That was remarkably well-written. I felt as if I were watching the show instead of reading it.  In other words,

*Clears throat*

Brilliant!

Please tell me that you came up with it yourself and aren't another of those people essentially copying from one of those Doctor Who books that I've not as of yet read. That would be uber-disappointing.

>>284408284408 Oh no no no. I've never even seen Doctor Who! (Well, okay, a couple episodes or clips, but I don't keep up with the show.) This is actually a collaboration between a few friends and me (as the description states). I'm not even the one writing the Doctor Whooves bits.

Very good so far cant wait for more.

Tracking!

This seems so familiar...  where have I seen this before??    Good editing job, Tales.  Tracking here though I've read it already

Oh man, this is going to be brilliant.

God lord, that was great! I hope the rest of the story is just as good

>>285007285007 I hope so too!

"He spun around again, walking down the hall away..." I thought he was outside lol

Track~

I've been tracking this for a few days and thought that, since I have no other things to do I would read it

and I can tell that that was a good decision

>>288712288712 They're all actually inside the whole time.

>>294390294390 Ha! Guess that means I'll reread it before ch 3. <3 Lovely story :D

Love chapter three! ^.^ I promise to go back and see why I got topsie-tervie in ch2~

>>294397294397 If there is something that sounds wonky, feel free to send me a message so I can fix it.

this is VERY interesting now

Doctor, how did you leave your show and end up so perfectly in character here?

First! I have never been first ever!

I like where this is going, the Doctor knows them, but they have forgotten him? Interesting.

this is awsome

I missed the "He slipped in through the kitchens..." line apparently! :D oh me <3 On to CH4!

I hope it is explained why Luna dosen't remember him :D

So many questions, so few answers! Lovely chapter ^.^

>>314084314084 I think I imply later at some point(s) that she lost a lot of her memories from her time on the moon/trip back/transformation from NMM.

It kind of goes along with how she's experiencing a loss of magical power (as this is Season 1 Luna), so eventually she'll regain them when/as she transitions to Season 2 Luna.

Somehow I get the impression that those last "oooooooo"s are you all trying to go ghastly-ly ghost-y on me.

Poor guards...

>>347867347867 Haha, Bramble Rose wrote that part.

This sounds oddly similar to my fic. Doctor Whooves, something horrible lurking beneath the castle... semi-dark...

only difference is mine focuses a lot on a non-self insert OC, since I find that it's actually easier to invent a personality. Anyways, very interesting fic, congrats on getting to EQD!

As a minor nitpicky thing, Dr Who never identifies himself as "Doctor WHO", nor do I suspect his pony counterpart would refer to himself as "Dr Whooves".

He is, and has always been simply, "The Doctor".  That is how he identifies himself.  

" I'm The Doctor ... just 'The Doctor' ".

*the guards see a mysterious light... and approach...*  Wha... what is THAT?!!

*horrible thing*  Snookie want smoosh-smoosh!!

*pair of blood-curdling screams*  

Trolololo!  

Dreadful monsters that lurk in the darkness, yet possess their own unearthly light... the Glow Worms...

>>348179348179 Strangely, I have one of those dolls in my closet. O_o

God, this is brilliant. It's like right out of the show!

The only thing that's killing me, as mentioned before, is the Doctor Whooves bit.

The Doctor always just goes by The Doctor, never Doctor Who. It's really just a small thing, but it would be great if you could fix it. Other than that minor issue though, this is flawless! Well done!

One word: Tracked

The only thing I'm not much of a fan of is the use of Doctor Hooves instead of The Doctor. Of course that is a matter of personal opinion.

Tiny things aside, you got your fic posted on the front page of EQD, and it's obvious you earned it. Hope we get to see an update soon.

For all those with comments about Doctor Whooves VS The Doctor... Well, I personally haven't delved into Doctor Who, and perhaps only the Brony writing the Doctor Whooves bits has... as this is a collaboration, I write for Luna, Bramble Rose writes for The Doctor, and Diomedes currently writes for Celestia, though it was formerly MudBug. I edit it together. Suffice it to say, I guess most of the writers are ignorant of the show (Doctor Who), but I will see about editing.

