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  • 1w, 2d
    Temporary hiatus due to intense course

    I have tried taking it with a positive view, but considering the circumstances, I might have to put writing and drawing away for a few weeks. I didn't think it was going to be so time consuming, but the course is an intense 12-weeks course compressed into 6, and the physical training I haven't done in probably years. My classic "I will run when they come lookin' for me"ideology is taking its toll. Not only are the classes 4-5 hours a day 5 days a week, but I also have to study and train while trying not to die in the agonizing pain my body gives me the day after exercising, as if he were saying. "Dude, why? We had a deal with the bed and the couch!"

    So yeah, even if after the course is done I still have to study and get prepared for the physical tests, at least those extra hours I am currently spending in class... maybe I could write or draw. Until then, it is time to work hard to earn my badge.

    2 comments · 12 views
  • 18w, 23h
    As if I needed more reasons to be a slow writer

    I've always had reasons to not write/draw while following a specific schedule. Most of them being:

    -Gaming like a mofo.

    -Exhausted from house chores.

    -Simply not feeling like it.

    -Lack of inspiration.

    -Friends come to visit (extremely rare)

    If I needed one extra reason, which I didn't, I got one: I have a job. Well, several. Sort of. Being a freelance translator for several companies around the world, mostly. With plans on moving from Spain, my home country, to the US and saving to do so. Assignments aren't that common for now, but I've gotten a few, with the idea of becoming an official, professional translator in hopefully a not so far away future.

    With this report about my current situation, I bid thee farewell and I hope I'll be able to write and draw more.

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  • 20w, 1d
    Why I seem to be dead around here these days

    I've seen a lot of blogs these days commenting about fake suicide notes and stuff like that. Not a pretty sight. I was going through a bit of an ordeal myself, but I didn't feel like bothering anyone around here with it, so I moved forward. Anyway, that's not the point of all this, but it's true that the idea of being called out because of all the ones posting lies for attention really didn't made it easy for me to open myself here. But since I walked through this shit and lived to tell the tale, here goes the other reason I'm not too active here.

    I've always considered myself a comedian, though much more of a spontaneous kind of comedian than the classic, scripted in stand-up. It's why my short career as one didn't work. But as a writer, which I've been for almost eight years now, I decided to try and earn a living as a freelance writer/translator. If any of you have given it a try, you'll notice how troublesome that crap is. Allow me to expand on this.

    I have two sites I usually visit. One of them allows employers to set the job offers so only premium members can apply for jobs (it's a yearly fee of 120 bucks). If you aren't a premium member... well, there are SOME jobs that aren't set to Premium-only, but even then, to apply for the job, you have to pay 1 dollar. Just so it's clear enough for everyone, I'll repeat it. They charge you for applying for a job. If you're premium, applying is free, but if you're trying to earn some money for yourself and are starting, you're basically screwed unless the employer offers you to contact him via email directly. Other than that, you're hosed. Then they have the translation contests, which would be awesome to have something to show off and get you in the spotlight and prove your skills. But again, only uncommon language pair (say, Arabic to Icelandic) you can make submissions as a free members. As a measure to trim entries in the most common language pairs (mostly English to almost any common language known to man) you must be a premium member of the site. So no "prove your worth" for you either. Also, mastery of a translation assistant program is required in mot jobs, premium-only or not, and those bastards cost over 600 bucks. I dunno, there are expensive dictionaries, but those are quite useful. I have one, actually, and it works wonders. I know it's much more, but damn.

    Then there's the other freelancing site. This one at least isn't demanding when it comes to "you have to pay for apply", but it counters it with more bullshit. You have limited bids (times you can apply for jobs), and they regenerate very slowly (if you're a free user, you get another bid every three days), and of course, competing with hundreds of people. Not only that, but, while there's no way of making jobs "premium-only" in this one, the employer might demand to have passed one of the several exams the site offers to show your skills. And, of course, those cost money. 5 pounds each. Even if the exams aren't truly necessary, it's constantly encouraged to pass them to attract more clients. Again, this is balls if you're trying to start. Not only you have to think about all that, but most of the jobs have such a miserably low pay that you have to read it several times because you refuse to believe. It's very common to see offers where they pay you one dollar per 500-word article. Wow! A whole dollar! These guys are throwing money away like candy here! And don't even get me started with rush jobs! This was a real, I-shit-you-not" conversation with a client.

    "Hey, I need to get this 10 pages translated!"

    "Sure, when's the deadline?"

    "In thirty minutes."

    Yeah, that happens. And the pay is still shitty compared to the average translation rates. "Hire freelancers for a fraction of a cost," they say on the site. A fraction indeed.

