Very interesting, tracking.

there is no such thing as a second person narrative, (not trying to be mean) there are 1st person (this one) and 3rd person (omniscient and limited omniscient)

>>277023277023  I was always under the impression that using "I" was the defining characteristic for first person.  Third person revolves around a narrator who is not part of the story.  A first person story is someone telling you what they did.  "I went to the store."

A third person perspective involves someone telling you what someone else did.  "John went to the store."

A second person perspective is someone telling you what you did.  "You went to the store."

I may be wrong, but that's always the way I've looked at it.  If I'm wrong I have no problem changing the wording of my summary.  Thanks for the input, though.

Nice story! Can't wait for next chapter! Good work and have some staches!

>>279147279147  Oh my god!  Staches!  You have made my day with that.  And I MAY just get the next chapter out tonight.  No promises, though.  Although it does remind me of the fact that I should involve Spike, considering they are in Twilight's house...

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but should be changed to bit

(still not trying to be mean)

>>283614283614  Fixed, and thank you.

Faved

>>291048291048  You're the first one to do so.  I appreciate it.

Cloud Runner I am guessing had that in other stories good story by the way.

>>293505293505  Yeah, probably something like that.  I haven't finalized the first name yet, but soon.  Probably end of the next chapter, or so.  Thanks for reading, though.  And commenting.  I try to respond to most comments.

>>293526293526Well you are doing a great job of that and keep up the great work my good sir.

>>293679293679  Just updated the latest chapter.  Enjoy.  It's a doozy.

I WAS SOOOOO CLOSE. guess t's not Cloud Runner then.

>>296248296248  You were really close.  I'll be honest, though, I really considered Cloud Runner for quite a while before I settled for Storm Runner.  I applaud your effort though.

>>296313296313 Saddly tis the other way around friend I applaud your effort good job mate.

>>297123297123  I fear we could go in circles for quite some time applauding each other, so I will graciously accept your applause... This time.  Next chapter may take a bit longer than the others, but should be up by tomorrow evening, maybe sooner.

yay!

Muffins!

and good job on the chapter! staches for you!

>>298234298234  Moar staches!  And thank you.  I would like to get Derpy involved, though...  I'll ponder this, whilst I write the next chapter.

>>297123297123  Ended up being sooner than I thought.  Classes were cancelled, and so I had more time to write.  Victory cheers all around!

>>299453299453  Dear lord.  I'm sorry, but I figured some suspense was in order...  I'll have the next chapter up soon, so don't worry too much.

>>299507299507It's okay I stil wuv you and your storry so don't worry much I just feel sad about it but don't worry my good sir I shall read some happy stories now

>>299633299633  That's the spirit!  I may, MAY, get the next chapter up tonight.  It'll be around 5 hours from now, but that's the price one pays for their work.  I I'm not happy with what I come up with, then it won't be up till tomorrow.

>>299652299652 Well you can't rush genius now you should get back to your life or whatever you are doing still like the story.

>>299674299674  Real life came, and went.  Work is pretty easy, so I had plenty of time to think up some plot, and then I wrote it all down.  Enjoy the latest installment, this time with 300%(I know I had none in the past, but an infinity sign takes time to find, and type, so make do with what I've given.) more links!

>>301258301258Cool.

>>301258301258AWESOME I was mentioned in a fanfic thank you :)I liked Fur Elise a lot very good song.

I like this story, i also like where it is going so good luck, ill make sure to come back and read next time you update.

>>304134304134  I'm glad you like it.  I'll try and get an update up tomorrow, or perhaps even tonight.  Although the tonight option is unlikely.

very interesting story so far, i can't wait for the next chapter, but don't think I'm rushing you.  By all means take your time

Good job interesting

Twist jokes

>>305372305372  Don't think that you're rushing me, I'm trying for a chapter a day, and if I can't make that, then I don't post a chapter.  I'm not going to sacrifice quality for speed.

>>305414305414  I figured that it was about time for the plot to really start going somewhere.  It's been progressing this whole time, but now we'll start seeing some of the good stuff.

>>305549305549haven't read chapter yet can't wait ...... Reading now.

>>306533306533Read and......

It was AWESOME :

i shall have to track this and give it a like

i play the piano myself and some of those songs are kind of hard to play. if he can play those with his wings and hooves then he is talented.

Good job on the chapter

I like it so far. Mustache get!

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Thank you, all of you.  At first I was writing this just for the sake of getting something on paper, to practice my writing, and things of that nature.  Now, though, I see that I have some fans (dare I call you that?) to please.  Hopefully I won't make any of you upset with how things go.  I still have quite a bit of story swimming about in the vast emptiness that is my mind, so fear not.  On that note, if anyone would like to suggest some ponies to make cameos I'd be more than happy to oblige.  I'll just need descriptions, and names.

That's all for now.  Good luck, and God speed!

Good job. I like it. Although I feel that Rainbow is a little too emotional than her state of mind in it calls for I feel that she is too weak. not saying it's bad but that Rainbow is too emotional.

When I saw storm runner you  cant imagine how happy I was I thought storm runner ever since he made runner his surname thank you so much!

Ok i know you wont say but this feels like a dash fic its all going towards her but it may be a story were you put main focuses on each girl to make them all uniquely special without doing it all at ounce but so far i only see dash or harem (harem incase you didnt know is basically polygamy more than one girlfreind) this really reminds me of some manga i read a whle back anyway great story cant wait for more!

>>308030308030  I  may have gone a bit too far with the emotion, but, as i wrote it, it seemed right.  I'll take it into consideration, though, for the rest of the story.

>>308369308369  Glad you like the name.

>>308408308408  There will be more focus put on the others, but not just yet.  And you're right, it is mainly focused on Rainbow Dash, because she is the primary interest.  I am familiar with the Harem style, and I, more often than not, can't stand it.  Some events are going to take place that will change things up.  I'm still fleshing it out in my head, though.

Stuck in a dreamworld for a year just to realize none of it ever happened. That would suck. (yes you can consider me a fan, I really like it)

"Yay" you finally moved the focus from rainbow and now onto other ponies.

>>311448311448  Yeah, a whole year spent thinking it's real life, just to discover it was all a lie.  What's going to happen next with Discord, I wonder?

>>315227315227  Indeed I have.  There will probably be quite a few chapters for each one, and MAYBE the main focus will shift.  Depending on how things go in my head, and in the story.

>>315425315425 Ok

Finally some love for AJ. lol

>>316942316942  Speaking of love for AJ, While at work I thought up the premise for a story that I will probably be starting sometime soon.  AJ will have a large role in the tale.