At a quick glance, the grammar and sentence structures seem right on the dot.

Very well-done.

YES! DIAMOND TIARA FICS! Interesting enough to. Can;t wait for more!

a bit clumsily presented... but a thought provoking angle on things. It IS rather cruel that someone would be dismissed as useless simply because they were born into a wealthy family.....

I LIKE IT! 2 CELESTIAS

Oh wow....this is really wonderfully written and a very fresh and interesting idea. I like Silver Spoon and it's always interesting to see a more-or-less sympathetic presentation of those two and what makes them tick. That last sentence was...actually a little chilling and sad. Well done.

The idea, while refreshing, needs a better execution. Some parts of dialogue didn't go smoothly and you had difficulty separating it from actions.

Overall, it's okay. It needs loads of work, however.

Tracked.

I had this looked over several times, as well as by an English major. Not that I'm adverse to suggestions- that was just there so you can understand when I say "I looked over it pretty well, and can't see anything horribly out of place about it, so I'm going to need examples of what parts could be improved or not beyond just 'it needs to be done better'." I'm open for improving, but since I can't exactly see what's so bad about it, I'm going to need the bad parts to be pointed out. Otherwise, what you have it about what you'll get, sorry.

At last, some Silver Tiara action. I just wish it was a romance.

The story is alright but its lacking in feeling and insight; what I mean is, you were trying to be mysterious about their problem but it just came across, to me at least, as confusing, and there just wasn't much reason for Diamond Tiara to get as upset as she got, you make it look like she's a completely unstable emotional nutcase -it feels very out of character.

Actually, I see a bit of romance there. This was even better with more reading.

It sort of brings up the oddly bad treatment of these two girls. Gilda gets redemption and lots of stories. Trixie gets redemption, a Mane Six shipping and tons of woobie points. But two little girls, just getting by and potentially able to change as they grow get the most horrible hatefics. But this one was beautiful. I wish I could thumb it up more

Poor Silver Spoon and Diamond Tiara-no wonder they are so nasty.

Interesting idea! I wonder if they could redeem themselves and become less useless with time? I've heard some alternate interpretations of what those marks could mean.

In any case, thanks for writing! Love to see more DT+SS fics.