    So while I still throw bids there and hope for jobs here and there, I'm working on another projects I'll keep you informed about. I'll still try to write little by little as i usually do, though. Until then, I'll still hang around every now and then.

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  • 30w, 3d
    I got interviewed at the MBS show

    About 3 weeks ago I was recommended for an interview at the podcast called The MBS Show. Last Saturday, the interview took place. You can see it here

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  • 32w, 3d
    I draw (horribly) too!

    So, after almost a month full of delays and mishaps, I was able to get my tablet. Suffice to say, I wasn't an outstanding artist before I got this thing, and getting used to it (and learning how to use it) takes time. Ever new drawing shows that I'm slowly adapting to it, but I still was a mediocre artist when I started. For any of you interested, there's actually a comic I'm working on that shares my spare time along with my writing, called Dice & Dining rooms. You can check it do the usual tumblr stuff. I'll try to keep everything (both writing and comic) updated at a decent rhythm (which considering my slow writing, that might not be too much of a challenge). I have a lot thought out for the comic already, and even if I don't get asks, I have material to keep the comic going.

    That's basically all I had to say. Oh, and a soon as I improve my drawing a bit more, I'll make the covert art for Edda's second book and submit it. Be patient, fellas, for I'll deliver!

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The six Great Clans defend the Empire, and life is peaceful. However, since the clans’ interests usually clash, that peace is really fragile. Unfortunately for the Empire, the Dark Lord has bigger plans now.

First Published
27th Feb 2012
Last Modified
13th Nov 2012

This would have had more exposure if you just posted each part once per day. Now I fear that it won't get much recognition. :pinkiesad2:

This is quite an interesting take on MLP. Setting it to a Fedal Japan setting. This is well writen out and the characters' personailities are kept intact while adapting them to the fedal setting. Il ove to continue seeing where this goes.

If I may ask, though, you said this is in the crossover category. A crossover with what, I may ask?:rainbowhuh:

>>266084

Glad you asked, though its a little known world. The crossover is Legend of the Five Rings, a CCG/RPG based in feudal Eastern Empire. It's a really complex world but, knowing that very few peole will be familiar with the main source, I simplified most of the elements and avoided the specific jargon. This should make the story enjoyable for all the readers.

Heh, I'm familiar with the source and I'm finding this quite entertaining.  Good job, can't wait to read more. :pinkiehappy:

>>267753

Really? Wow, That's awesome!

Really glad to have a L5R connoiseur as a reader. If you find it enternatining AND not insulting, then I'm doing a better job that I expected. I have a huge draft around here, and in order to fight the writer's block, I'm trying to get some random scenes from the future episode rolling. I'll take time, but I hope everyone will find it as awesome as I do.

>>267793

Heh, I used to play the card game, had most of the first edition of the RPG, and later the D&D sourcebooks for Rokugan.  Also read the clan wars series a long time ago.  Considering you're crossing over two very different universes, I think you've hit the right mix of the two.  

Finally got around to reading this. I might be unfamiliar with the settings you're crossing over with, but you seem to be letting in just enough information for me to follow the story.

Kudos. Would be tracking.

I can't tell you how happy I am to see this story here! As I said on Equestria Daily I love that someone ponyfied L5R.

>>266084 I highly recomend Legend of the Five Rings if you are into RPGs, CCGs, or interesting stories (they publish stories on the L5R website).

Ok, this story is pure WIN

On the chapter aspect: the chapters may be long enough to separate into 3 parts, possibly 1 chapter = 1 arc in the story, but that doesn't phase me one bit! The structure of this may make it easier for one to read, so that's a plus right there.  Although it is the longest fic (and still going), I am amazed you have enough inspiration to keep this going.  Kudos for the future!

On the content aspect: as stated above, this is LONG!  And it is not composed of shit at all.  The plot continuously adds to the much larger one, and keeps me going, enough that I would look for the next chapter button, when it isn't there.  Few fics do that.  All the characters, mane ponies, background ponies, etc. all of them blend in together as if they ALL have a purpose in the story.  The detail just paints a picture of the story so realistically, kinda like I have a movie in my head.  This is one fic NOT hastily, lazily, or apathetically written.  I wouldn't be surprised if someone did make a movie (not likely) out of this masterpiece waiting to become a masterpiece.  

On the preview aspect: the picture show Lyra the samurai kneeling.  At first glance, the mind would stereotypically assume it is full of action.  They would be mistaken by the dark and humble setting they are placed in at the beginning.  I like that view of things. The discription would be a tiny bit excluding, and a little misleading according to the story.  In my opinion it would be great if you could clarify and even give a little more of the 'appetizer', because with this amount of content, there should be a little more foreshadowing to what the fic holds in store for the reader.  

