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    Gilda and Lyra form an unlikely duo as they travel to the Griffin Empire, becoming involved in an undertaking far larger than they had ever imagined.
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  • 16w, 21h
    Sometimes a Year Just Vanishes

    I'm sure there are people who will see this that don't even remember following me or favoriting my story anymore. I guess that's what happens when you disappear for upwards of a year. I can't attribute this to writer's block. Not really. What I can attribute it to is depression. I'm not going to make any excuses. I'm just going to say that I've actually managed to write and publish a chapter for the first time in a long time, and if people are still interested in the continuing adventures of Lyra and Gilda a year later, good, and if not, I don't blame you. No one should have to deal with that kind of delay for just a couple thousand words. Especially when the end result is super sloppy due to how rusty I am.

    I can promise one thing, though. I'm not giving up. Even if mental issues get the better of me again and I slip back into nothing, I won't forget this story. I really care about it, and I will finish it. And I hope that people are still around to see it when I do.

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  • 80w, 3d
    An Apology

    I used to be able to update whatever story I was working on once every two weeks or so, but that hasn't been the case for a while now. I just want to apologize to those following The Griffin's Apprentice for how slow things have been going. Things are a bit rough in my life at the moment, and it's hard to get the motivation to push on in a story. I am by no means abandoning it, and I try to work on it every day, but most days "working on it" consists of staring at the page, writing a single sentence, and then finding myself unable to come up with the words to continue. Hopefully I'll get my drive back, because I seriously love the story as it exists in my head, and I want to share it, but I refuse to do it poorly. I'm not going to crap out chapters just to get them done. That doesn't do anyone any favors. In any case, I hope you all stick around to see where things go with the story, but I wouldn't blame you for dropping it if the gap between chapters is unacceptable. Sorry.

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  • 97w, 3d
    Finally Broke the Writer's Block

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  • 103w, 1d
    Contests, discouragement, and the dangers of writing late at night.

    So, I recently learned a rather important lesson on writing: Contests are not for me. I attempted to write a story for the EQD Nightmare Night contest recently, and I did not like how it turned out at all. Of course, I ended up finishing it at about 2:00 AM the night before the deadline, and I was really sleepy, so I published it regardless. Immediately, regretting that, I kinda shut down for a while, and I haven't really visited this site since then until just now, when I deleted the previously mentioned story.

    I am a slow writer. The concept of my horror story has tons of potential, but I was stupid to think that I could figure it out in a week for a contest. I essentially crapped out a one-shot for what should have been a multi-part story, and it wasn't scary. Now that I know that I simply cannot attempt to write within any sort of concrete time frame, that should hopefully never happen again.

    Back to writing my next story I go. It'll be a straight adventure this time, though not with the characters you'd expect. Just don't expect a date on it.

    Perpetual Lurker

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  • 106w, 6d
    So ends the first story...

    Well, here we are. Six months ago to the day, I published the first chapter of Make a Wish. It was my first real fanfiction undertaking, aside from a failure from before I had familiarized myself with what was horribly cliche in the fandom (it's still sitting around here somewhere if you want to look at it and laugh. Just don't expect me to ever touch it again).  The response I received for it was entirely positive and unexpected, which inspired me to submit it to Equestria Daily. After one quick round of edits, it was accepted and posted up there.

    Now the story is finished. I'm really proud of my work, but I know that in the end what I think about it doesn't matter. What everyone else thinks about it does. So, that's what I'd like to hear from you guys. I have comments on the individual chapters themselves, but they tend to be short and only pertaining to the chapter at hand. In the comments on this post, I'd like to hear your complete thoughts on the story as a whole. What you liked, what you didn't like, what you found funny, what you wish had been explored more, etc. Spare me no criticism, as I want complete honesty with my flaws. If I want to grow as a writer, I need to hear what I did right and what I did wrong so I can emphasize one and fix the other in my future works. Thanks a lot in advance!

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One night, an amazing display lit up the sky over Ponyville. A comet, brighter than any in living memory, was making its way through the sea of stars. The residents of the town gathered en masse to witness the spectacle. As was the tradition for such an occasion, many ponies made a wish on the celestial body, hoping that maybe, just maybe, some of them might come true...

