I would have been an idiot to not read this, I mean come on you had Pipsqueak (fav colt), the CMCs, airships, great action, TheWattsMan as an editor, and my attention. While there are a few typos left behind here and there, there certainly weren't enough to detract from this kick-flank story, consider this tracked, yourself watched, and the story rating one-upped. This whole thing reminded me of Skies of Arcadia combined with Starfox for some reason, and that is an amazing feat. Love it GIMME MOAR!

This seems to be the start of a good story. I look forward to reading more.

>>286472286472

    I can most certainly promise you more on the condition that you are patient. Thank you very much for the watch, track and one-up. They are greatly appreciated!

    Now about that Starfox thing. I have never invested a lot of time in that series, this, in fact, is a crossover of both Star Wars and Code Geass. (Set, of course, in a futuristic Dieselpunk -not Steampunk- version of Equestria).

Well, this is interesting! Give your editors some more time to catch errors, but your steampunk world is enticing and your action is exciting. Good start.

this universe of steampunk enthralls me and calls for my attention. perhaps the color scheme is appealing. perhaps id like to someday pilot an airship. or maybe i just like the goggles. either way, i will read this. wish i could now, but sadly, i must go to bed. ah well, it appears to be a wonderful find, and im glad i stumbled upon it.

OMG!!!!!!!!! A ponies steampunk crossover!!!! My god!!! So much win!!!!

TAKE ALL MY MONIES!!!! WINNNNN!!!!!!!!

great detial

Appears to be a good fic so far. Lol and good luck convincing everypony about it being a dieselpunk, NOT a steampunk.

>>286644286644

Yeah... Not going to be easy. Still the differences are quite broad once you look into it. STEAMpunk uses... You guessed it. Steam!

Dieselpunk uses... Diesel! Or rather, motors that are powered by some sort of fuel that is not steam (or coal, or anything that powers a steam engine).

Dieselpunk had other differences. Steampunk is more victorian-era inspired. Gears, Brass...ect... Deisel? Grime and 1940's style military clothing. Think StarWars Empire garb.

But they are very close honestly. I won't nit-pick...

BRILLIANT

Scootapilot? Awesome!

Looking forwards to chapter 2!

Huh... Much better than my story.

More.

Now.

I demand.

On a side note, NOOO not the CMC!

wow... airships, I got a few ideas for them if you want, but I only think of SUPERHUMONGERNORMOUS airships with like 20  air-to-air MG batteries; large, heavy cruiser naval guns for ground artillery and/or ship takedowns...

If you have ever played Kirby: Super Star Ultra, and have played the Halberd stage, Then I am talking about something like that...

looks good. tracked to be read later

It feels like it could be a Castle in the Sky airbattle. That was pretty impressive.

WIN

Dear Celestia thats some awesome action!! You are truly a wonderful writer!! usually I get bored within the first page of a story like this, but you kept me hocked! I put off getting up to get my pizza to finish this!! You get a watch, track, fave and a one up my friend, I look forward to seeing more!

I feel a little conflicted with the story so far.

I'm a fan of diselpunk, airships and the CMC, so this makes for a great scenario. Writing flows good too.

But I think the story is moving to fast at this point. The loss of the Crusader and the capture of Scoot's friends would have more impact, if we had spend some more time with them, read about a few of their everyday adventures and shenegains. The way it is now, I can hardly care for the ship that was just introduced in this chapter. And if I would not know the CMC from the show, I wouldn't care about them too.

If you were going for a beginning like SW: A new hope, with an Imperial Destroyer boarding the rebel ship and caputring the princess, I think the plot moves to slow and we shoud be with Luke on Tatooine by now. No need to go through all the technical details of the Crusader if it's only purpose is to be rammed by the destroyer to show the might of the empire.

Well, I'm tracking this. Let's see where this is going.

>>305138305138

Don't you know that most epics start in the middle and end at the begining?

