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A story of how two ponies, both opposites in personality, formed a bond of friendship and love that lasted throughout an entire lifetime...
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As a huge fan of FlutterDash I naturally hope this fanfic goes down the path of a FlutterDash romance fanfic and yet, if it were to be only a friendship fanfic my immense appreciation of this story would not dwindle. I have never attributed cute to anything more than a scene within a fanfic but so far I have caught myself going d'awww so many times that I feel justified in saying that this is the cutest fanfic I have read. Seriously, at the end of every chapter I was going d'awww and that is not like me at all.
Other than being absolutely adorable there are many other things I can say contribute to my love of these first four chapters. These can be small things such as the chapter titles or larger things such as the frequent details and description. Sure said details and descriptions are merely good rather than great, but they are more frequent than the majority of fanfics and this allows me to see things as you, the reader, intend me to rather than making a lot of the characters actions and general scenery up in my head. The style of writing feels simple yet appropriate, and allows for smooth transition between narration, description, and dialogue. Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash appear to be in character, and their interactions provide heart-warming moments, entertaining reading, and sweet bits of humour.
Now let me think of what I can say on the matter of improvement. There are a couple of minor mistakes such as misplaced speech marks and wrong words or additional letters, the common mistakes that you miss when proofreading unless you know exactly where they are. You use Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash’s names a little too often, and your vocabulary could be a tad stronger but otherwise I’m quite satisfied. So far this story is pretty balanced; it only has a few key strength’s to it but makes up for that with a general lack of weaknesses.
This fanfic doesn’t try hard to be funny yet it can make me laugh (chapter 1) nor does it try hard to make me cry yet it can make me feel sad (chapter 4). The story is progressing well, nice and slow, in particular to the relationship between Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy which hints at some spectacular development, and the interactions between the two characters make it all worth reading. So far it’s an adorable fanfic to which I gleefully await the next chapter of. Fantastic job, keep up the superb work!
So, so, so beautiful
. I swear this should have more popularity than other flutterdash stories. I usually go for the ones with romance in them (take my man card) but this is just as good as some of the greats. If you decide to do a romance, great! If you decide to keep it at friendshipping, great! With the work you've done I don't think this story can be ruined. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Cheers,
jangledorf
I don't think you should bring a romance into this, its good as is and it would just kinda ruin it for some of your readers if you brought that in. What you should do is bring it up to date with modern time. like into daily things with the show with twilight and everyone else and elaborate that Fluttershy makes more friends in ponyville and maybe you could have a couple chapter where she helps each pony out in a special way, or something like that. All in all its your choice so do as you want but anyways great chapter and story so far. Can't wait till the next chapter!
As I mentioned in the last chapter I of course would like to see this fanfic take the romance route. Would it not being romance stop me from reading and reviewing? No, but I would like it even more as a romance, and it would be nice to have another great FlutterDash fanfic on this site (especially one that does not have either of the two characters injured and either in hospital or caring for the other, which is the most common FlutterDash fanfic plot).
Plenty of chuckles were had as with the introduction of Applejack, Pinkie Pie, and Rarity (mostly the later) the comedy was vamped up. Loved every moment of Pinkie Pie's in character antics and Rarity's was a very believable first encounter between the two, and packed with humour. Details were present, Fluttershy's current situation has logical reasoning behind it (her unconstructed house and lack of places to stay are well explained), and all the characters were introduced smoothly. They weren’t forced to appear but made their presence known as the natural flow of the well paced plot. I also loved the reunion between Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash as well as the hints to the pairing (the part about marrying a childhood friend, even if Rarity was referring to a colt at the time, is such a tease if this does progress as FlutterDash).
The first criticism I noticed was the sentences which could flow better as it were. Many feel like they end too soon and what they detail could be either extended or have the second sentences details added to it, making a single smoother sentence, than two stunted ones. My main criticism for this chapter though were the numerous errors present, such as capitalising pony constantly (you don't refer to a person as a 'Person'), some other unneeded capitalisation, and out of place full stops. I could point out where each one of these errors is but they should be easy enough to find with another proofread.
I loved how the chapter unfolded, the events that lead to Fluttershy interacting with the other characters and of course, Fluttershy's first interactions with Pinkie Pie, Applejack, and Rarity. Here's hoping it will be romance in the next chapter rather than just friend-shipping but ultimately it is your decision, I remain eager for the next chapter. Great job, keep up the good work!
Ahem, to repeat FlutterShy and Rainbow Dash!'s comment. AWESOME! Just pure win good sir. A few grammar mistakes here and there, but nonetheless awesome. This is one of the few cutesy HAPPY stories involving the Mane Six's past, and its done well, so for that take my money!
Anyway, I hope to see you continue this. Tracked, good sir!
Image: http://cdn.head-fi.org/4/47/1000x500px-LL-47e009cc_Shut-up-and-take-my-money.jpg~Parajack 
Today’s introduction will concern the recent chapter you have sent for me to proof-read (this way I don't have to send you an extra message). I have received your chapter and have begun proof-reading it however I'm afraid it won't be available until Wednesday at best (I was a tad busy on Monday and only did a brief read and edit on Sunday) but I enjoyed what I read. Now to review this chapter, which once again I would have done sooner but I was kind of busy all of last week.