Since mustaches are given as a rating here, I hereby give you :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache: out of 5 :moustache:'s

Have a nice day!

Awesome chapter! And go Big Mac and Twilight!

It's godd every character has a story behind them and every thing that happens has a impact to the story.

So there are Void spirits...an interesting change.

I like the world building you've been weaving into these chapters.

Pinkie was awesome, I hope her and AJ will be all right.

Once again, you amazed us with 3 chapters that each make up one complete "episode" that is action packed and blood-thirsty. A true spectacle that is breath-taking and wonderful to read. The whole story plays out like a japanese anime even!

In fact, if this were an anime, I think the two opening themes for Sengoku Basara would be perfect for this story:

OPENING 1: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1ELt1B9r6y0

OPENING 2: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rj2ldRSHNzE

Anyways, the characterization is blended perfectly between the two source materials while adding it's own terminology and history.

This is truly one of the best MLP:FiM crossovers I've read, and can't wait to read more.

Anyways, I hope the two opening themes from Sengoku Basara help inspire you further with the story and setting.

Keep up the good work. :pinkiehappy:

>>617858

I appreciate those words. It's actually the thing that takes most time to make up and adapt in a way that's still loyal yet not disastrous. Relationships among clans are also an issue to take care of, but luckily most of the plot-related stuff is going smoothly and reviewers have little to no problems with them (and sometimes it's just something minor that can be easily fixed by rephrasing or adding some more worldbuilding or a piece of lore tu justify it).

>>618072

Wow, I haven't been an anime fan for years now (only a few of them caught my attention, and the clichés really started making me loathe the genre), but that looks like a pretty awesome one. I love the songs, and I'll surely check it out sooner or later. Thanks! :pinkiehappy:

I will mention this later on the blog too, but I have the exams in a couple of weeks, so the next chapter(s) will take a little bit longer to appear. Even though I have most of the basic drafts already made, writing them with all the study I should be doing (and that I'm NOT doing) will take time.

On an unrelated note, I'm not the kind of guy who drops references to certain movies/songs here and there very often, but I was hoping that somepony would be able to get the reference to "The Ring of the Nibelungs".

Check the blog every now and them to check how the story gets developed and reading some mindless stuff every now and then. :raritywink:

I don't want to be a doody or anything, but I did notice the lack of a space after a comma, before the word proceding the comma.  If you want, I can copy paste a revised version into a Gdoc.

>>949740

Hmm nah, I think I'll just check it once I have time. If it's only one lesser mistake such as that one, I'll be able to look it up once I have the rest of the new chapter in the reviewer's table.

Good things to know: After so much writing, I've improved as an author. That means it takes far less time to review the episodes, changing from the usual week or so to only 3 days (one day per part), which basically halves the waiting time. Salute to you all and enjoy the reading!

“What won’t be necessary.

Wouldn't what be that?

What do you mean by reviewing the episodes?

>>961828

Well, I know it's technically incorrect, but that's what everypony at Ponychan comes for: a review for their fics.

I know that the correct term should be proof-reading or edit, but I'm used to the term. And yes, I should've used 'chapter' instead of 'episode'. They're synonyms, but 'chapter' refers mostly to books and 'episodes' have to do with TV shows.

This is not a sarcastic answer to you, my grammar nazi friend, bear that in mind. Sometimes I want to make sure I'm saying the right words. Word choice is a pain in the flank for me, being non-native English speaker and such.

But yes, when I mentioned "review of episodes" I was talking about proof-reading and editing the chapters. There are a lot of things I used to have problems with, but luckily I've improved a lot with every chapter, so there aren't as much issues as with the first one.

We still have the classic "’he’ instead of ‘she’ or viceversa" issue, now 100% more frustrating because my "s" likes fooling around. Word choice, as previously stated, is a huge pain. So many words that mean almost exactly the same, but only one transmits the idea and effect I want. Also, clarification is an issue that I'm fixing in this incoming chapter, so dialogues will be easier to flow. Sometimes, as you noticed, edition has a drawback. When fixing stuff, some minor issues like spaces before commas that should be there but aren't or spaces at the beginning of paragraphs because I deleted/rewrote a sentence or the like.

We also have to avoid OoC moments. Even in a crossover world of samurais where the characters have aged around 10 years or so, the main cast is still the main cast. Unless explained or developed deeply (and with shown consequences), you cannot simply write a story where (spoiler alert for those who haven't finished reading Chapter 4) Silver Spoon bitchslaps Diamond Tiara for insinuating that she's a whore. That, my friend, even though I love writing complex scenes and convoluted political stuff, is my favorite scene for now.

