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Neon Czolgosz
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A ginger figging reference in an MLP fan fiction.
You. Are. A. GREAT. Writer!
And you earn many mustaches.
3040800 dude only three mustaches? I think he deserves
on a scale off 5
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I thought there was a limit to how many icons I could put up, so I figured I'd let 3 stand for 3,000,000.
"Slumber buddies"?
That's really really gay.
I've never read a gay clop before... This should be interesting!
Will read as soon as I get home so I can... Er, "enjoy" it, we'll say...
Also, is this like the appetizer to the fabled Spike/Big Mac clop you keep teasing? I don't think I've ever seen Spike on the receiving end... Or giving end, really, besides Behind Closed Doors. Come on, Mr. Axe! I wanna see Spikey-Wikey hikey his tail for Macky-Wacky!
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Well.. That WAS interesting.
.... Thumb up for you!
Eww straight. Oh. Oh wait a minute...
Your short description doesn't make any sense in terms of punctuation. May I suggest fixing it up? If you read it aloud it sounds awkward as all hell.
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Semicolons are used in place of 'comma conjunction' when a particular conjunction is implied by the sentence structure, in this case, 'Scootaroll sucks at kidnapping, but is a surprisingly good listener.' Can't see the problem, m'fraid.
3041464 It is indeed correct in terms of punctuation, but it sounds pretty awkward.
I think this is sexy, and I'm completely straight.
Had it been Diamond Tiara and Scootaroll, it'd been right up my alley. As it is, I can still sense the sexiness without getting turned on myself.
Does anyone know who Zephyr is?
I get Gold Watch = Diamond Tiara
Scootaroll = Scootaloo
Applebuck = Applebloom
Soprano = Sweetie Belle
Blue Chip = Silver Spoon
But I can't figure out which r63 character Zephyr is!
Things I realized I wanted after reading this story:
*Knowledge of what Elusive's parents were smoking when they decided "Soprano" was a perfectly good name for a colt. Why not just name the kid "Castrato" while you're at it?
*A story where Dash takes Scootaloo to the pony equivalent of Chippendale's.
*More stories with figging, because ginger up the butt is always funny to anyone who doesn't presently have ginger up his/her butt.
*More stories that consider the amount of societal pressure that may rest on Diamond Tiara's shoulders, and similar little-considered aspects of largely reviled characters.
*How Scootaroll acquired such comprehensive knowledge of Ponyville's fetishes.
*A pony who is actually named Prince Spycraft von Gossiptown The Fourth.
Well done, Chuck. I don't normally read M/M, but I'm glad I made an exception for this one.
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Rumble
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This is my favourite comment so far and I love you for it.
...I ain't no Bronystories!
Sexy and hilarious is rare enough in clopfics, but you did both very well. I usually don't care for same-sex stories, especially on the M/M side, but you made this very enjoyable to read. I'm only saddened by the lack of anal and the short sex, but the build-up itself was fun. Kudos.
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I consider you a true master of sexy and hilarious, so that means a lot coming from you, thank you.
3042521 Me? I'm average at best, I just have a grammar fetish. Glad you think so, though. I'm off to read some more of your stories right now.
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If you leave comments I will have the warm fuzzies for the rest of the week
3042537 For what it's worth? I enjoyed your Gilda/Mayor Mare story, if only because you made it a believable pairing and the characters were well fleshed-out. Surprisingly, I've never seen MM as a stressed-out politician who curses like a sailor behind closed doors.
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Of course you aren't. I don't know what you're insinuating.
3042537 Do you see that thumbs up button? Yeah, it has offically been raped! (By me) This story was hillariously arousing, I can not press that button enough to show you how much I loved this story. GREAT WORK! :D
Stop opening up my head and narrating the contents, Chuck.
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That's my job, matey.
Damn that was hot. I was so close to a fourgasm... I got to three and a half
Some tense errors, but the story was so good I forgot where they were immediately after reading the next sentence.
Could we maybe get another chapter?
This is the best story ive read in iver a year, at least.
“We always share beds and sleeping bags when we’re camping or sleeping over. We’re slumber buddies.”
“...five minutes ago you were dribbling my cum and what you just said is still the gayest thing to come out of your mouth all night.”
I laughed soooo fucking hard there
pff ahahah this story was great...humor and yet romantic haha o ham you should deffinetly make a sequel pls its just too good XD
Good Job
3041464 Ignore him, he's just been listening to The Lonely Island.
3046089 "...But seriously, what's up with the lack of anal? I sat through nearly 4k words of build up, and you didn't give me any ass pounding for my trouble. That's not cool, Chuck. I thought we were friends.
"
Gold Watch only sleeps with Blue Chip. They are 'slumber buddies' after all. :p
This was surprisingly nice. Felt natural at least, for as natural as being kid napped and almost potentially having had been caked with shit and spanked and done god knows what throughout the weekend had Gold Watch not totally made things awkward with a huge boner over being so over powered and feeling helpless against Scootaroll and his all too organized and far too worked meticulously laid out assortment of ways to torture and humiliate his captive. Then there's the traps. lol Gee, what to do for a night under all that male bonding out in the middle of the woods where none can pry or judge you? Hmm.
