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    Fluttershy returns to defend her title as Quiet Game world champion.
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  • E The Proper Care and Feeding of Monsters

    Fluttershy discovers the limits of compassion.
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  • E Lost Cities

    North of Canterlot, in the far marches of the Equestrian lands near the border with the Griffon tribes, there is a mountain that flies.
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  • T For Whom We Are Hungry

    You didn't want to come here, but fate cares nothing for insects. The story of a changeling in Ponyville.
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  • E I'm Afraid of Changeling (and other short stories)

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Blog Posts74

  • 2w, 1d
    Forever Summer updates, and some other cool stuff

    5 comments · 236 views
  • 3w, 6d
    Interview! Dramatic Reading! Exclamation Points!

    Hey folks,

    I was going to wait til I had a new chapter ready to post, but this weekend two community members finished up some projects that I was fortunate enough to help with, and I wanted to pitch their great work.

    FIMFiction Interviews: Cold in Gardez

    Nekonyancer has done interviews with several other authors on this site, including Eakin, Pascoite and Horizon, so I was pretty thrilled when he asked me -- waaay back before I deployed -- if I would like a turn. Obviously it had to wait until I returned from Afghanistan, but we managed to reconnect and the result was this interview. Here's a table of contents:

    1:00 - What kind of stuff did you write before you joined the fandom?

    2:05 - What particular works opened your eyes to what the fandom is capable of?

    4:07 - How do you go about developing your writing skill?

    5:37 - What books in particular would you recommend for learning how to write better?

    6:47 - How does experimentation play into improving your writing skill?

    8:47 - Which of your old stories are you especially proud of?

    9:55 - Don't you like your comedies?

    10:49 - How do you nail those character personalities so well?

    13:17 - Do you have an OC?

    13:40 - Where'd you get the ideas for your worldbuilding regarding the pegasi?

    17:14 - Where do you get your inspiration in general?

    18:27 - Sample of The Glass Blower original writing style

    19:35 - What did your reviewers say about that attempt at Victorian, purple writing?

    21:17 - In Victorian literature, characters talk too poetically. Their dialogue never feels real. Do you see that as a flaw in the style?

    22:29 - Was "The First Light of Dawn" your first time ever writing a long story?

    23:10 - How did you find the experience of writing a long story for the first time?

    24:02 - What kind of problems did you face that you don't have to deal with when writing short stories?

    25:47 - Seems like the writing for "The Wind Thief" went smoothly.

    27:02 - Did everything become easier as you wrote your second novel?

    27:31 - It's been two years since you posted the first chapter of Salvation, and it's still not done...

    29:31 - When you started your project of expanding Salvation, how long did you see it becoming?

    30:10 - On using editors to chop your writing down to size.

    32:11 - Was Salvation your first time writing something so structurally loose?

    34:05 - Was it difficult to write something that focused so heavily on characters instead of action?

    35:00 - Will we be seeing more stuff in the vein of Salvation?

    35:32 - Will we ever get the sequel to "The First Light of Dawn"?

    36:23 - What about the sequel to "The Wind Thief"?

    37:32 - Is there anything you want to say to your fans?

    Give it a listen!

    Second, one of the fandom's best voice actors, Illya Leonov, saw that I updated Lost Cities with two new chapters, and he went ahead and updated his dramatic readings to include them. I'm proud to present them here:

    Lost Cities: The Ice and What it Holds

    Lost Cities: The Driftwood Emperor

    So, work was a bit of a pain this week. Fortunately that's over with, and I get get back to my most enjoyable pastime -- writing! As noted earlier, I'm working on finishing Forever Summer, the next chapter of Salvation, and a new adventure story. And, yes, The Wind Thief sequel is in there somewhere too.

    7 comments · 366 views
  • 4w, 6d
    Some art, new short, and some updates

    22 comments · 522 views
  • 8w, 2d
    Walking through a large department store after spending seven months in Afghanistan

    When you first get back to America after a long time spent elsewhere, everything feels a bit surreal.

    You walk through the mall, recognizing everything. You don't stand there, gaping at the shelves like you've never seen them; you aren't overwhelmed by the choices or surplus. You remember, somewhere in the back of your mind, that this is normal. This is what life was always like before you left. The strange, indescribable feeling hiding just behind your eyes, that none of this is real, is like a veil upon your thoughts, shrouding them, but even through it you still see. Seven months was not enough time to forget what walking through a department store is like, or how it should feel.

