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  • E The Birth of Chaos

    A chronicle of the events 1000 years ago, which tells of Starswirl's dabbling into new magic, the rise of Discord and the Elements of Harmony
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  • 37w, 6d
    Simple Ways, Simple Ideas

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  • 38w, 6d
    A new thing.

    Here's an idea. Me talking about the new episodes that come out. Okay, good? Go.

    So Pinkie Pride, the episode with Cheese Sandwich AKA Weird Al. After simply watching the episode I don't think it had the same generally good feeling some of the other episodes the season had. I am referring to Pinkie Apple Pie and Three's a Crowd. Those episodes just felt happy and fun to watch. This one was average in that sense.

    The music. I can't say I expected it to be a musical episode, but on the same hand I was not surprised. I mean, it was Weird Al, of course there would be tons of music. And that being said, I think that the music helped along the plot. If this episode, which is all about fun, was just spoken it would be dry and lacking the jovial nature it demanded. Unfortunately, it seemed to sacrifice quantity of songs for quality. While the songs may have been good, they did not have the same kind of ring to them as others this season. The fact that the characters just went in and out of songs made them lack the "Oh THIS is the big song" feel. Not to say any of the songs were not great just that they lacked any UMF. Compared to Magical Mystery Cure, where every song was big and significant and held it's place in the story.

    Weird Al. He was spot on in this episode. His swings from serious to silly seemed natural and part of Cheese's personality rather than just being random. His back story, which at first felt like a cop-out to wrap up the episode, grew on me by the time it was over. Other than that, his songs were good (see above), his place in the story was solid, and his jokes were on par. That being said I think he is best left as a one-shot character. I don't see how he could come back in any meaningful way.

    Pinkie Pie. Ho boy did she shine. I often hear that Pinkie is a tough character to write, and I can see that. To balance her zany antics without making her a gag character is tough, and this episode got it right.  While I could drone on about it, the major moment was during the goof-off. I had a moment when I realized "Wait, by keeping Cheese Sandwich busy Rainbow Dash's party is not going to be as great." And then BOOM Pinkie realized that too, and forfeited. She made an adult decision, for the greater good of her friend. I was however looking forward to Pinkamena coming out, but I was sadly disappointed. I really wish they had that as Pinkie was waking out of town.

    Boneless, the Key. Yeah, it was kind of just thrown in there at the end, like the other keys. Dammit writers, when will things start to come together? It's like they are trying to have a solid narrative, but doing it in the sloppiest way possible. They are just throwing in the narrative, in completely unrelated stories. You want to know what has a well connected narrative? Fucking The Equestria Games, witch I am eternally opposed to since the first episode they were brought up was Games Ponies Play, which I think is the absolute worst episode. Also sadkfhsdkcnwouef Boneless's dance was too perfect.

    So overall, good episode. Not legendary like the season bookends, but out of the "plot" episodes it was one of the better ones. Out of this season, on the high end of the scale, and out of the series, average.

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  • 40w, 2d
    School

    Well school is back in session for me, which ironically enough will probably mean i will get back to work on my story. During winter break i could never sit myself down and decide "This is it. This is when i get work done" But now with the formality of classes and the better atmosphere of the library I can find it in me to hammer out words.

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  • 41w, 4d
    MUST. FIND. SILVER. LINING.

    Well through an unfortunate series of events I find myself banned from my favorite Minecraft server. And I mean perma-banned. No way out, need to purchase a new account to play kind of deal. And, needless to say I am left without much to occupy my time. However, as the title of this post says I will try to make this a good thing.

    I will find time to continue work on my story, which has been nagging my mind recently. Also school is string up for me soon and this is just one less distraction i will have to deal with.

    Well hopefully things will work out in the end. It's not like I'm hopelessly addicted to that server or anything. He,  he.

    dear god how will I last?

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  • 46w, 2d
    For the love of gos

    DAMMIT ALL TO HELL! I finished my chapter. I wrote it. AND FORGOT TO SAVE. GOD DAMMIT!

    Sorry to get hopes up anyone who say it. But GODDAMMIT!

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Sombra may have been defeated after his attempt to retake the Crystal Empire, but he was not destroyed. He still lives, and now he seeks to work his way into the mind of Princess Twilight Sparkle. As she struggles with the implications of her new immortality, she finds less comfort in the wise words of Princess Celestia, and is drawn to the dark magic of a fallen king.

First Published
27th Nov 2013
Last Modified
5th Oct 2014
#1 · 48w, 2d ago · · · Magic ·

Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here.

