Princess Luna is delighted to learn of her dear friend Fluttershy's crush on Big Macintosh, and enlists the "aid" of Rarity and Applejack to make their romance a success.
Five-star feature on Equestria Daily!
Glad to see this back on the site. [size=8]Yay![/size]
Oh boy, this should be good
Here we go again!
The bit that cracks me up every time in this is the first exchange between Fluttershy and Luna.
"Oh, girls! Are you all right? What happen—“
I can just picture Shy's look of appalled alarm change to to one of pleased resignation.
The interplay between Rarity and Applejack was hilarious, made my morning.
Great story! The characterizations were fantastic. If anything, the only part I didn't like was the climax with the timber wolves. It was a bit too quick and it seems really out of character for Big Mac to be all over Fluttershy like that. Nevertheless, good job!
Yes advice is back up! adding it back to my favorites!
I hate shippings.
You wrote a shipping.
I read it anyway.
I liked it.
I tip my hat to you.
LOL at Fluttershy having a wingboner.
Best MLP shipping story I have read yet.
Flutter-Mac with a pinch if Rari-Jack. :D Love it.
Yeah, I remember reading this before.
Read this on EQD
It was Great!!!
great story. one question though who was the first P.S. luna or spike?
Luna, making fun of Twilight.
I don't care if Luna wrote the PS, Twilight obviously like Celestia.
I read this before *hipster glasses*
Always love a good Fluttermac story.
I liked it, but Fluttershy seemed a little too... "Brash" in the end.
Just a reminder to everyone: This story is fucking terrible and I'm only reposting it because...well...I dunno, because
>>267765267765 Actually, Luna only wrote one of those postscripts. Assuming Spike wrote the main letter for Twi, the first PS could be Twi, Rarity or AJ (albeit most likely Twilight Sparkle). The second is most likely by either AJ or Rarity (with Luna as a maybe), and the last is probably Luna's.
Faved. A sweet story with a healthy spice of funny bits (The ending in particular cracked me up).
Twilight wrote the letter, then Luna, AJ, and Rarity got their hooves on it and added the postscripts (in that order).
I thought it was a bit strange that Luna risked Fluttershy and Big Mac being torn to shreds and eaten by timberwolves on the basis of faith.
THAT IS BECAUSE THE ENDING WAS WRITTEN EXTREMELY POORLY WHILE I WAS VERY DRUNK
THE WOLVES WERE NOT REAL. THEY WERE ILLUSIONS MADE BY LUNA; WHY IS SHE ALL MAGICAL OTHERWISE.
IT WAS ALL PART OF A SCHEME TO GET FLUTTERSHY TO SHOW HER STEEL
UNCLEAR WRITING IS UNCLEAR
Well, it's better than anything I could ever write.
>>269853269853 So, a hint of Lunestia then?
No. Luna is making fun of Twilight.
Like, she, Rarity, and AJ snuck up on Twilight and took the letter and added the postscripts, snickering to themselves because they are now HILARIOUS MEDDLING TEAM
>>271901271901 I still think Twilight likes Celestia.
Stop being so down on yourself. This was a wonderful story.
Quite well written. Though, for the love of Derpy, I cannot imagine Fluttershy being straight. My imagination is maybe lacking but I just can't.
: "Mah hero."
^ that scene was brilliant.
That's so weird. She's like the straightest pony to me.
Well, um, I will level with you. My imagination is very lacking. I cannot imagine anypony being straight really. Well, maybe except for Twilight, whom I frequently see shipped with Big Mac. Sometimes I even wonder what would become of Ponyville if there were no straight couples to reproduce. The village would get extinct in 2 generations, max.
You'll have that, when your population is like 75% female. Glorious flexy-sexy paradise
I actually wanted to review this a while ago, but then "The Incident" happened. Glad you and your stories are back now :)
Overall a funny story with a nice pacing and a fitting ending. The timberwolves (or any wild creature) were the perfect instrument to showcase Fluttershys tougher side. I enjoyed Rarity's and AJ's bickering the most. I like how you portraited Fluttershys feelings for Big Mac as being mostly in the physical attraction stage. I like that approach much more better, than two protagonists falling instantly into never ending love, because they are destined to be together.
But I think you won't be suprised if I say this story is nowhere near Eternal quality-wise. For example you jumped around between POVs during scenes. That's something that in my opinion destroys the flow of most story. And it's also something you did much better in Eternal. You also opend the story with the Ponyville weather report, which made me snicker a little.: trollestia:
I hope I don't sound too harsh, because I actually liked this story. It's just hard not to compare anything you write to Eternal.
Expect a comment on The Wayward Knight next :)
In the interest of full disclosure, this story was written, edited, published, and submitted to EqD in a single afternoon, over the course of which I drank about half a bottle of brandy.
So, yeah, not...erm, not my best work. Glad you liked it overall, though, I still think it's cute.
I'm starting to think I'm not drinking enough when I'm trying to write
But yes, "cute" is a perfect summarization for this story.
im not going to read the comments or all of them i should say but if you drunk when you wrote this why dont you mkae version 2 of it becouse this is a major (well the first part) tie in to eternal and also you are a good author when your drunk
If you can pull off a story like this in one afternoon while drunk on (possibly apple) brandy, it goes a long way towards explaining why Eternal is so damned impressive as it is.
I was wondering where this one got off to. Glad to have it back, this story never fails to amuse me.
Hmm... simple but very entertaining! I love it! so says I, Gear-box.
heh the ending cracked me up
That was cute.
This was a pretty great story. The only thing that bothered me was the constant bickering between AJ and Rarity. I mean, I know they disagree a lot (ya' know, being polar opposites and all), but they seemed to hate each other in this story...
But this was great, despite your alcoholism.
My Little Fiction: Brandy is Magic
Rarity: "Applejack, surely you can’t be serious."
Applejack: “Serious as the sun is shiny."
Me: AND DON'T CALL ME 'SHIRLEY'"!!
Nice job once again! I know I'm really late, but this impressed me. Thumb, fave, the works. No surprise this is on EqD.
"Like, she, Rarity, and AJ snuck up on Twilight and took the letter and added the postscripts, snickering to themselves because they are now HILARIOUS MEDDLING TEAM"
Well, that's the plot of G 4.5 done.