>>348218348218  I recall them because they were part of the MLP Gen 1 show.  Their original multi-part quest wasn't bad, much like the first MLP special (which of course had a great villain, Tirek).  

And then both segments quickly became lame afterward.  

There was also a Mister Potato Head segment...

Anyway, I'm sure the Glow Worms are down there eating the guards as we speak.  After all, real glow worms are canivorous!  

Well. Interseting. Worth the track and doing well so far. Good work!

Congrats on getting featured in EQD

I could hear David Tennant's voice in my head as I read the Doctor's dialogue.

That is a VERY good sign.

Fantasic!

>>348105348105

I'm guessing that Doctor Whooves might be his fake hame. you know, like John Smith? Unless his name is actually Doctor Whooves, and he isn't a time lord.

Wouldn't that be THE WORST POSSIBLE THING!

>>314084314084

He could have regenerated since the last time she saw him.

Welp, you've gotten me interested, and I'm reading this in the 10th doctor's voice (or should it be the 11th?)  but anyway, hope to see more. :)

>>347867347867 Or is that an attempt at onomatopoeia for the Doctor Who theme?

>>349600349600 I have no idea, and WHY CAN'T I EVER ACTUALLY REPLY WITHOUT RANDOM NUMBERS REPLACING SOMEONE'S NAME?

>>349058349058 I could also hear him rambling along, in that fantastic voice. So yes that is a GREAT sign.

your argument is invalid?

>>349651349651 Most likely because you're replying to someone on a different page.

>>349367349367 With an avatar like your's I'd read it in Ten's voice.

This story does seem to ramble on a bit, but I guess that is because it is a Doctor Whooves fic(and rambling is what he does best).

>>349696349696 Maybe, but not likely. I'm on Chapter 4, replying to you...and it's messing up again. Maybe I'm still not doing it right. But...if you get the usual notification about my reply, then please reply back. That way I'll know whether everything's working except the actual label. Thanks beforehoof.

>>349748349748 It comes up fine right now when you reply to me. Brohoof*  /)

I'm enjoying this but I gotta say your portrayal of the doctor doesn't mesh well with my image of him. that's a personal quibble though. Overall very well done.

>>349651349651

are you replying from the table of contents or the chapter in which they actually commented?

I know everyone is in love with this and I usually like Dr. Whooves stories, but I can't get into this one.

>>MyLittlePonyTales I'm a huge Doctor Who fan, and using the name "Doctor Whooves" is driving me nuts. Please for the love of Celestia eventually have the Doctor say that "Whooves" is just an alias and that his proper name is the Doctor. Just the Doctor.

Great fic, otherwise. Tracking,  definitely.

I know I could hear the theme song playing in my head when I finished this chapter.

If you really haven't seen the show before, I have to say this is impressively close to what a real episode would feel like. Excellent job so far.

>>348342348342

being an avid follower of doctor who, you could simple pass off the name Doctor Whooves as one of his MANY aliases. While he IS "The Doctor" he could be going by Doctor Whooves simply because it happens to fit his situation while visiting equestria in such a clever way! kinda like a personal inside joke. Doctor who? but he's a horse, so its funny to him. lol. You could bring it up later perhaps just to clarify so that way you don't have to go back and edit.

Of course, Luna is a basement dweller.

I think it's safe to say that at least one or both of the guards are gonna get off-ed at this point. They already have zero personality; all you need to do by this point is throw 'em in a red jacket, have 'em whip out their family photo, and you'd have one ready-to-die pony (for the sake of good or otherwise).

Regardless, I am interested to see how this will play out, so i'm going to go ahead and track this story.

>>349874349874    /) Return brohoof! (\

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I'm sensing a bit of both David Tennant and Matt Smith here.

Good stuff. Looking forward to more.

