Melody Swiftsong is a unicorn filly living peacefully in Manehattan with her brother. She had everything she could have asked for in her life: a loving brother, a comfortable life, a house to live in and education. Despite having some strange hobbies and tastes, Melody believes she's the most fortunate of ponies.
Over the course of a single day, life teaches her that fate can be cruel. Her entire life is turned upside down, and she loses everything she loved and cherished before. Now she has to deal with feeling like a stranger in a world that does not seem to want her, yet she still persists to be a part of it.
(Disclaimer: Although I don't believe it warrants the sad tag, this story is undoubtedly riddled with sad moments at various points of the story.)
Special thanks to Benny for editing this story so far! Be sure to check him out! [This stopped as of Chapter 3 or 4 since my hiatus caused us to lose contact. Check him out nonetheless, he's pretty nice!]
There's a minor issue I have with the interaction between Star Blaze and the secretary, but maybe it's just my mind's eye on how the issue of the death of his parents should be brought up. Nothing to see here! Looking forward to the next chapter. I like the idea you have!
Interestin'! Hope you continue.
Good chapter!
Changeling magic for everypony! One bit!
Seriously, though, I look forward to what comes next even if it might freak the main characters out a bit.
Pony slave traders? Yeesh, I guess Equestria is not all sunshine and rainbows as we're led to believe from the show. Then again, in another fic this is also mentioned and the word to define MLP:FiM is "propaganda". Showing only the good things, glossing over the bad, and all but hiding the evil underside.
So when will he tell her both parents died and it's just them against the world?
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I can see him freaking out but Melody will be ecstatic and overjoyed, becoming the very thing she loves and talks about all the time.
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Reality rarely matches the dream. It is one thing to wish to be changeling, and another to become one. I suspect there may be a few things she'll be upset about, even if it's nowhere close to "OH GOD I AM A MONSTER!"
hey ben man , jai finalement reussi a avoir le temps de la lire ton histoire !
that awesome , you have my interest dear
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I guess you'll just have to wait and see what happens.
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Good to know. I hope I won't disappoint, mate.
Why does everypony seem to have a Texan accent?
3397855 I honestly don't know, I never really think about the accent I use other than that it's a casual accent,at least in my opinion that is. Then, there's also the matter that the reader can read something differently from someone else depending on where that person comes from.
That aside, I would not know because as far as I know, I don't think I've intended to use a Texan accent in this case.
3397899 well its all the "yall"s and "young'un"s that started popping up (to be honest it was only actually noticeable with the slave trader and changeling queen, but I'm pretty sure a few other characters threw in one or two words of the like)
3398152 Oh, those. Well, "young'un" is something I picked up after reading Guardians of Ga'Hoole a few years back and "y'all" is just a speech pattern I use depending on certain situations and as an actual speech pattern in real life.
3398200 Ok, I'm just telling you that that is how it's coming off to me (not really a bad thing as I'm enjoying the extra accents). However I would personally suggest changing young'un to young one for the queen.
Beautiful chapter!
More chapters please?
why the hell is there a sex tag?!
5355043 Further content. Occento has an issue with not having a filter sometimes. Plus, it's written in the description of the story why the tag is there. Just a warning for future mature content being discussed into the story later on as it progresses.
5355081 blegh. please don't let this turn into a clop.
5355133 Melody is a filly. I wouldn't dare turn this into a clop. Besides, it's just sexual humor I plan on putting in here and there. If not, I'll just remove the tag altogether.
5355261 phwef! that was a really close one.
5355265 Well, I still have a sense of morality, and I don't support infantile clop/sex. Anyway, I hope you're enjoying the story so far!
5355269 yes!
P.s PLEASE UPDATE! I BEG OF YOU! PLEASE!
5355272 I'm planning to do so. However, I'm in my last week of finals, so bear with me a bit longer. I've got chapters 3, 4 and 5 complete on my Google Drive.
5355282 okay. good luck on finals!
I always didn't really like Shining. KNOW I HATE HIM!!!!
Finally you do it my friend
how do you pronounce occento?
5457302 Personally, I always pronunce her name as "Oh-Chen-Toh". However, classical latin would have her name pronunced as something like this: "Oh-Tchayn-toh".
Since latin pronunciation is really even more ambiguous than it was before because of the decrease in latin speakers in the last few decades, I can't tell which pronunciation is best, if there is one to begin with considering the massive amount of latin speakers all throughout the world in the last two milennia.
I could do some more extensive research when I'm back from my vacations, but for now, I think my mind will likely pronunce her name as "Oh-Chen-Toh". From what I read as well, "Oh-Tchayn-Toh" can be just as valid. I guess it depends on how you feel it is pronunced right since latin can be highly ambiguous.
5457990 ok
That's a bit annoying to read at the end of the chapter. It should be stated in a sentence, not as a spoken line. It's a bit amateurish.
5504361 Thanks for the input. I've already modified it a bit and changed his spoken words as well as adding another paragraph to end the chapter somewhat differently.
MMMOOOOAAAAAARRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Or else I will barf in all your clean pants/shorts/anything else you where
5509528 I can only go so fast, especially considering Chapter 5 is the last of the complete chapters awaiting proofreading and editing.
You'll have to wait a bit longer for Chapter 6, as it now stands, to come out. Chapter 5 should be out within next week for sure.
5512916 phewf
Oho ho ho! I'm afraid then Star will lay his hoves on this guy wher woun't be much for the guards to catch.
5685780 You do realize Star is essentially nothing more than a consciousness stuck in a network composed of thousands of individuals, right? As in, he doesn't possess a physical form anymore.
I don't see a sex tag on this story.
5717821 There used to be one, but I removed it some time ago, about a month from now. I was busy and lazy back then so I forgot to remove it.
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Ah.
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6300871 Nah, it's just the muscles still twitching a bit.
6300895 Oh *starts to look really sad*
I was wondering why the name Benny was randomly thrown in the middle of the story...
holy shit your alive
6300945 How the hell I managed to not see that/forget about that, I'll never know. But thanks for telling me!
6300912 Just kidding. Chapter 6's done and need to be proofread/edited by yours truly when he gets free time. Other than that, Chapter 7 is slowly shaping up, though I've not yet decided on how I want to see it go down at this point in time.
6300959 Nah, it's only my specter. I overworked myself I managed to find myself in the Limbo of Souls or whatever it can be called.
6300988 oh that makes more sense
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Loving it so far and I look forward to the next chapter