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I woke up again, This time it must have been night because Twilight, Rarity, Applejack, and Fluttershy had all fallen asleep, and I could see the moon through a window at the end of the room. I nearly broke out in d'awwws. They all snore very softly in their sleep and their ears twitched a little. SO FREAKING ADORABLE. All the ponies slept in the guest chairs except Twilight. She had fallen asleep with her head on the bed next to my shoulder. She was standing on her back legs. I'm sure it wasn't comfortable, so I pulled her up on the bed gently placed her about a foot away from me. She kicked her legs a little, and I worried she had woken up. She continued snoring though so I relaxed. I'm so touched! These girls all decided to keep me, a newcomer they just met, company so I wouldn't wake up alone! At least, I assume thats why they slept here. Then I thought about how uncomfortable they must be, sleeping in chairs instead of their beds. Especially Twilight! I know now she's slept here at least three days. Spike must be worried sick! I thought to myself. I need to tell them to leave tomorrow... I sighed inwardly. Twilight must feel so bad about bringing me here... Wait... What if she sends me back?! I hadn't really thought about being here or staying here since I've got here, but know that I thought about it I knew two things, One: I'm not leaving. I have nothing to live for back on Earth, it was all taken away from me. Two: Twilight was problably going to try to send me back anyway. I began to panic. I was finally living in a world me and......her.... had always dreamed about living in! I'll be damnned if I'm gonna let the fact that she's not here bother me! I haven't been here long, but this is awesome! All I've seen is a hospital room for the biggest part of my time here, and everyone I've met here is already showing me more kindness than anyone, other than my parents, has ever shown me. I froze again. My parents! Noooooo! I started crying as it finally hit me in full force. My parents died. I never even got to say goodbye... I must have been crying really hard because my sobs woke up Twilight.
"What's wrong?!" She half-yelled, half-whispered. I jolted as I realized I'd have to explain myself. I decided to try a lie first.
"Oh..*sob*..I'm just..*sniffle*..So happy to have friends like you and the others..." I managed to get out. Somehow I had pulled myself together enough to talk. She glared at me. I'm getting a lot of glares from her...
"Don't lie to me!" She warned. I sighed and gave another little sob.
"I...I..I was thinking...about my parents..." I choked out. She immediately looked very guilty.
"Oh no! You want to go back to your parents and your life in your other world, don't you?" She almost whined. I laughed through my tears. Ironic how she had asked that right after I had been thinking about it. She gave me a very funny look.
"My...my...my....parents...died..." I mumbled. I then broke out into a full-on wailing sobfest. I'm pitiful. The others all woke very quickly and began glaring at Twilight like she had done something wrong. She problably would've been defensive at that moment, but she was too busy starting to cry with me.
"Oh dear... What's wrong Sharky?" Fluttershy asked gently. She trotted up to the bed. I couldn't help it. I grabbed her with one arm and Twilight in the other and pulled them to me.
"My parents are dead!" I sobbed Into Fluttershy's mane. She teared up and wrapped her forelegs around me. Twilight hugged me too and sobbed into my chest.
"Oh sharky...I'm sorry..." Sobbed Fluttershy. I should feel like a dick for making two ponies cry, but I'm so upset I can't bring myself to care. I tried pulling myself together, but it took a good 20 minutes. When I finally stopped Twilight and Fluttershy were still going strong, and Rarity and Applejack had tears in their eyes.
"Wh...why are you crying?" I said through my after-cry hiccups. Twilight looked up at me through her tears.
"Buh..because my friend's parents are dead!" She sobbed.
"But... you don't...didn't... even know them!" I said full of disbelief. How can these girls, who I've only talked to twice and only known for a day (counting only the time I've been concious) care so much?
"Thats true, we don't. But you're our friend and we care you! Nopony should have to go through their parents dying while they're so young!" Twilight whimpered. I gotta say, I really like these girls. They don't even know about the people that died, but they still cry...for me. I don't know any human that could say the same. Even I could only say "I'm sorry" when I found out my best friend's dad had died. (I hadn't known his dad. I did feel bad for him, but you know...) Their acceptance and emotion are both so powerful and abundant, they don't even seem to have a second thought about calling an almost complete stranger their friend. Wow...just wow... I didn't try to say anything else. I just pulled Twilight back into a hug and waved over Applejack and Rarity. They jumped up on the bed with us and joined the hug. We just sat there and hugged and cried for a few minutes. Then I had an embarrassing thought.
"Oh geez!" I shouted as I detached myself from the pile of pony. "I haven't showered in three days at least! I must reek! I'm so sorry!" I blushed as I realized how my scent must have been bugging them. They all wiped up their tears and looked at each other. Then they started giggling like school girls.
"Oh dear!" Giggled Rarity. "You've gone through so much, but you're priority is not wanting us to think you smell bad?! Even I'm not that self concious darling!" My blush deepened as I realized how foolish I problably sounded. I was glad all the crying was over though. I remained seperated from them on the bed, but I joined in on the laughing. As we laughed, I saw the sun start to come up and pointed it out to the girls. We all quieted down and watched the sunrise. I'd seen plenty of sunrises on Earth, but this one looked amazing even compared to the most beautiful there. The sun was just peeking above the horizon, and it washed the sky in orange and red hues. The clouds above appeared dark red, as if stained by berries. The sun reflected off snow that was on the ground at such an angle that it looked like the ground was covered in diamonds. It was breathtaking.