Well that makes sense, as I come from a place where I don't know what the hell is on ponychan, and don't intend to find out.

But alas, you don't have an official Grammar Nazi on your team, do you?  May I do the honors in future chapters?

>>965683

Well, you actually offered yourself several weeks ago, and I sent you a mail to the address you gave me back then with Chapter 4 (full chapter, 3 parts, comments enabled) ready to grammar nazi the horseapples out of it. However, after 5 days and no word from you (not even opening the gdocs), I decided to send it to my editor directly.

I had an error.

So did your editor.:derpyderp1::derpyderp2::derpytongue2:

When will you update?! :fluttercry: :applecry: :pinkiesad2: :raritycry: :raritydespair: :fluttershysad: :applecry:

>>1098308

Chapter 5 is finished and has been sent to my proofreader. In a few days it should be up and ready to read. :raritywink:

Excellent read. Another 3-part chapter completed! :pinkiehappy:

I love to continue reading where this will go next.

And if this where ever a real tv show, be be great if it were done as a Japanese anime or the official FIM art style either way. Maybe a combo of both?

Anyways, keep up the great work. :twilightsmile:

>>1287746

Glad to see you again. Yup, it took longer than expected, mainly because a lot of things, most of them out of my control, but I hope the waiting was worth it.

However, I'm going to try and update parts separately as I mention in the blog entry, to avoid having you waiting so long for the reading. I still think that it might work because the parts by themselves can work as a mini-chapter and don't leave anything in mid-action.

About the art, maybe some day I'll draw art. I want to think that maybe i can draw the ponies as they are in the story and then, next to them, the humanised version. I feel stupid when I check the Drawfriend and find an Eastern style pony and squeak saying "Oooh fanart of my fic", and then realise that it's obviously not.I've also been talking with a pretty cool dude to commission an opening for the fic, but considering the costs, it might take quite long. I have certain economic goals at the moment, and I think that the opening for this fic is a luxury that can wait.

Only 1 part? not 3? Where are the other 2 :pinkiegasp:

>>1349239

I actually decided, after weighing several options, to update parts separately as soon as they're written and edited (the blogs have the answers, but, in a nutshell, I fell horribly bad for taking so long to have material to read.:twilightsheepish:) If I start getting comments about readers prefering to wait for the three parts rather than taking them one at a time, as soon as I finish with the chapter, I'll return to the usual style.:scootangel:

>>1349256 Ah, I didn't know that, seeing as I don't stalk your every movement and such :pinkiecrazy: It is interesting, but will be hard to get used too. If it is faster than your old update system was, and get us to read more often with shorter breaks between them, it will work out better in my opinion.

>>1349256

If you feel this method of updating is faster and better, then it's fine by me. Just as long as you update regularly, then I don't mind.:twilightsmile:

“So my good apprentice couldn’t resist the desires of the flesh,” complained Lyra with a huff.

Oh god. :pinkiegasp: :facehoof: :rainbowlaugh:

Anyway, the only problem I see is when Lyra, Bon-Bon, and Pinkie were talking about the Prophecy, Pinkie seemed a little out of character when discussing.  If I were you, I would write the scene where Pinkie would be stressed, but then interrupt Lyra/Bon-Bon/That other pony who's name I forget to try and make another point, and THEN settle down to a point where she is on the verge of collapse because of lack of sleep, talking to much and too fast, and othe reasons to slow down a bit.

Other than that, this chapter is fine.  Apologies for the lack of pre-reading.  There were a lot of tests, concerts, and fame of being on a billboard (FOR THE WIN) and my mom to deal with.  I promise this next one will be in tip top shape when I am done with it BEFORE you post it here.

>>1452521

Oh, yeah, that scene with Lyra and Bon Bon is one of my personal favorites, so easy to picture it :twilightsmile:

I actually expected the beginning of the scene (when she's practising with the meteor hammer) to give the impression that she's actually trying to keep the mind blank. Once she explodes, you notice that she was trying to keep herself distracted from thinking, but when Lyra asks her what's wrong, she loses it. Still, it's not that much of a severe OOC, for there's a reason behin it and could be acceptable considering how it's going. But I'll try to check it once I have time.

No need to worry, we'll see what we can do in the following parts.

>>1456953

Ok, it's just me and my ramblings.  Not to worry, I am at least 50% sane...:applejackconfused:

*looks at cover pic* :rainbowderp:

Instant fave, why did it take me so long to find this?:raritydespair:

I got the Legend of the Five Rings core book today, but none of the Void Kiho seem to be able to deactivate Maho like Pinkie did. Is it from the Book of the Void, or did you create it for the story, or am I missing something in the core, or what?

