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    WARNING!!! This chapter contains graphic content *for the noobs this means sex, sex, and more sex* Those who requested clop, here you go. For those that didn't want clop, skip this chapter and pretend it doesn't exist.

    Special thanks to Daracke for editing my first ever clop scene. Enjoy.

    And by enjoy, I mean fap.

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    "I-it's my...f-first time...I'm st-still a bit scared..." She whispered to you, while blushing a deep red and biting her thumbnail. Her eyes were averted, scared.

    "Don't worry; it's the first time for me too..." You tried your best to reassure her. You kicked yourself mentally, hearing yourself speak. It sounded perverted, as if trying to lure her into it, even though your true intentions were to boost her confidence.

    Nevertheless, Fluttershy acted as if it had comforted her. Her blush didn't fade, but she smiled. You gulped as sweat rolled down your face, dripping off your chin.

    "Please...b-be gentle..."

    Oh god, why, you thought to yourself, why do you hafta make me feel even worse...

    You slinked down to Fluttershy's nether regions, and brought your face to it. As your tongue connected to her lower lips, Fluttershy inhaled sharply as she clutched the sheets with one hand and covered her mouth with the other, trying to suppress moans of pleasure. You traced your tongue up and down the thin line, occasionally letting your tongue enter her. She gasped and moaned, pulling at the sheets, her legs twitching every once in a while. You lifted your hand to her slit and slowly stuck the tip of your finger inside. You licked her clitoris as you slid your finger in and out, your finger tracing her hymen. Fluttershy's legs twitched rapidly for a second in reaction to your tongue in contact with her pleasure bud. She pawed at the back of your head, moaning and gasping, begging you to lick harder. You responded to the request by removing your finger and sliding your entire tongue in her passage, eliciting a loud and long moan from your partner. Not wanting to give her an orgasm just yet, you stop licking, and stand up. Your member had slipped its way out of the opening in your boxers, and had extended to its full length. You bent over her, your hands on either side of her body. You slowly and carefully slipped your member inside of her, and stopped once you feel the hymen. You and Fluttershy locked eyes for a full two seconds, her eyes shining with tears of pleasure. She wrapped her arms around your back and brings you closer. With a small intake of breath to muster your courage, you began to push your member into her, tearing the hymen. She clawed at your back as more tears streaked down her face. Slowly, but surely, you start a slow rhythm of thrusts; taking great care to be gentle. Fluttershy's small, quick moans matched the sound of skin smacking against skin, and your breathing turned heavy. Your slow, drawn out thrusts sped up, causing the bed to move and rock, tapping against the wall. In your mind, you wondered what the animals were thinking. You quickly tossed the thought aside; you had more pressing matters to attend to.

    You could feel your climax approaching. Judging by how tight Fluttershy was holding you, and by the increasing volume in her moans and gasps of pleasure, she was nearing hers just as fast. Sweat dripped off the both of you, soaking the sheets which were already damp with other fluids.

    "Epee...I-I...I...love y-you!" Fluttershy said in between moans; a second before she reached the 'big moment.'

    "I...love you t-to," you replied as you climax. You brought your lips to meet Fluttershy's; your heart skipping a beat at the words she just spoke.

    The bed creaked as you fell onto your back on the sheets, covered in sweat. You panted from being out of breath, as it seemed Fluttershy was as well. Something made you glance over to your hand, feeling a weight against it. She had grabbed your hand and pulled it closer to her. In response to this, you pulled her body closer to you, and wrapped your arm around her. She didn't protest, just returned the embrace. You wanted to hate yourself for what you had just done, but you felt strangely happy. You had just done the most indefinite thing in proving your love for Fluttershy. That thought made you forgive yourself, just slightly though.

    Comments ( 26 )

    #1 · 68w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Yay!:pinkiehappy:

    #2 · 68w, 3d ago · · ·
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    You said you're not good at clop, but to be honest, this isn't bad.

    I won't lie, it didn't quite match up to your writing ability of the other chapters, but what can you expect when it's focus is entirely on this one scene?

    I think it's wonderful. I do hope you weren't uncomfortable writing this part out. You've hit the key point and I'm satisfied with it.

    You've still managed to keep in connectivity with the characters, and that's what makes most of it worthwhile. So be proud of yourself.

