Daring Do and fellow adventurer Red Glare find themselves in a pernicious predicament as they are dragooned into doing some desert dirty work for the villainous Al Miraj. Can they survive the treacherous tunnels and retrieve the mysterious Amulet of Kaboo? Will they make it to the Mountain of Ra before their luck runs out? If you wish to know the answers, read on...
Henna Baba of Ra?
At least they didn't catch an illness, like Wilted Dizzy Knee.
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Luckily, you can only catch that in the Magic Kingdom.
Fantastic story from beginning to end. Wonderfully pulpy and engaging. Extended a bit, it'd be just the thing for a rainy afternoon.
Also, dat Rocky and Bullwinkle reference.
Huzzah! From the maker of "Windfall" and "Earth and Sky", an update!
Ohh, this looks good... I'll just put this in my "read" list...
lol, the short description...
That cracked me up
Looks like there's some Belligerent Sexual Tension between Daring Do and Red Glare.
Is it odd that I saw the Rocky and Bullwinkle reference as soon as Kaboobie conjured that hat?
Thanks for the story!
Again? That trick never works!
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If you put two pulp adventurers together that's generally what you get.
I am quite eager to read this, as it looks pretty interesting.
However, I noticed a few paragraphs in that you repeatedly forget hyphens. Example: an evening gown that was no longer quite so form fitting. Add a hyphen when you do things like that. Just remember: The noun-verbing object needs a hyphen between words, as do the noun-adjective, such as needle-sharp, and noun-verbed object, like poker-faced.
You don't need to fix it, but I thought I as a Grammar Nazi should bring it to your attention.
Loved it.
So the Camel Genie's name is Kaboobie. Hmmmmm, why does his name and description sound so darned familiar to me.......?
*thinks about it for a minute or two, then it clicks*
Ahhhh, I remember now! "Kaboobie" the name of the winged camel (non-talking, except for the typical camel noises) in the old Hanna-Barbera cartoon from the 60s (when I was a kid), Shazzan. It was one of my faves.
Thinking back, though, I don't think that that Kaboobie had a goatee or a top-knot, or wore earrings, or other jewelry. Sounds like you combined him with the Genie Shazzan. Well done, and thanks for the l'il trip back into my childhood.
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OH HO HO HO HO! YOU'RE MOST WELCOME, O GENTLE READER!
"Wrong hat?"
"I take a seven and a half..."
*Grins* Very nicely done. Daring is always great fun to read when in the hands of an author who can help her shine. Nice nod to Bullwinkle too n_n
Oh wow. That was a great chapter. I love your sense of humour.
A few things that stood out to me:
The idea of lazy ancient temple/artefact repository contractors using "off the shelf" security bits in their designs and not bothering to change the default passwords is deliciously barmy.
That was a nice immersive touch. 1/3 of the dominant culture in the world has the ability to fly, so of course the designers would take that into account.
Looking back to Indiana Jones, you are right!
I never really made that connection before.
I love it!
It would be interesting to see Daring give a lecture at a university about the history and development of temple traps.
Team Miraj is blasting off again!
Grand theft carpet? Only in Sadle-Arabia I suppose...
And that is where Angel Bunny came from...
Overall this was an excellent little Daring Do story. I certainly enjoyed reading it.
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Ho ho ho! Thanks most kindly for reading my little tale. I'm mighty glad you enjoyed it!
Thanks especially for commenting so extensively, 'cos that's my absolute favorite kind of reader!
(And super duper mega bonus points for using the word "barmy" while you did so. Coming as I do from the other side of the pond, its usage tickles me immensely. )
Loved the uh oh tiles and the Rocky and Bullwinkle reference.
Think you for this most awesome amazing story !!!