    While you were gone you made a list of all the things you wanted to do, to see and to buy when you got back. You may have kept a word document on your desktop with all these things, or just emailed them to your personal account so you would have them ready when you got home. The list was like a talisman back when you were in country and the days seemed endless. If you had time, you could open it up and imagine each one come to life, or dream of something new to add. The mere imagination of them helped banish the tedium of deployed life.

    But now you walk through the department store, and you can't remember half the list. You found one item, a favorite drink or snack, and you carry it with you through the store as you try to remember the rest, as you try to remember what was so important that you had to come home. You turn down the next aisle, scanning the shelves, wondering if this is where you will find it, though you cannot recall what it is. You turn the corner and look, and turn the corner and look, and again and again.

    At some point, as with all the previous deployments, you'll realize that it wasn't the list or the stores or your favorite drink that brought you home. It was your friends, and they never really left you. They were just harder to talk to while you were gone.

    I'll be getting home tomorrow, and as such this will be my last 'deployed' blog post. Thank you to everyone who wrote or watched or even just read something I made over the past seven months. You guys are great, and there's rarely a day that goes by that I don't think about how lucky I am to be part of this fandom.

    Back to our regularly scheduled programming.

    38 comments · 544 views
  • 8w, 4d
    At the Doha Hamad international airport

    Hey folks.

    I'm typing this on my Samsung Galaxy, so forgive my brevity and typos. It's the first time I've turned this phone on in seven months, and I'm having to learn hour to use it all over again.

    We landed earlier this morning in Qatar after a six hour flight in a C-130, which is about the least comfortable aircraft ever designed. Also, I get air sick easily, so today has been a particularly uncomfortable experience. I've been awake for 36 hours now.

    But, of course, it's worth it. When it's time to come home from a deployment you just accept that there will be discomfort, but the alternative is never leaving Afghanistan. For some reason I've never understood, the flight home is always worse than the flight there. But the reward at the end will be better.

    In a few hours, I'll be getting on a 15-hour flight back to the states. I'll hate it, and it's possible I'll be sick many times before we land, but I still can't wait.

    Talk to you guys again in a day or so. If you see me in a bar, first round's on me.

    Edit: I guess I can link a story to this post. Go read Forever Summer!

    29 comments · 362 views
  • ...

Twilight Sparkle is a gifted student and scholar. When she attempts to harness her creative side by writing a science-themed sensual romance novel, however, things rapidly get out of hoof. Can her friends stage an intervention before she humiliates herself (and them) at a prestigious literature recital?

No. No, they cannot.

Fan art! Rarity and Twilight at the cafe.

First Published
1st Mar 2012
Last Modified
1st Mar 2012
#1 · 142w, 3d ago · · 8 ·

You told me there would be no shipping. -.-

#2 · 142w, 3d ago · 31 · ·

I don't see why that would have been embarrassing. I would pay money for a full copy of Naked Singularity.

#3 · 142w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

This story is good and you should feel good. Also, I'm with AestheticB on this one.

#4 · 142w, 3d ago · · ·

This. I love this. CiG, you genius.

#5 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

Aw man, I saw Singularity and was hoping for a crossover of the game. Glad I stuck around and read it anyway. This was awesome. I hope to see more from you! Not about this story obviously. You marked it as "complete" for a reason.

#6 · 142w, 2d ago · 8 · ·

It's not often that I see cringe-humor so powerful I have to take breaks between paragraphs to de-cringify, but you've done it spectacularly well.

#7 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

The fact that I read this in class only aided in the cringeness of all of it...

Good humor. Awesome story. Just... its one of those things that you really dont want to see happen but it does so anyway... :fluttershyouch:

Take all five sta- I mean.... one thumb. Take the one thumb.

#8 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

I can't give you any constructive criticism because this was perfect. Everypony was IC, and so was Spike. I loved the pacing, and I especially loved the purple prose. Or should that be lavender? Please write more you sexy genius.

#9 · 142w, 2d ago · 3 · ·

This is ... the best ... possible ... thing!

Seriously, I loved it. Poor Rarity and Rainbow Dash will never look at Twilight the same way again.  I second Wonderousm - you are a sexy genius!


#10 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

This was excellent. Superb. Splendiferous, even. Everything about this was hilarious and fantastically crafted.

It's the sort of 'original' concept that I continually kick myself for never having.

#11 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

This is possibly the best thing ever.

#12 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

You may have all of my applause.  Masterfully done.  :rainbowlaugh:

#13 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·


Speaking of which, what happened to 'First Light of Dawn'?