"Wow..." I whispered. Then the clouds made me think. Isn't Rainbow Dash supposed to clear those? Then I realized I hadn't gotten to meet her or Pinkie Pie yet. I turned to face Twilight. "Hey Twilight?" I asked.
"Hmm?" She breathed. She sounded totally content. I almost didn't ask about her other friends, but she had her eyes locked on me. It made me have to say what I was going to.
"Are there any other ponies you wanted to introduce me to?" Her eyes widened and she squeaked, jumped off the bed, and dashed out the door. (magically opening and closing it, of course.) Then I turned to the others that were on my beds. "Ummm... I like hanging out with you guys and all, and it was really nice of you to keep me company tonight, but dont you guys have jobs you need to get to? It'd be nice if you could stay, but I'd guess you're all busy mares."
"Ah'd normally be busy with ma apples, but the trees are all bare. Ah'm outta work fer now." Applejack said.
"I would normally be taking care of animals, but they're all hibernating or flew away for winter." Fluttershy mumbled. "And also I'd like to keep talking with you for now if you don't mind..." (squee! Fluttershy likes talking to me!)
"I've already released my winter fasion line and drawn the designs for spring way ahead of schedule, so I'm free." Rarity added. I grinned.
"Great! More time to get to know you guys!" I said excitedly. Then I realized It had been three days before I'd visited a bathroom. It's moments like this that make me glad I was born with a large bladder. "Ummm right after I use the little boy's room!" I shouted. "Where is the bathroom?!" All three of them pointed to a door on the left side of the room. I dashed into it and locked the door behind me. "Wow they have indoor plumbing!" I mumbled to myself when I saw the short toilet. It was pretty far from the wall, so I guess ponies stand over it or something. I relieved myself then pulled up my jeans. I then realized I had been wearing the same clothes since I got here. I exited the room and walked back in to see all three of them huddled in a little circle.
"Hi girls!" I shouted. They all fell back, startled by my yell. "Whatcha talkin' about?" They blushed a little, except Applejack.
"We were talkin' about where ya'd stay while yer here." Applejack stated bluntly. I laughed.
"Girls, first thing I would like you to know, there is no 'while yer here'. I want to stay." I waited for this to sink in. Rarity and Fluttershy smiled and jumped in a happy fashion. Geez these ponies don't contain emotions at all. Applejack however, seemed a little confused.
"Whadya mean yer staying?" She asked. "Don't cha miss your world?" I would have answered, but at that moment a pink bolt exploded through the door.
"Ohmygoshthere'ssomeponynewinponyville!" The bouncing pink pony shouted like a squirrel on coffee. "Ijustgottaintroducemyselfandgettomeetyouandthenwe'llbebestfriendsandI'llthrowyouawelcomepartybecausecomeon,whodoesn'tlikepartiesand--mnnnnffffff!!" Her rapid fire speech was cut short by a blue hoof being shoved in her mouth.
"Sorry about my friend here." The blue pony with the rainbow mane said. "She means well, but she's just so random." (OHMYGOSH SHE SAID IT!!!) Then she looked up at me and her jaw dropped. "T...t...tall!!" She squeaked. I laughed. Hard.
"Nice to meet you two!" I boomed, trying to scare her a little more. (yeah, I know I'm a dick.) "I'm Sharky, Sharky White. You are?"
"I...I..I'm" The rainbow one stuttered. I guess I shocked her pretty bad.
"Lemme guess..." I mused. "Your name starts with Rainbow." She gasped.
"HOW'D YOU KNOW THAT?!" She yelled. I walked over and waved her bangs in her eyes.
"Lucky guess." I lied. She regained her composure and talked again.
"Yeah, I'm Rainbow Dash, fastest flier in all Equestria!" She bragged. I rolled my eyes. She gave me a mean glare.
"Hey are you gonna take your hoof outta the pink one's mouth?" I asked.
"Are you sure you want her to do that?" Asked a familiar lavender pony. I hadn't seen her walk in, but oh well.
"Yeah, I think I can handle It this time around." I stated confidently. My mistake.
"Wowieyouarereallytallyouknow?Idon'tthinkI'veeverseenanyoneastallasyouinmylife.WellexceptprincessCelestia.OhandNightmareMoon.MaybeprincessLunatoo,butonlyifyouaretalkingaboutnightmarenight,becausewhenIfirstsawhershewasn'tastallassheisnowand...OHRIGHTIstillhavetothrowyouaparty!Itsgonnabereallyfunanddoyouwantstreamersandballons?It'snotapartywithoutstreamersandballonsohandacakeandpuncha---"
"Excuse me!" I interrupted. "Could you please tell me your name? SLOWLY."
"Oh, I'm Pinkie Pie." She said slowly, with obvious strain. "Now about yourparty--" I interrupted her before she could start hyper-speed babbling again.
