Maybe I should. Who knows, words are very powerful.
A statue stands alongside others in the royal hedge maze. All the statues have a long history behind them. Starswearl the Bearded, greatest Unicorn. Discord, feared entity of Chaos. But this one statue has only a short story behind it. The creature that the statue resembles gave its life for all of Equestria to live in peace.
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Good story! Though, I would suggest you put more explaining into your stories. I didn't understand why Celestia was crying so much. I mean, he was her son and he saved Equestria but how and why? Was there an apocalypse? Did the griffons overtake Equestria? And, how? With a javelin? Spell? Special stone? Also, I mean he did probably die, I'm infering that, or did he just go back to the human world?
These are my opinions. Not to be rude or anything, but please try to put more depth in your stories. I truly like it, though.
3342017 The reason i did not explain why he died is because i'm leaving that up to the readers to decide. That is your imagination taking place of what i did not input. Sorry about not explaining more as to why. But remember i put this all together in less than an hour, then took a half an hour to fix it up
3342041 Well, thank you for explaining.
Sorry if I was rude... 
3342052 You were not rude. I completely understand. And who knows, if enough people like it i may write the whole back story to this.
3342067 That'd be a cool story!
3342075 Care to join me?
3342081 Totally!
I'll join you!!!
gave his life for peace?
PRAISE JESUS
3342094 This is the upteenth time coming back to this and no matter how many times i see it i laugh real hard.
3344761
laugh?
BURN THE WITCH!
Very nicely done. Especially when I know where the story originated from. I put on some sad music and nearly cried.
This makes me look even more forward to your story. I hope you continue it.
3352762 All in good time my friend, hehehe, all in good time