Grats, Finley. This was a rather nice r63 clopper that sorta broke the mold a bit. You didn't even end it with anal, instead you gave us "SLUMBER BUDDIES!" Which I think damn well ended this little botched kidnapping and potentially ruining two colts lives, into something warm and beautiful. As beautiful as getting a facial and new spikey mane-do could be, I suppose. lol;;
I prefer the non-r63 pairing of these two or at least one of them being r63, but this is cute! And the pitfalls of youth is just adorable in Scootaroll as he proves to be just as much a klutz when it comes to executing a plan. And despite his wicked intentions at one point —we all have our limited to the abuse we can endure— he still felt genuine and in a way comical with all the crazy things he pulled off I'd just mentioned above.
Gold Watch is adorable. Though I'm pretty sure I caught a hint of "enter me now" just before Scootaroll told him to clean/finish him off.
I was expecting something all too cliche when I saw Diamond on the tags, but this really did have an adorable twist. And yay for not just jumping into the sac in the first 1k, hell, you went 3.3k before even a kiss. Though I guess even with characters people aren't so into, if anyone were to write a good believable make-out story then it'd have to be the one man who made so much magic happen with Gilda and Trixie. lol
I don't normally do this but I am totally faving this story. Not because it has Diamond Tiara despite being r63 version. Or even that I think Scootaloo and Diamond Tiara would make for an interesting pair. But because it was just good. And that bonus fight at the end was great. Nopony cares about making a big deal out of who's banging who. Far cry from our own society that seems to continue to create new laws based around religious zealots and bigots that refuse to be remotely linked to animals. Biology? Hell no, urges are the devils work... ugh, I'll end this here before I facedesk over humanity's brainwashed, and overall stupidity.
After reading "Slumber Buddies". My good sir, you have inspired me! I shall write a Gold x Blue story based on this very premis in your honor! If I might have your blessing, I promise to thee that it will be the gayest of all gay things that you will have ever laid you balls on! It will be a magnificently grandios Opus of gay!!! With gayness as far as the eye can see!!!!
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That sounds really really gay.
Very sweet, and very hot in places.
(If I had to point out a weak spot, it'd be the frequent use of R63 names at the very beginning. I'd think it'd put off those not well versed in them. Still, it's a minor quibble.)
i took way too long to get to this. i finally have, and i feel bad for not having glowing praised saved up. maybe it's my mood lately, but this didn't feel as strong as the stuff of yours that i've come (lol) to love.
that's not to say there wasn't anything good about it. it felt like an unpolished gem of a good idea. there's a lot in here that i feel, if not at all responsible for, at least is clicking with some part of ethereal connection to my brain. the whole fetish-talk stuff, fucked up impulses, confessionals, embarrassing boners — even the dialogue exchange after stuff felt like a direct press on my 'unf' button. the problem seems to be that it's surrounded by stuff that threw me off.
firstly, the pacing. i can feel that as you set out to write this, you had a really solid, super hot idea in your head that you wanted to get to — but the set up totally doesn't work. going straight from 'embarrassing torture boner' to 'oops sorry lemme untie you now we're friends shall we the sex?' totally took me out of it. i mean, i know people can say that for porn, pacing is forfeit for the conceit of an idea, but i don't believe that entirely, and i don't think you do either. your humanized Sweetie fic was a prime example of amazing pacing in a story — i know you don't wanna drag stuff out like that every time, but even a bit more care and attention in the transitions would have fleshed this out a lot. the sex scenes felt awkward as well — just smoothing out the jumps would have helped a great deal. the first orgasm felt especially too quick — having it be embarrassing for 63!DT is totally hot, but there was no set-up. just. bloosh.
oh, and while we're on sound effects:
Chuck, pls. you're better than that. let's get those caps for emphasis out of here too.
it was mentioned above that the rule 63 names with no explanation were a bit confusing, and i agree. i'm not sure if there's a way to deal with that elegantly, but maybe an author's notes section or a header or something that gave the translations? blunt, but probably supremely helpful.
Scootaloo's voice felt pretty off for me for most of this — like it was you speaking instead of her (him?) — minor, considering the stuff surrounding, but didn't help when i was struggling to engage the material. the sex stuff was kind of hot, mostly given the raw nature of the stuff going on — again, have to emphasize that all the ideas here are top notch. rubbing dicks and cumming? fantastic — but by that point i was so removed from the story it was hard to stay invested.
lastly, as i say to everyone, probably best to either line space or indent, not both. that's not really a thing though.
i still liked this, and gave you my vote for it the second it went up, but it didn't come together as well as your top-tier stuff, which is a shame because again, the ideas are super fucking hot. i know it's a bit annoying ot suggest any revision to an already completed work, but if i was gonna wait for a rewrite of anything, this would be it, because i feel it's got a lot of untapped potential.
sorry if any of the above seems at all condescending. you're still a bro, and you know how to write unf. i just think this could have used a bit more refinement.
cheers.
Please tell me you will be writing a sequel for this!
3070889 You, my friend, have dumbed down that comment like a boss, you get a cookie.
WELL I NOW SHIP IT.
the whole town knows this if he's anything like
I think a "he replied with narrowed eyebrows, his words dripping with cynicism" or something is in order to indicate sarcasm.
SEQUEL with the actual BDSM (no nettles'n nuts please) PLEASE!?
no but seriously great story.
Yeah the whole root of ginger up the ass thing is a real thing, it's called figging. Thank you so much fo making me have to look that up, i really needed to know that.
that being said, i like this, i did feel it could have been a bit more "fetish" filled, but I like the idea, it's great, it's interesting and makes me wish for a sequel.
Sequel?