    Keep up the great work.

    I can't wait to continue reading.

    #3 · 68w, 3d ago · · ·
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    *clop* *clop* CANT STOP CLOPPING!

    #4 · 68w, 3d ago · · ·
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    that was REALLY good im not gonna lie. :rainbowwild:

    #5 · 68w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I read this for the details not the clop/fap tbh, and I must say, bravo! :moustache: You lied to us by the way! :fluttershysad: But, since you DID have help I guess its forgivable.:ajsmug: Bravo, good sir, bravo!

    #6 · 68w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Not too shabby, not too shabby at all. ME GUSTA:pinkiecrazy: i was expecting the chapter to be a bit shorter though for obvious reasons. And i don't suppose there's a morning after pill. Or any type of contraceptive in the whole of Equistria.

    #7 · 68w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Before you read this, please listen to Antoine Dufour's Catching the Light or The Girl in the Drawing by Yoshimori Makoto while reading the chapter again

    ALLRIGHTY THEN! Here's my real critique.

    The way you were able to smoothly transition from one action to another was imipressive for your first time around at a sex scene. The actual description of what was happening physically was great, not being too descriptive to be creepy but still enough detail to give a mental image. Member? Well, there are worse words for it i suppose. I was thoroughly disappointed, though, at the lack of describing what emotions the two are feeling. By that i mean their feelings towards each other. I was very impressed that this chapter did not dirty the feelings i had towards the two and did not dirty the feel of the story. I still have the feeling that they both love eachother very much and that's mostly because of the last three paragraphs. GREAT ENDING

    On a scale from 1 to 10, I give it a 7.5 or 8

    Well done, sir. Well done indeed. :moustache:

    PS

    You should've implemented Shy's wings into the story as an indicater of her ecstacy (eg extending when she climaxes)

    #8 · 68w, 2d ago · · ·
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    That was... quick.

    Get it? Quick?

    Hehe.

    #9 · 68w, 2d ago · · ·
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    My good sir, you have done a impressive clop scene

    I must say, all in all I give it 10/10

    :pinkiehappy:

    #10 · 68w, 2d ago · · ·
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    On the subject of 'lemons' 'no lemons', I have a question. Are they lemon grenades? :twilightsheepish:

    #11 · 68w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>265175 No, they are UNFORGOTTEN REEEEAAAAAALLMS!

    #12 · 68w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Nice, but I prefer long clop scenes.:moustache:

    #13 · 68w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Dayum

    #14 · 68w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I'm sorry, but I couldn't read this. Not because it's a clop scene, but because I was laughing my ass off the whole time, I actually lost it at 'nethers' so suffice to say, I'm still gonna try reading it, but I might give up.

    #15 · 68w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Ok I read it (commenting on the same chapter twice? WHAT?!) My laughing fit ceased after I began reading again, but I had to goofiest grin on my face the whole time, don't ask me why cause I'm clueless. Nonetheless I'm glad this used more vocabulary and better... Description(?) than other clop scenes, first time I've read 'hymen' instead of 'snatch' good job. :ajbemused:

    #16 · 68w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>266757 That was pretty much how I reacted. I think this scene goes into too much detail; I wanted clop, not a lesson in human anatomy. :ajbemused:

    #17 · 68w, 1d ago · · ·
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    DAAAAAAAAAAYUM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! BOY JUST WENT THROUGH IT UNCUT!!!

    Fluttershy: epee....I-I...... I love y-you!

    Epee: "I CAME"!!!!!!!!!!!

    boy just got laid!!!! now i wish i was him even more!

    #18 · 68w, 1d ago · · ·
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    oh also damn nice work on the clop scene dude damn nice job:rainbowkiss:

    #19 · 68w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>266019 you do realize they're both virgins, right?

    #20 · 68w, 20h ago · · ·
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    #21 · 68w, 14h ago · · ·
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    the avatar< is recording to watch again. and again. and again.

    (Ok that is slightly creepy):trollestia:

    also: D'awww the nervous first-timers!

    #23 · 66w, 7h ago · · ·
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    I can only think of one thing when I hear lemons now

    #24 · 63w, 3d ago · 1 · ·
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    You raped my mind, but it was still a good chapter:pinkiehappy:

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