"YES. About that. I have a feeling there's no way I can just avoid a party altogether right?" She shook her head no so fast I only saw a blur. "Ok then can you do me a favor?" She shook her head yes at the same speed. Where does she get this energy!? "Ok then, can you only invite the ponies right here? I start panicking in large groups. Which is why I don't like big parties." I tried to say that as gently as possible so I wouldn't hurt her feelings. Apparently it worked.
"Ohthatsnoproblem.Weproblablydon'twantyoutoscareeveryponybymeetingthemtosoonanyway.NooffenseImean,butyou'resotalleveryponymightrunawayandthatwouldn'tmakeforaveryfunpartyanyway!"
".....Riiiiight....." It was then that I realized That I wasn't in pain anymore. I did a few stretches and a few push-ups to make sure.
"Ummm Sharky...What are you doing?" They asked in unison. All 6. It's like they practiced it or something.
"Guys, Why am I healed all they way already?" They gave me a confused look.
"Whaddya mean 'already'?" Asked Rainbow Dash. "You've been healing for four days! Thats really slow!" I almost dropped my jaw, but then I started thinking about the episode where Dash broke her wing. I guess fast healing is normal for them.
"Well I guess it might be a long time for you guys, but a human with that kinda damage can be in a hospital for a week, and still be in a lot of pain for a while after that!" They all looked shocked. Then Twilight came up with an idea.
"Maybe it's just our world that makes healing faster!" Wow. Thats a really good explanation.
"Wow good thinking Twilight! That would make sense." I agreed. "So I guess that means I gotta leave the hospital now." Then I started thinking. "Oh no! I've got nowhere to go!" Twilight cleared her throat.
"Actually, I wrote to Princess Celestia about you, and she wants me to watch you and make sure you aren't a threat." I'll admit, it hurt a little to be called a threat, but her decision made sense. "You can stay with me and Spike at the library! Oh and while you're there, we can look for a way to get you back to your home..." She sounded oddly unhappy about the last part of that sentence.
"Actually....I wanna stay here, in Equestria. If you don't mind anyway..." Almost everypony in the room seemed happy with that, except Applejack. Again.
"An' why doncha wanna go back home?" She asked. The others stopped smiling and turned to me with questioning eyes. I took a deep breath and decided to stop dodging around and explain.
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MUST NOT POST CHAPTER 5. ONLY ONE A DAY... RESISTING URGE TO PLEASE FANS ON DEMAND...so hard!
Comments ( 14 )
This chapter has a noticeable flavour of being rushed somewhat.
Take your time, make sure that you pick every spelling and grammar error. Also, formatting. Be careful there.
And, if I may, too early. You keep that kind of thing for major character development.
Hey Sharky, Jamie here just re-re-re-reading your story cause I well got lost. I downloaded the story and started reading but I acidently hit the end button and well here I am(rock me like a hurricane).Now then I was reading the comments and your reply to Anteh's comment is GENIUS I rarly see anyone who can update even once day I'm glad I have your story in my group![]()
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I hate when I do stuff like this I have horrible memory and thats how I lost my place really.
finally FLUTTERSHY FTW ![]()
-Meet the friends part 2- (sorry, forgot which number this is)
You really should spend more time on this dead-parents back story. It a huge thing he's dealing with, but when you bring it up, you just kind of brush over it. It would be a lot more interesting and compelling if you spent more time with it. Actually, Sharky's mood swings are starting to bug me. He's depressed one moment, terrified the next, then calm and mischievous, then upset, then mischievous again. It's kind of hard to believe his past is really haunting him because most of the time he seems perfectly happy.
Again, the girls' attachment seems too sudden. They didn't even spend the night with Dash, so why Sharky? It's a cute scene, but it doesn't make a lot of sense with their characters.
Dash in particular was a little off. I found it hard to believe that she would be intimidated by Sharky, since she's the bravest of the bunch.
Also, I know Pinkie is hyperactive, but mashing all her words together is just obnoxious. You should really only do it now and then when she's especially excited. I honestly didn't bother to decipher her lines because it's too much work.
~Scribblestick, TWE reviewer
"Ohmygoshthere'ssomeponynewinponyville!" The bouncing pink pony shouted like a squirrel on coffee. "Ijustgottaintroducemyselfandgettomeetyouandthenwe'llbebestfriendsandI'llthrowyouawelcomepartybecausecomeon,whodoesn'tlikepartiesand--mnnnnffffff!!
Am i the only one who likes to read this and can without having to pause every now and then to figure out where they are?
Or am i just that weird?
>>2507224 Nope
You're not the only one.
On another note, a critique of this chapter.
This Chapter, (4), Was done well, except for the exception of Dash. Who probably would have "Are you a spy?
"'d him as soon as she met him. It was a bit out of character for her to act like a blushing filly. But again, 'Is all good'
. This is pretty obviously amateur work, but for a first time, this was done pretty well. If you come back to some of the earlier chapters, and edit them for mood, this would be an exceptional story, on the quality of a bestseller. Though, Its nice to read a work that isn't overly dramatic, and that gets you valuable unquantified number of internets and a mustache. ![]()
Thanks for reading this comment,
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