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Inspire by the song Promise of a lifetime by Kutless.
This is a P.O.V. short story of a nameless pony who is dying of a sickness uncureable. He/She is having their last moments in the hospital bed with his/her love one Pinkie Pie remembering the time they met. Not going to spoil much so read to find out what happens.
Found a link to this fic at the top of the page. I thought to myself, "this cannot be what I think it is." In spite my doubts, I clicked on it to discover that it actually is inspired by a song from one of my favorite bands. Despite the fact that I am against most shipping, I was too curious not to read this. I'll get this out of the way quickly, the punctuation can use some improvements. There were times I read over a sentence twice to make sure I understood it. Moving on with the story itself.
Do not read the following paragraph if you have not read if you have not yet read the story. I would hate to spoil it for you.
I had to think for a few minutes after I finished to figure out that the promise broken here was the promise of staying by one's side. Maybe that was just a problem on my part; I am a Christian, and I take the song as having a Christ-centered message. It is all about perspective, I guess. Since this comment was made spur of the moment, there isn't too much I can think to say. The overall presentation was well-written; just one pony's perspective given yet, cleanly, makes to you feel the emotions of both characters here.
I am glad to have clicked on this in spite of my expectations. Punctuation needs a little help --forgive me, I am a bit of a perfectionist-- but the story itself is solid. Keep up the good work if you plan on making any more stories.
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