Luna has done something terrible. Can she ever be forgiven?
Cover artist is Clasherz, image used with his permission.
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I think my search is over. It's the next big thing!
If you want to find out who made the picture, just drag it into google search. It will probably be the first result.
I just tried to find the image, but the guy's DA account doesn't exist any more.
This is the best I can do for a source, but it is a link from when it was on EQD.
this story is so beautiful i think it's almost on the level of pen strokes!
This is a fantastic story. I laughed, I cried, I bawwed at the epic, celestial battle. If this does not become featured, fimfiction needs its rating system completely overhauled.
Well done.
Alright, imma read this story soon, but in the mean time, here's how to find the image in 5 easy steps
(they will probably load slowly, as they're loading straight off my network, which has only 1 megabit upload bandwidth (MFW: non-business-class internet)... but anyway, go here)
(don't bother opening these images up in fimfiction, just right click and open in new tab)
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Unfortunately, the rating system is dominated by clop.
Still, it got featured! Imma read this, and probably enjoy it from the looks of it! All aboard the hype train!
3256131 His DA is active its just a lot of his older work isn't on the page. http://clasherz.deviantart.com/ is the url. He still lives, changes his name a lot too which is probably why it appears deactivated.
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Why didn't I recognise the style. I've seen that guy so often. Anyway, yeah that's him. It just showed it as not existing when I clicked the EQD source link.
3256563 You can't find a lot of his old stuff through his pages, both tumblr and DA. Fortunatly I did find one place his old work still exists on. https://e621.net/post/index/1/crenair.
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Thank you everyone who pointed this out. I've contacted him.
well thank you for writing this fucking amazing fic you prick.
now im misty eyed and late for work.
try explaining that shit to a maintenance department.
hey gonzo. why is your scarred tattooed overmuscled ass crying.
oh just read a great luna fic.
a what?
my little pony luna is best.
fag.
fucking lovely you asshole.
upvoted faved and fuck you.
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YOU FUNNY I LIKE THIS GUY.
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
This was beautiful.
It still remains the case that I could forgive Luna for anything.
by the way dear author please tell me more will come from nightshade. it is a far too compelling charecter and premise to leave off here. no really, if you don't id love to.
p.s. the only reason i do not have anything up on this sight yet is the 15000 plus words ive had edited and ready to go between two storys haven't a good starting point in my eyes.
my pre readers and editors understandably want my head on a pike over that.
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Well, it's possible.
*like button*
a few minor edits and you're going to be on EQD
im not sure why i dont like this fic, it was on the first page all that about moody luna was like off.. it didnt fit character somehow
3257232 tsun tsun
. Dere dere
.
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You could say this story is...
Not Safe For Work?
Nice job on the story though!
3259089 Incredibly well done. And I too would like to see more of Nightshade.
Thank you for posting this, definitely a fun read.
Nightshade almost seems ready for a fic of his own. I like how you left it open like that.
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I cried.
I can't say I enjoyed this much. All of it seems like nonsense, starting from Luna firing her guards, to the over the top shouting, and even the battle. And I didn't give a damn about Nightshade. An orphan who steals a princesses crown? That Luna immediately takes on as her student? C'mon...
I think you tried to pack too much stuff into a 10k short story. You need time to develop characters and make the events plausible.
Also, I think your falling much too far into melodrama here. Very strong emotions are often better downplayed than just having them shout and yell and whatnot.
Excellent story. A pleasure to read.
I really like your stories, PrettyMonster. Between Clop It! and Unforgivable, I've noticed it seems your writing style... has a very cinematic feeling to it. I've enjoyed reading both stories thoroughly. (though Clop It! is still my favorite as there was more comedy, and it ended on a positive note) I've also noticed you seem to have a bit of a talent in working with flashbacks in your stories. You've done a really excellent job on both works, and I can't wait to read the next thing you write.
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Thank you. I love hearing from fans.
Is there any plan to continue this?
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This story is complete, I think I found an acceptable way to end it. I don't have plans to write anything in the same universe yet.
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I know, but I guess I want it to continue because so few authors I feel can adequately
give Luna the bitterness and guilt that she feels. A perfect example of this is when Celestia holds a vote to get Luna back her throne. Luna thinks this is a trick since the ponies are under her sisters control, but when the vote is actually held one objects. Making her realize that the ponies are not under her sisters' absolute authority. This leads to guilt for the spurn she gave to the Prime Minister.
When season 4 arrives I feel we will finally know some of the more intimate motivations and interactions between the two sisters, and the actions that led to Lunas down fall.
I feel if Luna was just more honest in telling ponies around her how she felt the whole "Nightmare Moon" thing could've been avoided.
That was always the failure of the canon, in a way - Luna and Celestia are never seen as confronting the consequences of their acts that day a thousand years before. Well, Luna, perhaps, but only in the smallest ways (over the legend of Nightmare Moon).
What this story does and does well as it shows that there are certain punishments that both of the Celestial Sisters will bear forever. Friends lost, trust lost, indeed a whole world lost and never to be regained.
It was an interesting canon to start, but the suddenness of the fight and the way the kept alternating between treating it as a reprehensible act and treating it as a joke thoroughly spoiled the atmosphere. The ending felt very rushed, without any real resolution between her and Nightshade. Instead of talking things out after freeing her from the stone, Nightshade just decides to leave without any closure and Luna lets her. She accounts for half the reason Luna has to live, and Luna just lets her leave?.
The story lacks continuity overall. You jump between scenes entirely too quickly because your characters have mood swings at the drop of a hat. We need more thought process, more dialogue, and more exposition on Luna's relationship/resolution with Nightshade in order to make this story complete. It serves as the entire pivoting point of Luna's 1000 years of development and internal conflict, but she's denied it seemingly without reason.
As I said this story has an interesting concept, but it suffers from being rushed. I hope you'll consider going back and remastering it at some point.
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Well I suspect you're probably right on most counts, thank you for the feedback and I'm sorry you didn't enjoy it very much.
I disagree about the ending though, I want to leave it settled the way it is and let the readers draw their own conclusions about what might happen in the future. You say the story is rushed, but how much more rushed would it feel if I just settled everything there despite the characters not being emotionally ready for it?
Amazing. Is there any chance for a sequel?
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There's always a chance but I'm not working on one at the time. Right now I'm more concerned about editing this so I can re-submit it to ED.
3428523 Well if it doesn't get picked up don't get discouraged EQD is a joke. Good luck.