Liz is a smart girl. She knows what she's doing, with only just enough drive for heroics and exploration to get her into (and out of) trouble. However, no matter how skilled you are you aren't ready for a swarm of unown to rip apart the fabric of reality and throw you into an unusual new world! Thankfully, the natives are understanding and quite helpful.
The issue comes up when her Pokemon team are spread far and wide across Equestria, and don't adapt to their new surroundings quite a readily as their trainer does.
(Pokemon/MLP crossover. Rating of 'Everyone' is pending at this time. If this story proceeds in a way that makes a 'Teen' rating more accurate, I will update it.)
Chapters (10)
Not bad. I spotted a few spelling mistakes, but over all well written. I'll be waiting for the next chapter!
Psh. Alright, ya have my attention. Will fav and upvote.
Hm, what pokemon makes a buzzing screechy noise...Beedrill? Fearow? I bet it's some kind of flying type, though.
Oh well. Moar pls
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Agreed with the fav holding off the upvote until I see more
I'll track your fic so I can see updates... but get an editor. your fic seems well written, but I can't read a Wall O' Text.
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If you have a recommendation for a more refined layout, I am willing to hear it! I'm used to tightly-packed text, but I realize that it might be more difficult for others to read.
Oh, so, Pinwheel forest.
Wait, does the Everfree have fire throwing monkeys?
Hahaha!
Dat Ninjask! Oh, how wonderful of a pokemon to use in this type of situation. I mean, it has to be Ninjask, right? Fast, claws, mask thing?
God I hope I'm right. Don't wanna sound like an idiot.
Definitely not regretting favoriting this. However, there are many grammar mistakes throughout. Many a times has Rainbow's name not been capitalized through the chase scene. Other then that...I eagerly await.
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Blast! I went through that twice to try and get them all! I'll go through it again to try and whittle it down more.
But yes, it's a Ninjask! I always felt like Ninjask never got enough love.
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Just put a symbol between lines during scene transitions to start.
The way you have it now, everything runs together and it's impossible to tell when something starts and when it ends.
Also:
That is the exact way anyone who just had pokemon completely explained to them with no prior knowledge would react.
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I'll try some horizontal rules next time, see if I can get those to work. If they do, I'll probably edit them back into old chapters. This is a learning process for me, and every bit of feedback helps me refine my chapters!
I really haven't played Pokemon for a while (last played G/S) so for those who haven't played in awhile you you link a picture of the pokemon in your text or even a picture in the actual text itself.
(((POSSIBLE SPOILER FOR THIS CHAPTER! IGNORE IF YOU HAVE NOT READ YET.)))
Ninjask is really known for his agility, although I think Yanma is one of the fastest Pokemon having Speed Boost and all. 
Most bug types are particularly fast though. A few minor errors, but nothing too bad. You might want to get yourself an editor to sort of smooth things out for you- proper grammar is one of the most important aspects of a story. I would more honestly read a story like "There was a man named Bill who liked pie." Than "there was a tall man with rough black hair who enjoyed eating blueberry pie". Still, you're pretty good grammar-wise and like I said, just a few minor errors. Sometimes though few errors matter though. 
I think that Pokemon's a Ninjask.
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Gold Mask?
Check.
Faster than fast?
Check.
Spamming Double Team?
Check.
Plus he/she's nicknamed Cica, from Cicada, and Nincada is a combination of Cicada and Ninja, so your story checks out. Also, Ninjask is the second fastest pokemon period, and it has Speed Boost.
I personally believe it evolved in the woods and there's a Shedinja hovering around somewhere too.
Better hope you don't happen to look in its back!
Please tell me one of the pokemon she lost was a Dark type! Please!
First comment on this chapter! Maple syrup, mmmmmm. I have a feeling there's still something out there...
Embrace it Rainbow...you deserve it
Anyways, now...you have me EXTREMELY curious about the next pokemon...lemme see, it interfered with technological devices, so it must be either a (Electromagnetic) steel type, or ANY electric type. Hm, I want SO bad to guess, but I know I shouldn't. I don't want to ruin it for anyone else/myself.
