The primise is good, but you need a pre-reader bro.

O hell yes! This on here all of my yes!

Of course the first new Sparity fic in days and i'v already read it on DA

Been waiting for this to get on this site

you know what truth fuck you

>>588420588420 Thanks mate. My stories aren't meant to be A+ stories really. I want to write because I find it fun and showcase ideas I have. Besides, you should've seen my earlier works I think you would've fainted from how bad they were.

>>588439588439 You have a DA account? Who are you there?

>>588468588468 Read this on DA as well I take it?

>>588499588499 What?

>>588513588513 same as I am here just replace the _ with 0's

>>588622588622 Oh okay then. I'll try to hunt you down.

>>588510588510

I think we should share early stories then, mine are rather coma-inducing. I can get behind the writing for fun idea though.

I swear, I have a bit of luck with grammar but story-telling isn't within my skill sets.

I also tend to skip grammar when reading, unless you wrote them in text-speak or Zalgo. Oh god, or... Zalgo text-speak.

Really good. You do need a pre-reader though to catch all those grammar mistakes.

>>588633588633 I just commented to one of your comments earlier today lol

>>588672588672 Do I even want to know what Zalgo Text Speak is?

>>588763588763

... the stuff of nightmares.

>>588702588702 Grammar is not my strong suit sadly. I write stories for fun and to showcase my ideas. I know this story is riddled with grammar flaws and I'm not striving to be perfect. If you saw my earlier works, you'd have a fit with how bad those were.

>>588770588770 Methinks I don't want to know, correct?

>>588794588794 Only if you want to. IF you don't want to pre read this, then I won't ask you to.

>>588947588947 You were asking to pre read my story correct?

>>588950588950

Correct. I'd consider it rude not too, it being your work and all.

Edit:

>>588977588977

Cool. I'm confused as to what just transpired, but cool.

>>588970588970 Well if you really want to, then by all means go ahead.

Is the guy above saying fuck you yo something in the story?

Will it has been a while since i read this a couple of months but its nice to have it here where i can follow it very easly hope to read more soon.

>>589005589005 I don't think he's saying fuck this story or something. I think he's trying to help me out with the grammar issues.

Glad to see you can track it here now.

I swear I've read this already. Maybe it's just the oh so similar plot :s Oh well, loving it so far, keep it up! :D

>>589138589138 Some ponies have said this was similar to another story, but I thought of this one before I read said story.

I like but Twilight is being a little bit a an ass to spike

>>589429589429 Well compared to how she treated Spike in season 1, this isn't that bad. Don't worry, she'll learn that she was being a real jerk to Spike.

>>589454589454 i hope so

>>589457589457 She will, I guarantee it.

>>589461589461 well then i do believe that this conversation has reached its end so i will leave you wiht these worlds

murg nulan rut rut yipp erol

"Uh, that depends. Who do you think I am?"

"Somepony new in town! PARTY!!!"

>>589616589616

nice story

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>>590540590540 Thank you!

Great story so far can't wait for more

>>589616589616 what are you thinking pinkie knows everything

>>590813590813 Thanks.

>>590836590836 Yeah, but her powers of omniscience are trumped by her propensity to say the most amusing things. For example, her inability to comprehend sarcasm.

>>592332592332 Your message isn't appearing.

AND THEN HIS NIPPLES BURST INTO FLAMES

>>592526592526 Erm.....what?

wow awesome can't wait for the next one TRACKING

>>593298593298 Get ready for an update then.

Very eeenteresting. Strange plot twist, I like it.

Just a quick note, you prob shouldn't capitalize "ah" (Applejacks "I"), since it isn't spelled the same.

Oh yeah, your story has soo many tags. Does this story really have adventure and dark?

First

awesome few errors but AWESOME

what a twist

>>593540593540 Where was that mistake at?

>>593550593550 It will have darkness and adventure in it. It's still early in the story.

>>593556593556 I know this story must have a lot of grammar errors, but at least it's not as bad as my earlier works.

>>593567593567 I think you mean

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"Well this has been fun and all, but Ah reckon it's time fer me t'head on home."  Applejack said.

and the paragraphs after that.

>>593604593604

I know. I'm just thinking that this must be a really impressive story to have all those elements.

what a

since none of you said it right!

I foresee this story to be quite an Epic

My reaction to the answer to the cliffhanger:

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NAILED IT!!! XD

>>593869593869 Now that's clever of you there. Well done.

>>594053594053 I aim to make it so.

>>594472594472 Thank you.

I'm being honest here... when i was reading this chapter, i thought to myself, "why doesn't he just say that she should say that he (sparkey) was visiting ponyville for a week and spike was on royal buisness for the time? I mean that explains all of it, doesn't it? But I guess the writer knows what he's doing... I've written things a LOT worse and it came out half as good as this."

>>600169600169 Well Twilight was in a panic. She was forced to come up with something and that's the end result. Don't worry, I know what I'm doing.

The revelations will soon be upon us.

>>601804601804 They'll be here soon.

if knows is he cursed now

its okay

>>605018605018 The curse will be revealed in due time.

>>605622605622 Thanks.

>>605927605927 sorry i was reading 3 stories sim-simo.... at the same time and i meant to post awesome on this story

>>606061606061 Thank you!

>>606128606128 your welcome, here have a flutter

>>606172606172

>>606362606362 YOURE GOING TO LOVE IT

>>606454606454 I DO!

>>606479606479 fine then kiss it

>>606487606487 Fine.

>>606494606494 just asking but..... do you know any good story featuring spike

>>606502606502 Well I have one called Circus Days.

>>606522606522 th first fic ive ever read pretty good but a tad too ermm.... fussi fussi namby pamby baby story, not bad or anything, not at all but it made me happy and it was good but at some point i wanted to make a twist where spike dont just turn around and tell them to leave but threathens them too, like

'' LEAVE I DONT NEED YOU TWILIGHT, I DONT NEED ANY OF YOU''  says spike feeling more power than ever, shadows moves up his body consuming him, anger. pain, hurt, he felt it all coming to him as his body started a new form of grow, his scales darkened, his eyes turning red with fury, huge wings riping though his scales covered in blood, fangs so big and sharp they could pierce metal, his claws grew longer and sharper and his body feel forward making him stand on all fours, he looked at twilight and the others seeing their faces full of horror, a final time before the shadows made a buble around his body, the ball turned smaller and spike disapered, but before dissapering he gave a evil laff that could make discord cry and nightmare moon run for dear life. WE SHALL BE BACK IN ONE WEEK, BY THAT TIME WE SHALL NO LONGER BE FREIND'S, WE SHALL MEET AS ENEMYE'S

something like that

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pooor little guy D:!!!!!!!  great fic !!!!!!!!!!! :D

>>609340609340 Thanks mate!

wooooooooooooooow 0: awesomeeee fic !!! hahahahahahahaha  poor boy xD he forgot to pay AJ for da apples hahaha groooooooooooove XD

Epic story brohoof /)

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>>618712618712 Thanks.

halleluja  ive been waiting forever on the updates but whatever what i do you allways seem to make it through thank you

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>>619011619011 ss2sonic picture! YES! Love that artist!

>>619018619018 me too he is awesome, here is my favorite

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>>619043619043 Here's mine

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>>619043619043 Here's mine

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>>619052619052 i knew you would chosse that pic

I like where this is going

>>619077619077 For some reason it's not showing up for me.

>>619106619106 Thanks! More to come soon!

>>619111619111 i right cliked and chose open pic

i shall wait for the next chapter

Interesting turn.

>>620557620557 Thanks.

EPIC FIGHT INBOUND

This is getting good!

>>624233624233 YES!