#2 · 47w, 4d ago · · · Generosity ·

....... MORE!!!!!!!

#3 · 47w, 2d ago · · · Magic ·

Equestira is better off without you as leader

Sure, Equestira will. But what about Equestria

#4 · 47w, 2d ago · · · Magic ·

>>3578208

You thought you were clever, mistake. You thought you could hide. But NOBODY can hide from the watchful eyes of Bulder.

#5 · 47w, 9h ago · · · Generosity ·

i cant wait for the next chapter.:pinkiehappy:

#6 · 46w, 2d ago · · · Magic ·

This is good so far, and I will keep reading, but I notice a few grammar issues. Most notably, you have a bad habit of switching from past to present tense.

Apart from that, I like it.

#7 · 46w, 2d ago · · · Magic ·

I will tell you for a fact that you stole a few of these lines from a Comic Dub on youtube, or the comic itself. It's called "A somber Meeting". The original author/artist of the comic stated that you're only allowed to produce a story about the comic if you credit him and send him a link so he can read it.

#8 · 46w, 1d ago · · · Generosity ·

>>3616430

Yes, that was my inspiration for the first chapter. But I assure you What I have is store goes far beyond that comic.

That being said I never saw that note from the creator. Thank you for bringing it to my attention.

#9 · 46w, 1d ago · · · Generosity ·

>>3617002

OH OH OH, I just thought that since I'm writing a story from the same comic strip, why not do edits and reviews for each other hehe.

My editor hasn't been in contact for last few days :c

#10 · 46w, 1d ago · · · Generosity ·

I just got done with this chapter and I love the concept of being "broken" in the literal sense

#11 · 45w, 4d ago · · · Corruption ·

The plot thickens, I really like how its going, good work keep it up :pinkiehappy::heart:

#12 · 45w, 4d ago · · · Magic ·

Whoops, wrong flash back... ignore me.

#13 · 45w, 3d ago · · · Corruption ·

>>3636762

It's the thick plottens, not the plot thickens.

#14 · 45w, 3d ago · · · Corruption ·

>>3645246

But is it really :pinkiecrazy: hehe

#15 · 41w, 5d ago · · · Corruption ·

Please update, I love this fanfic so much! :twilightsmile: why isn't there a Sombra emoji thingy? There should be one. *cue Sombra laugh*

#16 · 40w, 4d ago · 2 · · Corruption ·

I love Sombra, he's such a moldable 'villain'

#17 · 34w, 12h ago · · · Corruption ·

Wow. His is past is just...I never expected that to be his past.

#18 · 3w, 5d ago · · · Loyalty ·

Oh..Oh Twilight....what have you done...

#19 · 3w, 5d ago · 1 · · Loyalty ·

.......................... I CAME. Evil Twilight be evil heheheheh :pinkiecrazy:

#20 · 3w, 5d ago · · · Loyalty ·

Great that you are writing again. :ajsmug:

#21 · 3w, 5d ago · · · Loyalty ·

I wonder what advice Luna would have given Twi about immortality and the consequences of using dark magic:derpyderp1:.  I mean Luna knows what immortality is like, she has also dabbed with dark magic and probably wont give advice basically saying "Figure it out yourself Twilight".  AlsoI hope you will add Luna or Celestia to the story at some point of the story (I will eagerly await till they appear if you are planing on adding them):pinkiehappy::derpytongue2:

P.S. Obviously  I really like your story and I cant wait till the next update. :pinkiehappy:

#22 · 3w, 5d ago · · · Loyalty ·

I wonder what advice Luna would have given Twi about immortality and the consequences of using dark magic:derpyderp1:.  I mean Luna knows what immortality is like, she has also dabbed with dark magic and probably wont give advice basically saying "Figure it out yourself Twilight":trollestia:.  AlsoI hope you will add Luna or Celestia to the story at some point of the story (I will eagerly await till they appear if you are planing on adding them):pinkiehappy::derpytongue2:

P.S. Obviously  I really like your story and I cant wait till the next update. :pinkiehappy:

#23 · 3w, 5d ago · · · Loyalty ·

I know there's no romance tag but I see some Twilight and Sombra shipping.:pinkiehappy:

#24 · 3w, 4d ago · · · Loyalty ·

>>5102515 But there is a tragedy tag. A tragedy occurs between to lovers. I think that Twilight may fall in love with Sombra and then have to kill him, like Rosebud, for Twilight to learn the full spell.

#25 · 3w, 4d ago · · · Loyalty ·

>>5105569 Man that's harsh.:pinkiesad2:

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