Twilight her friends go to a carnival in Canterlot, where they find a certain unicorn. Trixie claims to have turned over a new leaf and asks for Twilight's forgiveness. Twixie! Rated teen for dirty jokes.
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"I'm good at making things explode." I have to say, I lolled. A comedy where i actually laughed out loud rather than just sniggered to myself. 5 'staches for you
Too short but faved.
I agree with the comment above. Too short but still good
You have quite instead of quit. I'm willing to see where this goes, though I would hope you'd slow things down, it all seemed a bit rushed.
I like how Trixie is being portrayed here and thus far it's off to a good start. You need to go through and do some spell checking as well as correct a couple "your/you're" errors. I would have liked more detail on the carnival itself as in what they did or any awkward moments; really just anything to add a bit more build-up. Maybe have Trixie debating in her mind if she should ask to stay with Twilight, all that jazz.
Anyway, looking forward to the next chapter.
"i'll impose her alright"
what does that even mean
Twi and her friends seem a little too accepting of new Trixie.
Also, perv Trixie + oblivious Twi = COMEDY/ROMANCE
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One of the definitions of impose:
to obtrude or thrust (oneself, one's company, etc.) upon others.
Think about it.
277663She got them free tickets instead of waiting in a very long line. I would accept anyone if they did that for me.
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This wasn't what I meant, yaknow
One would think that Dash would get at least a tiiiny bit suspicious or angry at Trixie before that.
278634 Oh don't worry there will be plenty of time for that later. /evil laugh
Lolz
You officially earned the Swag Seal of Approval
For the Most Swag-Indusing Lolz ever
LOVE IT!
Please please please write more!!!This story is amazing so far!
i wish you could just finish this right now!!!!
ill be waiting for it
Oh, c'mon~~~
356217 what?
359671 C'mon, still waiting for wat will happen! (wrings hands excitedly
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359705 What will Happen? Oh you mean how *Spoiler* the *Spoiler* while *Spoiler*.
359755 urgh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! u tease!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Trixie = Pervert apparently.loving the story so far.