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  • 1w, 1d
    "Cheerilee's Thousand," guest chapter!

    For those of you who, for whatever reason (masochism?) can't get enough Skywriter, please be advised that I wrote a short guest chapter for xjuggernaughtx's Cheerabuse magnum opus "Cheerilee's Thousand."  It is a crossover with my "Ask the Equestria Games Inspector," if you're into that sort of thing.  Anyway, you can find the relevant chapter here!

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  • 1w, 5d
    Daring Do and the Siren's Curse

    Rainbow Dash hovered anxiously over the crowd.

    It was true that Dash's default position in any given crowd was "hovering over it."  The weatherpony always existed in an uneasy peace with the earth; on the one hoof, the earth supported all her friends, and all her friends' stuff, and they would probably be really ticked if it were to suddenly go away.  On the other, the ground had done Rainbow Dash a lot of damage over the years by being generally unyielding in response to failed corkscrew turns, for instance.  Dash and the ground admittedly maintained a wary and respectful distance as a matter of course.

    On this particular day, though, being on the ground—in that crowd—was utterly out of the question.

    "This is ridiculous!" shouted Twilight Sparkle, Princess of All Friendship Everywhere, waving around a copy of Daring Do and the Siren's Curse.  "She spends the entire book as a monkey, for crying out loud!"

    "You're just letting your irrational hatred of monkeys pollute this discussion," shot back Lyra, Duchess d'Heartstrings, a mint-colored unicorn so far from her family's throne (and thus the public's attention) that she could afford to engage in public cosplay and live-action role-playing without risking scandal.

    "What?" Twilight cried.  "I don't hate monkeys!  Sure, they smell funny and have a weird relationship with their own fecal matter, but that doesn't mean I hate them.  I just don't particularly enjoy reading about them for like three hundred pages!  It's the sort of lazy authorial trick we never would have seen back when my mom was writing this series!"  Cheers from Twilight's half of the convention hall.

    "If you were actually a fan of this series, you'd give this book a chance, Princess!"  Cheers from the Duchess's half of the convention hall.

    "I've given it a chance!  I still think it stinks!  If you were actually a fan of this series, you'd see this travesty as a cuff in the face to everything that used to be good about these books!"

    "A.K. Yearling is putting a lot of love and care into these books, for ponies just like us.  You know what this is?  It's ingratitude.  Plain and simple."

    "It's not ingratitude to demand high standards!  You're just sucking up whatever weird monkey-related swill she puts out because she hasn't actually put out a decent book in years!  But by all means, go ahead!  Just hoof over your bits to the publishers, like a good little fan!"

    "What's with all this anger and bitterness, Sparkle?" Lyra snarled, her horn beginning to gleam sympathetically.  The "I am now so upset I am foregoing honorifics" line had clearly been crossed.  "Coming to DoCon used to be fun.  We laughed, played, sang songs.  It was great!  Now it's just full of horrible complainy whiny jerks who make everyone feel rotten.  Why do you even come to these things if you're just going to grouse?"

    "I grouse because I care.  I have standards, Lyra!  And I 'come to these things' because I still love adventure just as much as I used to!  I like to celebrate what this series used to be!  I can't help it if all everypony talks about is this monkey book!  Am I not supposed to express my opinion?  Is that what you're saying?"  The rumble of the crowd became a low roar.

    "What I'm saying is that you're being a complete and total hater, Sparkle," said Lyra, poking her with one forehoof.  "Hater.  That's you."  The low roar turned quickly to a medium roar.

    "Why, you—!" Twilight sputtered.  "You're just... some kind of drone!  Like a changeling!  Blindly loyal to the queen, never questioning, never thinking."  Twilight's horn lit, then, as well, crackling with a sinister magenta aura.  "I value thinking, Lyra!  Very highly!  And if there's one thing I can't stand, it's a pony who doesn't think!"