I kid, I kid. Actually all things considered I should have started with a little backstory. But that would make the fic much longer than it already is (Writing chapter seven right now, I am about 1/3 of the way through), I was hoping that a few mentions of the past, some flashbacks and a lot of world building would fill in the blanks. Lets just find out if I can pull it off without bogging down the readers with details.

I made the mistake of reading this just before bed the other night.  The sense of "NOOOOO" kept me up for another half hour after I finished the first chapter.

Loved it thus far.  Can't wait for the next chapter.  Do you have a target length for the completed work?  (the 7k-word chapter length seems about perfect for this story, by the way)

While it does seem to move a bit fast, I'm not sure how you could've changed that short of info-dump. Hm. Besides that, while it doesn't hit me as hard, the fact that it hits her hard *Does* elicit sympathy for an already made-likable character. So.... I think the good and bad are in better proportion.

LOVE this story. Had to go ahead and finish reading during the previews before John Carter because I NEEDED TO. I'm really looking forward to this!

And this is what I originally meant to type: OHGODPONIAIRSHIP

>>311632311632

Every sunsequent chapter will be about 5 to 7K in length. As for how long the story will be, that is beyond me. To date I have written the first six chapters but I am still in the process of editing them. The center climax is still a few chapters off. I am glad you like my work!

>>311668311668

Pacing is one of the many things I have always had a hard time with. In this case I decided to take it slow. From the point where I started onwards the story progresses rather slowly, giving me plenty of time to build an intresting world and to flesh out my characters, big and small.

I sure do hope so, because I want to know so much more about this world!

I originally read the first chapter that you had on Google Docs (the source EqD linked in their recommendation), but I simply had to check and see if it was on FiMfiction so I could favorite and track!  You really pulled me into the story from the get-go.  And diesel-punk Equestria sounds absolutely righteous! (curious, does steam punk still have military applications, or is that diesel-punk exclusive?  I'm fixing to write up a fic of my own involving a war between the Griffon Kingdom and Equestria, and that's a pretty big part of the story for me. :p)

Also, how did you go about planning out this story?  I ask because that's the stage I'm currently in for my tale.  So far, it looks quite rich, and looks like it might've taken a good while to map things out.

Finally, I'm getting a really bad feeling that something horrible's happened to Celestia if Blueblood's in charge.  And where in Equestria is Luna?  Could she not stop Blueblood's rise to power, or did she not know of the atrocities that would befall their kingdom?

Anywho, I'll be keeping close tabs on this story.

Hope to see the remainder of those seven completed chapters soon!

>>286655286655 i can see the difference, after actually reading the chapter. i like the story, although your editors missed a few things. like when applebloom fell through the 'gapping' hole, and another part (i cant find it again, sorry) that's really hard to explain without actually finding it. idr what the sentence was about, but you wrote it like this:

The airship quaked. Sending the crew to their deaths, and doing something else in the process.

it should all be one sentence.

but i cant find it anymore so im sorry :P either way, its an enjoyable story. keep it up!

>>318290318290

Lets go through this in order. Thanks for favoriting, I really appreciate it. Also Fimfic will update a bit faster then EqD will (only about five or six hours, still, a tad faster).

Steampunk CAN have war like things, altough think of the armies as colonail era, in other words, lots of chivelry and pride. Dieselpunk is a bit more grim and dirty in that regard.

And I can't tell you anything about Celestia at this time (massive spoilers if I did).

Also I rarely plan out a story on paper. I do, on the other hoof, spend days thinking about the plot and details of each chapter.

>>318315318315

A few things always get through the gaps (hehe, bad puns) but please don't blame my editors. They spend lots of their time going over the stuff I write, I don't think it would be fair to blame them of anything. Really, I am the one who wrote the mistake in the first part!

As a note to anypony out there I am looking for a proofreader or two. If you wish to apply just send me a private message via Fimfic. Only apply if you're really fast and good (not to be mean, but I'll only send a version to proofreaders a few hours before posting. They need to be fast).