This chapter has a lot of things that I love about it, a brilliant relationship build up through the course of natural situations, well described and enjoyable to read winter activities, and the introduction of my third favourite character of the show, Angel Bunny. Your decision to make this romance pleases me and your execution of it more so. It hasn't suddenly become romance but is rather progressing towards it with small hints and development that occur in what I presume to be normal interactions between the two friends. Everything feels both believable and sweet; I can imagine Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash interacting like this in the show and though it may be chilly for the two characters every moment I have read warms my heart.
One criticism I have is in regards to story progression, for instance it is strange that the story leaps all the way to Fluttershy's first winter in Ponyville when a lot could have been said about the events between the last chapter and this one. Instead we are merely given tibbits about it which is a little disappointing. A personal dislike is the fact that Fluttershy is already friends with Rarity, Applejack, and Pinkie Pie, while I prefer it to be the case of Twilight being the reason that they all are close friends with one another, and that while they were acquainted beforehand they were not best of friends as it were. That is though a personal preference of mine.
This is not the most creative or exciting of events and yet that is why it works. That is why it works so well as a tale of friendship and romance, that is why it is so realistic, and that is why it so enjoyable because it feels smooth and normal and doesn't involve any sudden unexpected dangers or accidents or anything of the sort. Thanks for mentioning me in both the opening and closing author notes. Fantastic job, keep up the superb work!
Its review time...Yeah, I can't think of anything witty, or special to serve as an introduction. Hold on a minute, I think I've got one. Call me a minion and I'll give you my opinion 
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What I recieved to proof-read was a mighty fine piece of work, with great development and heart tugging atmospheric and emotional moments. What I see in now is an amazing piece of work, with beautiful development and heart tugging atmospheric and emotional moments. The chapter was good before but the additions of the dream sequence, some added lines, and the exploration of Fluttershy's developing feelings as she watches Rainbow Dash sleep make this simply wonderful, wonderful. The story is engaging and believable, its twists and turns being plausible particularly for the characters involved. Detail is great as always and while humour was rather light, the moments that were to be had got a giggle or two from me.
Unfortunately with so much new content and so many new lines a few word errors have cropped up. There small and few in number, though there is one repeated mistake of writing 'audition' as 'auction', an error I noticed in the version I proof-read and corrected but one that has resurfaced in this version. Other than that, well you know longer have the Derpy line of reasoning that I criticised in your draft so I guess that's it. Oh, you could probably do with some more description concerning the scenery, though the characters never did stay around in one spot for too long.
I always smile when I see my name amongst the author notes, and even if I wasn't tasked with proof-reading I would still be looking forward to your chapters just to read. I have high hopes for the next chapter and can't wait to see it. Fantastic job, keep up the superb work!
Been waiting for this to update! This is really gutwrenching and handled really well. I think Rarity's arguments weren't the best since those were more errors of judgement than a wilflul act of deception, but if it works...
I've really liked this story from the get go. It's been fresh and original. I just hope that you continue that and don't simply have it end with "pony x feels bad and runs away and gets into trouble and pony y saves pony x from something and everything it magically forgiven"
Can't wait for more!!!
Once again I must apologise with being so late with the editing of this chapter. I will try to be quicker and more efficient with the editing of the next chapter, which I will get on with once I have finished reviewing.
Rarity and Applejack are spot on in both characterisation and their manner of speech. The reactions and actions of the characters feel fitting are well explained without the explanations being forced, and said explanations even allow the show to be referenced quite a bit. Writing was generally decent to great, with plenty of details and description to help picture each scene and moment. Comedy was not completely absent but left when it the chapter needed to focus on the sadder emotions, which in turn were well conveyed and well paced.
A few of the sentences lack flow, and could have easily been expanded into one another. Considering other instances when I've made note of this criticism there are fewer cases of this here however the fact that there are some should be noted. Also, the pacing at the beginning felt rushed, not helped by Rarity's quick leave from the spa and almost instantaneous meeting of Applejack.
A well rounded chapter this is and a fitting follow up to the events of the last chapter. Again the ending leaves me wanting more and guessing as to what is to come, which I will luckily be able to find out as I begin proof-reading it. Great job, keep up the good work! 
I was also confused by the dream at the end. If I were to read the whole thing through I'm sure the fact that it's a dream would be immediately apparent, but since this is just one of dozens of stories that I read as new updates come out, I didn't remember that dream. A quick line indicating that it is in fact a dream would probably be a good thing.
I should have said something sooner about RD's feelings regarding Flutters' betrayal. I can understand why she refuses to forgive her, and most of it was because RD had not one idea as to why Flutters would hide the letter from her in the first place. It's much easier to forgive someone/somepony you hold a grudge on when you know what their reasons were for doing what they did. Not understanding leads to uglier scenarios. You gotta make closure, and fast.
As seen in the next chapter, everything becomes crystal clear. 
