Come closer, I don't bite...unless you're into that.
Sombra, painted as a villain who simply wanted to be evil and enslave ponies. Why did he do what he did? No one asked why, they rarely do when you're already seen as a monster. Everyone deserves a chance to explain.
(I'm not finished with this story but I'm also going to start working on the other 2 Redemption stories and maybe finish The Sound of a Heartbeat.)
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I would read this story, but because of this:
I won't. If it is fixed then I will give this story a chance. It seems cool, but I need you to fix this error.
A fic where the baddies have possible redemption moments?
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That's a tad nitpicky don't you think?
Not too say that pointing out mistakes is not important. but deciding not too read what is obviously an interesting story souly because of a capitalization mistake? That's a bit far in my eyes.
Wow, it's doing well, who knows might get featured
Princess Glitzy, thanks for pointing my mistake out, I just made this the other night and haven't proof-read yet so if you see any other mistakes please point them out.
3175712 If a story has problems in their descriptions then I'm sure that they will have bad grammar in the story itself and that's my pet peeve. If I read a story and see several errors in the beginning then I will literally leave the story, even if it's interesting to me. I shall read this story when it's completed.
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Well everyone is entitled to their opinions I suppose.
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Well everyone is entitled to their opinion I suppose.
I for one think that I am going to follow this story and see where it leads
Also, before the grammar Nazis rip me apart, yes I'm going to proof read and edit out the mistakes in chapter two, I was in a bit of hurry to put that one out there
Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here.
3200490Actually I haven't, thanks for the idea though, was a little discouraged trying to go bigger when my first fic didn't start out well because some thought it was cliche. With any luck this could be shown on Equestria Daily
I say go with your original idea.
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Fixed that.
What other tags do you guys think I should put on this story? Romance? Sad? By the way sorry for the long delay.
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A general question to all of my readers, who thinks I should write the redemption story for Chrysalis and Gilda in chapters after Sombra or start a new story specifically for them like how it has been with Sombra so far
3367422 New Stories it would allow you more freedom to elaborate on them.
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New stories would work better, but all linked still
Alright, just a head's up, I'm going to work on the first chapter of Gilda's Redemption. One, so I can think about how I'm going to do the next few chapters of this. We're little over half-way through but I won't make any promises about the exact number of chapters. Hopefully hers will contain some elements that I couldn't quite fit into this one. It won't be so much dark like in this one but, hard to explain, just wait and see.
By the way, which do you guys like more? 3rd person perspective or 1st?
For some reason I was expecting him to try to eat her part way through the museum portion, strange thing is I`m not even a big fan of zombie anything really, great chapter and am enjoying it.
4227095 Glad you're liking it and that is sorta odd, can't say I haven't thought stranger things wouldn't happen in a story though. Also she's have a better chance in a zombie apocalypse, your odds are pretty good when you have scales, can fly, not to mention breathing fire, etc.
Wow. Posted new chapter and go to the main page and realized it got featured.
That's been a big goal of mine. Awesome! 
Well it is a well thought out story for a "villian" that didn't exactly get much attention outside of hissing the word "crystals", so from where I'm sitting anything to help build him is a welcome sight!
Thanks! And yeah I though it was unfair how he was portrayed when he had a lot of potential to be interesting, it's not an interesting character if their sole motive is to "be evil".
http://i.imgur.com/kQWV2.gif
Am eagerly awaiting the next part!
4798676 Oh I know you'll love the finale, I just wish more people were interested in the story
4798793 In the famous words of Jessie Cox: "Advertise like a shameless whore!"
4799011 Seeing as I'm a guy I'm not sure how effective taking my shirt off would be but I shall try!
4799183 Allow me to say it in a different way, I think you should find other Sombra works and read them. When you finish, message the author your thoughts on how they portrayed him and ask them to do the same. Will help you refine your view of Sombra while taking into account how your rendition might act in the different events that occurred. A good one to start with, if you haven't already read it, is Shadows Enigma by Note-Sketch. His version is a calm and collected version, much like your own from where I sit, and interactions are organic. Where you go from there is up to you, this is only a suggestion. The one I thought I was making at first but was much to vague apparently, I'm sorry for that.
4803709 Ah alright, I might just do that
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5191317 Alright, thanks. I'll fix it before the next update.
LOOK I MADE A NOISE!!!! Is that better?
naw just kidding! love the story so far!
5410105 Thanks! Oh trust me, it'll get even more interesting telling from what chapter you're on.
That... was freaking epic!!!
We need more epic emoticons!!!
5410555 Glad you liked! I'm ramping it up to the climax in the next few chapters I'm working on too...
here I am
Only thing that I noticed so good on you for being thorough with your work!
5528354 Ah, thanks for catching that, already fixed. Hope you liked it!
aw come on! theres gotta be more than four of us, right?......right? well, i still love it
continue good sir! so excited for sombra's change!
5529500 Lol I hope so. I'd publish more if I knew more people enjoyed it compared to say Playing The Heartstrings but I still personally love updating this one. Get ready for the super huge frickin battle as well.
5530872 yass!!!
Well I just read this whole thing in like two days. Slow start but got interesting fast.
5542854 Awesome, that's kinda what I was aiming for. You're in good time too. I'm writing the climax of the story now as well. Everyone will just have to wait and see if there will be a sequel or not...
Meh GIRD BEST SHIP EVA!!! nah just kidding, if you want me to I can try to fix some of the grammatical errors.
...That was very descriptive and I enjoyed every second of it. im surprised this doesn't have more views and likes.
5602556 Thanks! Glad ya liked it. Also not as many (Even though it's my longest story) because no one's doing the pants off dance off in it.
Odd, just got an update telling me this had updated.
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Everyone is entitled to an opinion and mine is to agree with you. Though the main reason I would leave a story is cause of Celestia so I can't judge. Not celestia as a whole but... it's hard to explain in words