As another note Chapter Two (called Capture) will be here by tonight at the latest.

Still a crazy fun and adventuresome story, with action, intrigue, and airships!  I can't wait to find out what Rarity, Applejack, and the others are up to!

When will we be introduced to Sweetie Belle's brother?

Other than that, great work and I eagerly await for more.

This story is made of awesome.

Hmm... This intrigues me

What is in that letter, it's driving me crazy!

I don't know if you play(ed) any Crimson Skies but that's where my mind is right now, and it's awesome.

FUCK YEAH! ANOTHER CHAPTER!

Applejack and Rarity famous... I wish to know why now, and if Rarity and Blueblood have a connection of any kind here.

Cool story, ill be waiting for the next one.

"adrenalin" -> adrenaline

"That was it, she was stuck here, unable to tell if Scootaloo or Apple Bloom made it out alive, or even if they were okay." -> "That was it, she was stuck here, unable to tell if Scootaloo or Apple Bloom were okay, or even if they made it out alive."

>>322697322697

Crimson Skies! Good times. Possibly my favourite airplane shooter on the original XBox.

evanwidloski:

Thanks for pointing that out. I`ll fix it when I get back from work!

Holy Hell that was good!

Hmm. A frenchy rich pony leading a resistance group. I'm liking the path this is taking

Interesting ... inexplicably flying air battleship/death star, French-speaking resistance fighter, and a glimpse at the world at large. Now we know that Twilight and Dash have large companies, with Twilight a tech magnate. Sweet Apple Acres also seems like an important agricultural conglomerate. Pinkie Pie is some sort of Oppenheimer-esque weapons designer. Rarity is apparently a member of the "Belle" family and is still into fashion, although she has yet to make an appearance. Fluttershy is MIA so far. We've now been in Blueblood's head, and he doesn't necessarily seem particularly evil yet, although he is a cad, and cruel. He also doesn't actually have complete control over Equestria. Well, I'm looking forward to the next chapter as always, and am equally looking forward to the introduction of the Mane 6 and more CMC + Pip action.

Sparkle Tech, Twilight Sparkle

Spectrum Skies, Rainbow Dash

Sweet Apple Acres, Applejack

Pinkie, just the same

Rarity, ??

Fluttershy, ??

Blueblood is really a massive douchebag

Hurrah! Airships and Star Wars-esque-ness!

I'm really curious as to what Rarity and Fluttershy are up to... and what about that war? At first I thought it was Blublood usurping the throne or something, but then the Mane 6 wouldn't have sat quietly for that and built themselves companies, now would they?

Smile Emporium, love it and Dr Dissonance's  other steam-punk pony pieces. There're the perfect soundtrack for this story. Love this whole concept of industrial Equestria. Keep the chaps coming

>>346961346961

   I can fill you in on one of those, it doesn't have that much of a bearing on the story. [MINOR SPOILERS] Empathy Medical. I'll let you guess to whom that belongs... [SPOILERS END]

>>347283347283

   His music is a great source of inspiration. So is Phychgoth's, check him out too.

>>346959346959

   You touched many points I would love to talk about but unfortunately cannot. The least I will say is that by this time last week your wish for more Pip will be answered.

Sorry I couldn't answer to all; I don't want to reveal that many spoilers... As of note I am currently working with SALT on a writer's guide. It should be finished sometime soon. Also that request for proofreaders is always on the table, Celestia knows my spelling could use some help.

>>347848347848

Just 'Medical' would have been enough,

so: ST, SK, SAA, EM... Rarity's would just be something Fashion. lol

this continues to be awesome.

I really liked the Blueblood section: a competent little bastard, isn't he? Looking forward to more of this. And of course Pinkie's a cannon designer! I like it!