I see what you did there
Image: http://www.wwephotos.org/wp-content/uploads/2011/12/WWE-Edge-Entrance-with-Smiles.jpgAs I am staying up tonight to watch Nintendo's pre-E3 show I have quite a bit of time on my hands, and before I proof-read the chapter you sent me I thought it would be better to get this one reviewed first. Without further ado, it be reviewing time.
Overall it is decently written, description could be even better but what you have is decent enough and at several points shines. What shines more than it though is the pacing, wonderful in every scene in this story, each separate scene contributes to the story and feels like it gets the attention it deserves. Characters come out in show like quality, Twilight and Pinkie Pie especially so, as well as Rainbow Dash's taunts to the manticore, I can hear those very words coming from her in the show. The dream sequence was a clever contrast to the previous one, the manticore fight felt epic, the picture scene has vastly improved, and the interactions between Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy have solid and real emotions behind them.
Some names are used too often in sequence, Twilight and Pinkie Pie for instance, but there have been worst cases of it in previous chapters. Quite a few sentences felt too short without the reason of suspense to reason their shorter length, and these short sentences could easily be combined or attached to one another and thus improving the flow of the story.
A great chapter here, it wraps up all the drama well and leaves me satisfied. Yet the story continues after this and from what I've been reading, I'm glad for this. Superb job, keep up the great work!
Ah, this is beautiful. It reminds me of friends I made on my used-to-be-annual trips to Canada, who I used to miss greatly on leaving. I've always been able to make one or two friends in every place I've been, and in school I don't have over ten really good freinds.
This leaves me with the same feelings as I had at the end of My Little Dashie... you're truly magnificent at writing. I will definitely read all of your fanfictions.
Disappointingly short. This was, however, the only negative aspect of this chapter. Very well done, friend. You know, maybe when this is finished I can review it, gain it some extra viewers and popularity.
Refresh my memory: Have I made that offer before? I think I might have.
This remains one of, if not the, best Fluttershy/Rainbow Dash stories ever! The image of Dash and 'Shy shaking their rumps and shouting at Canterlot---I cracked up! Oh man that was classic!
I really love the way they support each other. I just wanna hug them sooooo much!
Too short! But at least you updated
I am so very happy. I've always tried to come to grips with Fluttershy's descent into madness while playing out a bad parody of Snow White. Not to mention she looked like she was going to eat that squirrel. I always felt the ending was rushed that way. 
You're still doing a terrific job, man. I can't wait for the next one now!
just read all 10 available and now I'm already sweating having to wait for the rest! Keep up the good writing, but you may want a proof-reader for some of the minor mistakes (nothing detracting from the story itself, but just a few things that make me feel the necessity to read things over to make sure I'm getting it right) but other than that, great work! 
I see that a few additions were made since I proofread this chapter and they have benefited an already great chapter, though there are one or two I'm not as fond of but that comes down to personal taste. Anyway I believe it is time I review this chapter.
I stand by what I told you before; this is a short but solid chapter. It is entertaining to read and leaves the reader with intrigue and a desire to read on. The humour was great, details were great; characterisation and the development of Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash's relationship are as always in this fanfic, great. I like how this one fits in neatly with the events of the cartoon and feels like something that could have happened, it feels like a believable extension of 'The Best Night Ever', and you use its connection with said episode to full advantage. The concluding part, as I have already mentioned, leaves me with a desire to see what happens next, and is also both sweet and funny.
I will not criticise this chapter for being short, its length is perfect for the story events and works out well. I will say that the dream/imagination sequence could have been done better, as in worded better or made clearer through italicising or bolding the words the moment it begins to shift to inside Fluttershy's head. Also, one of my corrections has been removed, the addition of 'the' before opera, as in your line it reads You’re so terrible that you make opera look like a rock concert when it should be written as either 'You're so terrible that you make opera sound like rock' or 'You're so terrible that you make the opera look like a rock concert'.
A neat chapter with beyond satisfactory events, I am impressed at what you have written, enjoyed reading what you have written, and eager to read more of what you will write for this story. Fantastic job, keep up the superb work!
The first update since I read all of the other chapters a few weeks ago. Although it was shorter than what I had hoped for, I still enjoyed it. Grammar is excellent except I noticed one mistake, "Okay, chances are THAT won't happen, but I so nervous!" I imagine you meant to say, "but I'm so nervous" Great stuff you got here though, I'm really enjoying the story so far.
Great chapter!! Can't wait for the next update.
Keep up the good writing.
Few small grammatical errors:
She stopped her hoof and shouted,
stomped*
Fluttershy’s smiled and nodded in approval before walking back towards the picnic table.
Fluttershy*
Angel and Opal were about to follow her when Rarity grabbed Opal, who hissed at her own.
owner*
AWwwwwwww.....poor Flutters!!! *hugs her* I'm sort of glad Dash DIDN'T have a crush on Fluttershy if only because it would've been a bit too...predictable I guess. This is such a greatly written story!! It makes me squee and cry and laugh all at the same time! ...well, in the same chapter anyway. Wonder how AJ feel's about RD?
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