Scootaloo is a young Pegasus Filly, who comes from a broken home where her mother abused her mentally, physically and emotionally. Set shortly after the events of Sleepless in Ponyville, Rainbow Dash finds that her little friend is being abused. She intends to stop the abuse, her friends arrive at the house to stop it. And after that fateful night Scootaloo's life changes forever.
Featured April 14th, 2016 at 12:23AM
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Chapters (2)
Oh the cutes.
... What? Its always the words feels I swear.
That was so adorable. Just, keep doing that, and you'll be fine. Oh; and send Scoots's old mom to the moon.
The D'awwws will continue forever...
"Hi Scootaloo, I'm nurse Redheart,"
"She's your kid, you bucking feed her!"
You keep putting commas in the wrong place
No word can discribe this....
Its approved... Approved.
Scootalove is always best love.
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2979410 Duly noted thanks :D Any other glaring mistakes you noticed?
Also just wanted to state that I brought in a second editor for opinions. He had me misuse commas which I actually argued with him about. Ah well thanks for reading everyone.
Just what I was looking for. The commas seem to be a tad bit overused, but nothing I could really pick out specifically. Also, I just wanna hug Scoots...
2980823 Thank you sir or ma'am. Working on the comma situation. One of my editors was adamant on using so many
Woo popular stories! C'mon go to featured!
So sad!!!
Please write soon! 
Well it was also a bit bland for my liking but that's just me, I like excitement
Twilight is suck a badflank in this story! Keep it up!
2981127 Now, now it's just chapter 1. The excitement really begins in chapter 2. This was just introducing Scootaloo and Dash's relationship. Expect some shenanigans with the CMC's next chapter.
2981208 meh
2981285 Alright if it's not your thing I can respect that
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It won't get featured cause I worked on it, even though my part was very slim, I'm like a plague, any story I work on seems to get close to being featured, but never actually gets featured. Sorry Thun... lol.
2981419 LOL
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I can vouch for what sec said... lol.
Nothing makes me happier than a nice Scootalove fic, especially when it's well-written!
2983293 Why thank you kindly!
2983296 Scootaloo is eazy to work with she is the only one that dint get a episode in MLP:FIM about her family, and in that case she makes it perfect for RainbowDash to adopt her.
I will give my rating on this story win chapter 3 comes out to see how will the chapters merge.
Till thin I will be look at this story vary closely.
Shined
Slowbro95
P.S: whir is Rarity in chapter 1 she dint get a sinusitis out.???????????????????:P??
will you dont half to anser that if you dont wont too. It is just srange and I know Pinkie Pie was planing a parity.
I cried reading this... And I still don't know why.. This story really touched me so keep it up!
3009750 I am not very good at writing Rarity but she will play a part in the story.
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3015907 OK.
oh man i'd love to know what twilight did to scoots' mom!
I think it's a really good idea, but the pacing feels really... Off. The story doesn't seem to have a proper flow.
I know that isn't very helpful, flow and pacing are something that can't so much be explained as felt. I like the concept, but the way it reads just throws me off a bit too much.
If, sometime in the future, you do a rewrite, I'll be the first in line to read it, but until then, I just can't get into it. Sorry.
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K. I actually really appreciate the constructive criticism. Is there anything else I can do that would give you a better opinion of this story?
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Just improve as an author. I can tell you're going to be good with a little more practice and experience. I look forward to seeing it
Upload more plz
3283546 Working steadly toward chapter 2!
YES
Thunderchaser23 i got a question when will the next chapter come out for this story and more chapters after that and please reply to this comment on here and love it
3358457 Sometime soon hehe I have a bit of writers block right now but the chapter is being worked on.
3359460 ok
are there more of this story
3448879 There is but I'm in a bit of a funk with irl stuff. I have a wedding to go to in 9 days so things are taking a bit of a backburner right now. Rest assured though if you like my work I should have a one shot out at the end of this month or early December
Cute fic. What was the time jump between flashback and the hospital scenes?
3666405 A few days, i'm working on chapter 2 now that writers block is over an done with.
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Cool. I hope everything's doing better for you, and Happy X-Mas.
3673516 Thanks and you too!
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You're welcome
, and I will.
A tiny bit rushed but I enjoyed this. I will post the blog in the next few days
3725321 Yeah... I'd be lying if I said I ddin't rush that last bit
I do plan on coming back to the first chapter and re-doing some of the parts. But thank you for the comment and favorite! 
I actually would want to see another part to this. So cute.
While I do like the approach, I find the execution a bit lacking. The story does a great job raising sympathy for Scootaloo, but not much is done with it; there is not catharsis.
The story still has such potential were you to pursue how Scoot learns to cope with her condition, new lifestyle, and Dash as her guardian. I would also strongly encourage you to develop Dash's character, like how does she learn to deal with being a mother? Could past experiences be motivating her to take role? I am of the opinion that her being the Element of Loyalty, and her wanting to adopt Scoot are both consequences of similar past experiences. Additionally, I would like to see you explore the reasons behind Scarlett Breeze's treatment of her daughter. No one is truly evil, and to simply pass her off as a bad seed would not be very exciting.
Unlike Scoot's wings, this story is by no means stunted, there is so much more room for growth and development, especially character development. It would be a shame not to pursue it.
4691846 That is hands down one of the best comments I've ever seen. Seriously you've just motivated me to get my ass in gear and start writing more of chapter 2.
I'm going to flesh out the entire reasoning behind Scarlett's abusive behavior and the struggle of Rainbow Dash being a young mother. Being the Element of Loyalty definitely makes her feel a little compelled to be a Parental figure in young Scootaloo's life.