(WANTED: SOMEONE TO TAKE OVER THIS STORY. I HAVE LOST INTEREST BUT IF ANYONE WANTS TO KEEP IT FROM WITHERING AND DYING, PLEASE LET ME KNOW.)
Twilight had been obsessed with Pokemon ever since she discovered it in the Human World. She was hoping to get her friends into it, but she never meant to get them into the game. Now they must adapt to a society of gladiatorial fighting if they're to have any hope of seeing home again.
This is an attempt at a serious story, Cassandra's going to be sitting this one out.
Chapters (16)
Well, i'm not gonna dislike it like a jerk, but i'm gonna tell you this. It's needs editing fast. In all honesty, not trying to be mean, but your first paragraph would have people throw their computers out of windows, forget it if they're grammar nazi's. Your story would be awesome if the grammar and punctuation were to be corrected. I'm gonna favorite this story so that i can read the rest.
The sight of friends going separate ways makes Apple Bloom sad
I thoroughly enjoyed what I read, please update this quickly and as well written as possible!
I want more!! Give me more!!
Wow, I loved that and I don't even like Pokemon! Good job, you get a moustache
They feel so out of character and yet they are still in character!
That was the cutest thing I have ever read!
please, please give me more! Please?
You do a pretty good Applejack.
This is a sequel, right?
3361079 Sequel to what?
3361242 The fanfic where Twilight first discovers the Mirror World.
3361594 No, the "Mirror World" is the human world from "Equestria Girls." I thought that that was the canonical name for that universe, but perhaps I'm mistaken.
Aw. Rainbow Dash doesn't have a Pokemon.
I bet the rock turns out to be an egg and it hatches into some really cool flying Pokemon for Rainbow!
Also Fluttershy is really cute when she sings Pinkie's song.
interesting premise, ill be watching
Hmmm a Happiny? Well if I remember Correctly When Brock had has before it became a Chansey she was strong enopugh to throw him in the air
Oh, that's what they look like. See if I knew anything about Pokemon I would already know what they look like.
Very interesting. I hope this continues!!!
3393409 yeah, similar thing with Brock's Bonsly aswell, those baby pokemon can become some really powerful pokes
I think Masquerain is a bit of an overpowered pokemon for a starter, but seeing as it is Fluttershy, I can cope
Totodile learns water gun as its first water type move it can't learn bubble.
3402741 Right, thx for telling me, I've fixed it.
Hmm, not quite what I was expecting from Team Aqua. Good job though!
team Aqua becoming humanitarian!? preposterous! although, in sapphire they wanted to turn a volcano into a pool, you only stop them because it would stop business for the hot springs... team Aqua sound like the good guys there, but then they went down the deep end with the Kyogre plan...
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HAHA! "Down the deep end" and they're "team AQUA" LOL!!!
Yeah both Team's Aqua and Magma would have both screwed up the world in some way.
3412846 glad you enjoy my punny yolks! also, Aqua's first plan wouldn't have been as devastating as Magma's, because Magma wanted to replace the coasts with more land... then they decided to burn themselves with their Groudon plan
I can picture what was going through Archie and Maxie's heads in their respective bad guy roles when they thought up their plan
Archie - "that kid stopped me from making a cool new pool for water pokemon in the remains of a volcano! im gonna flood the world!"
Maxie - "that kid stopped me from destroying the coasts! im gonna bring a drought like no other to the world!"
ah Happiny, one of the most underestimated pokemon of all time
Lol
All Happinys, Chanseys, and Blisseys are female and you referred to the RD's Happiny as a male.
You flipped an 'it' there.
In answer to those questions,
1. You could 'convince' them that fighting is the only way to get by in that world. They don't necessarily have to be okay with it, they just need to know that they can't just stick their heads in the ground and pretend everything's alright.
2. Have them give dodgy answers to personal questions. For Fluttershy's party, you could use their urgency in getting to Mt. Moon as a justification for why they don't just sit down and tell people all about themselves. The other group you're on your own for, though.
3. Everyone has their own interpretation of Pinkie, so I can't really tell you how to use her better. If, according to you, she's a bit of an idiot who only thinks about partying, you can write her like that as long as you don't stray too far from how she's portrayed in the show. If your interpretation is that she has quite the intellect and just prefers to come across as sociable, rather than smart, you can write her like that. Though again, only as long as you don't stray too far from her canon portrayal. It really depends on your interpretation of the character if she can contribute to the story. Just ask yourself, "where in this story could Pinkie contribute something meaningful?" and you should be alright.
4. I can't help you with this, since I can't write a fight scene to save my life and I usually end up just skimming through fights when I read, because exactly what's happening interests me less than the outcome and the why.
I hope I could help a bit and that you will continue this story; I quite like it, aside from some typos and character inconsistencies I've spotted.
3598268 Cool thanks for the advice. I'll probably end up taking a break because of semester finals and all, but getting feedback like yours encourages me to keep at it.
*sigh* im a sucker for pokemon fics....gonna give this a like and fave
Ouch, Rarity will be in for a shock when she meets Conkeldurr
Ice!?
Just what they needed. 
I hope they have an ice heal. 
We need Team Magma to bust Twilight, Rarity, and Rainbow free
i'm loving this story!! please keep it up!!
4610113 I agree I want to see how it continues
3598808 can u please add more to the story ive alredy read the chapters that u posted I want to see it continue
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Rarity is a built-in Dowsing Machine... that's:
Keep up the goods work!
This is a great story and I can't believe it's only got 50 likes.
keep up the good work and can't wait for the next chapter.
4231639 that or some pokemon rangers to help the hoenn crew
3598808 please hurry up with the updating of the story I'm starting to get impationed
"Sorry Rainbow, they didn't have pictures of these in my books." She ran her hoof over the oval-shaped imprint curiously, "but we won't have to wait long to find out. A few towns over is a research center that can not only identify this, but bring the Pokemon back to life!"
Dash had stars in her eyes "Wow! I didn't know science could be that awesome!"
It's Clemont and Ash all over again...
Love the story! If your looking for help (editing, prereading, writing, ect), then I would be happy to help you. PM me if you need anything.
hey are they mega in this story or not?
6228002 not in this story. I started writing this before generation 6 existed, and it's easier to keep it that way than change it suddenly