    Dash let out a nervous snort.  Yeah, there was about a fifty percent chance now that somepony was going to end up as a cactus.  Time to put a stop.  Working with great professional economy, Dash gathered the water vapor from the ceiling of the convention hall (one of the unpleasant side effects of crowding this many steamy unshowered egghead ponies together in a small space: all the flippin' moisture) and formed it into a tiny black thundercloud.  Then she gritted her teeth and gave it a good solid buck.

    A thunderclap echoed across the hall.  Shocked into momentary silence, all the fanponies looked ceilingward to see Rainbow Dash floating gently down, perched on her little black cloud.

    "'Sup," she said, nodding to Lyra.  "Twi."

    "Rainbow Dash," said Twilight.  "Daring Do's self-described hugest fangirl.  Here to weigh in?"

    "Eh, kinda," she said, keeping it easy.  It was important to keep it easy, sometimes.  You learn this sort of thing when you are a weatherpony dealing with mood-responsive stormclouds.  You also learn this when you are totally completely awesomazingly chill, which Rainbow Dash was.

    "Okay, look," said Dash.  "I'm not gonna insult any of you by telling you to not take this series of young adult novels so seriously.  Because saying that they're not worth caring about would imply that they aren't completely radical, and they completely are.  A'ight?"

    "All right," said Twilight Sparkle.

    "Excuse me?"  Rainbow Dash held a hoof behind one ear.

    Twilight sighed.  "A'ight," she said, fuming a little.

    "Better," said Dash.  "Okay, sorry about this, Twi.  I know we're besties, but as the previous Bearer of the Element of Honesty—"

    "Loyalty," muttered Twilight.

    "Whatever.  I gotta call a spade a spade here.  You know that thing you say about how anypony that actually dares to like A.K. Yearling's version of Daring Do must be a brainless supporter of Ms. Yearling's publisher who's got no standards and doesn't actually care about the series?  That's really insulting and wrong.  There's a lot to like about the recent books.  Even if Daring Do is a monkey for like the entire book.  And I'm pretty sure that some the ponies who were writing Daring-Do-as-Monkey fanfic before ...Siren's Curse came out like the book because of this new development, not in spite of it."

    "Woohoo!" shouted a lone gray pegasus with a bubble Mark, somewhere over on Lyra's half of the hall.

    "See?  Like her.  Believe it or not, it really is okay for ponies to like the monkey-books!"

    "But they're ruining the franchise!  The more money they spend on monkey-books, the more monkey-books the publisher will put out!  I don't want this franchise to turn into one hundred percent monkeys all the time!"

    "Yeah, I dunno," said Dash.  "I mean, maybe spending bits on monkey-books will make the publisher produce more books about monkeys instead of original-flavor Daring Do books.  It's possible.  I'm not a publisher, so I can't tell you that.  I prefer to think that publishers who see the money rolling in from anywhere in a franchise are going to wanna bankroll more of both kinds.  Rising tide lifts all boats and all."

    "Thanks, Dash," said the Duchess D'Heartstrings.  "I knew you'd come down on the right side."

    "I ain't done yet," said Dash, putting on her emergency sunglasses for an extra layer of chill.  "Lyra, it's also really insulting and wrong for you to say that Twilight hasn't given the monkey-books a 'chance.'  We're all a bunch of grown mares attending a convention for a young adult novel series, so, yeah.  Pretty sure we've all given the topic of every single official release enough thought.  Ponies have the right to like what they like, and dislike what they dislike, and they also have a right to be in this community even if they grouse about the direction the books are taking.  Your happiness is your own responsibility.  It is downright selfish for you to insist that someone else be happy even when they're not just because they're bringing your mood down.  Crystal?"

    Lyra stood there for a moment, mouth agape, and then looked away and muttered something that sounded vaguely like assent.  Good enough for Dash.  Giving her powerful wings a few strong beats, she hoisted her thundercloud a cubit or two more off the ground.  "And here's the last thing I gotta say to the both of you.  Daring Do conquers problems through the power of her extremely awesome adventure skills.  But she also conquers problems through friendship.  And when either—"  She raised her head, addressing the entire convention hall now.  "—when any of you say to yourselves, 'I value these books and this fandom so highly that I am going to be all surly and rude and namecall-y to my fellow ponies just to prove how much I value these books and this fandom,' for Celestia's sake, you had better friggin' check yourself.  Because by being surly and rude and namecall-y to your fellow ponies, you are proving, beyond a shadow of a doubt, that you don't actually value what you're claiming to.  Because being surly and rude and namecall-y is the exact opposite of what this whole entire series is about."