And, do ponies even have bosoms? I'm not sure how that would work...

#14 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

>>278672 I'm uh...Not sure why your asking me this.

But in a way, yes I suppose ponies have bosoms. Just, not like humans. As for the light of dawn? Your gonna have to ask the author...

#15 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·


It's, um, being worked on.

Slowly :ajsleepy:

#16 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

*Looks at title*  Hmm, might be worth a look  :applejackunsure:





In that order, Very well done sir, and original to boot

:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:  5/5 Mustaches

#17 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·


That, sir, is a damn dirty lie.

#18 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

Where did you get the picture?

#19 · 142w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

My goodness. That was amazing. Very few fics that claim to be comedies have me laughing, but I could not control myself! Well done!

#20 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·


EqD drawfriend, about a half a year back.

#21 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

Oh lordy. One of those rare comedy fics that had me laughing out loud all the way through the story. Excellent work, as usual! Although I won't ever be able to look at particle physics in quite the same way ever again...

#22 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

I had fun reading this

#23 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

>The candles on Twilight Sparkle’s desktop guttered weakly.

Guttered can be used like that?

>“Oh Evening Glimmer,”

Why does it always have to be a self-insert?

Now I want to read about the "centipedes" episode.

>‘Hello Twilight, I just finished your story and I discovered absolutely no redeeming qualities in it whatsoever. I suggest you burn it before anypony else sees it.’

... Can I use this? I just need to replace "Twilight" with another author or 10's names...

That Dialogue... Is 100 times better than most pornos.

OOh, Gardez, I love your soft susurration.

>It was time to get dirty. Dirty with science.

What horror has science wrought now?

Sorry. I literally have no comment for the rest of the fic other than "lol".

>“I’m volunteering with the Canterlot Benevolent Association for Impressionable Young Fillies,”

Sorry let me rephrase that to "ROFL"

Also I love how rainbow Dash is basically a foil for the audience in this.

But poor Dash. Not realizing she was lusting over her own r63 version.

Anyway, I've read a bunch of these saucy comedy fics and I have to say this was definitely one of the more original takes. But why no Luna? I would imaging her being the only one to actually be able to properly relate to the narrative style.

#24 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

This was insanely good. Beautifully written. I mean, genuinely, sincerely, better than a lot of actual published literature I've read. I was in hysterics of laughter for most of that. Although, to be fair to Twilight, I would buy her novel, because it was... awesome. Have all the Spikes :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache:

#25 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

>>278859 Could you please link to it?

#27 · 142w, 2d ago · 2 · ·

Magnificantly well-crafted. Just from a technical stand-point, I must really approve of how you set all of the manuscript's text in italics. I know it seems rudimentary, but I know a lot of authors that would just be too lazy to take the time to do that. The scene-breaks were all properly placed and nothing felt like it was mashed up against everything else.

Now for the content. I gotta say, this is a pretty original concept, and now that I think about it I'm surprised that no-one's made a famous story about it yet. Twilight writing a novel, a romance novel at that, just seems to fit with her personality and character. While many, many authors seem to agree that Fluttershy reads a lot of smut, no one's really bothered to wonder where any of it comes from until now. Which leads me to my next point of praise. The manuscript Twilight wrote was just great, you can really hear HER voice in it, rather than your own. Masking one's own voice in writing and making it legitimately seem like someone else is a rare talent that should be admired by all. The fact that Twilight not only wrote the most robotic and technically-driven romance plot EVER is a testament to how much time and effort YOU put into the intricacies of what she wrote. Yes, it was bad, but it was bad on purpose and you made it flow as if it were from her hoof.

Also, excellent job on the tension as well. Parents, foals, Cheerilee even Celestia were all packed neatly into the scene to cover every possible squirm-worthy demograph. The only missing pony would've been someone random, like... like Big Mac. But he's not really the bookish type so that wouldn't have made any sense, haha... Anyway, it takes a lot to make a reader squirm like that, and I can tell you, you definitely accomplished this, building it up higher and higher as more ponies she knew came in. Not to mention the hilarity of her friends bursting in on not one but SEVERAL of the wrong coffee shops. That was a good touch, hahaha!

Well done! You should be proud, cheers!

#29 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

so silly

oh celestia so silly

brb laughing like the joker

#30 · 142w, 2d ago · 1 · ·


Twilight writing self-insert stories and friend-insert romances is one of the main jokes of the Friendship is Witchcraft series, so it's not entirely a new idea. Cold in Gardez just took it to its inevitable, lurid, hilarious conclusion.  