"Even as such, though, there were a few things you just didn't do in Equestria. Breaking into the palace was probably one of them."

Unless you're Twilight.

"Why isn't anypony surprised to see me sneaking around in here?!"

This story is great, i feel like it keeps up well with the incessant rambling of the doctor in the show.

This particular Doctor's personality reminds me more of 9th than any of the other modern incarnations, so I'm reading it as his voice. Keep it up!

Oo, what is it? Need more!!

Well damn. personally thought you'd quit this story and had moved on. Anyways. good grammar good plot but try and make chapters longer. Other than that. Great job

...Smorg?

I also fixed the Doctor VS Doctor Whooves bits. There are a couple left in, because Luna generally thinks of him as Doctor Whooves, while Celestia, being more familiar with Equestria as a whole, refers to him as the Doctor.

And then it mutated into a horrible monster and killed everypony.

The End

Celestia's being unnaturally fearful. Maybe she had a traumatic conflict with this creature when she was a child? Guess i'll found out in the next chapters!

>>397008397008 Indeed...

full extermination... must have been a serious threat

...

nice choice of words there, Celestia.  suggestion- never work as a councilor.

>>397008397008

I kind of thought that was being implied or... something.  though the level of implication was almost as low as that of the level of display the order for a certain mister dents house being demolished...

that doesn't make a lick of sense now that I've written it... Enjoy!

Please more! We love the way you have written the Doctor!

I have absolutely no idea what he just said. What do you think, Inner me?

Dont care! It's good enough! MORE!

"We're not going to hurt you …"

Riiight, like that'll work.

*roll opening credits* I presume?

Well Luna did animate those toy spiders at the Nightmare Night festivities. I wonder if a childhood prank got out of control?

>>400388400388  Oh my Celestia.... it must be... a HUMAN!!!

No wait, aren't they supposed to be sort of monkey things?

Maybe it's a Vashta Naradasprite?

>>409851409851 Like Parasprites, but spiders.

>>412786412786

Would that make it an arachnasprite?

>>421328421328 ALL SHALL BE REVEALED!

I'm guessing it is something that feeds on magic.

Yeah Updates! Mass updates at that. I really like the way this is going. I really, really like the way you brought the Doctor to Equestria.

>>587885587885 Thank you. But I can't take all the credit. This story was collaborative, as it says in the description.

You misspelled ALLONS-Y

Sincerely the Doctor

Mass update! :D

Yaaaay! Excellent work, team!

YES! I'm so happy to finally see an update from this :D

It should be Allons-y though, not allon-zy. It's French, I believe.

Just read all ten chapters.

Can't wait for the next!

Ah, so you're not basing the 'Doctor' entirely on the Doctor Who omniverse then?

The Doctor in this universe isn't a Time Lord, he's just a pony with a penchant for the strange and unusual.  He's written be fit into the canon universe of FiM as much as possible while still retaining the spirit of the Dr. Who universe.

Luna was more powerful? Good. I love stories where the fact that she controls trillions of stars doesn't go unnoticed.

>>588607588607 No big deal or anything.

query: Why are these four chapters so bloody short, only to be published the same day?

Luna is so awesome

>>589001589001 Much needed update... and because they're a bit short, I uploaded more of them.

Okay everybody, I fixed the 'Allons-y'.

This is interesting... Yes... Interesting...

I am waiting for the twist though... =)

>>590642590642 Plot twist?

Okay...so these "Doctors" are just everyday ponies who help out. Does he still have a sonic screwdriver?

>>590814590814 Nope, still Timelords.

Funny you should mention the Sonic Screwdriver though... peculiar how you guys sometimes predict what's just a chapter ahead.

Ah the good old doctor, traveling through time and sweeping it under the rug until the time is right. The image of luna in her pajama's and listening to Mulezart was not just absolutely adorable, but convinced me that he'd been there Now it's obvious the way he's talking about all these events. Gotta love the way he plays it cool sometimes while still managing to act completely insane. Please keep the updates coming, I'll be looking every chance I get.