• Member Since 22nd Aug, 2013
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ThegoCarter110


I'm one of the most inconsistent writers here.

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(Canceled due to no longer caring about writing and being burned out on colorful horses.)

Well, things could be worse. I find a portal to Equestria but instead of keeping my orignal body. Fate has some fun with me and makes me a rabbit that reminds me of a cartoon character. But hey, like I said, things could be worse...


Like becoming wanted, screwing up most chances to get friends... Oh wait.

Well... Lets see what I can do to fix this... If I can that is.

Chapters (14)
Comments ( 84 )

I am not going to lie, when i first clicked on this story i thought it was going to be awful, but when i read it, i kmew i was wrong. +1 like and fav.

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Thanks you, have no idea how much that really means to me. This is my first time EVER writing A story and feed back like that for the first comment made my day.

OH in other news both the first chapter and the second chapter where typed out on my PSVita so yeah it kinda was A pain.

Honestly I would have wen't into the last of us.

I would have loved to meet Ellie.

I hate to say this but the next chapter might take longer to make. Everything I wrote down got deleted for some reason and I will have to remake it to the best of my ability. Sorry

I suppose this accurately describes the category, all right!

Good story :twilightsmile:
Needs an editor very badly :facehoof:
But all in all it's probably one of the most original stories I've read!
Also whenever you say something like
"He's a bunny" you don't need to capitalize "A"

3117700 Sorry it is a REALLY BAD HABBIT my parents had me do when I was younger and I have a hard time breaking it.:applecry:
but thank you none the less thank you for your time.

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I know the feeling
I spell friends "freinds" involuntarily :facehoof:

3131631Meh you still had it better then me. before MLP was on I always used to think "friends" was "frends."
ill be honest, although a good chunk of the spelling errors in this story are because of me writing on a PSVita. there are some that are just flat-out my fault.

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Don't sweat it :twilightsmile: a lot of other [INSERT SPECIES HERE] have the same problem, you just need to find a good editor, but trust me when I say this, the better the editor is the more mistakes they find :fluttershyouch:

You've got a few spelling mistakes, but a good plot. Liked.

3138078Thank you for atleast liking the story but I dont know how having a editer works. I hear some people send emails of there chapters to there editers.

but my problem with that is my PSVita cant copy/paste... That or I dont know how to:twilightblush:

So unless im told otherwise I dont know what to when it comes to getting a editer, untill I can get my own computer to write on that is.

Tresspassing, Suspicous Activity
Multiple Accounts of Attacking
Guards, Resisting Arrest,
Causing Mass Panic And Chaos.
REWARD FOR CAPTURE:
10.000 bits

Seems a bit much, don't it?
Unless they knew with absolute certainty that he was in league with Discord or something. Doesn't look like they know yet though.
Maybe if you added something like espionage or suspected to commit treason. That would be serious enough to warrant such a high amount.
It made sense raising the bounty after he was seen using a weapon against a guard though.

3166799Hmm... Ok I will fix it:twilightsheepish:

I made the bounty REALLY high though because he is probably the first outlaw (not super evil bad guy like Discord) Equestria has seen in quite some time. I mean with a princess like goddess and the most over reacting civilians even known to man, I would expect the reward to be stupid high........

But umm I do see this is a issue. Sorry

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IRL I dont really hate Sonic, but im still not a fan. Honestly its mostly just Tails I like. :twistnerd:

Personally if I was sent to Equestria I'd rather be a Manakete

Manakete: Legendary Race in the Fire Emblem Series [Can turn into huge dragons when using Dragonstones] [When not in Dragon form they look like Humans, but have pointed ears [Like elves and dragon wings

3244370 Meh I like Taguels better :trollestia:
(Yes fricken sue me that I like a RABBIT BEAST better then a dragon -wink- -wink-)

Ok I hate to say this but I might not be able to make another chapter in time, but (people who DO care) fear not for I am going through the first 3 chapters and editing them. I have the first chapter done right now amd might work on the next tomorrow.

I find this very interesting, will be waiting for the next chapter.

It's O.K.. I did spot various errors though.

Why did he have to say THAT?:rainbowderp:
You never say THAT!:facehoof:
Well Carter, Trixie, we hardly knew yeh.:ajsleepy::fluttercry::pinkiesad2::raritydespair:
Ok, I got 20 bits on chockatrice.:scootangel: What? It seems almost every other story with the old Everfree is rather the ponies meet a Mantacore or Timberwolf/s. So I think a hen's egg hatched by a toad in a dung pile is due to rear it's ugly head.

Ugh... not to be rude, but please get a editor and paint me like one of your French girls.

3495091 Dont worry its not rude to say im a bad at editing. Trust me I know I am.:ajsleepy:

I just have no freaking idea what having a editer is like.

After all, im restricted to writing on a PSvita so I dont get the pleasure of having things such as copy and paste for example.:raritydespair:

So for that reason (unless told other wise of coarse.) I dont know abut getting a editer or not.

Save Trixie, hunt down cockatrice and force it to turn filly back.
Loopholes ftw! :pinkiehappy:

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When I typed that, I had no idea you were typing on a Vita. In that case, it looks really good. Not as bad as when I saw someone try typing a whole chapter on his Xbox, which is good, and still better then some people who use an actual computer, which is a great accomplishment.

my brain said : why not grab the cockatrice and turn it towards the manticore, and proceed to beat the stone manticore with the cockatrice until the cockatrice dies, and then lure the manticore away so the filly can save the day

Dang... Looking back to the first chapter of the story. I can't help but feel impressed by how much I got better in comparison to this and my latest chapter.

When I get done with this, I'm gonna have to rewrite this and the next few chapters.
But until then, im just gonna make a few edits every now and then when ever I reread them.

3942494 It truly is a relief knowing people still like this story.:twilightsmile:

go hero!! :eeyup:
with Trixie as his bumbling sidekick :trixieshiftright:

Heroooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo

Huh... Didn't think everyone would want another hero story... Oh well, I know where to take the rest of the story now. :pinkiesmile:

hero [ for the love of god shepard no! i said spare him not blast his face in!]

hero.
and can' wait to hear about what happened to Trixie.

4883762 Although I I'm extreamly happy about your offer, I'll sadly have to decline.

The reason that I'm declining is that I honestly don't think I would need an editor for this story... At least not anymore for the new chapters I can make.

That and I have zero clue on what having an edited is like.

I wouldn't want to waist your time on stupid questions that I should already know the answer on.

So for that reason, thank you for the offer, but apology's for not accepting.

5119761 If people wanted me to write Carter as a evil character... That's probably what I would have done.

After all, making an army of idiotic rabbits might not do too much good in the long run for the ponies.:twistnerd:

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yes ... the carrots fields GONE:scootangel: THE brockili fields would be next , the wonderful pit hazards and caves around town and best of all

THE FLOOD resulting from tunneled trough water and sewage lines

:pinkiecrazy: Pony ville will have to be evacuated as the rabbits tunnel through it....

...:unsuresweetie: wow the changelings could have just copied and pasted him to the farming community's and forced them to surrender... after all giant scared rabbits break doors and windows in panic. :trollestia: plus rabbit infestations are likely a nightmare to remove when their small and the teeth cant bite a hoof off.

Well... I hope they have a taxi I can use.

NOPE! >:D

5346604 Oh, you're the guy who put my story in the Hiatus Library.
Well thank you for giving me motivation to complete this chapter.:coolphoto:

i whould like it to cut to the clone and see there reaction to the clone and questioning it.

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