#31 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·


Thanks for taking the time to correct me at the end of my high praise for this author's hard work. :facehoof:

#32 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

This was beautiful. I don't usually read stories like this... but I read this and I am so glad I did. Laughed hard. :P

#33 · 142w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

I got about halfway through before it became impossible to read on. Maybe later I'll give it another shot.

#34 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

So ... I expect Naked Singularity will be out in stores soon?

#35 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·


I was only too happy to do so. All creative types - authors, artists, scientists, philosophers, etc., stand on the shoulders of those who came before, and it does no harm to remember that. Nothing detracts from the fact that this is a great story by a great author, and we could all only be so lucky as to have Cold in Gardez grace us with a half dozen more of his excellent works. I would even go so far as to call this my favorite short fanfiction yet. :raritywink:

#36 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

Science + Romance + Twilight + Science = Win

As a physicist, I approve of this story for all aspiring scientists/writers.

Good show.

#37 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

Oh man, I loved this.

But, since I study physics, I understood most of those...ahem...descriptions. I would actually be quite interested in a copy myself...

#38 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

It's been a long while since a story has made me burst, loudly, into actual laughter.  

This was beautiful.  Thank you.

#39 · 142w, 2d ago · 5 · ·

Oh wow, Twilight's novel was the hottest thing ever!  I'm talking hotter than 1.3 femtoseconds after the Big Bang!  I could just FEEL my amygdala's neurons firing desperately to regulate the massive increase in activity within my anterior cingulate and ventral globus pallidus!  Nitric oxide levels have been rising steadily within the spongiform vasculature!  

*reads the part again about the saline, alkaline colloid, which Twilight had edited for her final print version*  Oh Celestia... she added 'a sweetness reminiscent of 5% aqueous fructose solution' to the passage!  HNNNNNNNNGGGGG!!!  :twilightoops:

*pants*  Oh Twilight, you know how to push a biologist's buttons!  :rainbowwild:

(actual comment)  I was laughing so hard it hurt.  Alot.  :rainbowlaugh:

Especially at RD's attempt to cleanse herself after realizing she'd been lusting heavily after the male version of herself getting it on with Twilight.  I do notice, however, that Rarity wasn't exactly insulted.  I suspect she harbors certain fantasies of herself with the geeky librarian!  :raritywink:

#40 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

I have to say this is one of the funniest things I've ever read! I've studied chemistry, maths and physics so I understood all the little references too. More please, for science!

#41 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

One of the funniest fics I've read in a while. Also, gratz on your EQD post! :twilightsmile:

#42 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·



#43 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

I award 4 out of 5 'staches.


That was truly hilarious.

#44 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

Yes. Just yes, so good.

#45 · 142w, 2d ago · 3 · 1 ·

ALTERNATE ENDING!!  :pinkiegasp:

*Celestia saunters slyly toward Twilight*  My my, I never assumed you had that in you.  I always assumed you to be the more 'straight-laced' sort of mare.  Why don't you follow me back to the castle and give me a... VERY detailed... report on what you're learned about this sort of 'friendship', my ever-so-faithful-and-fun, student?  *saunters away slowly while Twilight is reduced to a puddle of lust, barely maintaining enough surface tension to extend pseudopods and ooze along after the infinitely desireable Sun Princess.*

*Pinkie Pie suddenly pops up*  And that's how Molestia was laid!  :pinkiecrazy:

#46 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

Oh my God...


As a science geek, and particularly a physics geek (though I have stopped taking science classes since High School), I give this story unrequitted love and a lovely :facehoof: Poor Twi. She needs more practice.

You, sir, are great though. 5/5 staches


May the Grace of the Valar Protect You

Shire Folk

#47 · 142w, 2d ago · 1 · ·


this sums it up pretty well, i think.

i have to say, it was hilarious. i feel a little stupid that i didn't realize prism slash was r63 rainbow...:facehoof:

anyway, have ALL the moustaches! :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

#48 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

Release dates = Bad for Cassius.

#49 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

like particulates crossing a membrane via osmotic action…

Osmosis refers to water movement, not particle. :facehoof:

#50 · 142w, 2d ago · · ·

Oh Celestia, I was cringing and grinning in all the right places.  

Amazingly well written, my friend. You managed to make a fic that was completely enjoyable as well as totally uncomfortable.

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