After falling prey to a prankster, Luna gets revenge the only way she knows how.
Murder.
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Trials
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Trials
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Oh, Celestia. You cannot outprank a pony with a direct line to your subconscious. You can try, but you will go insane.
A great little tale of sibling squabbling between demigods. Thank you for it.
lol wat. This is amazing.
3116313 No problem, and thank you! I have a feeling people will downvote just for the description.
3116323 Thanks! Got to say, your avatar looks familiar...
3116338 I take other people's avatar and shove Bowser's head on it. I'm Skeeter the Bowser or Bowser the Lurker right now. Whatever name strikes your fancy!
I was hoping the prankster would be Discord, but Celestia is a fine prankster too. Good stuff.
It was...different. Yes. Different seems to be the right word to describe this story. Good job, Trials.
Thought ponies' hides would be thick enough to withstand sunburn.
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3118355 Oh, right.
Nice!!!
3117542 Which tells us something about how close the sun was.
Delightful mood whiplash. Delightful, I say.
Saw the twist coming, the irony was too obvious. But that didn't spoil the fun.
*spun
Also, if one character is speaking through multiple paragraphs, only the last paragraph should end with a quotation mark. If a paragraph ends with a quotation mark, and the next one begins with one, most readers assume that another character has started speaking.
So, Luna just used her only trump card, I think. Celestia's not going to fall for dream trickery again. Or maybe Luna could ACTUALLY do something atrocious, making Celestia think she's dreaming, only to realize that it actually happened. Not actually atrocious, of course, just something like turning all the cake in Equestria into sauerkraut. Lots of potential, here.
3328713 Corrected the quotation marks, and thanks for that, but I did a bit of research on the spun/span argument beforehand. Even though 'span' is the older form, it's still an acceptable term. It just depends on your preference. For me, I naturally say 'span' instead of 'spun'. English is silly at the best of times, especially when the old mixes with the new.
I have to admit, this is brilliant.
Sister... You may have your pranks...
But we may make certain you never have a peaceful night of sleep again! MWAHAHAHAHA!!!
In the words of a pony I know... "It. Is. On!"
LOL! Brilliant story!
This is amazing! XD
Oh, very funny. Not sure it warrants a Dark tag, but its absence would be a terrible spoiler so... do as you like!
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140 upvotes to 6 downvotes. Don't you hate when you're wrong?
I honestly wasn't sure what I was expecting. Pretty cool though.
This escalation in pranks will eventually result in the deaths of all ponies.
Luna has foreshadowed the tragic end more than she realizes.
It's up to to stop them... by KILLING THEM BOTH!! HEE HEE HEE HEE HEE!!
But anyway, I honestly don't think Luna would go this far over a sunburn.
The bitterness of NMM is still too fresh in both their minds. This would be a transformative reminder, unnerving Celestia greatly to think that her sister would be willing to even pretend.
3329043 Yeah, English is dumb sometimes. A lot of the time.
3332220 One day. One day, I will make a fic that you will like.
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3331285 I've learnt to like being wrong, actually. I've become increasingly better at it.
3332588 Well, you came close. I'm simply of the opinion that bringing up such a fresh wound would be something very hurtful to them both.
Maybe in a few hundred years they'll both be able to take a joke about Luna's dark side... but to respond to a sunburn by making your sister dream that you killed your entire race?
Duuuude, that just ain't funny.
There is such a thing as a prank gone too far and leading to an emotional schism. Now, perhaps you could have made a point out of that.
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I have absolutely no idea why, but your post compels me to comment.
>inb4 someone thinks I'm taking this shit too seriously or some nonsense.
>inb4 someone comments on the ">inb4" about greentext or 4chan or some bullshit that doesn't even matter.
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So dreams of messing with the celestial bodies in such a way that results in the entire land being flooded (and thus committing genocide via Ocean) is 'not funny' and is a 'prank gone too far', but Celestia screwing with the heavens in exactly the same way (though not "close enough" apparently) just for a little prank isn't?
Messing with the dreams of another, depending on the dream and your influence over it I suppose, can be pretty fucked up. Fucking with the planets and the stars themselves to the extent Celestia did is on an entirely different level of fucked up. Worse case scenarios for Luna's actions would be a spooked Celestia, a hateful Celestia, or potentially a dead Celestia.
The equivalent thereof for Celestia's actions were essentially shown in the dream, and results in a dying or dead Equestria.
I personally find a world destroyed and left in ruins by their rulers in the most obscure way possible -- manipulating their solar system with magic -- to be hilarious. Significantly more funny than a stupid little dream of the exact same thing am I right?. Ha ha ha. Funny, yes?
If Celestia -- the 1000+ year old being she is -- knew any better, she should have learned her lesson from that dream. Though the problem here is that Trollestia -- to the degree in which she would abuse her powers over the heavens just to give her sister a sunburn -- is, well it's just that: a problem. A proper Celestia shouldn't have even considered these kinds of actions as a possibility for something as petty as a prank of all things; but I don't want to go further into that, or the rest of this if I can help it.
lol i would have a volcano explode and kill there friends and family but make it look like Luna did it and when she try,s to put it out she cant all the wile pony's are burning to death around her.
3337199 You've missed the point. It's the psychology of the two sister under consideration NOT our opinion of their actions themselves.
Think for a moment: Luna has just returned from being NMM. A thousand years of bitterness and regret which have had barely a handful of years to heal.
And she thinks of pranking her sister with a nightmare about her giving into darkness again and killing all life on the planet...
Celestia's prank wasn't wise, BUT it wasn't something based on a long-standing and very deeply painful experience for both sisters.
I really do not think Luna would have done this.
3339814 I don't think Celestia would have done what she did.
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yes i agree
Hm, well that turned out rather different from what I expected. I was thinking Pinkie Pie or a royal guard or some other pony than Celestia would prank Luna, who, after having been gone for so long, wouldn't understand that it was supposed to be funny, so she would set out to literally murder that pony to exact justice for such an outrageous attack on royalty. Frantically trying to prevent Luna from succeeding, Celestia would finally manage to explain the concept of pranks to Luna, and that murdering someone to restore your honor went out of style a while ago. That explanation would probably come too late, of course.
This is probably quite a bit more believable on Luna's part, though, anyway.
I liked their interactions, and specially the idea of Luna pranking her dreams. Still, the pacing could have been a bit more snappy, it dragged at points and that did the story no favors.
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i felt the same way, it would have been nicer if they had exchanged a few less intense pranks before luna pulled that last one
O Luna
U so silly
While I saw the "it's a dream" twist coming a mile away, I'll admit that the "Close enough." made me laugh. Pretty great job, honestly!
That plot twist! I seriously thought Luna had gone off the deep end for a moment, then everything made horrible, wonderful sense. Some prank indeed!
My first thought was that Celestial had accidentally melted the polar ice caps.
I liked this story overall, though it is not without flaws.
The opening dream was a lovely retelling of Icarus, and it successfully pulled me into the story. It's by far the strongest part of the story, however.
I found it difficult to reconcile Celestia's actions with the character we know, or with common fandom interpretations. Her prank has the potential to affect many bystanders, while the results are petty and hurtful. While it's a little funny as a single prank, finding out that she has repeated the same prank several times (as best as I could tell) reduces the humor while magnifying the irresponsibility. A progression of increasingly-irresponsible pranks would have made it more believable.
That said, I liked the idea of Luna using the tides to flood Equestria, and her comment about bringing the moon "Close enough" got a good laugh out of me. That idea alone is almost enough to carry the story, but the rest is just not quite coherent enough to have kept me fully engaged.