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TheTobacconist


...can I even call myself this if I quit smoking years ago?

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Rarity comes home for some alone time, but her younger sister is there, and has made quite the mess of her shop. Rarity teaches Sweetie Belle how to act creatively without being destructive.

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This is wonderful. I remember being taught by my grandmother, and it is a fond memory. Thank you. :heart:

Aww this is adorable. I like little slice-of-life things with Rarity and Sweetie Belle.

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You're welcome. I'm glad that I could remind you of a fond memory.

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I love little slice-of-life things as well.

I guess that was cute? I dunno, the dialogue seemed robotic, and the narration was really bland, especially during the dialogue section in the middle. I just--I couldn't get into it, sorry. But the ending was nice.

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Have you ever tried to teach someone how to do something? It often ends up being a somewhat robotic explanation. If it doesn't turn out like that then you're not explaining it right, and problems will occur when the hypothetical student attempts the task on their own.

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That's a fair point.

But good teaching isn't necessarily fun to watch, and we readers are watching the scene. Not necessarily to learn, either--though I suppose I could learn how to make a scarf by reading this fic and using Google to fill in the gaps.

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I thought it was kind of an amusing window into 'rarity-as-dressmaker' intersecting with 'rarity-as-sister'.

Tobacco has a rather laconic style, though. Generally he doesn't use ten words if he can say it in five. :eeyup:

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Ex 1:
Other People's writing:
Big Macintosh rubbed sandpaper across the curved surface of the chest. Every side of the wooden box was curved, and every piece of hardware was curved to better fit it. The wood was bare and natural, yielding to the fine tooth of the sandpaper.
My Writing:
Big Macintosh sanded down the bombe chest.

In the first example, we receive a nice description of a bombe chest.
In the second example, I assume that the reader is not an idiot, and can figure out that the chest is wooden and unvarnished based upon the fact that it is being sanded.
The difference?
The first assumes you are stupid, and the second doesn't waste your valuable time.

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TabourineBlossom and I are working on a fic that delves a little deeper into this.

Very lovely. As a seamstress myself that's probably one of the best descriptions of how to thread a sewing machine I've ever read.

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For me, that was the hardest part to learn.

This story has been approved for the Sibling Story Stockpile.

That was nice. It was a little bit dry, but the ending was very sweet and worth the read. Because of the shortness of the story, it never felt like a waste of time.

Just one thing:

Sweetie Belle sat in the floor, snipping at a bolt of yellow fleece.

In the floor? That's Robin Williams pony.

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Sorry. Couldn't resist.

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That was hilarious. Have a :moustache:

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