The Scootaloo bit, though, I wasn't much for the pacing felt rushed and off, and really the entire bar scene felt superfluous, sort of an excuse to show Scoot kicking ass. Maybe if you had moved meeting this Frenchy to the bar and all that, and possibly added some more forshadowing/information (perhaps a little thing comes on the radio?), and then had the whole 'Scootaloo kicks ass' thing if you really need to have it, and then have Frenchy come along.

Just a thought.

'Heavily accented pony'

French reading voice activated. :)

An enjoyable chapter, with more insight into the world. Maybe I missed this somewhere, but is it stated how long after the events in the show this story takes place?

French critique:

Nice touch, having Arnaquer refer to the soldiers with the formal "vous" and to Scoots with the informal "tu".

And "arnaquer" meaning "to rip off, to scam." Nice.

"Le veut tu" is a really awkward construction, which would never be used unless Arnaquer was merely pretending to be French.  Which is entirely possible at this point.  But if he is French, he should say "Tu le veut?" or even better "Tu le voudrais?" meaning "Would you like to," which is a politer construction he would use while trying to win her over.

In other news, you have created here the most dastardly Blueblood I've seen yet.  I can't wait to hate him even more as the story progresses.

>>349707349707

Even I am uncertain. I think of the CMC as in their late teens or early tweens. So approx ten years after the events of this season.

>>349751349751

You're right, or at least partially so... Depending on where the French is from "Le veut tu?" is okay while elsewhere it would be said "Tu le veut?"

Unfortunately I learnt my French in Canada. Basically it's like Texas English compared to British English. The method of pronouncing and even speaking is quite different.

looks good and its shaping up quickly into a bigger plot.

if you like, i got a bit of criticism, only on the style, rest is great (which i can see improvement chapter by chapter), some parts appear 'stretched' (some actions like the gun-turnabout on the imp seemed longer then the action should take) while some descriptions don't seem to have a lot of colour (just for describing environment, buildings, interiors and such), a few short descriptions whenever it might seem encouraging will create more 'taste' for the readers and visualization.

Other then my little bit of writing critiq i'm really anticipating how far your going to bring this story to our eyes!

Have fun writing!

Definitely interested to see what happens to Sweetie Belle....

Also, Pipsqueak is best pony.

Great work. Keep it coming!

Awesome chapter. Wonder what's happening to Scootaloo though.

Yay, it ups! to another update! "Huzzah!"

There were a couple of grammar/spelling mishaps around this chapter, but other than that, I really enjoyed it.

I was thinking that maybe you should have expanded upon the trial scene, so that you could have expanded on Sweetie's horror even more, which would have hit us harder.

The Pipsqueak/Apple Bloom/Keen Eyes bit was really fun, though. Apple Bloom is clueless (process of elimination, motherbucker, do you know it?), and Pip is adorable.

i dont know to me it was good

Oooo... Rarity is going to be sooooo mad. Brings on the Rebellion!

Steampunk is what got me started, but it's the fantastic writing that keeps me coming back.

SWEETIE BELL IS GOING TO NOVA PROSPEKT!!! Also, what happened to Celestia

Hm, I didn't wanna read this at first, mainly cause I try to avoid reading anything dark where ponies are concerned, but now that I've started I've gotta keep reading, mainly to answer the question: How in the $#@%ing hell, did Blueblood, take over Equestria? I wouldn't trust that prick to take over a Wendy's!

Celestia died?

Image: http://fc01.deviantart.net/fs46/i/2009/191/d/6/Spock_Finds_You_Illogical_by_densethemoose.jpg

I mean I guess she could get captured, but its believed she's immortal

Note to self: have Darkfang set a certain unicorn named Bunnyhelm on fire in the next chapter.

Personal fantasies of violence aside, great work as usual, hope to see more from you soon and all that.

DEATH TO BLUEBLOOD! That prick deserves to be eaten alive by weasels!

