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Octavia has always had an aura of class and sophistication around her, at least, that's what others say. Deep down inside, the cellist has always longer for an understanding of what causes emotion to be expressed. Are the lengths at which she'll go to learn these secrets too far? Maybe to some.

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lmagine

lmagine #1 · Sep 23rd, 2013 · · · Understanding ·

aftger

I think you mean "after"

breath taking

This should be "breathtaking", together.

Overall, a great story that's really interesting.

TheExhaustedBrony

TheExhaustedBrony #2 · Sep 23rd, 2013 · · · Broken Record ·

3244833 whoops! XD I'm typing up all my stuff on my iphone, so naturally, pressing buttons is a bitch. Thank you for the feedback though.

TheTobacconist

TheTobacconist #3 · Sep 23rd, 2013 · · · Understanding ·

I wasn't sure where you were going with this at first, but I ended up really liking it.

Corwin Freiss

Corwin Freiss #4 · Sep 23rd, 2013 · 1 · · Broken Record ·

I'm slightly disappointed by how short this story is. There is so much potential in the idea of Octavia "studying" the emotions and their causes and you apparently have the capabilities to use it. Why didn't you do so?

TheExhaustedBrony

TheExhaustedBrony #5 · Sep 23rd, 2013 · · · Broken Record ·

3246615 thank you for the feed back. I'll make sure that your advice gets put to good use. Aside from that one issue you found, did you otherwise enjoy the story?

Corwin Freiss

Corwin Freiss #6 · Sep 23rd, 2013 · · · Broken Record ·

3246709 Yes, that's why I yearn for longer version. The fact that Octavia went to perform after she commited murder showed perfectly how emotionless she is.

I was slightly surprised by the weapon of choice - hammer is usually reserved for extreme hatred - but considering what she aimed to evoke in Vinyl, it makes sense.

The beginning of Octavia's curiosity fascinates me. Seeing her train of thoughts when she switched from caressing the creatures to killing them would be very interesting.

PhantomChaser