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Workard
I will no longer be writing Fimfictions, nor will I continue the unfinished ones. I do apologize. However, my stories will remain on this site.
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This looks interesting
I will download it to my Nook later, and then give you a full review later. You get bonus points for TwiDash so even if for some reason, I don't like it, you still win 
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Well, hopefully it's a win-win, and you like it for both reasons ^^
But thank you. I would love a review, so hope to hear from you soon :)
I am going to read it but before I do I just want you to know. I haven't read any twidash clop fics that suck. I mean it seems any Author writing a TwiDash clop fic make sure it's damn good. I am wondering why that is? I mean after my first fic when I have had enough practice writing chapters I want to try my hand at TwiDash. Though FlutterDash be my OTP something about TwiDash just screams... Hot!
anyways going to read now :P
Well I won't lie the clop part felt forced. Not that there was any rape but I felt like it was out of place. The words used to describe the organs were more of humans than equines. But over all it was still enjoyable.
The part I really enjoyed oddly enough in this clop fic was after the Clop. Though it felt a bit awkward it was the right kind of awkward. The fact I am most impressed about is that you didn't make Rainbow Dash into a fucking coward about her sexuality. Like half the authors do. I hate how people portray her as someone who is afraid to be gay or scared to be picked on for being a queer. I can't picture someone as awesome as RD even with her insecurities give a shit about her sexual preference. It just doesn't fit her character. So Kudos on making the romance not as ridiculously charged from fear of being outed.
Over all I would give this fic a 7.5/10 while it was a nice read the immersion breaking use of butt cheeks and stuff just killed the clop for me a bit.
sequel? do i hear something about a sequel?
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Well, not from me. I am currently in the work of writing another Fimfic, which will not be related to this story in any way, and it will not contain any shipping. It will be a twisted drama/horror. I may write a sequel at some point, if that's what people want. All in good time though.
Love the way you can write such a sweet short story packed with feeling, and use it compliment the clop and make it so much more meaningful.
I would love to see this story continue, but I fear you could never really recreate the special first time
2982324 if your calling equine body parts non-human then you haven't read many clop-fics or fan-fics on here.
if they are "non-human" then how do you explain equine breeding rituals in the real world? I'm pretty sure
animals can't give birth to their young, unborn children from just the anal portion of 'sex,'
they'd have a reproduction system very similar to what any other mammal does.
...anyway enough of that I rather liked the story clop and all, it was well made
and sadly the first time virgin thing is indeed a special moment that can't really
be trumped or improved if you are planning a sequel, clop or non-clop.
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A sequel has been made. Though it is not finished. Hope you'll like it!
try one of these two:
who felt like she should say something
whom she felt an awkward silence
Turn clop to actual romance. Nice job.
... is that safe? I mean, I'm very much not into anilingus, never practiced it, but I would've thought that nothing that goes into someone's ass gets anywhere close to a vagina without proper washing in the interim... I mean, you can wash out and prepare all you want, I suppose... but there'd still be that lingering doubt, right?
Anyone?
Its good