    Rainbow Dash gave a sharp nod.  "That's my thing," she said.

    "It... really has gotten kind of hostile," said Twilight.

    "Yeah," said Lyra.  "Maybe we should just... y'know, be happy with each other.  Happy that there are other ponies who are just as passionate about the same silly thing we're passionate about.  Happy we've got company on this crazy head-trip we're all on."

    "Agreed."  A smile.  Then, hesitantly, the two ponies shared a hoofbump; sighs of relief, of tension relaxing, echoed throughout the convention hall.

    "I know what," Twilight continued.  "Let's make this fandom what it used to be, back in the early days, back when we were all peaceful and happy.  We should all sit down together and share our thoughts on one of our favorite books."

    "That's a great plan, Princess," said Lyra.  "I've got an idea:  why don't we talk about one of my very favorite installments in the series: Daring Do and the Extended Metaphor of Faith Versus Scientific Understanding!"

    Princess Twilight Sparkle's eyes grew flinty.

    * * *

    In Equestria, they were long and sinewy things; elegant, slippery and snakelike.  For literally thousands of years, they had been trapped in the awkward, gangling bodies of the native inhabitants of their prison-dimension.  Now, they were back, and their old serpentine forms welcomed them back like a pair of comfortable slippers.

    Comfortable slippers like they used to wear back in the prison-dimension, of course.  They didn't currently have feet that would accept comfortable slippers.  This was a point of chagrin for Sonata, who constantly lamented the loss of her two fuzzy bunny friends.  This was to be expected from Sonata, because she was a moron.

    Sonata's relative stupidity was actually not bothering Adagio all that much today.  She stretched decadently, then relaxed, her body falling in easy curves all across the surprisingly-roomy maintenance area beneath the floor of the convention center.  The portal between the prison-dimension and Equestria opened so frequently now; little bits of correspondence, gifts and souvenirs exchanged across the interdimensional divide.  All it had taken was one little misdirection, one moment of inattention, for the three of them to slip through...

    "Mmm," purred Aria, glancing up at the muffled noise of Daring Do fans really going at it now.  "This is the best petty bickering I've had.  In, like, a thousand years."

    "I brought popcorn!" shouted Sonata, gleefully, displaying a striped paper carton caught up in the coils of her tail.

    "You eat hatred and dissent, Sonata," groaned Aria.  "Not popcorn."

    "I think they go great together."

    "You know what else goes great together?  My cloaca and your face."

    "What do you know about pairing food and anger?"

    "More than you!"

    "Do not!"

    "Do too!"

    "Please," said Adagio.  "Idiots, please.  You're interrupting my digestion.  Let's just sit back and enjoy this delicious feast, shall we?  I, for one, am perfectly content right now."

    "Yeah," said Sonata.  "I kinda miss my chaos amulet, though."

    Adagio raised her long, horsey head and gave her underling a sweet little smile.

    "Who needs chaos amulets," she said, "when you've got fandom?"

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  • 2w, 2d
    "The First Time You See Her," complete!

    ...Finally!  The story that was only ever supposed to be a one-shot and turned into a huge campaign exploration of Cadance's history is finally over.

    So, serious question:  this is a bridge story.  It's all it ever was, really; just a glorified way for me to shift the story cycle from here to there.  It obviously holds up best as part of a greater whole, with its precursors supporting it, but just to get a consensus, do you folks feel like it's a strong and worthwhile enough story on its own merits to make it worth the time to submit to EQD as a stand-alone piece?  Still pondering the idea and looking for input.  Thanks in advance!

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  • 4w, 2d
    Feeling Bad About Feeling Good

    (Sorry about the doublepost.  Accidentally published too early, and I didn't want comments coming in on the incomplete version before I had a chance to explain myself...)

