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A 21 year old engineering student. How I manage to find the time and ability to write a coherent sentence is beyond me, but I do.


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Sombra may have been defeated after his attempt to retake the Crystal Empire, but he was not destroyed. He still lives, and now he seeks to work his way into the mind of Princess Twilight Sparkle. As she struggles with the implications of her new immortality, she finds less comfort in the wise words of Princess Celestia, and is drawn to the dark magic of a fallen king.

First Published
27th Nov 2013
Last Modified
5th Oct 2014
#1 · 65w, 5d ago · · · Magic ·

Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here.

#2 · 65w, 13h ago · · · Generosity ·

....... MORE!!!!!!!

#3 · 64w, 5d ago · · · Magic ·

Equestira is better off without you as leader

Sure, Equestira will. But what about Equestria

#4 · 64w, 5d ago · · · Magic ·

>>3578208

You thought you were clever, mistake. You thought you could hide. But NOBODY can hide from the watchful eyes of Bulder.

#5 · 64w, 3d ago · · · Generosity ·

i cant wait for the next chapter.:pinkiehappy:

#6 · 63w, 5d ago · · · Magic ·

This is good so far, and I will keep reading, but I notice a few grammar issues. Most notably, you have a bad habit of switching from past to present tense.

Apart from that, I like it.

#7 · 63w, 4d ago · · · Magic ·

I will tell you for a fact that you stole a few of these lines from a Comic Dub on youtube, or the comic itself. It's called "A somber Meeting". The original author/artist of the comic stated that you're only allowed to produce a story about the comic if you credit him and send him a link so he can read it.

#8 · 63w, 4d ago · · · Generosity ·

>>3616430

Yes, that was my inspiration for the first chapter. But I assure you What I have is store goes far beyond that comic.

That being said I never saw that note from the creator. Thank you for bringing it to my attention.

#9 · 63w, 3d ago · · · Generosity ·

>>3617002

OH OH OH, I just thought that since I'm writing a story from the same comic strip, why not do edits and reviews for each other hehe.

My editor hasn't been in contact for last few days :c

#10 · 63w, 3d ago · · · Generosity ·

I just got done with this chapter and I love the concept of being "broken" in the literal sense

#11 · 63w, 10h ago · · · Corruption ·

The plot thickens, I really like how its going, good work keep it up :pinkiehappy::heart:

#12 · 62w, 6d ago · · · Magic ·

Whoops, wrong flash back... ignore me.

#13 · 62w, 5d ago · · · Corruption ·

>>3636762

It's the thick plottens, not the plot thickens.

#14 · 62w, 5d ago · · · Corruption ·

>>3645246

But is it really :pinkiecrazy: hehe

#15 · 59w, 1d ago · · · Corruption ·

Please update, I love this fanfic so much! :twilightsmile: why isn't there a Sombra emoji thingy? There should be one. *cue Sombra laugh*

#16 · 58w, 3h ago · 2 · · Corruption ·

I love Sombra, he's such a moldable 'villain'

#17 · 51w, 3d ago · · · Corruption ·

Wow. His is past is just...I never expected that to be his past.

#18 · 21w, 1d ago · · · Loyalty ·

Oh..Oh Twilight....what have you done...

#19 · 21w, 1d ago · 1 · · Loyalty ·

.......................... I CAME. Evil Twilight be evil heheheheh :pinkiecrazy:

#20 · 21w, 1d ago · · · Loyalty ·

Great that you are writing again. :ajsmug:

#21 · 21w, 1d ago · · · Loyalty ·

I wonder what advice Luna would have given Twi about immortality and the consequences of using dark magic:derpyderp1:.  I mean Luna knows what immortality is like, she has also dabbed with dark magic and probably wont give advice basically saying "Figure it out yourself Twilight".  AlsoI hope you will add Luna or Celestia to the story at some point of the story (I will eagerly await till they appear if you are planing on adding them):pinkiehappy::derpytongue2:

P.S. Obviously  I really like your story and I cant wait till the next update. :pinkiehappy:

#22 · 21w, 1d ago · · · Loyalty ·

I wonder what advice Luna would have given Twi about immortality and the consequences of using dark magic:derpyderp1:.  I mean Luna knows what immortality is like, she has also dabbed with dark magic and probably wont give advice basically saying "Figure it out yourself Twilight":trollestia:.  AlsoI hope you will add Luna or Celestia to the story at some point of the story (I will eagerly await till they appear if you are planing on adding them):pinkiehappy::derpytongue2:

P.S. Obviously  I really like your story and I cant wait till the next update. :pinkiehappy:

#23 · 21w, 1d ago · · · Loyalty ·

I know there's no romance tag but I see some Twilight and Sombra shipping.:pinkiehappy:

#24 · 21w, 15h ago · · · Loyalty ·

>>5102515 But there is a tragedy tag. A tragedy occurs between to lovers. I think that Twilight may fall in love with Sombra and then have to kill him, like Rosebud, for Twilight to learn the full spell.

#25 · 21w, 11h ago · · · Loyalty ·

>>5105569 Man that's harsh.:pinkiesad2:

#26 · 16w, 4d ago · · · Loyalty ·

Sacrifice one to save so many... an ethical conundrum.  

Or one can just think more blood to spill :pinkiecrazy:

#27 · 8w, 12h ago · · · Loyalty ·

To tarturus with you evil scum:pinkiecrazy::trollestia:

#28 · 6w, 6d ago · · · Loyalty ·

This story is the start of something beautiful. Now (at least in my opinion), all that needs to happen is Twilight Sparkle needs to kill the princess that was responsible for her transformation into Alicorn form, Princess Celestia. If it hadn't been for Celestia transforming Twilight into an Alicorn, she would never have had a reason to listen to Sombra, and she would have never had a reason to kill that poor innocent mare. But, like I said, that is just my opinion. The story is still sure to be a good story either way, especially when it gets finished.

#29 · 3w, 6d ago · · · Loyalty ·

Four months... You better pick up the paste! Chop, chop! Five more months!

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