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Icer 2767

Joined February 2012
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    Icer's Stories (2)

    • Letters to a Lunar Goddess
      Luna discovers just how much her subjects love her after she regains control of the night sky.

      4,224 words · 1,194 views · 91 likes · 2 dislikes
    • An Old Stallion's Story
      An old stallion recounts his life, and the accident that brought him to Equestria.
      17,808 words · 348 views · 13 likes · 3 dislikes

    On old stallion recounts his life to his grandchildren on Hearth's Warming Eve.

    Their request for a story becomes much more than that when one of them asks about Humans, and the stallion goes into a description of the human race that leads to a startling realization for his grandchildren, and even more, the story that goes with that realization.

    First Published
    29th Feb 2012
    Last Modified
    24th Jun 2012

    Comments ( 7 )

    #1 · Chapter 1 · 64w, 2d ago · · ·
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    This story seems interesting.  It also seems to be a different take on the Human in Equestria genre, and I also think that it has some really good potential to be a great story.  I did notice a problem, but it was mostly just that you switched tenses.  You started off in the Present tense, but then changed to the Past tense.  It's not really a big deal, but I thought I'd tell you anyway.  I'll be tracking this story to see where it goes.

    #2 · Chapter 1 · 64w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>275426

    To be completely honest, I didn't even notice that I did that! Thanks for pointing it out, and I hope to have another update by Saturday or Sunday, really depending on my schedule for other things.

    Glad you found it interesting!

    #3 · Chapter 1 · 64w, 2d ago · · ·
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    You're welcome.

    #4 · Chapter 2 · 62w, 4d ago · · ·
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    It looks good, and the concept is one that is a little better than "a brony ended up in Equestria, lets see what happens."  The only warning I would give is to be wary of where you go with the story, because a bad slip-up could destroy such a good concept.  But until then...... :moustache: Keep it classy.

    #5 · Chapter 1 · 52w, 5d ago · · ·
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    SPOILER ALERT!!!


    not everyone was as loving as work as them,

    -I suggest "not everyone was as loving of work as them,"... also I find this talk of humans loving work more than ponies to be a bit odd given that while ponies DO like to play, they also generally have their career-path magically emblazoned on their hips and may become mentally unstable when they can't pursue it any more.

    #6 · Chapter 5 · 52w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Some notes:

    I feel like this chapter turned out all right, I'm happy with it but I think I could have done a much better job.

    Secondly, sorry that it took so long for me to put it out, I had other things like life and research pop up that I had to prioritize, as well as writers block for this story. In the time that I had writers block for this one, I wrote the entirety of Letters to a Lunar Goddess and started on a third, fourth, and fifth fics that I'm going to be working on in addition to this one.

    A heads up for this summer however, I will be putting out chapters in any of those much slower than you are used to, as I'll be starting a job where I only have access to a computer around 20 hours a week. I'm sorry for this, but I love the job and I wont be giving it up for anything.

    Stay frosty.

    - Icer

    #7 · Chapter 6 · 47w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Here's an idea that I've been working on for a while, I've decided to let you in on some things that will happen in the future in the story, by taking a look at as something that happened in the past from the perspective of you the reader.

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