    So.  Just watched "Rainbow Rocks" again.

    I actually really like this movie, and it makes me sad, because I keep on imagining what Ms. Faust must think of it, and what she would think of me, by proxy.

    This is nothing new to me, of course, speaking as a Cadance fan.  It's well-known public record by now that the show's original developer never wanted more than two alicorns, and yet, here I am, devoting most of my creative energies in this fandom to the once-controversial third alicorn.  (Is Cadance drama even a thing anymore?)  When pressed on this topic, I will always fall back on the following conclusion:  Cadance is a Bad Thing, and we are making the most of it.

    If I am being brutally honest with myself, however, I realize that I am saying this because I have the specter of a disapproving Lauren Faust watching me over my shoulder.  I like alicorns.  I like to have a selection of alicorns.  I like that there's a younger alicorn.  I like that I do not have to choose between "godlike, regal, and canon-perfect" and "struggles with inner darkness."  I like everything about the fact of Cadance...

    ...except for the fact that I feel like I'm stepping on someone's childhood imaginings by doing so.  Pity the professional artist, who frequently has to sell control of her childhood friends to a corporation who never knew them, and who will take them places you never wanted them to go.  Craig McCracken, Ms. Faust's husband, as much as confirmed that "Equestria Girls" was contrary to her original vision.  And I can see why, of course.

    The original Equestria Girls was very much an honest "making the most of a Bad Thing" period for me.  That movie was a bit of a mess; I enjoyed bits of it and did not criticize it too harshly.  The fans and creators were both dealt a bad hand by management, and I liked the idea of us all sort of enduring it together.  But now we have a sequel, and while rough edges still exist, on the whole, it's a much more satisfying film experience.

    Nothing about it being a satisfying film experience changes the fact that it's never going to be the direction this show, this franchise, was intended to go.

    My entirely non-scientific surveys of the Ponynet suggest that people are generally pleased with "Rainbow Rocks."  I am... disheartened by the people who are unquenchably angry about the whole thing, the ones that point and say, functionally, Skywriter, you are the problem.  That you continue to consume this media spits on the thing Lauren Faust was trying to do with this show.  You, Skywriter, have participated in muddying this from something great into something merely okay.  One in particular has exhorted the general public as follows:  "Don't you dare forget what could have been!"

    I wonder what this hypothetical show looks like in that fan's imaginings.

    I wonder if I would like it as much as I like the show I'm currently watching.

    I wonder if I am a worse person for liking what "could have been" greater.

    I wonder if it's even true that it "could have been" greater at all.

    I wonder what Lauren Faust thinks of me.

    Ms. Faust, there is no chance that you are reading this, so I say this purely for myself:  I actually like what they did with the characters you thought of first this time, and I'm sorry if anything has been diminished because of what I do or don't like.

    It's the best I can do.

    Final non sequitur:  Why haven't I seen any crackfic stories where Cadance is actually the fourth siren of the coven, the only one redeemable by Star Swirl?  Get on it, fandom!

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  • 8w, 4d
    "Rainbow Rocks" (flagrant, persistent spoilers throughout, obvs.)

    Welcome to another edition of "Because You All Perforce Must Care What I Think."  Let's make this short and sweet, shall we, getting the unpleasant bits out of the way first.

    Category A:  Things That There Was Never Any Hope For Improvement On

    1.  Human character designs still not doing it for me.  No amount of time and effort will make our girls not look like somewhat sexualized and rainbow-hued versions of Mr. ZIP what with the huge heads and stick bodies and all.

    2.  Still no substitute for actual pony film.  Actual pony screen-time even lower than last time around.

    3.  All protagonists are suddenly skilled musicians, when canonically only Pinkie, Fluttershy (maybe?) and A.J. have even been shown handling an instrument.  And Twilight is appropriately lampshaded in the narrative, so I guess I'm only questioning Dash and Rarity?  I dunno.  Let's move on.