>>433639433639

Thanks, and will do (well, maybe not weasels), as I said at the end of the chapter, the next (chapter six) should be very long (Edging on the 8K). Thankfully my editor (cheezsauce) is here all week! (usually only online on the weekend) so I might get it out by the end of the week!

I have faith that whatever you do would be as great as anything you have posted yet, better even.

"If they made a signal chances were the help would be Imperial or some other outlandish rouges." ...That should be "rogues." Celestia forbid we would want the attention of any criminally outrageous shades of blush!

Off to the next chapter!

I see the plot beginning to develop.  Suddenly I'm much more enthusiastic about this story.

The meeting between Bunnyhelm and Soarin is a little hard to understand.  Is Soarin the fat one as he thumps up the ramp? (I assume this is the case, as he has a rather unfortunate reputation in fanon.)  But then this happens:

“Hi, I’m Soarin,” he reintroduced himself with another hoof shake. The fat blue pony smiled and bobbed his head, his curls of fat bobbing in time.

The way it's structured makes it sound like Bunnyhelm is the fat one.  it's just a small detail, it doesn't change the meaning at all, but as I try to picture the scene it's standing in my way.

>>425962425962 She may never age, but she can most certainly be killed.

And again, tensions have rose

Didn't say this earlier, might as well do so now.

Very cool stuff with Darius, and I'm excited to see how it plays out.

Not a bad chapter. The plot hasn't really advanced much, but a few gaping holes in our "history" have been filled, like the nature of the war. It reminds me a lot of FoE, with the six champions of Equestria pumping out technology and such. But that's not a bad thing.

I'm interested... this captain sounds like he's about to go rouge. I'm looking forward to seeing just how that pans out. I mean, will he go it alone, or will his ship be at his disposal? His men love him, but do they love him enough to basically commit suicide by mutinying?

Poor Soarin'.... and shouldn't he be famous for being a Wonderbolt, or did that not happen this universe?

>>435650435650

Well, Soarin` now works for Spectrum Skies... which happens to be owned by a certain Rainbow Maned Pegasus... I doubt that she would be mean to an ex-wonderbolt...

>>434208434208

I spent the entire day with the mental image of a bunch of pirate ponies applying make up... A few fits of spontaneous giggling and I am officially the weird guy at work. Thanks.

Huzzah! it's up, pretty good rate of chapters i might add...

glad to see this series continue on and hope my editing and quaint little style sputters have been helpful and not an annoyance

In other gimmicks, in terms of world buildings, theres been a steady climb but one of the things i feel really representative of the world is how it works with the 'common folk'. there was that small short bar scene in chapter 2 but a lot of it was just normal things happenings, I'd like a scene where one of the charecters is 'strolling' for whatever reasons down a crowded yet vibrant street with all kinds of characters that would fit into the universe with its fashion, technology and or overall circumstantial social dynamics, showing these types of things in a gradual fashion will 'flesh out' the world. Will anticipate what you will have in store for us!

>>435780435780

If it's any comfort chapter seven spends quite a bit of time in Ponyville...

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12 5-stars away from 6-Stars on EqD...

Wow, this is faring better then I thought!

Thanks a lot guys!

This reminds me in no small amount of that End of Ponies fic. This is no bad thing.

Interested to find out just how Blueblood became Emperor when he has such an abrasive personality.

Also, Pinkie owns 1/5th of Equestria?

Image: http://i0.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/original/000/199/693/disgusted-mother-of-god.png?1321272571

So who runs the other 4/5ths? And where do the other elements fit into all this? I'm aware they head up their own companies, but if AJ is a known rebel sympathizer, then...

Tl;dr Awesome story, some questions about the history I'd like answered, keep up the good work my man

Edit: Also, Darius is pretty damn cool, but I can't find any description of him physically. In his first appearance, only his uniform is mentioned. Is this me just derping, or is this a genuine oversight?

>>437062437062

Pinkie owns one sixth of one fifth. The mane 6 as a group own 1/5th.

