When Rainbow Dash leaves to care for her dying mother, nopony is more heartbroken than Fluttershy. Every morning she watches the horizon, waiting for Dash's return.
First person. One shot. Sad.
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If it's a oneshot, you should mark it as 'Complete.'
No Fluttershy! Nooooooo!
I has a sad now D:
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Please write a sequel to this. It was amazing, so please continue with it.
Please.
Ohhh wow.
Mmmm I've faith rainbow will come back... le sigh.
Wow, that was a good read. Very good job!
That's the end? Fluttershy possibly dies because she was so eager for Dash's return she sat out in freezing cold?
I very much liked the story - it was well written (minus a few of typos, though the only one I remember is 'think' in Dash's last letter), unique and interesting - but that ending just seems completely abrupt and odd to me. Unless I'm missing something, which wouldn't surprise me.
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Since the story is in first-person past tense, it's implied that Fluttershy wrote it after the events. I agree it might not have been clear though.
thanks for commenting!
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Not clear to me, as it seems that Fluttershy died at the end there.
You must write another story. That is a great ending, but I really want to know what happens. Please.
Oh please oh please write a sequel! I need it!!!!
277648 I am, with take flight's permission, writing a sequel. Will upload as soon as I get an editor to go over it with a fine-tooth comb.
278636 After I get some feedback, I am uploading a sequel to this. Just need an editor...
Avett Brothers reference? Nicely played.
As far as the story, I thought it was a nice little one-shot. First-person worked well for this story. But I thought the ending was an abrupt change in the way the story was told. Everything felt far more rushed and unclear than before. Other than, that, though, you have yourself a solid one-shot here.
Good, but with no apparent closure. A second chapter would/might be needed to properly end this wonderful little fic. Very good, ending aside.
~Wywint