    Category B:  Things Actually Worse Than Last Film

    1.  Vinyl Scratch.  I am absolutely great with fandom nods.  No allergy whatsoever to seeing Octavia, Snowflake Bulk Biceps, and lots and lots of Trixie.  Welcomed.  But basic storytelling dictates that you cannot have a functionally nameless character pull not one but two eleventh-hour saves without seeding the plot properly first.  Story structure demands that the protective qualities of her omnipresent headphones be hinted at before they are used to save our heroes' bacon (something so simple as including a version of the the disapproving Celestia / Vinyl interaction we saw in the "Music to My Ears" short would have been absolutely sufficient) and the Bass Cannon Sedan needs to have been at least established (if not fully revealed) prior to its use as a problem-solver.  When you count on an audience's in-joke knowledge and delight over a character to fill in the cracks of a story, that is when your fandom nod has crossed the line.  Furthermore, I can't tell if the creators are putting her forward as a strong-silent master of her craft or actually envision her as the same loudmouthed Bohemian that the fans see and are merely having her stay mute to appease the "Nowacking or Nothing" crowd.  I wish they would just pick one, because the more the plot actually hinges on her the more distracting her silence becomes.  Thank goodness they actually had Octavia speak a line.

    2.  No Candybutt, not even in cameo.  This is not a fault in the story as such, I'm just (predictably) disappointed and furthermore holistically trepid that my functional OC will continue to fade into the background as Twilight becomes more and more Cadanceified.  She's got wings now, is a princess, and lives in a crystal castle.  All she needs is a coat of pink paint and to get married, and the narrative will have no use for dear sweet Candybutt whatsoever.

    Category C:  Things Better Than Last Film

    1-n.  Virtually everything else.  The scene compositions were more visually adventurous and intriguing, the villains had a plot which made some damn sense this time, the songs are marginally superior, plot points are followed through on and not just mentioned and dropped, and the whole thing seems to have been stitched together with a lot of love and affection for the property.  And Sunset Shimmer is handled exactly the way I wanted her to be handled.  The scene where she once again attempts bad-girl intimidation in the darkened hallway only to have it fizzle this time is just splendid, and I for one gratefully welcome Sunny as the unexplained sixth peripheral star in "Magical Mystery Cure."

    That is all.  Thoughts?

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This story is a sequel to Heretical Fictions

Following the events of "Heretical Fictions", Princess Celestia tries to get dinner, fails, and learns an important lesson about loss and love and the healing power of vegetable kebabs.

First Published
3rd Mar 2012
Last Modified
3rd Mar 2012
#1 · 142w, 6d ago · · ·

This was lovely.

I really like your Celestia and the lessons she's learning. And your Luna is simply adorable.

Maybe more to come later; I'd intended to sleep and then saw you'd posted this, so there went that plan.

#2 · 142w, 6d ago · · ·

Well that was rather emotionally rollercoastery wasn't it?

Poignant message and portrayal though.

An immortal finds something they truly desire with all their heart, more so because they will outlast it by default, but the only way to allow this thing to be what it was meant to is to detach and remove themself from the equation.

It's actually a lesson I already acknowledged, myself, and also a great metaphor for... a lot of things.

I especially liked the concept of the crossbred Asian dragon/ponies as well as the references to "boons" from Observatory Hill.

My biggest problem would be, I guess, that I have great difficulty reconciling the characters with their canon versions. Makes me feel detached, kind of like I'm not really reading a pony fic.

One question I do have, however: If you are going to use Moonbeam from Laurence Brown's series as Luna's "meta" disguise, why would you have Celestia pick a random OC when there is already an established "meta" alter ego for her in PhantomFox's Sunny Skies? (It would have been oh so sweet meta irony considering the contrasts in personality.):trollestia:

#3 · 142w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

That was a wonderful read. The part where Celestia was getting insulted was lulzy, though her reasons for responding in that manner is vague.  

however, the pedant in me calls me to voice a trivial objection.

