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Joined May 2013
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Stories (2)

  • The Eternity of Twilight Sparkle
    As Twilight Sparkle deals with the consequences of Immortality she finds comfort, not in Celestia, but Sombra.

    11,961 words · 613 views · 54 likes · 2 dislikes
  • The Birth of Chaos
    A chronicle of the events 1000 years ago, which tells of Starswirl's dabbling into new magic, the rise of Discord and the Elements of Harmony
    8,519 words · 138 views · 8 likes · 0 dislikes

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Sombra may have been defeated after his attempt to retake the Crystal Empire, but he was not destroyed. He still lives, and now he seeks to work his way into the mind of Princess Twilight Sparkle. As she struggles with the implications of her new immortality, she finds less comfort in the wise words of Princess Celestia, and is drawn to the dark magic of the fallen king.

First Published
27th Nov 2013
Last Modified
16th Dec 2013

Comments ( 17 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 20w, 3h ago · · ·

Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here.

#2 · Chapter 2 · 19w, 2d ago · · ·

....... MORE!!!!!!!

#3 · Chapter 1 · 19w, 14h ago · · ·

Equestira is better off without you as leader

Sure, Equestira will. But what about Equestria

#4 · Chapter 1 · 19w, 13h ago · · ·

>>3578208

You thought you were clever, mistake. You thought you could hide. But NOBODY can hide from the watchful eyes of Bulder.

#5 · Chapter 2 · 18w, 5d ago · · ·

i cant wait for the next chapter.:pinkiehappy:

#6 · Chapter 1 · 18w, 12h ago · · ·

This is good so far, and I will keep reading, but I notice a few grammar issues. Most notably, you have a bad habit of switching from past to present tense.

Apart from that, I like it.

#7 · Chapter 1 · 17w, 6d ago · · ·

I will tell you for a fact that you stole a few of these lines from a Comic Dub on youtube, or the comic itself. It's called "A somber Meeting". The original author/artist of the comic stated that you're only allowed to produce a story about the comic if you credit him and send him a link so he can read it.

#8 · Chapter 2 · 17w, 6d ago · · ·

>>3616430

Yes, that was my inspiration for the first chapter. But I assure you What I have is store goes far beyond that comic.

That being said I never saw that note from the creator. Thank you for bringing it to my attention.

#9 · Chapter 2 · 17w, 5d ago · · ·

>>3617002

OH OH OH, I just thought that since I'm writing a story from the same comic strip, why not do edits and reviews for each other hehe.

My editor hasn't been in contact for last few days :c

#10 · Chapter 2 · 17w, 5d ago · · ·

I just got done with this chapter and I love the concept of being "broken" in the literal sense

#11 · Chapter 4 · 17w, 2d ago · · ·

The plot thickens, I really like how its going, good work keep it up :pinkiehappy::heart:

#12 · Chapter 1 · 17w, 1d ago · · ·

Whoops, wrong flash back... ignore me.

#13 · Chapter 4 · 17w, 22h ago · · ·

>>3636762

It's the thick plottens, not the plot thickens.

#14 · Chapter 4 · 17w, 21h ago · · ·

>>3645246

But is it really :pinkiecrazy: hehe

#15 · Chapter 4 · 13w, 3d ago · · ·

Please update, I love this fanfic so much! :twilightsmile: why isn't there a Sombra emoji thingy? There should be one. *cue Sombra laugh*

#16 · Chapter 4 · 12w, 2d ago · · ·

I love Sombra, he's such a moldable 'villain'

#17 · Chapter 4 · 5w, 5d ago · · ·

Wow. His is past is just...I never expected that to be his past.

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