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It's probably safest for you to stay behind the yellow line.

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The Cutie Mark Crusaders attempt some crusading when the Mane 6 leave on holiday. With about the level of success you're probably expecting.


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I love your Sweetie Belle. I lost it over her paralysis over the laws of thermodynamics being violated in her hair. I fully expect this story will make it to the judges, it's great stuff.

Certainly entertaining if a little unwieldy. The plot didn't seem to know where it was going and stumbled between several incidents before deciding to be about parasprites. I can seen it was based around the Cutie Mark Crusaders but that was pretty much it. I know you've exaggerated quite heavily for comedic effect but I'll still note that Sweetie Belle was a little out of character whilst the Mane Six are not that crucial to life in Ponyville. Some very quotable lines up there, "Trust us, we are a Princess," is a good example of one. Strong on comedy but weak on plot, ending seemed pretty pointless. But yeah I laughed, it was fun to read.

I see someone tried to be clever and tried to write to all three prompts at once. :trixieshiftright:

A fun read to be sure. :pinkiehappy: Get's my vote and a thumbs up. Plus a few points for D'awww. :yay:

"A lyre?"
"No! She's telling the truth!"

Funniest line ever. :rainbowlaugh:

LOVE IT
I LOVE IT
MY CAPSLOCK IS BROKEN, SEND HELP ASAP

I was surprised by Twilight evaporating her scroll. I'd have thought she'd want to keep it, in case she needed to make a better one or something.

Strange how the CMC didn't know what Parasprites were.

Nice to see a Scootaloo taking what Twilight and the others say seriously.

Interesting how you have a danger rating scale.

Unused to Apple Bloom as "Applebloom"

Typo:

Sweetie Belles

Sweetie Belle's

Could easily be an episode!

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