In the dead of night we let slip our darkest thoughts and deepest regrets where we hope they will never be found. It has been a thousand years since a mare was banished within the moon. Now, with the passing of an age, has anything changed? Or will some things always remain the same?
Thank you to Loopy Legend for his editing work and encouragement in making my first submission.
Interesting. I liked it, but I'm not qualified to review anything.
You have a LOT of incorrectly capitalized words. I'd recommend getting a proofreader, or running your text through the Auto-Proofreading App.
Also, I noticed some inconsistent spacing between your paragraphs; for example, in the following passage:
There should be a space underneath "herself" and "as colts."
Other than that, interesting story. And If you ever require a proofreader, I'm always happy to help. Danger Beans out.
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Thank you very much, Danger Beans. Your keen eye is greatly appreciated as are the tips
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Thanks for reading, Bekdontraz. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
3332501 Ah, I can't believe I missed all that! The Google Doc version is crap for trying to correct spacing as well. Will run it through Word next time.
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I'm confused, did you proofread this story?
The authors notes gave no mention of one.
3334711 He is new to FimFiction. I don't expect him to know how everything works around here, that, and he to humble. I will get some time later to correct this a little for him.
A lovely and somewhat heartbreaking story. You really made me feel for Luna and her incredible loneliness. Kudos to you.
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I'm glad you enjoyed it, starguy. Your comment is very much appreciated.