Also, while I can make comparisons to some of the clans, such as Jewel=Crane+Scorpion, Apple=Crab, Lore=Phoenix, Party=Dragon, and Rainbow=Unicorn, what exactly is the Wilderness clan? and is the Rainbow Clan also part Lion clan?

>>1854175

An interesting question.

The Kiho Pinkie uses against Trixie is called "Way of the Void" or "Kukan-do". Quoting the book, "neither the caster or the target may use any magic, kiho, technique, tattoos or other Rank-derived benefits." Which, when you're a magic-focused character, screws you beyond belief. Now, that part where the spell fades when it gets close to Pinkie's void-surrounded body, that's a bit of artistic license I took.

Now, while it's true that you've guessed most of the clans, the Wilderness one is the oddest of all. There's not a whole clan of tamers expect for two exceptions: the Yoritomo Storm Riders of the Mantis and the Utaku Horsebreeders of the Unicorn. As for the Rainbow being part Lion, you might say so, though they're more a mixture of the Unicorn (Moto and Utaku families) and the Mantis (Tsuruchi and Moshi families).

Bear in mind, though, that the strictness of Rokugani rules (and the ideal of clans) are counterproductive when writing fanfiction that's not Legend of the Five Rings. Sometimes, to make the story easy to read for both scholars of the universe and those who never heard of it, we have to simplify and soften concepts.When you start your campaign, you might have trouble with some of those, especially for samurai who take insults to their honor (or things that they perceive as insults to their honor) quite seriously. Etiquette is serious business, but for the sake of canon characterization and story, I overlook some of those rules every now and then.

What book is Way of the Void in? because I can't find it in the 4th edition core (though oddly enough it is in the 3.0 Oriental Adventures book)

>>1857856

3rd Edition Core Rulebook: Way of the Void, Mystical Void Kiho, Mastery 7. To activate, keep eye contact and spend a Void Point, then make a contested Void/Insight Rank roll. If successful, neither the caster or the target may use any magic, kiho, technique, tattoos or other Rank-derived benefits. Skills, Advantages, Disadvantages and Void Points work as usual. The Kiho lasts until you end the effect, lose conciousness or the target moves out of visual range.

>>1858309That explains it, I have 4th edition, not 3rd:twilightsheepish:

oh my sweet Luna... you mean to tell me that someone else besides myself knows and loves L5R? :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy: OH GLORIOUS DAY

I have one question Simon_oSullivan.

Which 'Legend of the Five Rings' clan is each of the six clans based on anyway?

>>4186393 Oh, well, this is a bit behind the scenes, and I might return to this fic someday. Anyways, to answer to your question.

Lore Clan (Twilight's): Phoenix Clan

Apple Clan (AJ's): A mixture of Crab and Lion; dependin on the characters you see more Crab and Lion or viceversa.

Party Clan (Pinkie's): Mostly Dragon, with certain control over the greater monastic orders since the Pie sisters are the leaders of each one of them..

Jewel Clan (Rarity's): A (slightly) harmonic combination of Crane and Scorpion

Rainbow Clan (Rainbow Dash's): Combines the military aspects of both Unicorn and Mantis.

Wilderness Clan (Fluttershy's): There's not an equivalent in the original L5R stuff. You can see it as a mixture of the Utaku horse breeders and the Mantis Stormriders.

>>4187133 I see.

So in other words, 'Summoners' are the 'MLP:FiM' equivalents of 'Shugenjas' I believe.

If that's true then I should aim for the title of a summoner of the Lore Clan because I love to combine all of my powerful ice elemental magic with all added bonus of jade magic to protect all innocents and destroy all evil at every same time!:twilightsmile:

What title of a chosen clan would you be by the way Simon?:pinkiesmile:

>>4189825 Oh, yes, I replaced "shugenja" for "shugenja" because, back when I tried to submit this to EqD, they told me to try and keep the Japanese stuff to a minimum. Shugenja summon the spirits of the elements to cast the spells instead of bending them to their will as classic wizards, I went with "summoners".

As for the title... I don't know, really. I've always been a huge fan of the Phoenix Clan (it's the one I started with when I began playing the card game), and my first character in a pen and paper campaign was a Phoenix ishiken (Void shugenja) who married a Kuni Witch Hunter and served in the Kaiu Wall. He was looking for a way to cure the Taint, which became out of the question when Daigotsu became the new Lord of Jigoku and made the Shadowlands Taint only affect those who embraced it willingly. But I still loved the character.

Damn, I really should return to this story one day.

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