First Published
18th Mar 2012
Last Modified
7th Oct 2012
#1 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Scootaloo's Wish: Part 1 ·

hmm.  someone's gonna wish for the status quo at the end, I bet :P

#2 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Scootaloo's Wish: Part 1 ·

I really, really enjoyed this story, so Imma track it and give it a thumbs-up. But, there were three things:

ONE: The blank space at the end.

TWO: You know, I think I go have breakfast with my sister after all... but how do I get down from up here?

-Corrected: You know, I think I'll go have breakfast with my sister after all... but how do I get down from here?

THREE: "You weren't looking!" the she replied, prancing back to her seat on the other side of the table.

-Corrected:"You weren't looking!" the pink mare replied, prancing back to her seat on the other side of the table.

-Corrected V2: "You weren't looking!" she replied, prancing back to her seat on the other side of the table.

Sorry, my proofreading powers activate sometimes. :pinkiecrazy:

#3 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Scootaloo's Wish: Part 1 ·

Interesting story.

#4 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Scootaloo's Wish: Part 1 ·

I'm tracking. You should get a proofreader or proofread it yourself. :pinkiehappy:

In the event that you need a proofreader though, feel free to PM me. :twilightsmile:

#5 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Scootaloo's Wish: Part 1 ·

Scootaloo ... what have you done??

:scootangel: Nothing...

Still though, this looks good and you should feel good. Tracked.

#6 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Scootaloo's Wish: Part 1 ·

Heartwarming, though I suspect things are going to go south before the end.

Can't wait for the next chapter :twilightsmile:

#7 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Scootaloo's Wish: Part 1 ·

If I were Scootaloo, I'd just say that she didn't make a wish because she thought it was childish (or something to that effect) and is starting to regret it

#8 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Scootaloo's Wish: Part 1 ·

I see lots of potential here, good work up to now, I'll be tracking for more. :twilightsmile:

#9 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Scootaloo's Wish: Part 1 ·

*Hides the reset button* :scootangel:

:yay: MAAKKEEE, A WIISSHH! IT'S UP TO YOUUU! FIND THE STRENGTH INSIDE! AND MAKE YOUR DREAMS COME TRUUUEE!

Props to those who know what's that refrencing. Anyway, this was a good story! tracked

Wait, Pinkie didn't wish for Sugarcube Corner to be made out of cupcakes?

THIS IS UNACCEPTABLE

goo

Aww, I loved it! Keep writing!

Oh wow. I submitted this at 5 in the morning and I woke up to this? That was certainly unexpected! Thanks a lot for the comments, guys. To those of you who pointed out typos and grammatical errors: Thanks, and please continue to do so. I will definitely go back and fix them as they are pointed out, and I'll try to lay off the late night editing while I'm at it. :derpytongue2:

me want moar! good story bro. acctually better than i thought it would be! hope this turns out well. track and like for u

go on....

A most interesting start.  Tracking...:twilightsmile:

Oh. Snap.

Wow.  I really like where this is headed...  the different memories, and Scoot starting to find things weren't exactly as she suspected.

Well done so far.

More!   (if that's all right, of course)

Be careful what you wish for...

erm. TELL RD WHAT YOU WISHED FOR. OR ATLEAST THE CMC OR PINKIE PIE

So good :O

Happy End: Scoots wakes up again in her old house...and Rainbow's sitting at the table eating cereal.

If Rainbow had parents around before then that means Scootaloo's wish sent them away too. Bummer.

>>399906Wouldn't they still be together because unlike scootaloo's parents rainbowdash's parents would of already had rainbow dash before the would of had scootaloo so they would still be together

>>417985 i believe somewhere in the story it was said that Dash was raising Scoots. Which means their parents are gone. But we don't know if Dash did or did not have parents around before the wish.

Oh no... I really want to know what happens next.. do you know how soon the next chapter will be out?

Was your wish to be featured on Equestria Daily? Cause if it was, wish granted, dude. :pinkiehappy:

REALLY want to know not only what happens next, but also what everypony wished for. Fav/track. :twilightsmile:

great story so far!  can't wait to see what happens next.