"chromatically-reduced minor seventh" = Diminished 7th

You're welcome. :pinkiecrazy:

Are you planning to write more of these? It's very enjoyable. :rainbowwild:

#4 · 142w, 6d ago · · ·

Lovely indeed :ajsmug:

Rather silly on how tia got very possessive on Beloved

#5 · 142w, 6d ago · · ·

>>283622

"If you are going to use Moonbeam from Laurence Brown's series as Luna's "meta" disguise, why would you have Celestia pick a random OC when there is already an established "meta" alter ego for her in PhantomFox's Sunny Skies?"

My total lack of familiarity with that story!  I realize this might be a major gaffe, but I'm pretty new to this thing.  May hafta do some more reading...

#6 · 142w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

>>283623

""chromatically-reduced minor seventh" = Diminished 7th"

OBVIOUSLY MORE WORDS ARE BETTER THAN FEWER WORDS.  Seriously, I should probably change that.

#7 · 142w, 6d ago · · ·

I'm quite liking these stories, you write a pretty good Celestia. Would love to see more from this series! :twilightsmile:

#8 · 142w, 6d ago · · ·

>>283623

Oh, and...

"...though her reasons for responding in that manner is vague."

Clarified a bit more with one additional line of dialogue.

"Are you planning to write more of these? It's very enjoyable."

Thanks!  Barring some weird inspiration particle, I think that's it for this arc; while it's fun writing Celestia as an angsty old war-queen with serious daddy issues, that's only one tiny piece of her, and any attempt to extend the events of this night will just start spiraling further and further away from the "real" Celestia, who has, I think, a much greater sense of perspective than the one you see above.

#10 · 142w, 5d ago · · ·

@Skywriter: OBVIOUSLY MORE WORDS ARE BETTER THAN FEWER WORDS.  Seriously, I should probably change that.

Glad you did. It sounds very silly to anyone who's been through Grade 4 music theory. xD

while it's fun writing Celestia as an angsty old war-queen with serious daddy issues, that's only one tiny piece of her, and any attempt to extend the events of this night will just start spiraling further and further away from the "real" Celestia, who has, I think, a much greater sense of perspective than the one you see above.

Nothing is impossible, friend. Think of it as a challenge to you as a writer! It would be awesome if you pulled it off. :twilightsmile: I've yet to see a portrayal of Celestia that truly reflects the wisdom one would attain at her age.

#11 · 141w, 17h ago · · ·

You could always write a sequel that doesn't start immediately after this one you know :ajsmug:

'course, then you'd have to come up with an entirely new story beginning.

In any case, brilliant as always.  You have a gift for first-person perspective.

#12 · 141w, 12h ago · · ·

>>329178

Thank you.  It's my favorite perspective to work in, probably because it allows me to be more indulgent with internal monologues.  Possibly too indulgent, at times.

#13 · 139w, 6d ago · · ·

Lovely story, in every which way. Your Celestia is a true treat to read about. :trollestia:

#14 · 139w, 5d ago · · ·

>>361538

Thanks!  As I implied earlier, I'm not sure it's accurate, but I love the picture of Celly as an old warhorse who's gradually learning, albeit at a glacial pace, to actually love rather than just care.

#15 · 137w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

More please?

#16 · 137w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

>>439555

Hm.  The only thing left that night is probably some exceptionally chaste Twiluna, and I'm not sure it's noteworthy enough to devote a whole story to. But... maybe something different happens after midnight than I expect?  I've been thinking about this one and trying to keep my mind open.  Thanks for your interest, in any case!

#17 · 137w, 2d ago · · ·

I ment the storyline in general, but continuing the night's events would also be good. Keep up the good work.

#18 · 135w, 4d ago · · ·

This was absolutely delicious!  I love your version of Celestia and the lessons you've been having her learn.  Thank you so much for sharing this with us!  :twilightsmile:

#19 · 135w, 1h ago · · ·

I think I felt something. Im not sure that I like that.

#20 · 134w, 6d ago · · ·

Your ability to present new concepts into FiM canon flows much better than most of the writing in the show proper. Time to continue reading...

#21 · 132w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

Dammit, now you got me jonesing to listen to Rite of Spring again.  All of it.  I can't decide if I loathe or adore you.