Also, still really glad that I subbed this story. I mean, it's really well made. Most of the time, I see people who try to slyyyyly slide their pokemon team into this kind of story, and it's pulled of really horribly and turned into one of those "OMG CHECK OUT MAH POKEMAN TEAMS HURR". However, you manage to pull it off extremely well. I mean, the amount of comedy is enough to keep my entertained, but the pokemon creates curiosity. It's like this is one huge mystery story( Which I'm sure it will become sooner or later :3). Either way, keep up the great work. You're doing a great job with this story. Also, I didn't even spot any mistakes. Congrats!
-Cyneryk
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Thanks! This is exactly what I was going for.
hoping for a
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3130330Luxray all the fucking way!
But in my opinion, I would think it would be either a Pikachu (or Raichu if it's evolved), or a Galvantula (Joltik would be small enough for it to go unnoticed, but I prefer Galvantula).
Also, does Liz have any psychic types with her? If so, I pray that one of them is Gardevoir. Gardevoir, best pokemon.
In "The Electric tale of Pikachu", Pikachu revealed that it enjoys chewing on wires and eating the electricity.
Interpret that as you wish.
And The horizontal rules in this chapter really helped keep each piece separate and avoided confusion fairly well.
I'm going to edit horizontal rules into the old chapters, then. I know they could use more editing than that, but for now I'm just going to do the rules to clarify scene changes.
Lets look at our clues here.
1: The pokemon uses a move guessed to be sweet smell
2: This pokemon interfeared with electricity
3: it lives in the forest
my guess:
torterra :Can learn sweet smell i think- big so it could of crashed into the electricity jar- Grass type=wuvs forests
Hold it! Rotom. Maybe...
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"Sweet scent" just refers to the syrup plot and all.
...actually, now that I think about it, I don't think any of the moves used in the titles (current or planned) are used in the chapters themselves.
I'm hoping for a Luxray or Galvantula but a Rotom or Magnezone would be cool to.
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Oh. But in the first chapter I guessed the unknown where using tick room to teleport her. In the second Cica talked using bug buzz. I thought a pokemon used sweet smell in this chapter because of the smell they smelled.
P.S.
I got inspired and started my own story based of yours when two cousins and there three friends and colleague get lost in equestria and lost there pokemon so I had an idea. what if our carecters met when both of them had the same pokemon and they found it but the pokemon can't recondnise them so they fight over that pokemon.
Do you already have all the pokemon and there nicknames figured out? If not I suggest:
Rapidash- it could live along with the regular ponies and might be able to talk pony.
Eevee- Eevee could past as some kind of fox and i'd like to see a bond be made with a regular pony and Liz will have to separate the two new friends and maybe start the pokemon training biz. in equestrian.
Feraligator- Liz's starter causes chaos in equestria and animal control 'takes care of it' and animal control won't let it go.
Nick names:
grass type: boy: Weed Girl: Daisy
Steel type: boy: Rusty Girl: Gem
Electric type: Sparks or Charge
Woah! Slow down there! I appreciate the attention, but I already know where this is going! Roughly. I HAVE decided all six Pokemon. It's a bit of type coverage, a bit of how she can get them, and a bit of what's fun. No, I am not going to blab about what the team is.
For the later chapters i would suggest that you double space in between each paragraph as opposed to just indenting. This tends to be much easier on the eyes for the reader.
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ME HAVES AMAZING IDEA!
Why not for each new pokemon if you haven't decided nicknames yet :mustache: (Pause for the mustache effect) hold a contest for the names!
Just an idea!
Um, feel free not to answer this but was Liz's starter one of the starters from the game, like Bulbasaur, Chimchar, or Oshawott? Or was it a different Pokemon?(like Ash getting Pikachu)
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Aha!
