Well, This Is Original
"Piss off. I don't have time to deal with you punks, I'm late for a swirly with Danial, and then I've got my lunch time beating with Billy. I can pencil you in for a week from Tuesday." Yeah, I'm pretty much the school punching bag. Nobody does anything about it, and every time I try, I'm the one who ends up in trouble with the authorities. Not the police. The teachers, principal, and the worthless parents of these punks who think their little boys can do no wrong. They're used to getting away with everything, and it's gone to their heads. My parents are constantly punishing me for stuff I didn't even do. I get beat up at school, suspended for fighting back. I get grounded for a month, and the twats that started it get a new Xbox from their moms to make them feel better. My parents put me in ballroom dancing because they thought I'd hate it, then pulled me from it. Something about not wanting me to be a 'fancy footed pansy', which translates to 'You were supposed to hate it, if that's not happening it's over.' I still practice on my own, and it ain't ballroom. Shuffling. Stomp, and anything else with wubs. Another thing my parents hate me for, my music. Anyway, I'm getting off track here......
"Aw, look at the geek, trying to be a smartass." One of them said.
"Better than being a dumbass, like you. Which is a problem considering that's where your brain is." My attitude was met with a punch to the stomach. I'm a rather sarcastic person. Helps to deal with the pain.
"Not so tough now are you? ARE YOU?" Said one with spiky green hair.
"Pfft, I've been beat on so much, your pansy ass little punches don't even hurt anymore." I head butted him. Didn't hurt me. He fell over. Might be because I have a harder head, but is more likely to to him being piss drunk.
"You're gonna pay for that." Said a third.
"Nope, we're not on school grounds, the teachers ain't gonna save you, and the cops never come to this park."
"You're the one who needs saving." Said the first. He dove at me, and was met by a knee, right below the lungs. No coordination whatsoever. When you get hit a lot, you learn to avoid being hit. When you're physically weak, you learn to hit the spots that cause the most pain with the least force. Getting the wind knocked out of you hurts, I know first hand, so I can imagine what he was feeling. Combine that with being able to dodge like a pro due to the balance from my dance classes, and you got a whirlwind.
"You're gonna die Grif." The third, Carl, someone I despise particularly, pulled a knife and tried to stab. A very loose, twitchy, slow, drug induced stab. I corkscrewed my arm around his, placed the other on the inside of his shoulder, and dislocated it. No permanent damage, but hurts like hell. I cracked my neck, and gave him a wicked grin.
Normally, I'm pretty mellow. Happy even, when I'm alone. I don't like other people, mostly because for some strange reason, they don't like me. Never found out why. Maybe it was the dancing lessons? Gave me amazing balance and coordination though. More than enough to deal with these druggie fuckwits. Back to the topic at hand. Being alone makes you a target, but it also makes you learn to take care of yourself. Every once in a while, I get pushed over the edge, and my personality changes completely. I go from normal, calm, collected, to sadistic, malevolent, and calculating. Nerd rage is a powerful thing. I think faster than normal people. Comes from having to think faster than the punks which think it's fun to treat me like dirt. I took their shoes, and threw them off the bridge we were on, onto the freeway below.
"Enjoy walking home barefoot." Just to add a little extra humiliation. Besides, their parents would just go out and buy them a $400 pair of Nike's tomorrow anyway.
In an internet café, one of the few places 'nerds' like me can go hang out and not be bothered. We're kind of like a pack of wolves. Sure, when we're alone, a lion can pick us off, but there's no way one would come into a den of 30 of us. Little known fact, nerds who have had enough learn how to hurt people. Some learn kendo, other's learn karate. I learned anatomy. Pressure points, the body's strong and weak points. How to cause as much pain to other people as possible without actually damaging them. Works well when you want to get someone off your back without getting the cops involved. The punks from before all have criminal records, so it's not like they're gonna go to the cops. They spent a day in a cushioned jail before their moms bailed them out, and they think they're hardcore.
