TL;DR - Blueblood is a gritty alicorn superhero.
The coronation of Princess Twilight Sparkle… Blueblood can’t stand it! Somepony gets a pair of wings and suddenly they become royalty and the talk of Equestria! It’s just not fair!
When a mysterious guest offers him wings of his own and even more newfound abilities, how could Blueblood possibly refuse? The power is everything he’d ever dreamed of.
But when Blueblood discovers that he’s not the only pony in Canterlot with a mysterious benefactor granting them special gifts, he realizes that something nefarious is going on. Now, with his most bitter rival as his unwilling ally, Equestria’s most unpopular royal is going to have to find it within himself to be the hero Equestria doesn’t want, but definitely needs.
Cowritten by RainbowBob
This is literary gold.
This is going to be completely dumb- but awesome.
Partially ironic to me due to a discussion over alicorn characters in The Writer's Group right now.
Yeah, I haven't gotten past the description yet. Will read later.
...Oh, this I gotta see. I have a feeling I'm gonna be HIGHLY amused.
Edit: Yup, was highly amused. xD Please sir, may I have some more?
THIS...
This will be EPIC.
~Skeeter The Lurker
I smell forbidden romance, crime fighting vigilante and a whole set of mysteries and Twilight being in the story taking second, but with Blueblood it will take him about six to five more encounters before he notices.
3196255 No Romance tag, though.
I swear, if Rarity pops out for a screaming towards Blueblood I'm going to have to flip.
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It's a Comedy, funny pair-ups can happen even without romance.
Fayvorite!!!! :)
RainbowBob and Totallynotabrony?
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Pitch reminds me of Misfits in a way (people gaining random superpowers and everything goes awry).
Onwards, to reading !
No, wait, Bright Defender is... ? Really ?
It's just like a TV series, you're stuck waiting and imagining tortuous assumptions about everything and anything, only to be foiled and fooled in the next episode !
That messed up italics. Other than that, still good.
3196968 fixed
Wat.
So, two disguised alicorns, one more street-dumb than the other...
Oh, this is gonna be good!
So Bebe.
You now have a passenger riding in your head- one that looks like a nightmare version of you, complete with cat-like eyes, female, that keeps feeding your ego and is powered by envy. Who could that possibly be?
I'll give you a hint: It's not Waldo.
What the heeeeeeeelll?
Yeah, that's not suspicious or anything.
...
Well, she ain't a guard, that's for certain. Twilight?
Dang, if that is Twilight, she sure took a few ranks in badass.
So, a strangely forgettable maid in the middle of the changeling attack. Also not suspicious.
Hmm, that ending. Either a strangely friendly changeling, or Twilight picked up a few new tricks to go with her wings.
Featured.
I FUCKING CALLED IT.
Wait...
Doesn't this mean he's part Earth Pony as well (like a regular Alicorn)? Or was all he wanted wings? I thought he wanted to be better than Twilight. This is clearly not better than her.
Either way, good story!
3199650 Unless the same thing happened to her when she 'changed into an alicorn'.
Hmm, seems like an interesting start of a story, although I don't see comedy playing a big part of the story and might want to include action for seeing what has happened so far, but that's just my opinion. I'll be looking forward to see what events will occur from here as the story developed.
Keep up the good work man.
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As true as it may be, but does the romance play a major factor in the story or does it have a small part, if not sub plot? If it's the latter, there could be some small-time romances that can happen, but it won't contribute much in a story. Either way, it'll be amusing to see what happens from here.
You got italics on the underline words that are not part of inner voice dialogue.
3201287 fixed
3201370 Nice, and you had loaded the latest chapter as well, what a nice surprise.
Seems like a decent chapter, the story thickens to the possibility that Blueblood is not the only one who received the mysterious gift, although one would shuddered to think what leads up to it if the changelings are involved.
I had also found out that there are a lot of errors in this story were there are capitalized words that are not the first word of the sentences and unneeded punctuation at some other sentences. It's going to need some polish.
But still, good work man, keep it up man
facehoof: No comment.
OMG!
Candence. Ahahahahah. NEXT CHAPTER!
I dunno if Blueblood is in the right state of mind to be quick on his feet, but as soon as I read Cadance's entry I thought of him passing it off as a "really weird dream" featuring what is in retrospect a female version of Shining Armor.
3201775 Errors, well what do you expect, it was written in one day
I'll go back and fix 'em.
3201775 I read back over it and couldn't find instances of capitalized words. The unneeded punctuation is debatable, but could you point out the instances of both that you spotted?
This is brilliant. Please, good sir, tell me that you have a regular update schedule that I can look forward to?
3201874 Very well, I shall make a small list of errors that I saw.
There is an explanation mark and a period in the sentence
The word 'Simply' is unnecessarily capitalized as there is a comma before it
There is a spelling error for 'oogled' where you have an extra 'o' in the word.
Could use a revisement, I came up with the the following, but it could be optional:
Blueblood spun around, as he found himself facing down Princess Cadance that had just arrived at the kitchen.
Yeah, figured it was the maid in the closet (with the ovipositor?
).
Silly Blueblood, you'd need to find someone that actually loves you first.
Good luck with that explanation, Blues!
3202852 No regular schedule, but based on our pace so far, RainbowBob and I should be able to deliver a couple of chapters per week.
3202978 The first three things you noted have been fixed, thank you. All these errors could have been prevented by writing with Microsoft Word instead of Google Documents. The fourth thing you noted I don't agree with because it sounds like he's spinning while facing Cadance, not spinning to face her like I was going for. Thanks for you help improving the quality of this story.
3203109 The word "ovipositor" actually appears in our story notes, along the lines of "Never trust anything with an ovipositor."
3203164 If that's the case, the mysterious benefactor that's in Blueblood's head/body might be biologically related to him (to a degree) that he doesn't realized yet... I can't imagine how he'll react when he get's invited to the family reunion and then sees the truth, if such was the case.
Is this the thing that possessed luna?
Ok... some artist has to draw that costume.... It is like totally badass.
All the turn arounds the conversation took:
But the end result of said trainwreck conversation:
I can't wait to find out Blueblood's nickname. I imagine it to be something like Blueby or something equally horrible.
Oh dear, the suit design was going so well too.
I'm sure the villains will find all the white spatter marks very intimidating.
Hmm, sounds quite alright for a chapter, nice to see the hero assembling himself to do some more poorly-executed hero stuff. I would have to question Trudy's sudden change of attitude where she's becoming a lot more opened (and even playful) to Blueblood in this chapter, although it gives a nice touch to the conversation between them.
Based around the description of the costume, I can see that you are aiming towards the Marvel's Venom look with having a dark blue substance making up the body like the Symbiote. Now that I think about it, I can see how the similar concepts is connected to the story, which makes me wonder if Trudy will become quite attached to Blueblood as the parasite in his body that may hold influence to his mind.
Anyhow, nice chapter man, keep up the good work.
Super suit design is important, and this one seems decent. At least there's no cloak to get caught in things.
Did Trudy just invent spandex?
3222517 How about Blublo? That would DEFINITELY suck. I mean, how do you even pronounce that?
3222888 Well I'd pronounce blue-blow or blue-bow
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Well, he's got colour splatters on his costume, so how about...
"Blurblood"?
But if you want really annoying, she could with something like "Blubidiboo". That would drive anypony nuts.