#22 · 132w, 6d ago · 2 · ·

>>580006

This whole thing came about over the course of listening to, like, a thirty-six hour orchestral music appreciation crash course on audiobook.  I was pretty impressed by "Rite of Spring", and wanted to include it in the piece, even though what few details we get of the "Adoration" in the final version don't really match the inspiration work at all.

Incidentally, the fact that I had a whole mess of music history mashed together in my brain like this leads to the odd juxtaposition of Chanticleer, a ponified Vivaldi (with Mercy Stable standing in for the Pieta) commenting on his appreciation for the music of a composer who wouldn't be born for several hundred years.  But, I guess for a show that features armed centurions with spears guarding a steam locomotive security checkpoint, that's pretty much par.

#23 · 132w, 6d ago · · ·

Once you name him, I can't stop myself from picturing him as 'that' Chanticleer, which makes thing quite silly. Then you add in his stereotypes comment and I love him more.

#24 · 132w, 6d ago · · ·

>>582255

Oh, dear, did I evoke some other cultural reference with that name?

#25 · 132w, 5d ago · · ·

>>582493

Well considering his cutie mark, I thought his naming was intentional. Was he not to be named after Rock-a-Doodle's leading rooster?

#26 · 132w, 5d ago · · ·

>>584394

Nope!  It's just an iconic and fancied-up word for "rooster", from Olden Times.  Wikipedia tells me that it's derived from the "Reynard the Fox" cycle of  folktales, which I would probably know without Wikipedia's help if I'd been an English major back in college.  Pony Vivaldi, like regular-flavor real-world Vivaldi, has shocking red hair, so that's what I was going for.  Never really watched that movie, is it any good?

#27 · 132w, 5d ago · · ·

>>585092

It's decent to be, but I also have nostalgia working against me. It's a 90's Don Bluth movie about what amounts to rooster Elvis getting discouraged and dooming the world to eternal night. It's also got a kid who gets turned into a cat who has to save the world, meh, the doom part is more fun.

#28 · 132w, 5d ago · · ·

>>585137

Clearly, all that mucking about with the Elements of Harmony was unnecessary, then.  What we really needed for Nightmare Moon was a Don Bluth cartoon rooster.

I have the worst crossover fic ideas.

#29 · 132w, 4d ago · · ·

>>585171

What are the Elements of Harmony but a huge rainbow flashlight?

#30 · 130w, 1d ago · · ·

You write a better humorous Luna than anyone I've ever read.

#31 · 130w, 1d ago · · ·

>>673742

Thank you!  Now all I need to do is write a credible emotional Luna.  Romance is a far weaker thing from my pen than comedy is...

#32 · 129w, 2d ago · · ·

This made me smile.

   -Delta-

#33 · 129w, 1d ago · · ·

"It was the fluid catalytic cracking unit.  It made shoes for orphans."

I probably would not have caught this had you not mentioned there was a Portal reference to be found here, in the comments on Heretical Fictions.  :P

#34 · 109w, 1d ago · · ·

>>283754  To find Sunny Skies All Day Long:  Go to the top of the fimfiction home page.  Mouse over 'Browse'.  Click on 'Top Rated'.  Click on the one at the top.

This is very funny, and a wonderful character study/development story.  It's two stories for the price of one.  (Or I could say that my comedies are each only half a story.)  I see no deviation from canon, but a filling in of details around the edges, in the shadows.  Yet another Skywriter story for my favorites list.

"Surpassing only her sister, the noble Princess Luna" - I think you didn't mean for Luna to say that Celestia is the second-least-important pony in Equestria, and Luna the least-important.

Do I have to give Stravinsky another chance now?  I feel obligated to hate his music, and even derive some self-righteous satisfaction from doing so, because of its impact on later "composers" like Schoenberg and Berg.

#35 · 109w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1502164

I have since found and read "Sunny Skies..."!  Thanks for the location tip, though!  By virtue of general good quality and non-offending content, I guess it became the top-rated story on FiMFiction, huh?  It's sort of funny, I mean, it's a very good story and I love it to death, but it's so unassuming.  It's kind of like learning that an Eagles "Greatest Hits" album is the best-selling record of all time.  (Though it looks as though Thriller has finally surpassed it.)