I was watching My Little Pony, Friendship is Magic. I can't watch it at home, it's just another thing my parents would judge me for. The nerds, geeks, and losers like me don't think that way. Lot's of em play games. WoW, Starcraft. Other's play games RL, chess, and Dungeons and Dragons. Other's work on homework, and some watch television. Internet café's are havens for us. They let us escape school, family, life. Everyone who doesn't understand. I watch My Little Pony because it's a world of happiness, at least in Ponyville that is. We don't see much of what goes on elsewhere. It must have it's fair share of trouble, if characters like Gilda and Trixie exist, as well as the land dispute with the buffalo. Still a sight better than Earth.
"So, you ever think about going to Equestria?" Asked someone in the café.
"Yeah, I mean, it's just a cartoon, but it's a lot better than here.
"If you could go, what would you want to be?" He asked.
"Really, being there would be enough. I wouldn't really care. I mean, I wouldn't want to be a donkey or a cow, that's just lame. Being a dragon would be cool, but I'd be huge, and there's plenty of trouble in that. I definitely wouldn't want to be a non speech capable animal, like a dog, or a manticore. Other than that, I haven't thought about it really."
"Wouldn't you miss your family? Your friends?" The stranger asked. I didn't mind talking to him, since he was clearly a brony as well, and we know what other bronies are like. We can trust each other.
"I'm pretty sure my family hates me. It's a constant yelling match, and they're always looking for ways to make me miserable. As for friends, what friends? I'm in an internet café, which pretty much tells you I'm a nerd, so I wouldn't have many. The fact that I'm sitting over here alone means that I have even less, or none. I used to have people I thought were my friends, but they all bailed when they found out I was a brony. You're the first person I've met who knows anything about the show and doesn't mindlessly hate it."
"Hmm, true enough. Well, off you go then!" He said, snapping his fingers.
"Wait, what?" What all I could say before there was a flash of light, then darkness.
By the way. "Hello." Is someone saying hello. 'Hello.' Is thinking hello, from the POV of whoever it is who's front and center in the scene. It's probably going to be all Griffin, because I don't like switching POV's often.
.....Human Discord?Or just jesus in a Net Cafe just for shits and giggles?
246382 shits and giggles my friend
I think I've become a fimfiction addict leterally I have trouble going a day without reading one chapter
246479 Oh? And what would that be? While I do put a TF2 reference in every fic I write, I didn't put one in chapter 1, at least, not that I know of. Please point it out.
Question: Why are some of the mane six's names diffrent?
391383 3 days late awnser: april fool
nuff said
It's cool already :D
Great!
-Life_asylum
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Profit
I was going to read this fic, but it told me to piss off...
I know there aren't a lot of ideas on the internet, and I can tell you were being sarcastic with the title, but this chapter just screamed Echo the diamond dog to me. Still, I can tell it is going to be very different and have its own differences. I try not to compare stories, but this was all too similar.
Erm, If I could be so prudent as to critique the bit at the end there: ""Hello." Is someone saying hello. 'Hello.' Is thinking hello." Thoughts, in a written context are supposed to just be italicized, sans any form of quote mark.
Anyway, I'm liking the story so far!
I came here after Rust mentioned you in The Ballad of Echo, I am pleased to say that I am enjoying the story so far and will continue to read.
Hey there BlackWing, nice opening. My teacher saw this up and said nice job (can't believe I didn't get in trouble). Hope that your ego gets a nice boost due to teacher calling your fic cool.
246382 I'm thinking that too. Actually, I'm thinking Q/Discord. People have speculated that Q and Discord are the same ... Entity.
