it is probably one of the only 'cupcakes' based story out there that doesn't have a bad rating.. if I remember right, you can't even see that little devious red bar! Ha! Thats a good story right there. There are a few sequels made by the same author of the first one. Pretty good, and pretty long to, sheesh! I am currently on the second one, but here is a little summary of the first one.
(You don't really need to read this if you already understand the Silent Hill story, but you can still read it)
Pinkie has been having some bad dreams. The first few were tolerable, but as the days have passed, they all have gotten worse, and worse, and worse. She seeks towards Twilight for help. Twilight uses a spell called "Mind delve", but Pinkie does not like the way the spell works out. Pinkie then goes into the deepest, darkest corner of her head, where all the bad dreams are kept. She then has to fight her way through a foggy, abandoned Ponyville, with only a walkie-talkie that doesn't work, but makes strange noises, and a bag, and her surroundings.
-That summary might not be COMPLETELY accurate, but it is the closest I can get without making a bunch of spoilers. I also have not read the story in awhile, I tend to not re-read things,unless I am either pre-reading, proof reading, or editing. (Not sure if those are all the same thing.. probably).
--Anyways, hope you have time on searching that! It is on this site, and the author of is named "JakeHeritagu", and if you cannot find the story, the tell me, and I will send you a link via P.M. (personal message)
Never read Silent Ponyville. Gotta admit, the Cupcakes-based part somewhat kills it for me. I can stand Cupcakes no problem; I just have other issues with other fics constantly referencing it.
That said, read my fic. I worked hard on it. I require feeback.
-Tricondon
>>579535 YOU SHOULD READ IT!!! It isn't one of those "fail-fictions" where it is just referencing that... there are other references to! :D but besides that. The story itself is very, very cool, and it makes a whole lot of sense... at least to me, not sure about you... probably will make sense to you. Anyways, you should really read it! It kinda tells about Pinkies, very well hidden past and such of that manner.
Since you enjoy first so much...still no first for this chapter. It shall remain first less! I am sooo evil.
Awesome! This is the kind of thing that gives me dreams of the same story, except with my OC in it, which is frustrating because it would be considered stealing if I wrote a story about it.. Nice chapter, though!
Just got my chance to read this. A short chapter, but informative.
I'm curious as to what's happening to Twilight and Pinkie Pie, who both appear to be beginning to cross over their minds with their alternate selves.
...wait a second. "fix it before the darkness overwhelms her?"
Uh oh.
Dunno if anyone commented about this in later chapters, but how does Pinkie - a mere Captain and not a naval one - get away with ordering a General around? Unless that character's name is General Star rather than their title being General. Also how do the ranks work, because Commanders are usually navy or airforce ranks rather than army.
Finally, an update...crap.
I hate these situations. Don't get me wrong, it just makes the story better, but it's...frustrating. I know it's just a story, but I get so frustrated in these types of things, and you put it right at the end to add suspense. That was a terrible thing you just did to me, Tri.
Well, at least this shows you are an amazing and spectacular writer, as you can bend the readers' emotions at will. I'm sad when Twilight is, I'm frustrated and angry when she is, I'm pumped when she is. It's just amazing how you manage to do that. Don't ever stop doing that in your writing, okay?
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