Re: my bad grammar... yes, I've always hated that line, but I couldn't get it to work in production and then I stopped thinking about it.  I think I fixed it now, though.  Thank you for nudging me to fix it, finally.  And thank you also for the kind words!

The Adoration as described here, while stealing its title from one act of "The Rite of Spring", does not really resemble Stravinsky; inasmuch as there's not much resemblance between ol' Igor and his pony namesake here, you don't have to give him another chance.  That having been said, I kind of like the interesting complexity of his music, but I'm something of a musical masochist.  I have willingly listened to all three hours of Glass's "Einstein on the Beach" (at least, the only three hours that have ever been put to disc; the whole thing lasts like five hours in live production.)  I do not recommend this to the casual listener.  "Einstein on the Beach" is a real brain-destroyer.

#36 · 99w, 2d ago · · ·

Incredible writing, story, characters, etc. Just brilliant.

:rainbowlaugh: Also, "fluid catalytic cracking process". Oh my god, I see what you did there! I didn't realise straight away, I was in the shower about 10 minutes after reading when it just twigged and I burst out giggling.

#37 · 99w, 2d ago · 2 · ·

>>1889344

Achievement:  HEY I PLAYED THAT TOO unlocked!

#38 · 96w, 5d ago · · ·

and then they kissed ...

...

...

???

:raritycry:

#39 · 96w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1986919

THE WORLD MAY NEVER KNOW.

#40 · 93w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

Made me happy, made me sad, but in an entirely different way than Heretical Fictions did last night. I think that one hit me a bit harder, which isn't a great surprise to me considering how much I love to read (I suspect the comment I left was mildly incoherent, but I haven't gone back to check yet), but this is very good as well. Your characterizations are so well done.

#41 · 92w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

>>2106940

Thanks so much!  :pinkiehappy:  I don't always respond to every comment, and some are kinda late (like this one), but I felt like tossing you a thanks on this one as well.

#42 · 77w, 5d ago · · ·

I enjoyed this thoroughly when I first read it, and I enjoyed it even more this time.  This time, I thumbed it up and favorited it.

I long to see, and shudder at the thought of, this particular Celestia's attempts to cope with the sudden alicornification of Twilight, especially in light of the canon origin of Cadance.

#43 · 77w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2664626

Celly in this this arc is a bit of a wreck. The Cadance stories I'm doing have a slightly similar, but more composed and with-it, version. Neither seems 100% show-accurate to me.

#44 · 71w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

>>2665313

Well, Celestia in the show is a very difficult character to write about as a protagonist due to her general personality qualities. She isn't a Mary Sue because she isn't the protagonist of the show, the center of the story.

When she is the center of the story people have to try to keep things interesting with her, which is probably why she is such a mess in most fics that focus on her.

#45 · 71w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

>>2889363

Celly says exactly this in another story of mine.

#46 · 71w, 22h ago · · ·

Friendshp was, in fact, magic, I supposed.

"Friendshp" should probably be "Friendship".

#47 · 71w, 21h ago · · ·

>>2897676

Ah!  Thanks for the good eye!

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#48 · 65w, 1d ago · · ·

While I liked this, I felt Celestia's voice was way off. I don't know if anyone else has mentioned this, so it could very well just be me.

#49 · 65w, 1d ago · · ·

>>3123727

You're not the only one!  War-Queen Celestia in "Beloved" and "Heretical Fictions" is somewhat removed from a good canon Celestia.  "...Hates Tea" has one that's a little better, but not by much, and the one in the Cadance stories is viewed through the lens of that character and is thus distorted slightly there as well.  The only evidence that I even can write something close to a fair Celly is in "A Short Story by Twilight Sparkle."

#50 · 65w, 22h ago · 1 · ·

>>584394 Rock-A-Doodle is very, very, very very veryveryveryveryveryvery loosely based on an old story from a collection of french folktales.

Yes I know it's been over a year. I don't care.

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