And I rarely give much in terms of descriptions for OC's, unless said description adds to the character. I like it that way, fill in the blanks yourself! (I always thought of him as rather grey if that helps....)

>>437116437116

Yeah, I must admit Grey was what I imagined, until I realized you'd never mentioned it

Either that or a dark blue colour. Might suite the whole "Imperial Navy" thing

So, the main 4/5ths belong to Blueblood and Co.? Interesting...

Looking forward to seeing Spike. I'm wondering what role Dragons played in this Pony/Gryphon War.

Also, how often can we expect updates? So many fics I'm reading seem to be on hiatus or something...

>>437148437148

Updates... er... I am writing chapter nine right now (you distracting bugger, you!), but I tend to take forever to update. Thankfully cheezesauce is online everyday this week, so I might get chapter six out by the weekend (no promisses).

Honestly I had forgotten about Spike, I'll add him here and there along with Twilight (She pops in later) but as you can tell the Mane six, despite being major players in the world I am building, don't appear that ofter (yet, some have big roles in later chapters). And the whole 'they own 1/5th' thing was something I debated for a while, not too little that they would be unimportant, not too much that they would be stronger than Blueblood.

I am so proud, I wrote two whole paragraphs and there are next to no spoilers!

>>437175437175

A mighty achievement indeed!

Although it's quite an achievement to forget about Spike. Pretty much every dark-fic ever written has him as a major character in some form or another (FO:E, End of Ponies, Antipodies, etc). Usually he's a mopey bastard though and everyone else is dead, so hopefully that won't be the case here

Interestingly, I would never have been aware of these different Steampunk-esque genres if not for this fic. You have enlightened me good sir!

Anyways, it's enjoyable how rapidly you get a reply out. On most other stories, a wait of around a couple days is usual. I must admit this change of pace is refreshing, and gives the impression of an author who readily listens to their readers (the best kind of author )

I'll leave you alone now, so you can write Moar Poni

P.S Scootaloo is best pony

>>437226437226

Thanks! I like talking to authors too, I dislike it when they a stoic and quiet, so why should I be the same!

And Spike is forgetable, I am trying to recreate the readers perception of Equestria. What's one little dragon got to do with that? (Worry not, he'll be around, just not in a big way)

Oh, and because I didn't have time to do this prior to now: I did French ponies in Equestria first... take that Hasbro! (actually Fluttershy mentioned them, but that's fine)

Green Lance got released AND promoted?!  You've gotta be kidding me!!  

I can't believe Darius is being sent to Tartarus, if he plays his cards right, he'll be able to save Sweetie Belle without drawing too much attention.  

Can't wait to see the next chapter!  

No one else has touched on this, but I'd like to point it out, since it seems to be a small insight into a big part of Blueblood's personality, particularly his arrogance and sense of self-entitlement.

He is a rapist.

Not the violent, shove a girl down and rip her clothes off rapist, but a rapist nonetheless. Because the use of one's position and influence to intimidate and scare a person, or pony, into having sexual relations with oneself qualifies as rape.

That scene was incredibly well-written as far as I'm concerned, as it gives us readers a clear view of exactly what kind of despotic, socialite asshole we're really dealing with. And while far from impressed by Blueblood as a villain, mainly because I find it hard to be impressed by any villain who hides behind his ill-gotten wealth and the power of his largely corrupt army (Joker forever!), he's certainly turning out to be quite the hatable little emperor.

Great work!

This entire plot reminds me thus far of the early Empire in Star Wars. Where the Senate did still have a say (The Mane 6's influence). Ponified

is more like Springfield Armaments or Krupp rather than Oppenheimer (Father of the A-Bomb)

>>444801444801

Well it is sorta Star Wars inspired. If you know the plot of Star Wars, you'll, almost, be able to see where this is going...

Darius could be just what the Rebel Alliance needs. A seasoned vet with knowledge of the innerworkings of the Empire, a loyal crew, and a light destroyer.

