Welcome to the re-written Chapter 1 of Foalhood. It's about the same length as the original but the original chapter has been split into two pieces. Chapter 2 is done and I've just started re-writing chapter 2 (3) I'm also looking for cover artists for this and the next 2 "books" of this. Any artists interested please comment here or PM me.

where unicorns and earth ponies so I had some unicorn and earth pony friends,

Think there needs to be a 'lived' before the word 'so.'

Off to a good start here.  *clicks next chapter button*

It was the unicorn, Angelic Note.

You repeat this in the next line.  One of them needs to go.

Really the only main reason I can see that this isn't getting much attention is because it's all OCs.  That's NOT a bad thing, it's just an observation.  Also, it would help if we got some background info on the main character.  Have him introduce himself and maybe get a basic rundown of his life so far, aka: Why does he live with his aunt and uncle?  Why did they move from Cloudonia to wherever they are now?  How did he feel about that?  etc.

It's a cute story.