I can say that since she did not go to a professor (as was mentioned in the recent chapter) she does NOT have a standard starter! What she has instead I'm not going to say, but I think there's enough information in the story so far to at least make guesses.
(Hint: the Pokemon itself has not been mentioned. Rather, the circumstances in which she got the Pokemon are the clues.)
3188907 Hidden hints huh? Huzzah a hint hunt it is!
possibility of Flash or an external fire source.
possibility of Rock Climb
coupled with
means she got a Pokemon from Goldenrod City in the Johto region, the gym leader, Whitney, favors Normal type Pokemon. Whitney She uses a Miltank and a Clefairy in her first match in Heartgold and Soulsilver. Ignoring the Moves we can safely assume Liz obtained a first form Normal type Pokemon from the Johto or Kanto region. This should at least narrow down the possibilities
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3192290 took a bit to get a list, I stuck to pure normal types and weeded out some of the rarer Pokemon. Tell me if I'm close.
From Kanto: Rattata, Clefairy(Cleffa), Jigglypuff(Igglybuff), Meowth and Eevee.
From Johto: Sentret, Togepi, Aipom, Dunsparce, Snubbull, Teddiursa, and Miltank.
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Okay, okay, her starter is in your post somewhere.
That is all the more I will say.
Unfortunately, Now you'll have to wait, as she won't pick it up until 4th or 5th... and I have a horrid writer's block.
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Is there anything your followers can do to help?
HAH! I KNEW IT!
I KNEW it was either Magneton or Magnezone! I had a hunch from the very beginning!
I've been waiting for this to update. Nice work, bro!
Iz in your generator eatin your electrics!
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A buffer. I had a number of chapters written before I posted the story, I only needed to refine them, and I've been writing more since I've posted it... but by now that buffer is gone, and I may slow down on chapters.
Speaking of which, the next chapter may be shorter than the ones before it. Not sure right now...
The body switching thing is actually quite easy to explain, you see when a body is transformed through either magic or technology subconscious memories are often times implanted into the brain, not in a way that the transformed being has new memories of using their body but so that the brain knows how to connect to and control the new muscles and, occasionally, bones.
With Twilight and Spike the mirror implanted the memories through the spell that transformed and teleported them.
With Liz the Unknown most likely used their psychic powers to implant those memories, although it is possible that the natural magic of Equestria had something to do with it.
The Doctors control of his new body could also be explained through Equestria's magical field but I'm partial to the idea that the Tardis used it's physic circuitry to implant the memories of Quadra pedal movement in his mind.
I wonder if she had an empty spot in her party when cica evolved... SHEDINJA MIGHT BE HERE! YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY!
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No offense for all the people who are hoping for Shedinja but I think it's unlikely.
Most trainers don't have more than one of the same type on there team unless they specialize in that type and from the story so far, Liz trains Pokemon of every type.
I’m doubting that she will have Shedinija.
Hate to be an pessimist.
SkittyLikesMLP
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Also I think that Lost Deep is using the pokemon he thinks don’t get enough love.
Everyone wants Shedinja for some reason.
Everyone tries to evolve magneton when they catch it.
Just another point to put out there.
Okay, seeing as I don't see this coming up in the story itself...
The reason that Ohm is just a Magneton is because Liz is from Jhoto. At this time, there is no way to evolve Magneton in Jhoto! Nowhere has the requisite unusual magnetic fields to cause the evolution, and Liz doesn't know enough about Sinnoh or Unova to know how Magneton Evolves.
I am partially doing "I don't think these Pokemon get enough love," but that's not what I'm mainly doing. I'm mainly trying to figure out how Liz's Pokemon journey went, and what Pokemon she would have from that. She didn't have a normal journey, that much is obvious, but she didn't have one as blatantly main-character-screaming as Ash did. No hidden forest villages for her!
The tricky part is coming up with a personality for each Pokemon...
As for Shedinja: it's complicated.
What comes next? Darkrai? :P