Twilight asks a very important question that Celestia really doesn't want ponies to find out about.
First time writing a story so please destroy it with as much criticism as you can.
Twilight asks a very important question that Celestia really doesn't want ponies to find out about.
First time writing a story so please destroy it with as much criticism as you can.
One word to the ending.
Lol.
oh god
Thumbs up for Safety Dance.
Anyways, you need slight checks to grammar and spelling. Nothing horrid, though. The plot itself was okay.
I wish I could have cake every Tuesday. Wait... i guess I could.
...Not bad, not bad at all. For this being your first story you did pretty well.
While I can't say I approve your take on Celestia as a somewhat tyrannical ruler, I have to admit this story made me chuckle a bit. I was expecting her to turn Twilight into a statue and put next to Discord for eternity, but I guess little Twi just brought the banishment decree on herself.
Princess Celestia would never say let them eat cake, because it is all for her. Also that is child cruelty...
That Skyrim reference! Good shit!