Need more! :rainbowlaugh:

Next time a comet apears:

Scoots: "Excuse me, mister comet? I think you got things a little confused last time. I wanted Rainbow Dash to be MY sister, not me to be hers. It's better that way. I get a sister, and Rainbow Dash has a family again. That would make both of us happy, and aren't wishes supposed to make ponies happy? So this time, I wish you had granted my first wish the way I wanted it to be granted! And that includes a reset back to the day the wish was granted, because you had to go and take your own sweet time coming back so I can fix this. Seriously, what were you DOING the last sixty years!?"

>>426327 It was sleeping off some silly filly's wish that made it rewrite years of history. You're supposed to wish for little things, like pink snow! :twilightsmile:

What probably happened is that since she wished to be RD's sister, her 'parents' are now RD's parents, and her folks never made that house that she grew up in since her real dad never stayed around to make it.  I wonder what Twilight and Rarity wished for...

Oh dear!

>>427601

Twilight was one of the following.

"I wish Princess Celestia knew about my feelings for her."

"I wish my library had ALL the books!"

"I wish for a book fort. No, wait, a book FORTRESS!"

"I wish my fanfiction was real." (Warning, Twilight ships everypony with everypony)

"I wish I knew what to wish for." (And by the comet had gone, she did!)

Rarity was one of the following.

"I wish Blueblood knew what it was like when he was such a pig to me at the Gala." (Princess Bluebelle has not left her room since the apearence of the comet, regardless of the best attempts of the most eligable stallions in Canterlot.)

"I wish my sister had her own room at my place. Then maybe she would actually play there when her friends are over, and not make a mess of the actual store." (Man, is she going to feel silly when she finds out what her sister wished for.)

"I wish I could make outfits fast enough to stay on schedule."

"I wish Twilight actually knew how to dress and accesorize to look her best."

"And Fluttershy wished to be a tree, and she lived happily ever after."

>>380910

EDIT: Tell RD what you wished for, and then immediately go to tell Twilight. DO NOT tell the rest of the CMC, because they will make it infinitely worse. Somehow. Also, tell Pinkie by writing her a note, and then running away as fast as you can. This way she is aware of the problem, but you don't have to be there for the Pink'splosion.  

>>430620 Well. That made me see it in a different way. hehe. Tell RD, then she shall probably deny the fact for a while, go to twilight, twilight will probably understand.

Well then.  I was afraid for a moment that Scootaloo's wish had caused her parents to die or something.  Though this does raise a question: why did Sweetie Belle really wish for what she wished for?  Scootaloo's wish hadn't taken effect then...

>>432717

Isn't reality warping fun? Depending on how exactly it functions you can have all sorts of outcomes. It's certainly something to think about, and rampant speculation is always fun to see (for me at least, as I know exactly what's going on :derpytongue2:). As for an explanation of said reality warping, Scootaloo herself doesn't care too much about the exact mechanics of what's going on, but somepony else might...

what u think fluttershy wished for rarity probably wished for some random clothes related stuff

bon bon probably wished for lyra to be fat or something

twilight probably wished for a book......

Pinkies is obviously

>>432717

I believe Sweetie would've made the wish anyway, especially since Apple Bloom's always had AJ. (Before the wish)

Applejack is:

THE AMAZING

SPIDER-PONY

////:ajbemused:\\\\

>>429905 Until she was chopped down. :fluttercry:

>>426327

Lawyer Cutie Mark Crusaders!


Ah, yes. One of the implications of being sisters.

You need parents.

this... this will not go well.

*grins* Excellent! I'm loving this story so far.

Very, VERY interesting so far.

Can't wait to read more.:twilightsmile:

And so we reach a whole new level of awkwardness.. Just when Scoots manages to regain her balance somewhat, this happens. Obviously, we'll soon reach a point where pretending she knows what's going on will no longer be an option and she'll have to come clean. I really wonder what's going to happen next, though I must say I really hope the wish isn't reversed; as tragic as it may be for Scoots to lose her old life, I love the idea of Rainbow and her living together as sisters and the relationship you've created between them is very cute. Keep it up!

Also, I really wonder what Pinkie wished for. It's something she is unwilling to tell Dash for some reason.. Until you say otherwise, I'm going to interpret this in a manner supportive of PinkieDash :pinkiesmile:

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