He can defect!

What does the map look like, did the Empire conquer only other pony ra kingdoms or did they also seize Griffon's and what not?

Is Bunny Vader or Tarkin?

The biplanes, are they with internal baloons or are they like WWI's?

>>445126445126

Darius could be just what the Rebel Alliance needs. A seasoned vet with knowledge of the innerworkings of the Empire, a loyal crew, and a light destroyer.

He can defect!

>> Spoilers

What does the map look like, did the Empire conquer only other pony ra kingdoms or did they also seize Griffon's and what not?

>>You'll learn more about this in the prequal (haha, prequal, gve me about 6 months to finish this fic off first!), but, as it has little impact on the overall story and isn't that much of a spoiler, he did capture the Griffon lands.

Is Bunny Vader or Tarkin?

>>Ysanne Isard

The biplanes, are they with internal baloons or are they like WWI's?

>>Sparkle Generator's. Magic devices that reduce the weigh, or the gravitational pull, of the object they are part of (To some extent, a better generator is more powerful than a cheap one, their size and strenght varies from make, model and fuel type), other than that they look sorta like WWII era fighters. (Look at my DA, I love planes...)

If the Royal Guards were trained from birth, wouldn't they be fillys still (10)

I want to be a generic Imperial officer!

So suspenseful! Very fun fanfic to read, looking forward to the rest of it

Good work, looking forward to the next chapter

Loving every bite of this story. I feel like next to the MMMcake

Fan-tastic Chapter, absolutely loved it, keep it up!

One thing I noticed, scootaloo really asked what country Arnaquer was from?

Small note but still, great chapter

>>449888449888

It's Scootaloo, I think that honestly she would spend more time trying to find out how to squeeze more speed out of the Expedite, or pouring over magazines about Rainbow Dash, than studying a globe.

Woo, great chapter! I especially loved the part with Kami Kaze and his mechanical leg, and especially Mira! I realize of course the likelihood of it actually being so is about 0 to nadda but I can't help but feel they're references to my own work! Which is wonderful considering your story is one of my favorites on the site and I am a huge fan! My dreams, they want to be dreamed !

I still don't get how you put me under the impression that your short passage of the Rendezook would be in the story, lol. lol

I'm trying to figure out if the mane 6 are rebel sympathizers or if they're loyal to Blueblood.  I doubt they're rebels since they apparently manage large companies within the empire.  The Apples appear to be rebel sympathizers since they make that Zap Apple fuel, not much on the other five though.

Mira is what happens when you take Pinkie's personality and sprinkle just a dash of Cupcakes into the mix.

Loving this story.  I sense possible betrayals and plot twists around every corner.

>>450467450467

chapter eight silly

Drop in quality, my flank!

This is buckin' awesome. Ponies, dieselpunk, and quality writing? I'm not a big fanfiction person, but I'll be eagerly watching this one.

I just have to say, I really like the world you've created here. There's some beautiful imagery here, and as a pilot, I love the aerial combat scenes. If you ever need help with anything flying related, I can help you out.

The only thing I don't like is the sexual innuendo. I understand using it to portray different personalities, but sometimes it seems like it's just tacked on.

Anyway, is there anymore art? I'd love to see the battle between the Crusader and the Conformity.

Keep up the good work.

>>451598451598

100th comment!

And thank you, I`ve always had a fascination with aircraft, especially WWII era fighter planes and their combat manoeuvres, I tried to heap as much of that as I could into the story without making it jarring. As for the sexual stuff, I do believe that that about tops it off, from here on out it cools down quite a bit. (Minus awkward scenes between two young ponies... hint) And unfortunately no, here is only one other piece of artwork and I am saving it for a chapter header. But if you can draw go ahead! I did start building a scale model of the Expedite in my (very small) amount of free time. Used to be a scale modeller. Kinda lost a bit of it recently, gotta get back into that.

What kind of pilot are you?