This Internet cafe thing sounds awesome
251254 I feel your pain bro, but with all these good fics out there It's not pain
I would shit my pants if I had that conversation, I randomly talk to a man who I thought was a brony then, for no reason, he says 'Off ya go then' and POW RIGHT IN THE KISSER, I'm in Equestria
EDIT: Who ever gets that reference in my comment gets a cookie
253775 Do you wish to go to Equestria? I can do that for you, but at one cost. I must wipe you from human history. By the way, nerd rage is actually what got me 12 penalties for assault... IN SCHOOL!!! And I can kick anyone my age's butt.
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Jesus is a brony now?
Time to go get religion...
246382 Wrong Bob saget in the form of jimi hendrix wearing an apron
well i can see why this story is so popular its RELATABLE woot "I go from normal, calm, collected, to sadistic, malevolent, and calculating." yup that pretty much defines me and probably about half of all bully victims. all in all i think im going to like this story * mischievous grin* a WHOLE lot.
708257 POW is a tf2 reference but other than that i've no idea
251254 i completely agree fimfictions dominate my life. thank celestia, its summer otherwise my life would be 600 tons of shit hitting a jet engine
746598 i likey mainly because im the athletic nerd who you know if you mess with its like trying to kill 13 optimus primes with 1 pebble
I don't even care if this is a shameless self-insert. At least you can write one well. xD
(I saw, like, ONE mistake of using it's instead of its, but that's about it. With only ONE mistake, not gonna try to find it again, sorry. XD)
i just started reading this and can tell it will be good the piont of view of Griffin is amazing someone to relate to cant wait to keep reading
So, Carl now exists on Earth, which is a good thing.
1011595 I don't think this is really a self-insert. I think Griffin is different to BlackWing, I can't be absolutely sure, but mostly.
I made an account for this.
Eeeyup, His life in school sounds awfully familiar to this misborn Brony. I'm gonna read this and see where it goes... Bully tartar since there's a griff on the cover?
holy nutz, I recently offically joined the CGotGS group with a story of my own and the other members said I should read this story and I have say: I have a LONG way to go.
Welp, time to get started.
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I am currently critiquing the Ballad authored by Rust and was wondering if you would let me critique this as well just asking its no problem once I get things straightened out I should be able to get it done quickly sound like a deal?
1432127 Your profile pic. I like it.
i... fucking... LOL'D
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nothin quite liek murder by samurai Rainbow dash is there
needs to be a comma between these two words
okay trying to re-read all this before 2013 wish me luck
Read first chapter. Thought, 'hmm, I like this.'... goddammit, now I have to read 340K+ words.
bring it!
Shit.... My name is griffin....
Read the entire story and up to date on the sequel. now im reading it a 2nd time for the hell of it.
hello 1 and a half weeks of reading. probrably 8 hours plus a day but its worth it.
2172814 so It's really worth it tell me is there any unnecessary deaths or mane 6 deaths? I don't like stuff like that and the sooner I learn that the better but for now I read can't be dark in the first few chapters... right?
2417257 if one of the main six died the tradgety tag would be up and no needless deaths.
101 chapters. challenge execpted. (i read into the dark in 2 sittings)
Nerds that learn to fight? I know of some, that's for sure. Still, the idiots that pick fights with people they see as weaker than them are the easiest to take. They have no real experience besides pathetic swipes on equally pathetic living doormats who don't bother fighting back. If you show no mercy and beat the living shit out of them, it doesn't take long for them to stop picking on you, even if they win.
Damn it discord I mean you are one if my favorite characters but you don't just send someone to equestria I mean you at least kicked echo to equestria *sigh* going to equestria painfully is much more fun than sending them normally but such is life
Great story btw and just wondering is this the same Griffin in The Ballad Of Echo The Diamond Dog?
2850951 Yep.
101 chapters. Well time to get into this shit.
See you on the other side!!
Holy hell.
This is gonna be an all-nighter.
WOUUUH
ONE HUNDRED AND ONE NUGGITS OF GOLD!!
NUGGITS!!!!!11!!!
2988884I know right.
Charge my bronys we have 101 chapters and not one will be unread!! see y'all on the other side.